A tale of love and hate..

Player Rating4.52/8

"#325 overall, #16 for 2014"
based on 158 ratings since 12/17/2014
played 6,611 times (finished 245)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Love cannot be spoken about. It can only be felt. Almost everyone has fallen in love and loved but not everyone is lucky to be loved. Through this story you play through the lives of two individuals merged by a bond of forever love. Understand what it is to love, to be pained and to be loved. This is my first storygame. The story is a little linear because it is more a story than a choose your adventure game however their are three different endings.

Player Comments

Although this story was well written, it's very different from the typical CYOA found on this site- not that that's necessarily a bad thing!

For me, the main issues were spacing, length of paragraphs, and lack of choice (I only came across two real decisions).

Concerning the first two, to give you an idea: when I originally opened this story, I was immediately taken aback by the huge paragraphs on the page. I often found myself skimming through lines- but not because the story was boring. I only did so because of the gargantuan size they ended up accumulating to. I would recommend that, if you were to make a story in the future, you used proper spacing- it's a great way to convey emotion and separate ideas.

As for choice, you have to remember that this site *is* called "Choose your Story"! When there are only three endings that you have to offer- as you say in your summary- the story becomes very linear- as you also happen to say. This would not be an issue if the choices weren't so... clear, for lack of a better word. When choices immediately lead to cookie-cutter endings, it becomes quite bland. It also makes the reader feel like the true ending is Helena's- which is something you don't want to do. Try to make each choice feel solid.

However, apart from this, the only flaws I could find were an underuse of commas where needed, and not separating the dialogue with spacing. Be that as it may be, this is still one of the better stories on this site. I congratulate you on writing it, and give it a 5/8.

-- jamBuster on 3/11/2017 1:29:54 PM with a score of 0
crying my eyes out omg so cute
-- kj on 1/18/2021 9:54:53 PM with a score of 0
One of the best stories I ever read
-- Mukesh Pandey on 4/8/2020 4:08:13 PM with a score of 0
horrible say something about s**
-- Sierra rock on 9/11/2019 3:49:46 PM with a score of 0
your the worst writer and it was too long it took me 100 years to finish this story
-- jacklevop liuyt on 12/28/2018 3:28:03 PM with a score of 0
That was cool
-- Darksonglove_4 on 10/26/2018 9:09:59 PM with a score of 0
it was a cute story but it had no back bone. i chose to stay true to Helene because love is nothing if not durable, but it didn't make me feel anything. The story dragged me along with cold indifference, and honestly it was just boring. i wouldnt totally recommend but if you just want a quick thing to do if youre bored then go ahead.
-- brooke on 7/8/2018 12:29:52 AM with a score of 0
so romantic
-- PrincessStarlight on 5/3/2018 10:26:57 AM with a score of 0
not good
-- Amanda Moore on 4/26/2018 2:07:58 PM with a score of 0
Wow. I was completely caught off guard on the first page simply because of how long it was! I had to change my thought process from the "fast-paced" decisions to more "story-based" decisions. When I made the switch, though, I really enjoyed the story. It was well written and, of course, I'm a sucker for love so my opinion is a bit biased. *wink*
-- MysteriousMystery on 3/15/2017 5:17:43 PM with a score of 0
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