It Happened at the Waffle House

Now I want a hamburger from Waffle House.

Nice Job throwing something together just in time for the end of the contest.

I thought about giving you a detailed review with proper criticism, but with bonus rating points added for DEI and Affirmative Action you get a 10/8 (Yes, 10/8 not 8/10). If you dont win the contest, you got robbed.

This was a very strange story, but I liked it. I found the idea of the Eye to be quite frightening, but also interesting. The story was a bit short, but I really love that you didn't really explain what the idea was or what it was doing there. I like the surrealness and I thought that was really cool. Reading this story made me feel like I was tripping.

Maybe add a bit more flow and context because jumping from getting kissed by a Waffle House cook to seeing a giant eye is jarring. Maybe you were going for that feel, and if so then disregard my advice because you achieved your goal. But if you weren't, then my advice is to add a bit more to make it flow and feel a bit more cohesive, but this is some good stuff.

For some reason, it just feels a little incomplete like there could have been more, then again it's a really entertaining story about a crazy encounter at Waffle House, so good job

Mmm. While I will say the beginning I enjoyed immensely, it has a perfect mix of randomness within the perimeters of an established plotline, it tends to go off the rails in the remainder of its short time. There’s really not much of an explanation for why anything happens after the first scene, so it can be hard to follow or get into the story at all.

However, there were no spelling mistakes or grammar mistakes that I saw, and despite the lack of any sort of actual plot line, the flow of the story was written in a way that was confusing rather than jarring.

3/8

I can't believe you made me stay up to write this. You're so stupid. 8/8