Player Comments on Surviving School

I’m not a huge fan of the first page being titled, “The First Page.” I know, the story was written back in 2006 and “those were different times” and all, but still, I’d prefer it start out with an actual setting and place. At the same time, I did like the addition of the alarm clock image. I was hoping that would continue throughout the story, but perhaps not.

The first few sentences are a bit short and choppy. I’m not sure if that was the intent here, but it makes the reading a bit more difficult and sets a different mood. Then the fourth wall is broken at the end of the first page. These different and changing bits at the start sort of put the reader off-balance for the rest of the story. At this point the reader isn’t sure if they should get immersed in the story, or if the entire story is just going to be a joke. Following one path to avoid the story clearly enforces that idea. It is one thing to provide that quick outlet and free point to the reader, but this one is a bit silly.

The style of the writing is a bit jarring as well. While it tries to remain active, it does wander back and forth from active to internal thoughts to a narration-style passage. This makes it difficult for the reader to really get a feeling for what’s happening in the story. If it was all one setting, the reader could really involve themselves more and feel like they are part of the story.

The action through the story was, well, a bit random. Of course, I’m sure that was the point of this story. So if you don’t like lolrandom, you’re likely not going to be a fan of this story. It’s not totally random, but there are certainly some random options and actions. After all, after shaving your teacher’s head, punching her in the face, and watching her jump out the window, I’m not sure the class day is just going to continue on as if nothing happen. Heck, in one path two different teachers jump out windows and the lunch lady is stabbed in front of everyone – but class just continues on.

I did manage to win the game, though I’m not sure the school survived the day. It’s not a horrible story, but the pages are a bit short. There do appear to be a good number of options, even if many of them really do appear random. Thank you for sharing this story with the site.

I loved it!! Completely pointless! Amazing!

Wow

this gave me the lols, but screw mr.hintler

its cool, its sad that I don't have the courage to jump out the window tho

Though this would never happen at a real school it was fun

Though this would never happen at a real school it was fun

Cool!

This was a bit random, but ok

It felt like a LolRandom story but it was slightly too nonsensical at times like when the teachers suddenly start to try and kill the students. It was funny but in future, cut down on the randomness.

Last time I jumped out the window I impaled myself. This time I win? Pretty good time pass!

It’s really confusing and almost everything ends in death

Interesting game. Interesting plot? May not make the most sense, but that's not the aim of stories. Not the best grammar, and there was a problem where I couldn't get to third period. Anyway, interesting enough! And funny too, I guess.

very funny

Work on grammanar
Good plot
Very funny

Those are screwed up teachers. Well, good thing I killed them all.

Got stuck in a loop where I constantly relived third period. Sounds like a nightmare.

Oh, and I killed the lunch lady.

This was O.K. but could have been way better.

Pretty funny lol. Defiantly make a sequel to this.

Horrible grammar. Decent Plotline.

Yea. I won. So I care. (Wink)

LOL He's always had a gun with him JIC? Loved it

Hah! SOooo funny (=

The deaths didn't make any sense, the choices had no meaning behind them either. No character development, no fun editors, just a blind run. It bored me to death and the humor didn't work.

Favorite part?What is this?

THIS...IS...SPARTAAAAA!!!:))

WHAT THE HECK IS THIS???? THIS STUFF DOESN'T MAKE ANY SENSE! THESE THINGS DON'T HAPPEN AT SCHOOL! AND IF THEY DO HAPPEN, THE POLICE SHOULD BE CALLED AND SHUT THE SCHOOL DOWN NOT LONG AFTER THIS SLAUGHTER HOUSE HAS BEEN OPENED!

This was pretty hard. Since I didn't much about my surroundings or the other characters I could end up in big trouble. Like in gym. It was just luck. Otherwise it was good. Very gripping.

Disgusting ??

Hell High. Starts Friday at a theater near you.

its alright but this dude that you playing as really has bad luck. Like, whats the chance of you cracking your head while sleeping On a chair? Like wouldn't u be leening on the table or somefin?

best game

This was not the only thing that would make me feel like I'm going to be in my room for the rest of the day.

If it was up to me, this would be voted game of the year!!!

Cool, I win!!! Is there another one of these? I reaaally wanna play more!!,

This reminds me of the Fairview High School storygames. All of the teachers going sadistic and trying to kill you. I understand that it's supposed to be humourous, but no. Just no.

And the whole 'I don't feel like creating a whole page for homework?' Was that supposed to be funny...? Also, no one likes a left/right choice.

It was fun...

well it wasn't the best but it was very good choices. i would rate this a 4/8

AMAZING

your teachers tried to kill you, and your still going to school the next day?

I'm a survivor, I'm gonna make it, I'm gonna survive, keep on survivin'

Or something like that :P

is there any way to win this? I mean sereously!

I think this was a great story, but too much of teachers trying to kill students. I don't like violence. Otherwise, it's great. 4.5/8

Parody of survive school based on I'm a survivor

Once I was afraid I was petrified
I didn't know how I was gonna live with out a gun at my side
And so I sat in class thinking I wouldn't live long
But I was wrong and I shaved the blonde
And so I ran
Into the gym
Playin dodge ball I acted fairly dim
And once I was trapped I thought surely I was done
But I was wrong and I f***ing won

The story itself was something authors try to write but are usually unsuccessful. This story was done in the best way I can imagine was possible but I personally wouldn't know. The choices were interesting and I hope to see more like them in your future stories.

I liked the humor in this story, though I wish it had more branches and every choice wasn't either the right or wrong answer, and that the grammar was fixed up. Very fun. 6/8.

I love killing....i enjoyed it.

I sense you don't really like school much and a healthy fantasy story about killing everyone around you has hopefully eased any tension :) The writing was good and the story seems appealing enough for those with an interest but possibly because school is quite a distance in the past now it didn't really strike a chord with me.

OMG! I can;t believe how gr8 this kid is at murder and fightin'

This is awesome, dude. I couldn't stop laughing.

it was good i dont think theres much wrong with this story

Pretty interesting, its a bit short though.

I like this game, and it's also funny.

Pretty bad but it's alright...

This isn't the greatest game but it's definitely something you can play when you're bored and have time to waste.

This was hilarious. I couldn't stop laughing at the Gym part. It was also hilarious how you can stuff the Lunch Lady in a cupboard.

I loved this game.

This game was poorly written and edited, I highly NOT recommend this game.

Haha, even though it wasn't very realistic, it was very amusing and overall an enjoyable game.

That was awesome! I survived ( mainly because I kept hitting the back button) but still! That was freaky. I did it with my sister. My account username is thequeen13. Nice job.

Great game.

well, as fun as surviving a homicidal school is....this was not fun

Damn what type of school is this a lord of the flies school?

Cool, but pointless.

cool game.

5/8

too short

this is so cool and funny, you should do more like these, they're so cool;D!

I guess all the teachers are evil (believe me, I go to school too), but WHY does the cafeteria lady cooks students for lunch?? She's supposed to be like, whateva for all the work... Still, cool game! Make another one soon!!

very funny

Auewome i wish it was longer!

So basically every kid has to be a bad-ass or die?

Too Random/Retarded

hahaha that was fun I thoroughly enjoyed this story

I really enjoyed this. XD It was kinda dumb, but I found the premise hilarious. Nice job!^_^

Haha RUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUN

Zzzz(I do this everyday in school)

Not too bad, quite funny at times

Best one yes my favorite part is the end!

HAHAHA, this was literally that funny. Great job, I thoroughly enjoyed killing the teachers although I admit I did try and use Tom as a human shield before I went back like a chicken.

Ok. I killed about 5 teachers

funny, good story I like thethis is sparta part

Wierd, but fun

Great! This author is funny and creative... Keep' em coming

It was quite ridculous at times....but that just made it so much fun!! Great job, I loved it. The only thing that I didn't really like was the grammer but I could overlook that. I liked the good amount of options and the choices you had.

Nice.

6/8

Some grammar mistakes. overall pretty good
6/8

Apparently Windows are awesome..

When I told my friend about this she couldn't complete it then I won it first try without dieing XD lol

Nice...

Mildly amusing!

Okay. Not great, but okay.

Nice game. just fix up text and add some meat, and it will be AWESOME!!!

I liked it a lot i sometimes feel like our teachers are trying to kill us this was very entertaining keep them coming

you can die too easily here.

Very realistic depiction of being a school student.

Awesome

I like it!

Funny, although random. Good story, and better the second time around.

Great! Hilarious!
7/7
Great job Darth!

this game=hilarity

I really liked this one, good job.

The Ups: Very, Very Funny! Sarcasm is king! It had a funny storyline (al be it not original) and it was outright entertaining.

The Downs: The grammar was certainly lacking. The two things that come to my mind are putting blank lines before diologue and capitalization issues.

Overall: 5/8 (About the best I'll rate a game without a truly non-linear original storyline.)

Good Job! (I really loved the "THIS IS SPARTA" part.)

This game was funnier the second time around. It's pretty good. i wish you'd make another one.

funny funny funny! Good job

this game is ... ok. the problem is that there isn't really a story, a goal, etc. It's a little better than it was, but it's still not so great that I'd feature it.
march

It's definitely even better than before. Could still use a little work in the "punctuation etc." department. I'm pretty picky about that stuff, though.

sorry Darth... that really wasn't that great. The randomness really through me off there. No pics, and a link that said "click this link!" and then squashed me with a giant bracket really ensured this game's NOT getting featured. lol.

~cool

nice!

i like!

I liked this game, I didn't see a bunch of grammar errors you must of fixed them. Then again I 'm not big grammar nazi, Fun game. It's a heated debate over here.

LOL -- surprisingly funny. It has a bit of an "unpolished" feel though, as other readers have mentioned. You really should touch that up -- had this been spell/grammer/puntuation checked, I think it woulda made Contest Winner!

Lol, pretty funny game. Don't know how you came up with most of it. Nice.

That Tom guy right below me, he's my friend and I think he thought he was rating my Final Destination game, so ignore that comment.

The death ideas were cool but you need work on the spelling

oh my god......its actualy really good after 4 hours of trying 2 beat it

8/8 just because it was so freakin' funny! The ending was priceless. My two favorite parts were: When you get killed from making darthvader_13 mad, and the part where you can choose to go to sleep but you fall over and crack your skull because you weren't in a seat. Lol!

Pretty linear, but at least you tried making one..

Pointless choices, not too well written, but not as bad as some of the games on the site.
Its almost funny to.
Read over your game and think about things before you choose to submit anything

Better than I thought it would be. Although the grammar isn't as good as it should be for somebody your age (I'm assuming you are thirteen), it wasn't a waste of time. Maybe I'm just in a good mood. Nicely done.

It was interesting. I cheated though and used the Go Back Button at the top!

hahahahahahaha! make sequel

It was a bit on the disturbing side, if you know what I mean.

Better than FD:CD. You still had the same grammatical errors as FD:CD, and the story was too funny to be fully enjoyable. It was still alright.

Are all your thoughts this morbid?

Linear and incorrect. But fun!

Cool. Are you going to make a sequal about the other four days of school?

Wow- those are some nasty hall monitors. Fun game, could use slight improvement in the writing style, and still a bit short. Overall very nice- looking forward to your next game.

I believe you may be a little on the sadistic side, my young friend...

Tee-Hee Not bad, now if you combined the length of your first two games, thinsg would improve. Great game but your grammar impeded it. Im not a perfect speller or anything for that matter but you need to remember to add a space or two after each period. Thanks.

Hahaha, this story is hilarious. I liked the humor and violence, nice creativity with things to do and various choices that aren't just dead ends. Good job.