White as Bloodstained Snow

I appreciate the art style, and the atmosphere. These things were well done. I also appreciate the candid admission regarding the unfinished branch, but I think maybe a brief description of an ending first, followed by an author's note would have been better.

There wasn't anything bad about this, but one thing that would have made it a complete story would be some sort of emotional connection between characters. Of course, that takes more time to create, and this was one was too short for that. Instead, what was given wasn't a bad consolation prize: a spooky atmosphere very reminiscent of all those dark fairy tales that hide in the back of our minds, the little tropes we all love, like the "princess" being the monster, the beautiful banquet trapping you for eternity, etc. That sort of thing lurking in our subconscious. The One Ring. Etc. We got a little of that in this story, which is always welcome.

So, overall, the atmosphere is the strength for this story. And the way it leans in to that classical fairy tale essence. The weakness is that the side characters were just names, except the doctor, and there wasn't enough time for character development or relationships—a consequence of the length usually.

But it's the best of these I've read so far. It was well done, except for the unfinished part. Perhaps after the contest it will be completed as the author intended. I'd be interested to see what was supposed to go there.

Overall, nice work.

A beautifully written, grim fairytale that makes for a good, if due to being ultimately unfinished a bit illusory when it comes to choices story.

The highlight of the game is definitely the very colorful prose, followed closely by a well maintained tone throughout the whole thing. It is very easy to get immersed into the story and put yourself in the protagonist’s shoes.

A notable cast of side characters in relation to the modest word count lends itself well to the story despite, or perhaps due to the simplicity of their personalities. They’re introduced smoothly and serve their purpose without getting in the way, even if it can be hard to get overly attached to them in the brief time we get to spend with them.

One nitpick when it comes to the plot itself is that the mystery aspect of it isn’t particularly difficult to figure out, but I feel like that’s an issue plaguing most stories aiming to subvert the fairytale genre as there is only so many ways one can put a twist on a at this point very tropey premise.

Bonus points for the art and general formatting, but the fact the story isn’t properly finished sadly counteracts that.

Final score: 6/8 with strong odds for a 7 or better if the story is ever completed.

It's beautiful, writing wise and art wise. I really enjoyed reading this. The characters felt real and the monster terrified me.