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CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

22 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 9/10/2025 7:54:42 AM

Hey CYStians!

The Gazette Free-For-All continues with one last round! Got two more stories for you all to read and review. Post your votes here to the thread now before the deadline this Saturday 11:59 EST!

As always, a hearty thank you to all the members of the CYS Monthly Gazette and specifically the winners from the last round, RKrallonor and Anthraxus. Congratulations guys!

Expect an announcement for the winner of the Free-Foe-All in another short Bonus Issue later this month, and of course you'll still be treated to another issue by our regular schedule. Hope you all enjoy.

The pictures here are clickable! If you want the slideshow of this article, here's a link.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

22 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 9/10/2025 5:51:01 AM

It feels odd that in Story A, the main character is afraid of Scotty beaming him up when the aliens come, despite supposedly being an avid UFO enthusiast and telling us that he wants to be abducted at the beginning of the story. Meanwhile, Story B has some good foreshadowing in the beginning, and also gives us a good reason for why they are in the middle of the forest that is rumored to have not one, but two types of dangerous killers lurking within it, instead of just having them mindlessly wandering in because of the usual "THaT DEfiNiTelY WON't haPpen tO us! We'rE toO smARt For thAT!". As such, I'm going to vote for Story B.

FYI: The link for the slideshow goes to the last issue.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

21 days ago
Thank you for pointing out the error. All fixed now.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

19 days ago
That is entirely human. Falling in love with the idea of something and then when face to face with the reality of it, sudden fear and instinct pulling you back.

Also I enjoy the delicious irony of the pro-alien people becoming sex slaves or whatever for the aliens. It's fitting for being so annoying.

Consequently, while I think maybe Story B might have better writing techniques (starting in action, good description, etc), I feel like story A is more of a complete circle, and I like circles. So I'm gonna vote A, if it's still allowed.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

21 days ago
Commended by EndMaster on 9/8/2025 11:17:10 AM
Well seeing as I did so the round before, I'll first up start by writing what I'll be looking out for. See this as that sad sequel trying and failing to capture the original's magic.

Alright. What the fuck. What is that prompt, dude. I guess the last one was too specific for you folks, so you figured you can't get off-prompt when the prompt itself is as wide as your mom was back when she still called herself pretty. Might need the next one to be a story about a woman and/or a man, though, just to be safe and not steer too far off-course with your own interpretation.

Anyway with the prompt being about as creative as a sad sack of Cricket's thrown away potatoes, I'll mainly be judging whether I'd prefer reading these stories over watching cat videos. Because that's what I am looking for when reading about a holiday. A lads' holiday, family holiday or even a solo backpacker's holiday in Thailand (but definitely not for those reasons guys, it's all spiritual!), all of them sport those feelgood warm vibes with good company, a fun getaway from the 9-5 drab. Well, unless you're one of those tragic people who sit at McDonalds all by their lonesome on Christmas, but I'm going to ignore those just as they're ignored in real life.

Yeah nothing much to add to that. Pretty simple and generous prompt, I sure hope nobody fucked this up.

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Story A:

Yeah, you fucked this up. You're the type of guy who puts Die Hard on for Christmas, loudly yelling at all the crying 5 year old nieces that YES IT IS A CHRISTMAS MOVIE WHY ARE YOU NOT ENTERTAINED. Give those kids Home Alone, man. They deserve it. Hell, even Frozen is better than this, so you can dump those kids and have an actual conversation with their mom the next room over.

It's even worse. I read on and it's not even the 4th of July, but the 2nd. It's not even an actual holiday but just a random modern attention whoring thing for 'awareness'. Yes I am aware y'all a bunch of fags, I did not need an extra day for that. Did you know 16th September was rock collecting day? Yeah me neither. That's how stupid this all is. Except rock collectors. Those are genuine, man. More genuine than this will ever be.

There were no good warm vibes Christmas vibes, or happy summer holiday vibes that I was looking for. The start of the story took too long traveling. Who likes a travel day, let alone reading about a travel day? Why did you bother making a solid 25% of your story a travel day? Moreover, when the good vibes were about to start you had to ruin the moment with a bunch of UFOs. It was all a bit meh.

But the story did have a first person protagonist, and I am always a fan of that one.

Also I'm just making this score to keep track.

Prompt 1/5
Entertainment 2/5
Enter's whim 3/5
Total 6/15

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Story B.

Alright. I settled in, paused the cat that meowed like a chirping bird and am met with the following opening sentence: "The blood wouldn't stop flowing". Now I am doing my due diligence and will continue reading, as any self-respecting reviewer would, but you fucked up, man. You fucked up.

If the previous contestant put Die Hard on, you just yanked the remote out of his hand and switched the channel to the sequel of Terrifier. Do you think the five year olds are liking that more? Well, don't bother answering, you are promptly kicked out of my house and never invited for a family dinner ever again.

Well I was about to say you brought it back again, remarking it was weird you started a feelgood story with that atrocious first sentence, but in the end it actually turned out to be a slasher, alongside a plot even more retarded than most within that genre.

Now this one is a rough one to judge. If I'm going by what I was looking for this is a solid -5/5. Still, there were some genuine warm moments before you fucked up royally again, and they were together as a family away from their day to day jobs. And while the slasher part was unnecessary, I can't deny it was way more interesting than an alien lover running away from his aliens. Also, while not being a first person protagonist, you did include the harder hitting sentences. I was particularly fond of the following one.

'The man's viscera streamed from the wound, his intestines spiraling outwards like a spool of thread, undone.' The undone does it.

Prompt -2/5
Entertainment 4/5
Enter's whim 4/5
Total 6/15

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So I'm retroactively making Story A's prompt a 0/5 because goddamn UFO day is retarded and not a holiday. Congrats Story B. You got my vote.

Also, story A: your story once again ended just as it was getting interesting. I'd really suggest reading your first draft again to see where it fails to hold even your interest, and cutting that out in favor for the actual good shit.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

21 days ago
Well I haven't read either of these yet but this certainly sets some expectations.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

21 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 9/10/2025 5:50:18 AM
LOL I heard you guys had trouble following the prompt last time, but if that is what you were given this time it must’ve been really bad.

Anyway, about Story A:

If I need to google whether the holiday used is actually a thing I don’t think it’s a good one to use as a way to make up for not following the prompt previously. Still I appreciate the creativity and at least it’s more unique than, I don’t know, Christmas (wink wink). Unfortunately not that much happens for most of the story with almost half of it being travel, and sightseeing. This is even more of a problem when a significant part of what was established about our protagonist, which is the only thing that makes that half not pointless, is contradicted in the second half. Now it’s not entirely unbelievable that someone’s beliefs might lose out to basic survival instincts once the thing they believe in actually comes true, but there was no explanation for the protagonist’s resistance to abduction contradicting his wishes to be abducted at the beginning. Maybe having them witness aliens actively attacking as a catalyst to change his mind could have smoothed out the transition. I liked the “I don’t like this holiday anymore.” line as a way to end it, but ending it just as it was getting interesting kind of cancels that out. An unfortunate byproduct of wasting paragraphs for travel and anal probing jokes.

Alternatively one could fix most issues by changing the protagonist from a UFO enthusiast travelling from afar to a “non-believer” local. That way we can skip the journey and establish the place in fewer words, leaving more space for the actual event. Also that way would remove the contradiction in characterization and make the twist a bit more impactful from the main character’s point of view.

Meanwhile Story B:

Congrats on taking the path of least resistance in terms of the prompt, and then continuing down that path with a never before seen story of an axe-wielding serial killer attacking random strangers in the woods. Now, don’t get me wrong, there’s a reason this is such a well established trope. It works as a decent framework for easy thrills, and you get bonus points for our victims actually having a reason to be out in the woods, but you make them being there make so much sense that it in turn makes the killer look like an absolute moron between openly attacking three people at once, two of which are young and fit to defend themselves, and doing so in broad daylight. Aside from that it’s a solid story, and starting it at the end as a teaser before going back in time works well in building suspense for this kind of thing. My only real gripe would be that one single line of dialogue that almost gave me whiplash, but I can tell that you were bouncing from the word count limit, which is probably why that’s a thing.


Overall I did like both stories in a sense that it wasn’t a waste of 10 minutes to read them, but Story B had fewer issues that impacted enjoyment so that’s where my vote goes. A gets bonus points for the idea, but sadly fell a bit short in its execution.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

21 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 9/10/2025 5:50:10 AM
Hey! I recognize this prompt from the prompt contest. Nice to see it getting put to use!

As for the stories themselves, they both seemed pretty solid and managed to get me interested in their respective plotlines. Story A choosing to base its plot around UFO day of all holidays, was pretty funny. It almost felt like the author wanted to subvert expectations regarding the prompt and picked the most wacky festival they could find. I did feel like it could have benefited by showing the party's interactions with the aliens or something. Then again, maybe that would've strayed away a bit too much from the prompt.

I really enjoyed the non-linear narrative choice to start with the end in Story B. You end up reading the rest of the story knowing full well that this happy nature walk isn't going to have a good ending. Sure enough, the sudden brutal appearance of the killer and the descriptions of the struggle provide an excellent payoff to that whole setup, finally bringing us back to the dying protagonist, captivated by the snow. Very cool writing. Except of course, I wouldn't read all that and tell you it's a story about Christmas lol. Maybe if the killer was actually Santa Claus but he went insane because of a curse of immortality and he started believing everyone was naughty, it would be more on theme?

Tough decision, but I guess I'll vote for Story B. It made some narrative decisions that really impressed me.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

19 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 9/17/2025 1:54:03 AM
Without having read the stories yet, I'm going to declare that the best part of this issue was the opening by Milton, made me laugh. We were however also promised the stories would stick to the prompt in letter and spirit, and given Enter's reaction, I'm not so sure of that. Story A It's a stretch to call a gimmicky event a "holiday", this gathering in Roswell seems to be one only in the same sense that a RenFaire is. Since the 4th was mentioned in passing, wouldn't it have made sense to have the invasion happen during those celebrations? I couple picture a scene of the UFOs appearing while everyone is picnicing outdoors looking up at the fireworks, which also would make it less boneheaded that the characters all left the shelter of the house to go running off down the street. There were a couple of places with missing words, one pretty obvious since it was just a blank space before a period; I assume there was some location the author meant to look up info on and fill in. It's been pointed out already that half the story is just about travel. I feel like that part could've been shortened while still getting the same info across, and leaving room to perhaps introduce the other characters in a more dynamic scene with dialogue or something; I'm not a purist on "show, don't tell" by any means, but enough of the story here is just summarizing events that it becomes pretty noticeable. Still I don't regret taking a few minutes to read it, it's a fun idea with some flaws that...wait for it...could have done more to stick to the theme. Bet nobody saw that one coming, hehe. Story B Okay, so I think this is Anthraxus's story. Pretty sharp prose, and thankfully this does a much better job at plotting and having things actually happen than the one from a couple weeks ago. It also has a little of that white Christmas aesthetic, and luckily the broadest prompt ever only says it has to be set during a holiday rather than particularly be about it, so you're safe as far as that goes. The plot itself is pretty generic, revolving around a sudden encounter with a random axe hobo, but the prose does the heavy lifting here, and I don't have a lot of criticism of that part besides nitpicking. (Can you really that easily saw somebody's legs off with an axe? Hmm.) It does seem like if people were routinely disappearing or being murdered around the edge of their property, the mother and Max would have been aware of it though, or some kind of police investigation might have involved looking over the cabin. "Rumors" of serial killing aren't really a thing if it's a fact that multiple people have gotten got. But then maybe there was nothing to that and this was just random bad luck, there isn't much learned about the killer. Anyway, my vote goes to Story B on the strength of the prose and pacing.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

19 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 9/11/2025 10:00:27 AM
Story A because I like the annoying alien people becoming slaves to the aliens. No offense if you're an alien person. I used to live in Roswell though and I just had my fill.

That isn't to say that Story B is bad. It's in fact, IMHO better written. But I just gag when I see people deeply in love, and a serial killer doesn't interest me that much. Sometimes something resonates with you and sometimes it doesn't. Great descriptions though, excellent writing throughout.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

19 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 9/10/2025 9:25:15 PM
Ok, let’s take a look.

I like the narrative tone of Story A and I also like that being abducted by a UFO is preferable to hanging out with the writer’s bullying friends :D This story comes across as very authentic as though the writer really did go to Roswell for World UFO Day but it reads less like a story than an account of an experience. Despite the theme there isn’t much tension, even when the UFOs appear and everyone gets sucked up for the anal probing. There are not a lot of sensory descriptions and the narrator’s actual abduction by the UFO is glossed over.

The opening sentence of Story B is more attention-grabbing and we have this guy in a not-great situation and have the interest of how he got there. I actually missed the transition to the flashback and had to read a second time but the non-linearity of the story is a good call. Elise sounds nice (I like the line “Max squeezed Elise once more”) and there is good foreshadowing. I love how Mrs Chavez is cool with getting her land cheap because there is a high possibility a serial killer might chop them up (that must have been a fun conversation at the estate agents) and sure enough random killer strikes. I’m not sure what is the point of throwing snow into a blind man’s face but the whole fight scene was exciting and the ending was a sad one.

On the whole I preferred Story B – the opening is more riveting and though both stories have threats develop the second one is more foreshadowed, described in more detail and has a more tragic ending with characters that are more sympathetic (especially Elise). Both were a bit cliché, though well-written, with decent characters, plot development and few SPAG errors but yeah, I would vote for B, just for the non-linearity of the story and the stronger ending description where the threat is encountered.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

13 days ago
Congrats by the way @Will11, on being the only member of the Gazette staff to vote in the Gazette sponsored duel. :)

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

13 days ago
Lol :D I was even prompted to do so by another Gazetteer :)

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18 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 9/11/2025 10:00:34 AM
Been meaning to do this so let's get into it.

Story A is engaging, and I love the premise. Even though it's not a real holiday, I guess it technically counts. There's a few SPAG errors, such as missing comma after the world Janelle, and no 'd' on the name before it, (I could make a dirty joke here, but I'm not going to. See how mature of a reviewer I am?) and an extra comma after Max's girlfriend.
Overall an engaging story, though. On the traditional storygame scale I'd give it a 5/8.

Story B immediately pulls me in with the promise of gore, but fairly quickly reveals it to be a hallucination? Or a flashback? It's very unclear. At this point, I'm excited to read the rest. The pacing is alright until around halfway through, at which point there's a very rapid switch from exposition to cold hard murder. Story B author, I ask this with all respect, but is your favorite Christmas movie Die Hard? Well, the story ends with some good old suicide, so that's engaging, at least. I'd give this a 5/8 as well.

This is a hard choice, but after a long deliberation, I'll give it to Story A for the creativity.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

18 days ago
Interesting takes on Story B. I'm pretty sure there wasn't a suicide, and I never questioned whether it was a flashback. Character "thinks back to the morning before this happened" and then the scene switches to events leading up to this happening.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

18 days ago
I got 'the character sits in the snow waiting to die' from the last couple sentences and called it suicide. I suppose I just need to work on my comprehension for the other bit, though.

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16 days ago

Okay, I read both of the stories, and I did think both of them had good points...but if I'm honest, both of them felt a bit disjointed. Story A was interesting, but it was a little jarring to go from the UFOs appearing, and the main character being a believer, to the main character trying to escape. And with story B, the opening scene was really engaging...but there was no reason to care about the characters. Honestly, I think both stories offered short glimpses into interesting plots, and both could do with being expanded into longer stories.

In terms of which I prefer...I felt the descriptions were more compelling for story B, so my vote does have to be for story B.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

12 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 9/17/2025 2:24:28 PM

Voting is probably closed by now, but since the results have not been announced, I’ll post my feedback on these stories.

Story A

It has an interesting opening and clear characterization of the protagonist as an alien conspiracy theorist. The tone is rather informal, as if the narrator is speaking directly to the reader, which is a good way to deliver information in an engaging format. There are a few minor grammatical errors (e.g. didt, there has to be a comma after Janelle, etc) but nothing too major.

Normally I'd critique the overuse of adverbs, especially 'actually' but it does match the narrative tone of someone telling a story verbally as people tend to have their own crutch words. The same goes for words like 'even' and 'also'. But does this narrative voice work? On one hand, this technique allows a lot of information to be delivered in a few words.  On the other hand, it speeds through one event after the next without taking the time to immerse the reader in any scene specifically or create any emotional attachments. This meant the first seven paragraphs could potentially be condensed since it seemed a bit like filler information that did not contribute to the protagonist's development nor provide information that would be vital later on in the climax (i.e. foreshadowing). 

Lots of good worldbuilding details are sprinkled in. Either the author thought a lot about how UFO meetings go or they've secretly attended one. Descriptions are all filtered through first person pov and matches what we know of the protagonist as an alien conspiracy theorist; he selectively observes details about who is and isn't one. There’s a missing word after 'renting the .' Well, that's one way to reduce word count.

I like the different reactions to the spacecraft. They are all believers, but some accept it more easily, while others are understandably filled with uncertainty and doubt. This makes sense, as some people just believe in aliens on a balance of probabilities while others are utterly convinced they're already on earth. The main conflict is running from the aliens when they arrive. Good use of fast paced narration here to build suspense. I would have liked perhaps more details on what it was like being captured - did the protagonist resist, and what emotions went through his mind? The ending was good and I like the twist: these used to be die hard alien fans no longer like the aliens now they are captured. Maybe I would have liked to see this theme explored more in the earlier sections: for instance, how much effort the protagonist/ other characters have devoted into sending messages to space or welcoming the aliens, so this would make the 'betrayal' more hardhitting

Story B

It also had a strong opening and started as the opposite of the other one: it takes a lot of time to ground the reader in the scene through descriptive language and character thoughts. Each action comes with reflection - swiping his sleeve reminds him of the soldiers, limping across the snow brings to mind a trail akin to dragging a dead deer through the woods. This builds more connection with the protagonist. In the earlier story, readers observed the protagonist like one watches an amusing character on screen, out of a curiosity to see what would happen. Part of it has to do with the tones of both stories–this one is more serious, while the other more lighthearted and comical.

Surprise vs suspense: there is a perfect example of this here. The first story uses surprise, and the second suspense. Surprise was when, at the end, it is revealed that the story was narrated from an alien holding cell; it juxtaposes the protagonist’s view of aliens at the start and at the end. But my creative writing teacher always preferred suspense, saying it has more of an impact. Rather than a short sudden 'oh that's surprising', suspense drags out the tension, and the question—why is the protagonist covered in blood?—remains unanswered, lingering for a while.

There is a slight overreliance on 'as' clauses in the second story, and when introducing Elise, using 'His girlfriend' instead of 'Max's girlfriend ' may flow a bit better'. I like how both these stories create a sense of normalcy before the event that changes everything. Here, I like how it focuses on one moment instead of many, so it can create more depth through details. The mention of the serial killer was good foreshadowing. I have to agree that this plotline is slightly cliche, but execution usually triumphs concept.

I also like the mention that the cabin was between civilization and the wild woods, a symbol for the protagonist as he struggles to keep true to his humanity but the wildness of what happens to Elise drives him to murder the serial killer. But my main gripe is that this story does not really follow the prompt. It mentioned Christmas, but it seemed to be a one off reference rather than something that played a large part in the story. For all I know, it could have taken place at any time in the year as long as it was in a snowy region. Maybe if the protagonist had more memories about the first snow of Christmas, or at the end mused about dying on his favourite holiday of the year, it could be a more integral part of the story.

CYS Monthly Gazette - 7 September 2025

12 days ago
>and when introducing Elise, using 'His girlfriend' instead of 'Max's girlfriend ' may flow a bit better

Yeah, that spot felt really awkward to me too. I had considered bringing it up but didn't see like there was a good spot to include it in what I'd written since I couldn't find any other technical issues.