>DEVOTION

a Sci-Fi by mizal

Commended by TharaApples on 3/25/2021 11:21:28 PM

Player Rating5.40/8

"#245 overall, #10 for 2020"
based on 57 ratings since 07/16/2020
played 727 times (finished 66)

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.
You harvest in the Arena. Every machine needs a function, and that is yours. Written for the Tiny 'Topia challenge.

Player Comments

It was difficult to decide how to rate this, I decided to take into account the rules of the contest for which it was written. One must read through every page to get a handle on the setting. Fortunately, doing so is a pleasure, takes very little time, and is worth the effort. First, the editing is impeccable, and secondly, the writing is free of overly familiar phrases. The style is practiced and creative. The passage demonstrates admirable description within ultra concise passages.

One of the consequences of scavenging for every word is a somewhat unnatural sentence structure and occasionally choppy flow. The author partially conceals this by matching the writing tone to the setting. I doubt if there is really enough content here to satisfy the gawking rabble, but the morsels harvestable from this regrettably short glance into a dystopian colony are intriguing. The clever culture notes and a fragmented history elevate this tiny tale into something slightly larger than its humble packaging might otherwise suggest.
-- ugilick on 3/25/2021 2:22:58 AM with a score of 0
When it comes to mizal's writing, I'm always surprised by how many different genres she has a grasp on. This one in particular is no different, I would say. The quality that
s present in this story, remains consistent all throughout every page that is present in this story-game.

I feel as through the use of a different sort of font, than what some would consider the standard, and the tone and dialogue choices, certainly makes one feel as if they're a machine. Such a thing gives this story a bit of a unique flair and feel to quite a fair amount of stories that are on this site.

Although this is a short, it also done well. A story-game being done well is something that I personally feel to be of the up most importance when all is said and done.

>DEVOTION,

it does just that.
-- TharaApples on 2/8/2021 6:16:31 PM with a score of 0
it was good
-- ImmortalWarlock on 5/3/2021 1:56:40 PM with a score of 0
The action pacing was a bit jittery. It's difficult to get an appropriate sense of time in writing fast-paced action. The key is a careful balance of detail to match the slow down.
-- Ford on 2/26/2021 8:28:37 PM with a score of 0
Wow! I love this game! So epic although I wish it was a bajillion pages longer, I just love Mizal's stories so much!!!
-- WarHammer368 on 1/13/2021 6:15:15 PM with a score of 0
Good game
-- LeStab on 1/6/2021 4:42:51 PM with a score of 0
I really like how the writing slowly reveals the world of this story and fleshes out the POV character! And who doesn't love post-apocalyptic robots?
-- Garrison_Bell on 12/22/2020 7:26:50 PM with a score of 0
I'm into it.
-- anneisin on 12/15/2020 6:40:09 PM with a score of 0
I wish it was longer.
-- stargirl on 12/5/2020 10:52:17 AM with a score of 0
Quite a good story considering it's length(tiny-topia). Substantial information, and great robotics!
-- PerforatedPenguin on 11/16/2020 11:27:39 AM with a score of 0
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