Zeroes and Ones

This did not feel very funny at all. :c It felt like some guy is yelling at me about how the world should be.

There was... some sort of conflict with the virus and revenge thing, but it wasn't amusing. Otherwise, a storyline is almost completely rejected. I didn't understand what was happening and WHY.

There was 0 description, 0 background (unless you count the protagonist having the skill to - what was it - infect computers or something?), and broken grammar. I mean, some places were... okay, but it kind of hurt my eyes... >~>

Oh, and remember: We don't like pages with all but one link leading to death (or all leading to death) because it makes the story way linear.

While, yes, I understand the point of the story, the quality of it needs some enhancement. Work on punctuation, details, and background.

The adventure tries to combine Hollywood hacking and internet 1337... While using extremely bland humor and insta-deathlinks.

This type of game- The PICK WHAT THE AUTHOR WANTS OR DIE- type of game is highly fustrating to play, this is a CYOA, it wasn't supposed to be so linear. It gets bad from the point where you get to pick Revenge, Ice Cream, or toilet. Now toilet doesn't do anything beside adding another useless link in the game, with Ice Cream, you get arrested because all you did was hacking A TOASTER, now only Revenge is the correct choice. Why did you add those useless links anyway if you wanted us to pick Revenge? This carries on to the rest of the game, good god.

Deathlink issues aside, the game tries too hard to be funny. It's like some 12 year old freshly graduated from meme school and went here to do his magic. At least it didn't have grammar and spelling mistakes. (if 1337speech doesn't count.)

If you are aiming to make this game as fustrating as possible, then I'd suggest leaving it this way, but if you want it to have the characteristics of an actual CYOA game, then give us more options on what to do that changes the plot without killing us, over and over.

Somehow I get the impression that this game taught Ryder everything he knows about hacking. ^_^

This had practically no plot, though that might just be because it’s so short. I also am aware that it’s meant to be funny. But if it was really just a humor story, why can’t I hack the President? It would be more fun than my neighbor. I have reason to suspect that this was written by a second grad boy.
4/8

This storygame is kinda pointless. It's failing to be funny, and is obviously not proofread. :(

This WOULD be a great story, but a somewhat unrealistic ending in multiple locations kinda ruined the allusion of a good narrative.

This was poop. Pure and simple.

I rated it as such.

If you're trying this hard to be funny, you're probably better off being a prop comedian.

Sigh.
This story better be taken down. It's clear that no effort was put into it. A linear story mixed with an annoying MC mixed with several grammatical errors just made this an awful read.

Fell asleep reading it.

...Linear. Very linear.

Why can't I choose what I want to do? I have to do exactly what the author wants, NO EXCEPTIONS!

Was it supposed to be funny? One point was, the 'mwahahaha' thing. Other than that, a little annoying.

Still a little fun, I suppose...

3/8