I'm on iPad and it looks fine to me.
#1: wait really? You have absolutely no story in mind at all? You just wanted to make it look shiny? I mean, just my opinion, but I'm thoroughly confused as to why anyone would waste days coding graphics for a non-existent story.
i know, it matters to other people. I've never understood the bells & whistles thing though.
#2: seriously? Hard coded character limits in the comments? You don't want anyone to actually be able to review the game so that your title page stays looking nice?
I think Trying to code in such a way as to prevent anyone from leaving comments if they can't correctly appreciate your graphics might be overstepping your bounds.
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You put a bunch of effort into forcing the editor to do something it wasn't meant to do. That, personally for me, adds absolutely nothing to a cyoa.
There's no level of cool graphics that's going to make me uprate a game with a mediocre story. In fact, I'm more likely to be harsh to a game where it seems like all the author cared about was impressing people with his design/art skills.
#3 also just me but: that title page is insanely difficult to read.
