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what is allowed on this site?

2 months ago
can I add a lot of messed up scenarios or would it get deleted?

what is allowed on this site?

2 months ago
As long as its not just straight up pornographic or a gorefest it should be fine.

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2 months ago

Eh, gorefests are fine.

Just might be boring without reasons for said multiple gorefests.

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2 months ago

Judging by what they have written, I'd say don't get your hopes up.

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2 months ago
I regret reading that...

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2 months ago

"Time to stab and rape."

Lol.

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2 months ago
nice

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2 months ago

Nothing is allowed. You cannot write about anything.

what is allowed on this site?

2 months ago
ah yes! I forgotten about that.

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2 months ago

Though I'll add, considering you've read "The Pure, The Vile and the Deadly" along with giving it a 1, I certainly hope you can write way better "messed up" scenarios.

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2 months ago

I doubt this obviously retarded shit taste having faggot could write anything on the level of that. 

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2 months ago

I must say that what you've written so far is pretty bad. Not because of any "messed up scenarios" but because you're simply not very good at writing. That can be worked on, granted, and you may improve. But what cannot be improved is your apparent perception that an absurdist, disjointed story peppered with shock comedy and "messed up scenarios" makes up for a lack of talent. I guess what I'm trying to say is that I'd like to wring your cat's neck and then use its carcass as a condom to rape all of your loved ones with.

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2 months ago
you guys should have some respect for others. just because I dont find paragraphs about vampire bitches funny? I write what I enjoy

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2 months ago
And you enjoy murder and sexual assault? Cool.

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2 months ago

I could overlook his interests if he was at least decent at writing about them. The fact that his "story" made me think of Serpent's masterpiece, "The Manliest Man", is honestly rather telling as to the overall writing level and intelligence of this subhuman piece of shit.

what is allowed on this site?

2 months ago
What you enjoy writing is retarded. And no, respect is earned, not given.

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2 months ago

What story were you reading with vampire bitches?

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2 months ago
PTVTD was indeed the biggest failed comedy of the year.

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2 months ago

What you enjoy is literal shit. I'm reading the garbage that you're spewing and I'm like a stone-faced fucking monument. 

 

"Hehe! Shit! Piss! Rape! Stab! Stab!" 

 

No lick of cohesion, just retarded shock value. There's literally nothing. Not a single ounce of wit.

 

I'm actually angry that a retard such as yourself think EndMaster's works are worth a one, but is yours so much better? I'll tell you directly. Your story-game would get 1 and 2's out the fucking ass and then be unpublished. Oh, I'm speaking for everyone. My bad. Actually I think I would rate it a one on my end, and thankfully, I have enough point weight that it would at least reflect some change on hopefully getting it eventually unpublished if it was somehow able to drag itself to a 3.

 

Do you have any self-awareness, or are you literally this retarded? Personally, I don't see anything worth even preserving. I would delete this shit before it could even see the light of the day on the basis of you rating End's game a one, while writing with the audacity that you might actually think your story-game would excel more than End's game when it even comes to humor, but I digress. Keep writing your shitty story-game.

 

Far be it from me to take away your tools.

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2 months ago
Genuinely curious what you think you've done to earn respect.

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2 months ago
Looking at your story I can already tell you it will be unpublished. Maybe before worrying about writing "messed up scenarios" you could focus on you know, actual writing.

But you already seem like an extremely brittle and unlikeable soon to be banned retard, so whatever.

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2 months ago

"Like many things it turns out this all comes down to whether the author is CHAD enough to break the rules and pull it off"

- Mizal 

Obviously no porn, but the amount of gratuitous edgelordiness and schlockitude you're allowed to get away with is going to be contingent on how good you are at writing. 

 

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2 months ago
They're not good at writing though, that's the problem.

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2 months ago
except my story has barely started and not even published meaning u are abusing your powers

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2 months ago
Oh like they haven't heard THAT before

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2 months ago

It is on sneak peek you fucking retard

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2 months ago
HOW CLICK BUTAN

this is abuse of your powers Dark!!

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2 months ago

Let us know when you start writing a story.

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2 months ago

I don't think I've ever seen a tard get dogpiled this hard in years at this point 

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2 months ago
This is quite the sight ngl.

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2 months ago

You're an imbecile

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2 months ago
it is something wrong with this site. I didn't enable previews of this

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2 months ago

Trail mix-gobbling turdcunt

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2 months ago

Well nothing was wrong with it until you showed up. Lol.

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2 months ago

It's the automatic setting. You can go to the story settings and turn it off.

Though I would like to see where it's going, and I doubt you'll publish it. (or if you do it'll get taken down)

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2 months ago
I don't want to see what this degenerate wants to talk about. But, I reckon that it'll be hilarious to see him write his self-immolation worthy story.

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2 months ago
Red, turn off threaded view. You're replying to the wrong post.

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2 months ago

Another retard

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2 months ago

miz I think this dude just called you retarded 

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2 months ago
He meant to say rétard I'm sure.

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2 months ago

Si

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2 months ago
Oh no, I was actually replying to bon. I really don't want to read whatever he writes

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2 months ago
You do know that retard can somewhat be fixed by thinking with the head sitting on your shoulders, right?

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2 months ago

now now guys, I think we should at least let them finish the story, the incoherence may be because they haven't fleshed out the details

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2 months ago

I think you should shut the fuck up

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2 months ago
I think I've seen this exact scenario eight million times and it's always hopeless when the retardation is so advanced it's indistinguishable from trolling.

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2 months ago

In any case, hopefully Eric has a better understanding of what is allowed on the site.

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2 months ago
Good writing is allowed. Retarded scribbles aren't.

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2 months ago

Idiocy isn't allowed on this site. Therefore, you'll be deleted. Hope that answers your question.

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2 months ago

The only thing messed up here is the extraordinary volume of fucking whiskey that your spineless, brainless excuse for a mom managed to imbibe in the short two weeks she actually knew she was pregnant before you were miscarried. Thank god modern medical science has allowed aborted fetuses to gain access to keyboards and even smash their soft little heads against them.

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2 months ago
Y'know, if you're still coming back, I have a helpful little message for you.

Worry about messed up writing later, get the reasons and details down with it first.

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2 months ago

Let me give you a more kindhearted reply, because I'm in a rather good mood.

Small disclaimer:

I can go on my usual rant about how one shouldn't use sexual assault willy nilly and how it is usually better to show as little as possible when you write a rape scene, especially if you want to cater to a bigger audience. You know, keep in mind that this stuff can always be traced back to your in-real-life name blablabla. However, this a small hobby site, so you don't have to worry about making it palatable to the general public. 

The main gist

BUT if you still want to do an edgelord work, then (like other people in the forum have said) GO ALL OUT. "Kill and rape" is the most boring way to depict the most vile stomach churning crimes that only a deprived human mind can commit. Give it a little more flare, give me an elaborate description about how you raped every person on the boat, what your victims' last words were, how they reacted when you shoved your junk in them. If your goal is to make it as disgusting as possible, then you have to commit to that goal. If I'm not feeling nauseous after reading your work, then it isn't doing its job. (I've honestly read better fanfiction than this.)  

One great example of you not going far enough is already shown in the first scene. It was only casually mentioned that you slapped a girl's ass. However, we don't get to see the protagonist's thoughts about this act. Why did he enjoy it that much, was he enjoying it at all, how often does he do it to her? We don't even get to see the poor girl's reaction.   

You know, you can make the edge even better if the protagonist does harm to characters we may actually care about instead of cardboard cutouts. I don't know, make him force his closest ally to rape his own child or something, because that ally decided to betray him for a higher position in the court. Be creative my man, context matters.

Some extra pointers 

P.S Don't forget to PUNCTUATE your sentences. It is really bothering me. Also, for heaven's sake, we are not all Americans in here. Please don't botch European languages for comedy. It's not even that funny. 

You even have a fun little article to read: Endmaster's map for (im)mature story writing. Might do you some good!