HOW? do I get fucking proof readers
You should unpublish that and have someone read over it first.
and i have they said that it was interesting
someone in one of my classes
well fuck you and im not special ed and neither are my friends and if you dont like this you can go fuck your self
It's not that he doesn't like this. It's that there is nothing to like.
i just started im getting to the good part
Chris stop picking on the mentally handicapped
Fuk no, pls Chris.
For the sake of Uganda no!
Honestly if you deleted just the last 268 words or so and rewrote that, could be good.
fuck you all
fuck it if you think you could make this story better then go ahead tell me what i should right instead
if you call me mentally handy capped one more God damb time I swere
I’m not entirely sure why you keep responding to my thread with this, but sure by my estimation you’re “mentally handy capped”.
You swear what. It's the internet, lad. Suck it up. Write at least a thousand words, and come back to us for reviewing .
tell me how you would rewright it and btw I have worked on all of that
im not even close to being done with my story why are you telling me this
how am i a troll
thats what i thought
your pissing me of
who the fuck is fang
Stop making new threads for this. You have like three threads up already. I already reviewed this "story" in the Writing Workshop. You took none of my advice and just posted the same "story" again. Learn English or make your story in whatever language your country speaks. Why don't you try using the spellchecker that is quite literally built in to the website before begging people to proofread your pile of illiteracy?
im fucking American you bitch
what does this say
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And I'm Russian. Really makes your writing look poor doesn't it? But I'm done trying to help you so here you go:
well criticizing my shit is not helping
how about you choke on another pickle you fat bitch living in your moms basement
Damn, miz. Rekt.
He really crossed a line bringing pickles into this. Good riddance.
I think you were on the fast track to a pickle pic. You should thank Mizal for her mercy.
Here you go! ^_^
Happy fapping ^_^
... Hey, aren't Warriors games supposed to be banned?
I could have spent all this time writing, but reading this thread was like watching a crack addict in a car accident. When the series of onlookers showed up with medical aid, the burning driver just ran out into the street, and picked a fight with half the people trying to help. This attempted fight also included the mayor of the whole town. Then he turned around and got his ass handed to himself by the resident bad ass russian before throwing himself under the wheels of the ambulance. The last part was incredibly impressive because the ambulance was parked.
I don't regret reading this thread. Somebody should do something about the short dog that's nuking third world countries and sexually assualting/blackmailing young men.