Ogre11, The Grandmaster of the Written Word

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I like to write. I have lots of stories running around in my head, but it does take me (WAY) too long to get them from my mind to paper (or computer bits). I've always loved "Choose your own Adventure" type books, so I thought, why not write a few to share with others? I hope you like the stories I set up here.

I suppose I should update this some day... but today is not that day...

 

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Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Earning 2,000 Points Jointly won the 2017 Wilderness Contest Having 1 Storygame(s) Featured Rated 99.8% of all Stories Given by BerkaZerka on 01/20/2018 - Plentiful Contributions to the Site! Given by Will11 on 01/14/2018 - For your thirteen well-written stories, especially Spy Mission

Storygames

A UFO at School

There's a UFO at the school!

This story was written as a an attempt to try out a different way to write storygames. I tried to write the entire story from start to finish, then insert choices only after writing the story (see more here). The story is intentionally short: this is supposed to be a short story of the type you might read in a magazine: no matter which path you take, it should end up with a story about 800-1,200 words long. For those interested, there are eight different endings.


Alien Abduction

You were minding your own business when you are suddenly abducted by aliens! Now you need to find your way home before, well, you're not sure, but before something!

This is a short, lighthearted puzzle adventure. It is not too hard and not too serious. The puzzle is simple, but try and pay attention to the clues to avoid dying and having to back up! There are seven ways to die and just one way to win.


Created for Riddles & Puzzles 2016 contest

First Runner-up: Riddles & Puzzles 2016


Cryogenic Failure
You signed up for a long space journey -- so long that you would have to be frozen in a cryogenic state for decades until the ship reached the destination: a new planet that was just like earth, but had no inhabitants. The ship was automated, and a group of 249 other people were frozen with you -- to be automatically un-frozen when the ship reached its destination and landed on the planet.

After many strange dreams, you find yourself waking up, but something doesn't seem quite right. This waking up process is not what was described to you at all, and now you're going to have to figure out what happened and what you're doing to do about it!

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This is a relatively simple choose-your-own ending story adventure. There are many different endings (eight total) with a good story (I hope) behind each. Enjoy picking your own story!

Finding the Muse

This is a game based on writing, inspired by the forums here at CYS.

Your goal is to find your muse and write a storygame for CYS. How will you do that? There is only so much time in the day, and there are so many things that you can do...

In this game, you make the selections and see if you can find the way to the muse and the next great CYS story. There are a total of 5 different endings to this storygame.

Special thanks to Kiel Farren and ISentinel Penguin for their forum contributions to this story (whether they believe it or not).


Go Get The Mail!

You have a simple task -- go and get the mail. Oh, it sounds easy, but could you ever imagine how many different things could get in your way?

This is my first attempt at a storygame. It's a very basic "Choose your path" story. Let me know what you think of it in the forums!


Featured Story Spy Mission

In this story, you take on the role of yourself. Your day starts out like every other day for you, until a few different things happen... and you have to decide what to do about those things... Join in this fun spy adventure and journey to Prague, Havana, Buenos Aries, and more!

Note: There are a lot of different options in this game. Please do try it more than once -- there are many different ways through (you will always see the same first chapter, but there are many different ways through it to other chapters).

There are also quite a number of endings. For those who like to look for such things, each ending is labeled with a number, and there are 28 different endings (and many ways to get to each one).


Surviving Pre-School

High school can be tough with all the cliques, bullies, "resource" officers, and changing rules. But that is nothing compared to the pre-school room! In pre-school you don't even know what a rule is, never mind that you're breaking it. And those evil naps can slip up on you before you know it. Can you make the right choices to make it through the pre-school day without getting spanked?

Please note: There are just three endings to this little short: you survive pre-school, you do not make it through the day, and, well, you don't want to get the other ending.

Also note: This is an intentionally short, very light-hearted story that is meant to be silly. Please read and enjoy in that vein.

Story inspired by MattC


Survivors

This is a short story that is was an entry for playa988's 4-week long contest. Yes, I wish it was longer, too, but this was intentionally short for the purposes of writing a complete story in the short time frame allowed for the contest. There are, however, 18 endings, so feel free to try the story more than once and follow different paths. The theme of the contest was "gray vs gray," so don't look for a "winning" ending. When it's all grey, no one wins.

The year is 2016 and a series of nuclear bombs have been detonated in dozens of cities across the United States in the population centers. The country is destroyed and many people are dead.

While many cities (and surrounding areas) have been destroyed, there are various areas, far from the population centers, where people have survived. The people are trying to make sense of what happened and are trying to rebuild their lives and their country.

This story takes place in Western Montana where you follow the adventures of Jim Thompson, a survivor of the massive attack, trying to make sense of what is left of the world. Your choices will decide what happens to Jim, and perhaps what happens to the country...

 
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The Adventures of Rory Thorn in Math Class

Rory heads to Math class. That's boring, right?

Well, it is boring for most people, but not Rory Thorn. Rory always manages to find adventure, even in math class. Join Rory in math class and help decide what happens to him and his adventures!

The suggested way to read this story: do not press the back button. Oh sure, I know you want to, but read the whole story through, then start over. You will find that the stories will take you in entirely different directions and I think you really see that when you start over instead of just backing up! But hey, you're the reader, you get to read it however you want!


There is only one ending to this story. However, there are 32 different pathways that lead to that end! There are almost 16,000 words in this story. However, since there are so many pathways, the average story you will read will only be 3,000 words. So it's a short story...but with 16,000 words...


Author's Note: I do hope you enjoy this story. If you think it should be longer, well, I'm sorry, but do look for more stories in the "Adventures of Rory Thorn" series. The idea here was to give you a LOT of options and end up with a single short story.


The Emperor's Zoo
The emperor sends you to a faraway land to capture exotic beasts for his zoo. But a spreading plague, a witch-doctor, and a brewing feud between local tribes presents . . . difficulties.

This is a contest entry for Bucky's December 2017 contest

This ended up being more of a puzzle game than a story. It still has a good story, I think, so I do hope you enjoy it. It will take a little time, there's not a short way through this one!

The Mayoral Campaign

Try to get elected as mayor of your town!

This is more game than story. Okay, there's not really much story to this one, it's a game. There are many options and lots of variables, so be sure to play more than once!


The Mountain Pass
You wake up after a car crash and find yourself lost in the snow. Can you survive and get out alive?

For those interested in such things, there are eight bad endings and three good endings. Sorry about that, but there are lots of ways to die in the wilderness you know.

Created for January, 2017 New Frontier Contest

The Quick Dating Game

Play the quick dating game and see if you can get the girl!

I hope you have as much fun reading this as I did writing it. It was a lot of fun.

This is my official entry for the contest, "Brevity, the Soul of Wit" for August, 2015.

Please note: If you are easily offended by stereotypes, especially as they relate to men, women, and dating, please don't read, rate, or comment on this game. It is meant to be silly.


Adventurer
unpublished
This is a fantasy adventure where you star in the role of the young adventurer! Follow the adventurer along throughout his life starting out as a child and leading into adventure. Be careful with your choices because almost every time you make a choice, it will have an effect later in the story.

A Solar Flare
unpublished

Solar flares are quite common. Many days the sun throws out a number of different solar flares in all directions. Most are of no interest to anyone but astronomers. They aren't dangerous. In fact, the worst solar flare followed by a coronal mass ejection in history (The Carrington Event) really didn't even have much of an effect on the entire planet other than a couple fires and a lot of pretty colors.

That was then, this is now.

Most of the time, earth has days to react to a solar flare because there are astronomers out there watching and recording the sun 24 hours a day. But what if there were a solar flare larger than the Carrington Event? And what if that solar storm made a direct hit on the planet, before anyone had time to prepare? Could humans survive? Could the planet itself survive?

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Moon Base Alpha
unpublished

Join Stone Ulrich, leader of Moon Base Alpha, as he heads off to explore parts of the moon - why are there caverns here? Who made them? Are they still here?



Please note: This is not your typical choose-your-own-story on this site. This is a longer length story that really attempts to draw you into the story. If you're looking for a quick few clicks and a free point, this is not the story you want for that.

Created for Bucky's Epic Story Contest, Summer 2018


The Adventures of Rory Thorn in Biology Class
unpublished

Time for Biology! Sounds fun, doesn't it? What? It doesn't? Well, apparently you've never been in Biology class with Rory Thorn! Come, help Rory get through class by choosing your own adventure and see where he will end up!

The first story in this series is Rory Thorn in Math Class. You do not have to read that story to understand what is going on in this story, but that is his first class of the day, while Biology is his second class.

This series is an attempt to create stories that have recurring characters and are in a way similar to a sitcom -- no matter what happens during the story, everyone returns and is ready to start the next story.

I hope you enjoy this story!


The Adventures of Rory Thorn in English Class
unpublished
It's time to head to English Class

The Archaeologist
unpublished


Join in the adventures of archaeology student Tom Forsyth as he follows clues that lead around the world. Help him make decisions that will unwrap ancient secrets without releasing evil on the world. Discover the pathways of old before others decipher the clues and reveal enough power to take over the world!
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The Horror Inside
unpublished
Drew was a fantastic accountant. He really enjoyed his job and he was good at it. But one day something started happening to him, and he just wasn't quite sure what was going on...

Created for

Winning the CYS Contest
unpublished
Try your hand at winning the latest CYS writing contest! It's not as easy as it sounds: you will have to use strategy, do some quality writing, and figure out how to beat all the other entrants. And you will have to overcome the random number generator (because that's how your opponents are going to be determined).

It's a short game that you can try over and over again until hopefully one time you win that coveted trophy for winning a CYS contest!

Note: This is not an actual CYS writing contest and you will not actually win a trophy for your account if you happen to win this game.

Articles Written

Choose-Your-Own-Stories, Paths, and Writing
How do different paths work in CYS stories? How do you write different paths in your story? What is branching?

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Hey! on 10/16/2018 3:49:48 PM
Hi there. Welcome to the site! I hope you enjoy your time here.

Help with this question I have please. on 10/15/2018 9:43:21 PM
Of course.

Kill Aman's Mustache Hint Parade! on 10/12/2018 5:41:53 PM
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Hi, everybody! on 10/7/2018 7:06:14 PM
Welcome to the site, I hope you enjoy your stay here!

Men Can't Be Artists on 10/7/2018 5:51:36 PM
" Your happiness cannot change if you are a cis female, cis male or non binary." So all cis females, cis males, and non binary people all have the same level of happiness throughout the world. And it never changes. They're either always happy or never happy, I'm not sure quite which. Quite enlightening.

Choices on 10/6/2018 7:36:27 PM
Its a tough call, knowing the audience here. I've been thinking about a story similar to this. However, if there is a section without any choices, would it make sense to simply make it one page? Even if that page is 2,000 or so words? To me that makes perfect sense, but I know some here I don't think really like reading, so a large page like that is something... intimidating? Difficult? I don't know. At the same time, if there's no choices, why are there additional pages? Sure, if there's a major scene change or something, that would make sense. But more than two pages in a row with no choices doesn't make a lot of sense to me. So my suggestion is to avoid the linearity simply by putting more information on a single page.

Feed me on 10/2/2018 4:37:44 PM
How about a banana (or really any fruit hanging on a tree) living in fear of getting picked and eaten like all its friends? Based on choices, it might end by getting picked, never getting picked and falling to the ground rotting, by shrinking down into nothing, getting eaten by a monkey...

Feed me on 10/2/2018 4:11:51 PM
I keep thinking of making a non-human character into a silly oaf of a story, but I don't think that's what he wants. You can keep it simple and talk about a person becoming more and more of a vampire and trying to fight it off. You could write about a frozen hamburger that's going to eventually be eaten by the end of the story. Maybe a ghost who wants to do good, but is actually quite insane.

Quarry on 10/1/2018 5:55:48 PM
First, the disclaimers: this is my review. It is likely not like anyone else’s. In fact, you probably couldn’t find anyone else who completely agrees with what I write here. But it’s my opinion. I’m also writing this as I read through this for the first time. These are my first impressions as I read it. I’m not saying they’re right, just what I’m thinking. This is written in the spirit of helping you see how others see your story and to perhaps give you ideas for improvement, and not to be mean or anything else. Please don’t take it personally. This review is likely worth exactly what you paid for it. Finally, you did ask. Here we go: The howls are “within” the wind? To me, that makes it sound like the howls are captured by the wind and can only be heard if you’re inside the wind. The howls can swell, and the wind can blow, but I think the way you’ve combined those makes something not work quite right. The next sentence is a fragment, there is no verb. And “moon mourning?” That’s kind of alliteration taken to the extreme, isn’t it? I dunno here. I can get the idea of the moon mourning, but I don’t think I’d ever place those two words directly adjacent to one another. The snow sentence is okay, but again, the order and choice of words just feels a bit off. And that last sentence? I don’t even know what’s going on there. How do you stand FROM a mountain top? How is winter desolation? How is desolation CARRIED on the land? The next paragraph seems fine…but then we get to paragraph three. You mention that the camp fire is “underneath an alcove.” An alcove is “a recess, typically in the wall of a room or of a garden.” Therefore, your fire is apparently underground, crushed underneath stone, but happily burning away. Is the alcove made of coal? Next, though, I can clearly see the monster-feel of this writing – because the monster is grilling someone’s chopped off hands over the burning underground coal fire. At least that’s what I see when I read that hands are being held over the flames. I guess it could be lovers holding hands, too, but the “over the flames” makes me think there be some grillin’ going on. The rest of that sentence isn’t too bad. The first “his” is jarring because the very first time you identify this character, you do it by referring to his shawl, rather than the fact that there’s even a figure hunched over the flames. In the beast paragraph, it feels like the beasts died as I was reading. It started out with two beasts lying next to him, but in the next sentence they’re corpses. Maybe they should be identified as dead when you first introduce them? Did he just fart? I don’t know what’s going on. You were talking about the beasts, giving lots of descriptions about the beasts, but then suddenly he looks up, disgusted. Who doesn’t like the smell of their own farts? Okay, getting into the next paragraph we’ll just let the confusion rein. We have this guy, first described with “his shawl,” then he’s “this man,” but now “he is here.” Now I’d assume that the “he” in the last bit is someone else, but in the next sentence there’s another “he” that doesn’t appear to be. Then there’s someone walking in the snow, and that’s “his.” And since the farting guy just looked up, it looks like there’s now three guys, all only identified as “he:” the shawl guy, the guy in the sky that shawl guy was waiting for, and now some new guy that’s walking in the snow outside the underground coal-fired alcove. But that’s okay because now the corpse is alive what with its thick pelt and “the beast sits down.” And I don’t even know whose lungs we’re talking about now, it almost seems like it is the arrow-riddled corpse beast. But hey, someone (one of the three he characters, one of the maybe-alive beasts, or the new beast that just walked in) has “strange” antlers. Why are antlers strange? Are you an antler-phobe? Oh wait, there’s a beast and a man. Is this the beast on the left or the right side? I mean, I guess it’s the beast that just walked into the hidden alcove, but honestly I didn’t see that without re-reading a bit. Hey look, there’s a human! This would have made a lot more sense if you managed to work that into his description before you even got to the shawl. By the way, what is “cold staring?” Is that different from “hot staring?” or even “warm staring?” So now it appears the beast walked up, took a nice seat that was prepared for him in the barc-a-lounger by the fire, but he’s so much of a beast that he’s struggling to make words… but the very first word he utters is a contraction. Of course, the rest of the sentence sounds like a beast because it doesn’t make much sense. If you take out the description of the words, he said, “You’re probably wondering why I asked you to come here and not alone as I had asked.” What? Did he ask him to come here at all? Did he ask him to come not alone? Did he come alone, but not as he asked because there’s dead things on the ground? Yeah, I have no idea who asked what at this point. Why is “Gather by the Fire” capitalized? Is that a place? And why would the dead monsters want to gather by the fire if instead they really wanted what the other beast had? Maybe they wanted to sing campfire songs before taking something from the beast? It ends with the beast saying he “know[s] all of it,” and then the human says, “Tough crap, buddy, this is a damn exposition and I’m going to explain it all to you again whether you like it or not because I need the readers to know it too.” Well, perhaps I paraphrased a bit, but that’s pretty much what I read there. As mentioned, these are just my random impressions as I read through it for the first time. Hope this helps!

Hello, Story, and link help on 10/1/2018 5:04:33 PM
Did you hit the "publish" button?