It Happened at the Waffle House

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I feel like I could have rated this storygame higher if it had been longer. I've never actually been to Waffle House, but I guess I can imagine what kind of place it might be?

The player character feels pretty boring to begin with, but after the cook kisses him (and, ewww, vomiting cockroaches!), things get a lot more interesting. A bit of a shame that when the eye asks you about your god, your only options are to either worship the eye, or claim yourself as a god. It could have been interesting to see the eye's response to the player character claiming they already had a god, whether real or not.

There were some parts of this storygame that were pretty gross, so I definitely wouldn't recommend reading it while you're eating, or before you're eating.

Anyway, yeah - some good ideas behind this storygame, but it definitely could have been longer. Anyway, thank you for sharing!

People keep telling me to go to a Waffle House. I question their motives now.

The randomness is entertaining. It's a nice, light read. Still, the story's time of development does reflect its quality a bit. It's definitely not slop though and that's worth recognition.

Bizaar. Makes me not want to eat at Waffle House (although honestly, I was done with that place when I saw a cook smacking a waitress on the ass with bacon he then fried and served to me. He could have at least asked her to drop trou first.).

The low effort stories are the easiest to read and review, so this gets an extra point by default. It also had some weird humor, but I would have liked a bit more romance with the cook before meeting the God of Waffle House.

I’ve never been to a Waffle House before, so I’m just going to take this as canon.

I'm sorry. Autobiographical??

Now I want a hamburger from Waffle House.

Nice Job throwing something together just in time for the end of the contest.

I thought about giving you a detailed review with proper criticism, but with bonus rating points added for DEI and Affirmative Action you get a 10/8 (Yes, 10/8 not 8/10). If you dont win the contest, you got robbed.

This was a very strange story, but I liked it. I found the idea of the Eye to be quite frightening, but also interesting. The story was a bit short, but I really love that you didn't really explain what the idea was or what it was doing there. I like the surrealness and I thought that was really cool. Reading this story made me feel like I was tripping.

Maybe add a bit more flow and context because jumping from getting kissed by a Waffle House cook to seeing a giant eye is jarring. Maybe you were going for that feel, and if so then disregard my advice because you achieved your goal. But if you weren't, then my advice is to add a bit more to make it flow and feel a bit more cohesive, but this is some good stuff.

For some reason, it just feels a little incomplete like there could have been more, then again it's a really entertaining story about a crazy encounter at Waffle House, so good job