Player Comments on A UFO at School

Tu escritura es magistral como siempre, Ogre. La historia del juego en sí está llena de contenido y opciones, y me mantuvo entretenido hasta el final. No pude evitar sentir curiosidad por todos los posibles resultados y decisiones que están tan clara y maravillosamente ubicadas en esta historia.

Disfruté cada minuto de esta historia. Me siento tentado a decir que te has superado a ti mismo, pero tu escritura siempre es consistente en lo buena que es. Gracias por otra lectura maravillosa. Anticipo con impaciencia el próximo juego de historia que puedas crear. Ya sea una secuela inspirada de esta o algo completamente diferente. El nivel de cuidado y atención al detalle que pones en cada una de tus historias siempre es un placer para leer y disfrutar.

Gracias una vez más por escribir esta maravillosa y apasionante historia.

So, this was pretty good.

It was of course, a bit random, but it probably wouldn't be easy to write a super realistic story about a UFO showing up at school.

I enjoyed the writing style, and the characters were pretty well developed (which is impressive since the storygame had a short length.)

You managed to provide an interesting plot, a setting, characters with personality, and a main problem in just 800-1200 words. Again, very impressive.

The length may have been short in terms of words, but I was glad there were at least a few choices and a couple paragraphs on every page.

Some of the situations seemed very, uh, convenient and unrealistic. Sort of like they just happened for plot convenience and weren't really thought of very carefully before being written.

I did notice a few errors in tense, grammar, and spelling, but not anything too major. All in all, a good read if you're looking for something short and simple.

4/8.

This was great for the stereotypical genre of little green beings from outer space. It gives some choice of action. It obviously wasn't meant as a serious work of fiction. There's not a deep level of character or plot here, but it's a short, after all.

Does the author mean to keep swapping tenses, or did he write it like that to keep us off balance? We will never know now, since those green blobs disintegrated him, along with his ordinary, everyday school and its pupils and staff.

i like aliens

Great short story; need to follow up with choices of destinations and choices of what to do once there

I went through all the options, its still short. But not bad.

It was a little short but ill go through it again, my rating may change you little green man

not good

skoop

it's fun

It was okay. The writing was a bit janky at times, but the narrative was well made and it branched in a satisfying way. You get an idea of what's going on and what Gavin's personality is.

This is why I am so proud to be an American. Only in this great nation would a principal be so prepared for aliens invading his high school. Arm our teachers! Also, why does Gavin go to the bathroom so often during this class that his teacher knows he needs the hall pass without Gavin asking for it? God bless America, my home sweet home, and Go Packers Go!

Short, simple and interesting.
Enjoyed it.

Well done

I like this story

I personally found it fun to play, but I would've liked a longer version. I know this was made a few years ago, but I still liked it!!

Not that bad??

Not that bad??

Good Game. Very Easy. Finished it in under five minutes.

Ooooh, very spooky! :0 I like how destriptive the sentences were. My character kept yelling at the teacher XD

Kids liked the story, though they didn't make it very far.

Very short and very out-of-this world (get it?). As I'm sure other people have said, a lot of the situations are very convenient for the characters. You got a good amount of substance from such a short story though, and there were no grammatical errors that I could find. The writing style fits the plot of the story very well.

Pretty good for how short it was. 5/8

This was a very meh story. Not the best, though it certainly was not the worst. As with every story I review, I did read every ending. My thoughts on this story are hard to find, because with this story I’m very indifferent towards it. Most of the time I review things I’m either gushing with love towards it or despise it. At the very least I love the story, and point out the flaws in it. However here I don’t know what I think.

I love the style of branching. It resembles what I loved so much about love sick and trash. Every choice leads to a new path and there is no remerging. This style works for stories with no overarching plot. Just a premise, and a ton of things that happen within that premise.

Though there is not anything I disliked in the story, that goes both ways. There were many things I liked in the story, though there is nothing I love either.

This is a solid story that works for what it is. This is a story about a UFO at school. It is intently short, and that works here. While this story is not amazing, I did enjoy it. I was a nice short read, and sometimes that is all you need out of a story.

I want to rated this a 5 out of 8, but I just can’t bring myself to do it. In any case, this story is short enough that there is no reason not to go read all the paths right now. It is around 3k words, and about ten minutes of your time.

4 out of 8

While simple, this was well written, and I see what was being attempted here--creating a true true structure for the choices so that each choice was meaningful and led to unique text for each, and therefore eventually to a unique ending informed by the choices before. Well, that's the way to do it--and obviously you *can't* really do that without going mad as the number of pages you have to write double and double.

And so this story thinks in terms of short, short story, which is the perfect match for very branchy fiction.

Naturally, I wanted more, but it works as it is. I feel like it needs some really colorful cartoony pictures like in the wholesome magazines I used to read as a kid.

i liked this game

Should've been longer.

I got abducted, 'cause I'm a nerd...Yay! ??

So, the story was a bit short, and yes there is no possible way to lose. It’s kind of interesting— sort of a story that you wouldn’t want to stop reading but once it ends, it doesn’t leave you thinking about anything. I would recommend this story as a mind relaxer when you are feeling stressed. Overall, I quite liked this story and if you’re just looking for a easy and fun story, this is the right game.

MY PRINCIPAL IS A BADASS

Wonderful writing as always. Keep doing what you do best!

(: Great writing! (:

I think I survived...

There is almost no way to win, as around every corner is a death by winning page.

Good story, fun to pass the time a little. I went though every possible ending, and on only one of them did I survive.

I thought this was a pretty interesting game, but there were some mistakes.

First, I liked your story, an short story with a bit of drama in the story.
Secondly, I felt that you can improve your story with more pages, choices and more drama added.
I am also recommending you to add for each ending page a reset game button for trying again.
Finally, I liked your story, but I felt that this story can't be short, you can add more of anything to a bigger story!
I am sure I would like it to read after you improve this.
Final rating: 4/8

it was ok but, ikea meat balls with source are better and they have cheap stuff. COOL STORY BRO NEEDS MORE DRAGONS!!!!!!!!!!!!

my ending is the best

very epic #swagalious

I died!

Honestly, out of the so-called "8" endings, is there one that is even a GOOD ending?

Pretty good

Uh, welllllllllll
A bit random, and I wish there were more ways to survive, but overall a good write.

Simple and entertaining, nothing more, nothing less

Pretty good... Beat the story.. Principal kills aliens on first try.. Yea

This is a pleasant short story. It has a fair amount of choices and description for how short it is.

A little short

Some of the endings were unsatisfying!

I was crushed by a saucer. Jeez.

The officer dragged me away. Aargh.

I was desintegrated again. These aliens love to desintegrate people.

Principal Jenkins blasted the aliens. Welp, at least i'm good.

I was absorbed by an alien. Eek.

Yay! I am going to space, permanently. At least i will die in a place with smooth walls.

Desintegrated. With the other students. Suddenly and fastly.

I disappeared with Mr. Stamos and the rest of the students. Pity.

Not bad or Not good! It's so short but its funny!

I understand you wanted to keep it short, but I'm curious as to what happens next. Like what happens after he is in space ship, or after his principal shoots the aliens.

Okay, I suppose. If you want to stick with it being a short story, I respect your decision. However, one thing you might want to change would be fixing your switch from present tense to past tense.

You can't win the game, no plotline, but you have pretty good spelling.

Ok

Not necessarily a bad story, but your writing could be improved a bit more, as the reading didn't really transition smoothly with what the switching between tenses and redundancy. Overall it was okay for a fairly short story though. 4/8

An entertaining short story.

That was entertaining

That has to be one of the strangest games I have ever played.

WEEEEEEEEE!!!!!

I always enjoy playing your games. Well done with another one :D

Another good story, enjoyable teen fiction and I like the idea of inserting choices into a story which makes each page read a little like a goosebumps chapter (though for some reason R.L. Stine would always end them on a cliff-hanger). The story length isn't very long but that's ok, it's a pretty classic style CYOA that will give people 5-10 minutes worth of good story reading :)