Player Comments on Dusty Fist
Chris, you're supposed to rename The First Page!
But this was just good goofy fun and a worthwhile way to spend five minutes. A storygame doesn't *have* to be a giant epic to be enjoyable and yours are nice to be able to point to for all those trembling noobs who either get their own 2000 word stories tragically wrong or else refuse to ever try in the first place.
Glad to see you writing again and I can tell you had fun with this. Some of the lines are just hilarious. 'The desire to not be gay and to get a glass of water gives you the motivation to see this fight through to the end.' That and the tea and scones ending were my favorite since of course I did not choose to be THAT kind of guy.
First ending I got was the happy friendship ending two clicks in, but going back I was pleased to see I had correctly sussed out that one does not merely *become* fat in the post apocalypse without being important...or without at least having a lot of really good friends in assless chaps who are in touch with emotions and sensitive to your plight.
on 5/8/2019 2:44:25 AM with a score of 0
I found this story hilarious.
The humor in Dusty Fist would not be everyone's cup of tea. If you are one of those weirdos that actually read reviews before the story, and you do not appreciate the Rule of Funny, maybe you should not bother reading this. You won't find it funny and will just click through for the free point.
If, however, you don't mind a little absurdity, I highly recommend this story. It is short and can be read when you haven't much time to spare, and of the stories of this length which I have read, I enjoyed this one the most.
There were several parts which had me audibly laughing even on my second read through, and the grammar and writing are good. The first page may make it seem as if it will be just some cheesy action story if you're not paying much attention, but it becomes clear that it is not by the second page.
There are a few pop culture references, but they weren't very distracting, even for me who did not initially get them.
The branching style is my favorite, and it made reading through the whole thing very easy without making me read the same page multiple times.
Good job on your first story of 2019, Chris.
on 5/7/2019 10:30:47 AM with a score of 0
Good game. Short, funny, quite crazy.
on 1/15/2020 12:54:26 AM with a score of 0
This isn't really my thing, but some.e of the endings are pretty funny, and the Time Cave format is really cool. I got a kick out of the random, reversal reversal of expectations style comedy.
I'm reality this was a good thirty minutes of my time but not much else. 5/8
on 1/8/2020 10:34:05 AM with a score of 0
Your writing in this game was quite humourous. For the length, it had a wide diversity of endings. (I tried pursuing all the paths, and I counted ten in all.) The story never felt linear, with at least two choices being offered on every page.
Some of the endings were actually really wholesome. I especially liked the ending where I spontaneously turned British. Ending 10 was very sweet as well. Of course, it was also nice to have pathways that were more action-packed. My favourite ending was probably the one where (SPOILERS:) I got tossed into the world of Skyrim. That brought back feelings of nostalgia. That, and the ending in which I finally received that thirst-quenching glass of water.
Good job overall.
on 1/5/2020 8:47:25 PM with a score of 0
Dusty Fist is a very decent story. I wouldn’t go as far to say it is amazing, though it is quite solid, and I appreciate a story that has a specific goal in mind and seeks nothing beyond that goal. There are a lot of long epics that promise so much and fail to deliver. Though that is not all epics, for some are long epic tales that you love, and are rewarding to read. Those stories will always be the best.
Though if the only amazing stories were long epics, then this site would be quite alianating to the ones who have neither the time nor commitment to spend four hours of there life reading some amazing epic. That is where stories like this one come in. Nice, short, amazing stories that can give anyone a good time. While this one may not be for everyone, this subclass of stories is. It is for the ones who can’t commit to a story like necromancer everytime they feel like reading. Hell even the ones who can need a break from epics from time to time. That is why I’m so fond of stories of this length.
Though talking about the story itself, it is just fun. Not deep, not epic, just some fun. To that end the story pulls it off perfectly. The comedy is rich as well. That is so refreshing when compared to the stories who try to be funny and fail.
In conclusion, this story is short. While that is fine, it does restrict me from giving this story a 8. If you are simply looking for a quick good time, read it. I read every path in under 10 minutes. If you had time to read these reviews, then you have time to read the story.
5 out of 8
on 10/9/2019 3:28:43 PM with a score of 0
Dusty Fist made me feel like a dusty fist. 4/10 make sure you leave all your common sense at the door. The words, sentences, tone, and mood enhanced the heehee hahas. There were nuggets of 'ooh that's quirky hoho'. I didn't heehee haha but that's probably the bulimia acting up again. Had tea with the raiders - that's all right. Most of the humour comes from subverting that Mad Max characterisation. It's not really a break in logic, as you'd expect from an absurdist approach. The raiders are simply misunderstood and defy our preconceptions. That's what went through my head while reading. Probably spoiled it for me but whatever. That final bit about drinking toilet water was funny though. So yeah. You could probably still appreciate the jokes even after I've explained them - testament to its staying power or something like that. Thank you Chris for providing us all with Dusty Fist.
on 9/22/2019 8:02:07 AM with a score of 0
very funny, was never bored, alays surprised, had a fun time reading all the endings lol
-- Lillie on 7/22/2019 1:42:25 PM with a score of 0
This is a silly story about a bar fight with some blatant "Fist of the North Star" references. Enjoy!
on 6/12/2019 6:43:50 PM with a score of 0
Lol I loved this. Each line is beautifully written and you can never predict what will happen next. It's just wonderful. Had me laughing at almost all pages.
on 6/2/2019 10:30:30 AM with a score of 0
on 5/11/2019 9:06:05 AM with a score of 0
What a beautiful little story.
I found Ending 10 straight away. Got my water and made some friends... Was pretty happy with that ending, but I decided to stick around and explore... And boy, was it worth it!
Ending 5 was easily one of the most romantic and heart-warming scenes I've read in a CYS game, as the protagonist finally lets go of his bias and denial, and admits to himself who he really is. Discovering his true sexuality with these men who are outwardly so brutal, yet also know when to be gentle, is a truly intimate and inspirational love story that will hold a special place in my heart for years to come.
At that point, I thought the endings couldn't possibly get any better, but you proved me wrong yet again with Ending 2... I got tea and scones!!! I like scones. ^_^
on 5/10/2019 9:21:59 AM with a score of 0
Stunning Fist Violence.
Excellent Raider Abuse.
Seven outta Eight.
on 5/9/2019 10:16:38 PM with a score of 0
Somehow I ended up as Dovahkiin.
on 5/9/2019 6:32:37 PM with a score of 0
on 5/8/2019 11:05:57 AM with a score of 0
Story: Very short, but the absurdist humor, especially the tea and scones path is spot on.
Prose: The writing style was often really funny. The narrator's light and sarcastic voice was great, and propelled the story on. Some jokes didn't work for me ("you guys share a pair of balls and a brain") and sometimes the narrative does the heavy lifting with exclamation points or stuff like "ohohoh" when I wanted more description and jokes. But that's probably a good sign that I wanted more!
Grammar stuff: Punctuation needs a bit of work, especially comma placement.
In short, a ridiculous blend of different genres in the guise of a western.
on 5/7/2019 5:25:30 PM with a score of 0
It is cool and good.
on 5/7/2019 12:47:23 AM with a score of 0