Officer Dick Gristle
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
Played times (finished )
"Walk in the park"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably be between PG-13 and R.
WTF? It doesn't have sense and it doesn't have a plot. But I save White race. Not enough to impede this work lol.
on 1/6/2020 1:12:04 PM with a score of 0
I found a pretty serious typo where you spelled 'tragic and beautiful patriotic hero' as 'loser'.
on 1/6/2020 7:52:12 AM with a score of 0
Got the best ending
on 1/6/2020 5:21:21 AM with a score of 0
This is a wonderful masterpiece. 8/8
on 1/5/2020 9:59:33 PM with a score of 0
America is a wild place, this story is even wilder.
on 1/5/2020 4:27:17 PM with a score of 0
I caught a couple spelling errors throughout the story. The last one I saw was the best ending. So there is a location for one. Anyways, this isn't as offending as I thought it would be from previous comments. Even so still a little off putting, I guess. The second path could be fleshed out a little more since it is a one choice and then done. I think Officer Dick Gristle acted like a 'full blooded american'(by media standards) by going in balls to the walls, so good job on that. It was short and not really sweet.
on 1/5/2020 3:28:19 AM with a score of 0
It's like if you took a bucket of collected eye-mucus and id and stirred it around with carbonated water and red #2, and poured it into a cocktail glass with a little umbrella and an orange wedge.
It's like a bungee dive into a sulfur pit, where you go down down into stench, and then bounce up and laugh and then down again into smell and the bounce back up, but a little less, and then eventually you're just dangling in the smelly earth orifice.
It's like when we all got in trouble for finding the bad words in the dictionary in fifth grade and we had to stay in from recess and that one kid ate a bit spoonful of thick paste and all the girls were screaming and I was cracking up and we all got detention the next day, but it was so worth it and also the paste-eating kid threw up in his own desk.
on 1/4/2020 12:08:51 PM with a score of 0
You need more sensitivity training.
on 1/4/2020 11:14:15 AM with a score of 0
This is about what you think it would be just based off of the description. It's pretty much just here to offend any one that wants to read it to be offended.
on 1/4/2020 1:20:47 AM with a score of 0
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