Horror House

This game was a nice surprise!

This game was pretty well written. It is not very long, and having a bit more story and description would really make it a lot better. It seems that there could be a lot more of a build up in each room to make it a bit more creepy. Also, it seems that almost immediately upon investigating anything, the story ends. Perhaps playing the consequence out a little more before the ending would help.

For a short game, this game does a fairly good job with the branching. There are multiple endings, as well was multiple paths through the house.

Overall, I enjoyed this game and found it fun.

I survived! I think... Well, this was certainly quite a creepy game, and that is of course meant as a compliment in this case. The writing was quite engaging and served it's purpose in making the reader choose their choices carefully, not sure which one would lead to quite the unsavory path for the protagonist.

I must say that I immensely enjoyed this game.

I think that you are really capable of a better story. The problem is that about the time we are about to get immersed into the story you end it abruptly. Let the suspense build. We should wander around the house for a few pages, or whatever the user chooses to do, with only subtle oddities and serving as additional foreshadowing. When the horror begins let us wallow in it for a bit before you conclude. Give us a few more pages of options as we try desperately to survive. You want us to say something like, "I should have seen that coming!" or "What! wow, what was that?" For the first don't be too predictable and for the second don't be to crazy. Choose a few horrible things to be in the house and be consistent; otherwise it becomes random and we can't get into the story. I look forward to seeing more work from you.

REALLY fun, and I enjoyed it immensely! It was creepy and slightly scary. Overall, it was a pleasant surprise. Now for the criticism: like I said, REALLY fun, but it could use some improvement. First off, if you pick heads and go into the kitchen, the link to the bottom stares is broken. Secondly, some of the endings are super abrupt and feel very rushed (e.g. the part where John attacks you for some unapparent reason, leaves me feeling VERY confused and wondering if its Jhon or some monster masquerading as Jhon); a little more detail and explanation could fix this. Finaly, it could benefit from more backstory of the two characters. 6/8 Great game!!!!

I'm going to be honest. this wasn't a very good story, as a lot of it seemed rushed, and almost every choice i make after the first few pages make me die. Although, the deaths are very creative, and it's a good idea for a story. I just wish there was more to it.
Overall, probably a 3/8.

There were a variety of gruesome endings, but I would have liked to see some backstory about the house or the two characters. Also, some rationale for the horrors within would have added to the story. There were no grammar errors I could see but the writing didn't pull me in. One link from the kitchen seems to be broken,

Epic

vert scary

Horrifying, I enjoyed it.

fine