The Shameful Dead

Oh wow. This is good.

It’s good for many reasons, but I’ll get the criticisms out first.

**spoilers below!!**

There’s only one thing really wrong with this: the endings feel rushed. It has all the ingredients of a top rated story, except for the length. It’s just… so… short.

The characters were amazing. I could almost feel the motherly urge to find Amy and Millie, and most importantly, I actually wanted the main character to succeed. I understood how she felt in nearly every situation, and could find good arguments for both choices presented in a vast majorities of situations.
This isn’t only true for the MC. The side characters were well made, too, from the dad my horde killed all the way to my shaky, sobbing daughter.

The branching was also good. Even though it’s short, there are several different plots and storylines to play through, which is always a plus.

Overall, I’d give it a 5/8, though I definitely think there’s a potential here for much more.

If you’re looking for an enjoyable way to spend a half hour or so, this is the story for you.

Only very minor spoilers below.

After reading through one path, I wondered why the rating was so low. The writing is amazing, the characters are fleshed out, and it all works together to create a beautifully immersive experience.

Then I read another path, which revealed a huge issue. It just wasn't long enough. 7k words isn't nearly enough to have a complete story. There was good branching, but all the branches seemed cut off too early. From what I could tell, this seems to be a trend in your work. The writing is absolutely wonderful, but the story is too linear or the branches aren't expanded upon enough.

Everything else was spectacular. All the characters were relatable, with clear goals and feelings, and each of the branches revealed new information about the main character and her family. The writing had the perfect ratio of description to thoughts to action. Font was nice as well.

Highly recommend, definitely one of the best zombie stories on the site.

Too short. I really liked it though

Great story. This seems more like a demo and hope that maybe it can be expanded on at some point in the future. The writing was top-notch and I could actually feel the emotions running through the mom's head. I read this and the concept made me just sit there like holy shit this would be absolutely miserable to live through. Being a passenger in your own body, forced to watch your body consume others would be torturous.

Loved the concept, wish there was more.

That was so good, but a sad ending.

Pretty good short story to play through.

It's got a good beginning, but the whole thing was way too short.

I'm always down to read a zombie game as they seem to be rare and inbetween now a days given the fad has died down, and with the decent length of this one I went in with good expectations.

Didn't expect it to be so depressing and sad, and you were honestly able to pull it off rather nicely given the length, with acute and orgiginal depictions on zombisism that I found rather pleasing.

I don't think many zombie games take the approach in which you slowly lose control, which is what I liked from dead island among some other titles.

Good work with this, 8/8.

This was really good.

I truly enjoyed reading this story. It is extremely well written, the characterization is good, and the story has a good flow. I liked being able to get inside the zombie’s head, and feel her internal struggle. Also, I liked the concept of the zombie being able to exhibit some control over its direction even though it was not able to change its nature or instinct.

My main complaint would be the story’s length. What is here is great, but it would have been so much more fun to get to follow along with the character for a longer time. The branching is fine for the size story, but would be even better if expanded upon.

Overall, great writing, great story but would benefit from more. Definitely recommend.

It was ok, but excessively easy.