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"Walk in the park"
"Make sure not to blink"
"Appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.
This is a cute little interesting work. I can see how the vocabulary words are worked into the story, and their purpose is quite obviously clear. I also like how the words are used in sentences and then the reader is the one who has to attempt to determine their meaning by selecting an option. And yes, the pictures do add a little to the story. I guess since this is a quiz in edutainment that it makes sense to have each wrong answer immediately end the “story.”
I do wish there were a few other answers to select from in each case. It would have been nice to have other answers that were close to the right answer to really see if the reader knew the vocabulary words. The way it is currently written, it seems very easy to select the correct answer because in many cases the other options don’t make a lot of sense. I also like that when you do select a wrong answer, the story tells you what you did wrong.
It was quite short, but it certainly appears to have served its purpose. It is a nice little vocabulary tester. Maybe we should do one of these for grammar and require all potential authors pass the quiz to be able to write on this site…
on 7/16/2018 12:23:43 PM with a score of 0
Hmm, this wasn't bad at all.
I liked that this quiz was given a narrative in pursuing a thief, it certainly made this much more exciting and immersive in that aspect instead of simply throwing out questions to be answered. So as something that's both educating and intriguing, this storygame did well enough in that aspect.
Though I'm not exactly sure as to which audience this is targeting, because I found this to be quite simple and the words themselves were words that weren't difficult, even less so with the hints that is given to the reader. I think that this storygame is probably a decent challenge for children, but this does end rather quickly.
I feel that this story would've benefited from having more choices in general, as the length for this storygame is rather short. But I do like the effort that was placed into making this a more interactive experience from the usual quiz, so bravo on that front.
on 3/13/2017 10:49:01 PM with a score of 0
A neat little story. Nice writing and use of pictures. As interactive fiction I feel this should be more fleshed out so that there are multiple branches including their own plotline instead of one choice that leads to a Try Again" link and the other continuing the story until it ends.
on 6/30/2015 2:28:29 AM with a score of 0
The implementation of the vocabulary words as part of the story narrative was clever; I really liked it. I did spot some grammar mistakes throughout, which was unfortunate for a story of such a short length. Definitely has potential, but should be thoroughly proofread and perhaps made a bit longer.
on 1/23/2020 11:18:52 AM with a score of 0
I learned some new words today! ^_^
Seriously though, if the intention was to help improve some younger readers vocabulary, then this was a pretty cute way of doing it. Definitely some room for improvement though. There were quite a few grammar mistakes. Sentences that didn’t start with a capital letter, for example. I’m afraid that the image on the “Try to find another clue” page isn’t working, and while most of the game made sense, the ending just… Didn’t. What was the important clue that the other officer found? How did it solve the case? It just seems like you got bored by the end of the game, and instead of explaining what happened, you just put, “Yey! You win… Somehow.”
That said though, based on the play-length, the game wasn’t as terrible as I expected it to be. At least you put some effort into it.
on 4/22/2019 12:47:07 PM with a score of 0
Excellent hints and clues. I like it! Always love me some detective.
on 4/15/2019 4:34:23 PM with a score of 0
this game was short but a lot of fun! I think more could be added as the story goes along in the future. This first part had a lot of good aspects to it. I enjoyed playing this, and I can't wait to see what comes next.
on 10/11/2018 5:54:51 AM with a score of 0
Too short, but the potential is there. This could have been an interesting game if more thought out.
on 6/17/2017 7:24:58 PM with a score of 0
It was okay. Using rare/longer/misused words might make the story even more interesting. Maybe longer, too. :). Cute little story.
on 1/12/2017 1:26:17 PM with a score of 0
This was nice. You have turned something that would've been totally boring into something fun!
on 1/12/2017 1:55:03 AM with a score of 0
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