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Avery's Animations

one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/2/2024 2:40:36 PM

So, I've had a really hectic past two or three years where I've not really been able to get into the writing headspace and barely gotten any writing done. What I have been able to do though, is lots and lots of drawing! (I can draw no matter how hectic things are.) And playing around a lot with Opentoonz.

For the past three years I've been planning on throwing myself back into writing by taking part in the novel writing month that shall not be named, but the last two years, some big family emergency always turned up around the September/October/November period that left me needing to act as a carer for some family member or other, and I would always promise myself, I'd get some writing done when things calmed down.

... Well, things have finally calmed down! And so I decided to combine my love of writing with my love of drawing and animation to put together a youtube channel. Mostly I'm going to be focussing on things like book reviews and little animated shorts, but right now I have put together a daily vlog for October about how to go about preparing to write a novel.

Probably won't be very interesting for now, since I know that Preptober and NaNoWriMo have never really been big on CYS, but I figured I'd share anyway in the hopes that some people would squee over my chibi little animations while I unintentially promote a company who apparently support AI, scammers and pedophiles. ^_^

 

Avery's Animations

one month ago
This is my first time hearing about any NaNoWriMo controversies. Yeah, those are some pretty bad ones.

Well, good luck with productivity and all that next month!

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Thank you! No reason to let those pesky pedos stifle my creativity, right? ^_^

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one month ago

"I unintentially promote a company who apparently support AI, scammers and pedophiles."

I thought you were long done with CoG.

This is cool though, now you can get your channel mentioned in the CYS Media thread.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

CoG had pedophiles? I must've missed the memo on that one.

And thank you! That's a nice idea. I should make some videos doing playthroughs of different CYS games. ^_^

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one month ago

At least one of their "authors" got busted for child porn or something. Another one beat his boyfriend/girlfriend. Etc. Honestly not too surprising some of them are going to be mega degenerates.

They've been having a few folks trying to use AI to write their games along with using AI art recently too. Along with the usual "I'm really writing! Give me 2000 dollars in the meantime!" scamming/E-begging.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Oh, okay. Any idea which author it was? (Its Gower isn't it? I always got pedo vibes from that guy!)

"I'm really writing! Give me 2000 dollars in the meantime!" Melting Penguins by any chance?

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one month ago

I looked back at the info I got and it was some guy called Nicky Dick which given the name should have been an obvious degenerate. It wasn't child porn though it was merely a leaked text chat grooming a minor!

There was a small list of stuff like Paul Wang getting arrested for domestic violence. Some dude named Zape getting killed in a Brazilian Flavella raid. I knew about Malin going to an insane asylum due to folks accusing him of being associated with Nazis. (Though that's pretty easy nowadays)

MeltdownPenguin is just the obvious culprit concerning the wanting money and not writing, but there's tons of authors that don't actually write and just beg/scam on Patreon. Though given that CoG doesn't pay them shit anyway, I suppose it's inevitable. As for Meltdown she's technically not even with Cog anymore due to their NFT shit. She's still e-begging and whining though.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

She's cleared to return on December 1st, 2024.

I sincerely hope she does just for the lulz

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Wow pretty cool stuff! I like the art style. Best of luck with Youtube!

Also not sure what you are using to record but might be good to check your settings to make sure you're recording in mono as opposed to stereo. For me, it sounded like you were only talking on the left side of my headphones - not sure if that was intentional or not!

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Thank you! I really enjoy the crayon style because its so simplistic and quick to draw.

And thanks for bringing that up. I haven't been using headphones when I playback the videos, so I never noticed. I only use my phone to record, so I guess I must've been holding my phone to the left or right while recording. 

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Thanks for subscribing BTW! (Either that or someone who just randomly has your same profile pic.) ^_^

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one month ago

It was me. Gotta support the CYStian Kingdom. 

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one month ago

I love this! Your cute little animations and all the funny quips are so charming! It's a shame NaNoWriMo isn't what it used to be. :(

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one month ago

Yeah, from what I heard it was all rainbows and sunshine while Chris Baty (the guy who actually invented NaNoWriMo) was in charge. After he stepped down, it all went to hell.

The next guy who took charge was a full on boss bro who constantly hounded all the members for donations. Especially the regional volunteers, which is like... These guys are working for you FOR FREE and you're asking them for money? Classy.

And the most resent person in charge seems like she's taken on NaNoWriMo as her own personal vanity project and has apparently said to other members of staff, "I feel like we should just get rid of the NaNoWriMo forums because I never use forums. I just go on writing retreats." ... So... Yeah... Let them eat cake. ^_^

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one month ago

I had to look up what even all the drama was about Namo-Ramo (That's how I've always spelled it.)

In case anyone is interested.

https://www.wired.com/story/nanowrimo-organizers-classist-and-ableist-to-condemn-ai/

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one month ago

Oh, that is just the tippy top of the iceberg. There's a massive google doc that goes into detail on all of the scandals starting way back in 2022. One of the videos in my vlog is entirely dedicated to going over all the NaNoWriMo controversies. That was probably the most fun video to make.

https://nanoscandal.com/

Avery's Animations

one month ago

I had heard about the original AI statement, but was unaware of the degree of fallout.  Wow, what a dumpster fire that has become.

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one month ago

Thanks so much for the subscribe! ^_^

Avery's Animations

one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/2/2024 2:40:46 PM

Just released my second video. Slightly more nervous about this one as this is the first time I actually start giving advice and looking back, I'm not sure if the advice I give is actually any good. (Its probably fine. I'm just over analyzing.)

 

Avery's Animations

one month ago
NaNo sucks but these are really neat. Good luck with your writing, whatever month you try to buckle down in.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Thanks Miz! Since NaNo has been banished to the shadow realm, I say we combine two time honoured traditions and rename it NoNutWriMo. ^_^

Avery's Animations

one month ago
finally a competition I can lose instantly instead of waiting months to lose

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Pinned the thread.

And glad you clarified you actually don't like Humbert Humbert from Lolita. (He has a retarded name too)

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Always find it hilarious when I see book/movie reviews of Lolita talking about how much the reader hated Lolita and felt so sorry for Humbert Humbert and I'm like... Really? ... That guy? I mean yeah, the book was amazing and Lolita was insufferable but... That guy? Really? O.O

And that you so much for pinning the thread. I feel so special! ^_^

Avery's Animations

one month ago

The animations are really cute! And best of luck with your book, I hope it goes well.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Thank you! I'm a little over 54,000 words in already, so if I actually manage to reach my word count by the end of November, my first draft should be finished. ^_^

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one month ago

These videos are pretty high quality. I can definitely see the amount of time/effort put into them.

Good job.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Thank you! Going to have to get considerably stingier with the quality of the animations in the November videos though, or there's no way I'll be able to get them all done in time. 

Avery's Animations

one month ago

You could do less videos, but keep the quality.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Nope. One video for every day until 30th November. The Preptober videos should all be good since I've had loads of time to work on them. The NaNo videos are more for accountability than anything. I want to give at least a word count update everyday. So, maybe use a still image for those ones.

Avery's Animations

one month ago
Commended by Tim36D on 10/6/2024 7:08:16 PM

Didn't bother sharing the last video since that was all about choosing a genre, which isn't really something I think anybody here has any trouble with, but the next few videos are all about character creation, which is much more fun!

 

Avery's Animations

one month ago

I just like how you speak, it’s always slightly chipper and upbeat. It’s even funnier when you’re talking about something dark like the guy that almost killed his wife.

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one month ago

And then the little boy cried out in horror as he watched his father mercilessly beat his puppy to death... YEY! ^_^

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one month ago
Commended by Sherbet on 10/4/2024 5:38:20 PM

british

british

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Avery's voice has been described as "aggressively British"

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one month ago

Innit. ^_^

Avery's Animations

one month ago

She very much has that Stereotypical middle class British accent. When you speak like that here there's a +1 chance that your parents probably went to university. 

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Joke's on you! My parents were both uneducated bums. ^_^

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one month ago

You forgot to call him a wanker.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

I thought that was obvious... He does know he's a wanker, right?

Avery's Animations

one month ago

There's a moose loose aboot this hoose.

You got a haircut! I love it! <3

Avery's Animations

one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/6/2024 9:39:32 AM

Most recent video just came out. Not one of my favourites. The advice is pretty basic and obvious... But it does contain one of my favourite pieces of advice that I do give in the series which is... If you start writing a story and you like one of your side characters more than your protagonist... Make your side character the protagonist! Tada! Your novel is now 100 times more fun to write. You're welcome. ^_^

 

Avery's Animations

one month ago

There's been more than one occasion where I ended up liking a side character I was writing so I expanded their stage time a little more.

Conversely there's been a few side characters that I meant to write more on, and then I just didn't for whatever reason. (Usually due to the story idea going in a different direction)

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Too many characters, not enough time.

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one month ago

An example of each were from Eternal. One was Decena who originally wasn't going to get as much attention as she did and was going to get killed off due to going mad and attacking you. That path never happens though since I changed things severely with her.

The opposite example was this elf character who I can't even remember what his name was at the moment. I was planning on him playing a larger role, but probably due to focusing more on Decena, I ended up eventually just shoving him in the background and he gets a passing mention much later getting killed in some battle lol.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

So glad you expanded on Decena. She was one of my favourite characters! ... As for the elf character, I don't think I even remember there being a male elf character in Eternal so... Meh. :p

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one month ago

Flevas. And I will say he did have some great scenes. He rose through the ranks, freed his people, revenged himself on the humans, and ultimately got replaced by a female elf that the Eternal could bang on the side. 
 

Such is life. Also, Christ! Your voice is not what I was expecting. I've seen in posts before that you were British or something, but hearing your voice, I literally jumped out of my chair so fast my mom asked me what was wrong (she's deaf).

Avery's Animations

one month ago

What were you expecting? Full on Essex chav accent or Dick Van Dyke in Mary Poppins accent? ^_^

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one month ago

Bullet Tooth Briar

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one month ago
Commended by EndMaster on 10/7/2024 1:05:20 PM

Very educational. I shall incorporate this information into my lessons. ^_^

 

Avery's Animations

one month ago
possibly the greatest video I've seen this month

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one month ago

I think its very important for men's health that they know how to differentiate what kind of balls they have. ^_^

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one month ago

Honestly? With how chipper you are, I was expecting a voice that didn't sound like I'm getting robbed for a pack of smokes in the back of an English pub

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one month ago

Don't forget the lighter! ^_^

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one month ago

Yay, another featured comment for my profile page!

That comeback was too good not to immortalize 

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one month ago

Innit, cuz. ^_^

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one month ago
Commended by EndMaster on 10/6/2024 7:02:18 PM

Here's a video all about how your stories should ditch the honkys and be full of tits, faggots and trannies instead, because I'm super woke like that. ^_^

 

Avery's Animations

one month ago

I'll be extra sure to watch this one.

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one month ago

I remember watching a YouTube video of a little girl who had a bookshelf, and her mom asked her to take all the books off the bookshelf which doesn't feature a female main character, and by the end of the video there was probably about 15% of the books still left on the shelf. Cool video! 

Avery's Animations

one month ago

... In all fairness, where does the mom think all the books on her daughter's bookshelf came from? Maybe she should've bought her daughter more books with female protagonists. :p

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one month ago
Imagine having a kid that reads enough to have a whole shelf of physical books, and then trying to make her feel bad about them lol.

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one month ago

"Okay sweetie. Now find all the books with a non binary protagonist."

"Mummy, I'm sleepy and I just want to read Thomas the Tank Engine."

"Oh, Thomas huh? Another MALE protagonist!"

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one month ago
It is now my turn to say wow damn do you sound British

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one month ago

It's Bri'ish, Enter. Say it with me, B-R-I-'-I-S-H.

... Very good. Now we move on to the advanced class.

Bo''le o' wa'er. ^_^

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one month ago
Last time a Dutchman tried to speak British you got sayings like that's another cook.

Don't think I'll be ready for that advanced class just yet

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one month ago

Next lesson is 'Arry Po''er. ^_^

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one month ago
Ha''y ... now the monkey comes out of the sleeve!

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one month ago

What? No. We say the Rs. Who the fuck doesn't say the Rs?

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one month ago
Damn bette' luck next time

Avery's Animations

one month ago

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rhoticity_in_English

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one month ago

Okay, I'm super confused now. I keep listening to both of those "farmers" and I can hear the R in both of them so... Maybe I'm so Bri'ish that I don't even know what an R sounds like?

Avery's Animations

one month ago
B'i'ish

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one month ago

Literally same, lol. To me the British version just sounds a bit more elongated when pronouncing the words. 

 I can tell some british accents/people don't pronounce the T in a lot of words but i couldn't hear it in that particular example. Well I've learnt something today because I say it like the non rhotic example. At least that particular word. 

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one month ago

Wha' exac'ly do your pe'ple have against the le''er t in the middle of a word?

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one month ago

Duh. We're Bri'ish. We harvest all the T for drinking. ^_^

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one month ago

Nice lol. Here in America, we just throw it into the nearest harbor

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one month ago

I know. That's why there's a shor'age.

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one month ago

“Chop off their dicks and slap a pair of boobs on them.”

Lol

Catalina, Semra, Tanya and Suzy. I’ve had 4 major female protagonists.

Semra is also black and bi.

I have achieved diversity mastery. I can now make all the rest of my protagonists straight white guys as usual. (Oh ok, I'll throw in a white woman every now and then too)

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one month ago

Does drow count as black? I never thought of that.

... But yes, your characters have always been pretty diverse in terms of gender, race and sexuality, so... Congratulations on being the wokest writer on CYS! ^_^

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one month ago

Even your female supporting characters contribute to the story meaningfully. When you look at characters like Alison, Tanya, Marina, and Eidolith, it's pretty apparent that anyone who accuses you of being biased never actually read your stories.

There's a huge difference between diversity and pandering.

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one month ago

But I like pandas!

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one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/9/2024 9:11:21 PM

New vid! Advice is very basic but I think it stands up. If anything, people should always keep a record of their character's basic appearance so that they don't have to constantly scroll through everything they've already written to remember what their character's eye colour was.

 

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one month ago

Probably my favourite one yet. Very informative, and gets straight to business. It really highlights how critical it is to flesh out our characters before we write anything down, especially side characters. Loved the dark secret one too, you can really add so much complexity to the plot with it. Not sure if youre a teacher of any kind, but you would make for a good one. 

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Thank you so much! I think so too. I would be like Miss Trunchbull and throw little girls over the fence by their pigtails. It would be glorious. ^_^

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one month ago

miss trunchbull unironically terrified me as a little kid. Swear I had  a nightmare where she forced me to eat a massive chocolate cake made of her blood sweat and tears. So please, for the kids sake, no kiss trunchbull. 

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one month ago

No kiss Trunchbull? Dude, I said I wanted to be like her. I didn't say I wanted to kiss her. I mean I know my waifu list is pretty unconventional, but I think I'll swipe left on this one.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Usually I just make a “notes” page and divided up between the important people and places. 

With the people, I’ll just add a small note of who they are in relation to the story. Elaboration on them occurs based on how important they become in the story.

The main thing I focus on more is major events. Usually a small timeline of what’s supposed to happen in the story depending on the choices or if it’s going to happen regardless of the choice just in a different way, which also can alter the importance of a character's role/personality.

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one month ago

I have to have at least 3 notes pages. One for chracters, one for worldbuilding and one for plot points. ^_^

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one month ago

Yeah I'm usually using Word, so it's typically one document with multiple pages that I scroll through. Lol

Of course it also depends on how long the story is too. Longer stories tend to have more notes of course.

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one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/9/2024 9:11:50 PM

Day 8 is out! This video was particularly fun. I especially loved assigning all of my characters their Szondi personality types.

 

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Your stories have been really helping me with Sherb's contest entry. I appreciate you!

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Awh! Thank you! ^_^

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one month ago

I wonder what different site members MBTI types are. Last time i did it i got advocate, but before that id always get mediator. I think i just became a bit more 'pratical' as i've gotten older, which was enough to shift it. 

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one month ago

Well, Avery did leave a link to the personality tests in her video. So... I guess site members could find out 

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one month ago

I believe I am an Architect. ^_^

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one month ago

So have you been linking your videos to some Namoramo community or just here?

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Mostly just here. I've posted on a couple of discord threads, but in general the NaNoWriMo community is pretty much non existent since the forums closed.

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one month ago

Surprised there isn't a reddit or discord specifically for it. There's usually one of those for everything.

Avery's Animations

one month ago

There's a reddit. Should have posted something on there really. There's a few discords that I joined but only one I use regularly.

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one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/9/2024 9:11:07 PM

So this is the last video I made on character building. I wanted to include it as part of the last video, but the last video went on for way too long so I ended up having to split it into two parts.

 

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Hey a Clockwork Orange reference in this one.

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one month ago

I eventually settled on "Hello my little droogies" as my go-to intro. ^_^

Avery's Animations

one month ago

Your videos on character building have been fantastic! To explain, a lot of the reviews on my previous stories have centered around two common complaints. 
 

1)  Character development, which I'm trying to work on in my newest story with your videos (hence why I've been fleshing them out before I actually write my story)

2) Showing vs. Telling. Apparently a lot of stories (mine included) tend to explain to the reader what they're seeing and experiencing, rather than finding a way to "show them." Honestly, I find it confusing, and I think there might be a fine line between detailing something vs over explaining it? It'd be fantastic if you have the time and could find it in your Union Jack heart to make a video explaining the difference and giving us some good ideas. I've read the Price of Freedom, and it's breathtaking, but I struggle to apply it to my own writing, and I'm sure others out there do as well.

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one month ago

The price of freedom was one of the first none end master stories I read. Maybe my mind is hallucinating and playing tricks on me, but I remember reading it, and being absolutely devastated that it wasn't finished? And I came back like a year later, and it wasn't finished? But again, I MAY be hallucinating, but I swear that was the case, where she was promising a part two or something. 

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one month ago

It's finished. But there's a sequel that's supposed to come out. I think innocence lost is part of a series

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one month ago

"Supposed to come out" It's been five yearsss lol

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one month ago

Oh yeah, it will totally be coming out any day now... >.>

But yeah, I really do need to get back to work on Brothers in Arms. At first I completely threw myself into it, then I got really ill and took a step back from writing for awhile. I think, for a long time my brain assosiated writing with being ill, and I was afraid that if I started writing I'd get ill again. Doesn't make any sense but brains are weird like that. Then my confidence started to build and I got more in the mood for writing again, but a whole bunch of life drama kept happening one after another for about three years straight. I got quite a bit of drawing done in that time but very little writing. Now things seem to be calming down a bit. Knowing my life it's probably a "calm before the storm" situation and all hell in going to break loose in a month or two, but I am determined to get as much writing done as I possibly can while I actually have the opportunity. ^_^

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one month ago

Okay well,I hope so! 

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one month ago

I'll be completely honest, I'm not sure I ever caught on to the difference between showing vs telling. I mean I've heard the phrase "show don't tell" about a million times, but if you asked me to give you an example of showing instead of telling, I'd be at a loss. A lot of the stuff I write (when I'm not writing interactive fiction) is first person, which is literally just a character telling you everything that happened to them. To me, the only difference between showing and telling is that showing is just... Telling but with more emotion? I don't know. I should definitely research the term a bit more until I figure out what the actual difference is.

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one month ago

The whole show vs tell thing is sort of something everyone screams about a little too much anyway.

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one month ago

Honestly, dude, no rush on the story. I understand you have a bunch of projects, and you've been super busy in the past. I've been there. Fuck, when I was writing Terrorist, I was going through homelessness and a really bad relationship. Hence why it's a lot more violent: I just wrote down every depraved thought I had, Eric Harris style. 
 

As for showing vs. telling, it's still only one facet of a good story. I feel like as long as the plot and characters are good, the story will be fine. Branching also helps, I guess. But plenty of successful stories have limited branching.

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one month ago

Damn, that sucks. Really sorry you went through that.

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one month ago

The way I see it, telling is what you could expect to see in a textbook. It occurs when the writer appears to be giving you a summarised version of the plot rather than actually creating immersion through sensory details, pacing and description. This also includes using excessive adjectives. For instance, "it was a gloomy day and she was very upset" vs "grey clouds dotted the horizon, signalling the storm within her own mind".

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one month ago

Ohhh. So, just to see if I have this right...

 "The troops advanced upon the fort" is telling.

"The sounds of thunder echoed across the landscape... wait, no... that was the steady pounding of 50,000 pairs of boots marching  upon the fort, its stone spires reaching out to the sky like the hand of a drowning man." ... showing?

 

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Telling:

My stepmother was angry at me. I needed to run away from home.

 

Showing:

"You fucking son of a whore, get your stupid ass down to the kitchen- now!" my stepmother yelled from downstairs. Metal pans clanged to the floor. My stepmother was probably searching again for her favorite cast iron skillet to use to chuck at my head. There was nothing I could do to placate her when she was in one of her moods.


Telling:

I stole a credit card from her purse.

 

Showing:

Sneaking into the master bedroom, I grabbed her purse and rifled through its contents. I needed something that could get me all the way to Kentucky. A plastic earring? No. Three nickels? No. A tampon. Hell no. A shiny piece of plastic? Wait, that's her credit card, expiring several months from now. Just what I was looking for! I dropped it into my pocket and closed the door on the bedroom and mess I made behind.

 

Telling:

Jennifer cooked breakfast for her son, Gene. She forgot to make bacon, his favorite breakfast food, however.

 

Showing:

She turned on the gas stove and left it on medium before drizzling some olive oil into the frying pan. Jennifer then cracked an egg on the counter and dropped its contents into the oil. The sizzle from the frying eggs could wake even the heaviest of sleepers. Sizzle ... the bacon! That was Gene's favorite breakfast food. How could she forget to make it? It was too late to use cooked bacon grease to fry the egg now.

 

Telling:

She greeted the man.

 

Showing:

"Hi."

Avery's Animations

one month ago

This one's about choosing from different POVs. (Of course I made a point to mention Interactive Fiction when I talked about 2nd person POV.) ^_^

 

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one month ago

Amusingly I’v seen some fucktards have called various interactive fiction as “gaslighting the reader” because the story is telling “You” what you’re doing regardless of whether that’s what you’d actually do in “real life”

Of course even if this is remotely true, it just makes me enjoy writing IF even more since I like gas lighting people.

“So you genocided entire village.”
“No I didn’t.”
“Sure you did, trust me. Next you’re going to rape the princess.”
“I would never!”
“Yes you will. You’re doing it right now. Turn to the next page.”

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one month ago

Never mind the fact that like a bunch of cucks, they continue to play the IF instead of just walking away.

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one month ago

LMAO!

"Dude, stop raping the princess! That is seriously fucked up!"
"I'm not!"
"What does the game say?"
"... "Ouch," says the Princess. "That hurts. Stop raping me." "Never!" you yell as you carry on raping her. "I love rape! Rape is my favourite thing. Second only to pedophilia and beastiality." "Well, there's a puppy over there," the princess points out. "Wouldn't you rather rape that instead? That would count as both pedophilia AND beastiality." "Don't mind if I do," you reply as you drop the Princess in the mud and happily approach the puppy."
"DUDE! WTF is wrong with you?"
"I don't know! I can't stop!"

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one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/11/2024 6:09:30 PM

So, this video talks more about setting... I tried but its pretty easy to tell that I care a lot more about character creation than I do about worldbuilding. That's something I need to work on.

 

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one month ago
Worldbuilding is fundamental, NO COMMENDATION FOR YOU.

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one month ago
Ugh fine, but just this once.

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one month ago

Yey! ^_^

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one month ago

Pretty sure that's why I tend towards fantasy settings. It's just easy to hand wave various things in the world and you can fill in blanks later if need be.

One day I might try that Edutainment style story about Aztecs though if I get really motivated on the whole research thing. (Unless Will ends up beating me to it)

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one month ago

Just think of all the lovely human sacrifices! ^_^

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one month ago

Just going to say that you're not overly chirpy, give yourself some kind words!

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one month ago

I am... Just the right amount of chirpy? ^_^

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one month ago
Commended by Tim36D on 10/12/2024 9:35:52 PM

As I hope Mizal will be happy to know, I did do a video on worldbuilding. ^_^

 

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one month ago

I haven't been doing any homework this whole time and will continue to not do so.

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one month ago

Bad EndMaster! Detention after class!

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one month ago

I love worldbuilding and it is probably my favorite thing to do when creating a new story.

Very good video.

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one month ago

Thank you! I try to keep the categories relatively vague when it comes to world building, because there are so many little random things that might apply heavily in one world and not apply at all in another. Especially when it comes to magic systems and complex shit like that.

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one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/16/2024 2:08:10 PM

Didn't bother posting yesterday's video since it was pretty useless, but today's is looking at my favorite story outlining process. Works pretty well for IF too. ^_^

 

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one month ago

First I'm hearing about all this pants stuff. Had to find the other video to figure out what the hell "pantsers" are. Really I think that video would have been fine to post, if only for the hilarious use of the word "pantser" multiple times.

Anyway, plantser leaning more towards the plotter side.

As for this video I'm usually outlining the events for the story and potential changes of those based on the choices made. Some endings are already planned even before the beginning is written.

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one month ago

The Jot, Bin, Pants method! First you jot down all of the ideas that you have for your story. Then you screw them up and throw them in the bin because they're all crap. Then you find some guy you have a grudge against and pants him. It'll make you feel so much better! ^_^

I guess you've got WAY more stuff to keep track of because your stories branch off into so many different directions. I can't imagine what the outline for Rogues looked like.

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one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/16/2024 2:07:54 PM

And here's an explaination of the Plot Roller Coaster outline for people who love pants. ^_^

 

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one month ago

Animating Frodo and Sam's little roller coaster ride was particularly fun. ^_^

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one month ago

There’s also the “Shaggy Dog” story that just leaves the roller coaster hanging high up with no climax and the riders have to climb down themselves complaining the entire time. (Or sit there and starve to death)

But yeah as more of a plotter I usually have complex roller coaster with multiple major struggles to get past before moving on to the next one (or final one).

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one month ago

This one's probably my least favourite plotting method, but it can work if you tweak it a lot. ^_^

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one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/16/2024 2:07:15 PM

Classic Hero's Journey outline. Still a bit simplistic for me but can't really go wrong with it. ^_^

 

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one month ago
Looks like I've got a few of these to catch up on.

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one month ago

Can posts be commended by multiple people? I swear to God I've had two commendations on the same video before.

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one month ago

Lol called Leia a bitch.

In a CYOA, refusing the call usually just results in an early ending.

Pretty sure I've followed this outline without realizing it more than once, though "hero" probably wouldn't be the word for the protagonists.

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one month ago

Should've gone with cunt, shouldn't I?

And yeah, never goes very well when the "hero" actually has a choice.

The Wizard Arrives:

"You are the chosen one the prophecy fortold!" says the wise old wizard. "Come with me, and together, we shall save the world!"

- Sure, let's go!

- No thanks. I'm washing my hair tonight.

No thanks. I'm washing my hair tonight:

A piano falls on your head. Try again.

- End Game and Leave Comments

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one month ago

Piano suddenly falling on the protagonist's head is a classic. Right up there with the protagonist deciding to take bath and for some insane reason decides to watch TV while doing it which then promptly falls in the tub for a shocking ending.

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one month ago

And don't even think about turning off the alarm and going back to bed. There's no surer way to invoke the wrath of the Interactive Fiction Gods. >.<

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one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/17/2024 8:52:32 PM

Now we shall rescue some cats... Everybody likes cats! ^_^

 

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one month ago

Too fucking complicated, the cat can save itself.

It’s a cat, it probably doesn’t want to be bothered in the first place.

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one month ago

Heard a good story once (think its supposed to be true) of an old lady who called the fire brigade over to her house because her cat was stuck in a tree and couldn't get down. Firemen used the ladder, grabbed the kitty, gave it back to the lady. The lady was so happy! She invited all the firemen in for tea and biscuits. The firemen graciously accepted, congratulated themselves on a job well done, got in their firetruck and drove away... Ran over the fucking cat. ^_^

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one month ago

Shaggy cat story.

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one month ago

An absolute... Catastrophe! ^_^

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one month ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/18/2024 6:43:31 PM

This one I like! Lovely and detailed and complicated! ^_^

 

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one month ago

All your video are popping up in my youtube recommendations so I'm actually seeing these almost as soon as you post them there as opposed to waiting for them to be posted here.

Anyway, I think I use an altered version of this. It's more like 9 "boxes" keeping track of some basic storyline ideas for each major path.

As for the Harry Potter, they changed it mainly since "Philosopher's Stone" is sort of a concept linked to alchemy and yeah most Americans wouldn't bother making the connection. Sorcerer is obvious though.

And yes while a philosopher IS something here that most would still know (Like Socrates or Plato) Sorcerer would still work better here since it falls under the American Kirby is Hardcore change.

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one month ago

Yes, but the "Philospher's Stone" is a thing. The "Sorcerer's Stone" is not a thing. It would be like if some English guy wrote a book called "King Arthur and the Quest for the Holy Grail" and they published it in America under the name, "King Arthur and the Quest for the Holy Cup"... It isn't a thing!

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one month ago

Doesn't matter, sorcerer over here is going to sound more "impressive" than philosopher. 

Connecting Harry Potter to "sorcerer" makes him sound like the up and coming powerful wizard type he ends up being.

Connecting him to "philosopher" though just makes him seem like he's going to be pontificating in a toga and getting molested by his teachers.

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one month ago

I would WAY rather read that book! ^_^

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one month ago

Probably won't be sharing any videos for a few days because I don't think any of them would be useful for CYS... But this one is about blurbs. CYS games have blurbs. ^_^

 

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one month ago

I tend to keep the story descriptions short and try to use one word titles.

But I have been known to do the more "cinematic ad" when posting in the forums announcing the new story.

Like I used this for Rogues:

Endure the dangers of living in a fantasy world!
Be part of the problem because hey everyone else is!
Experience the life of an outlaw!
Experience all the odd twists and turns in the life of crime!
Experience multiple ways to die ranging from horrible to REALLY fucking horrible!
Experience the joys of performing despicable ranging from but not limited to mundane murder to slavery!   
Have sex with several lovely ladies, human and non-human alike with the potential to romance them and even make them your waifus!
Have the inclusive option of choosing your gender and orientation! LOL JK This isn’t a fucking CoG story, you silly faggots!
Twelve different epilogues, and one with a very special extension!
Rise from a small town thief to become everything from a smooth criminal overlord to a law-abiding jack off!
Even travel through fucking time!

And probably a whole bunch more stuff.

Enjoy.

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one month ago

I am so ashamed of the fact that I haven't read Rogues yet. I should do a let's play of it once November is over! ^_^

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one month ago

Just realised something that's curious. What is Rogues doing in Fantasy when most of your other games are in Grimdark fantasy? Rogues not grimdark enough to make the cut?

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one month ago

There's more "hope" in that world in general since its a bit more "traditional" fantasy. While there's certainly bits of it that can get a little dark, it's not like that's the entire world setting.

Or at least there isn't a necromancer ascending to godhood genociding everyone on the planet or a world where a genetically and magically altered super soldier is putting everyone to the sword that doesn't fall in line, not to mention all the sadistic dark elves and insane dwarves that inhabit the place.

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one month ago

Boo! Boring! Won't bother playing that one then. :p

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one month ago

Funny enough you actually have played through at least one path of it since I remember you saying you initially hated one of the waifus since she was annoying (She was sort of meant to be) but later in the story you liked her since she became a different person. So you said you were looking forward to go through the other paths when you had time.

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one month ago

Hmm... I think you might be thinking of two different people. I did start playing it and said I found one of the waifus annoying, but I never finished it or ended up liking her... Unless I have a really bad case of amnesia.

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one month ago

Oh yeah you're right, I checked the old PMs. I knew you hadn't finished it but I thought you got further in the story where the character changes a bit.

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28 days ago

Yes please. We need an Avery play through. 

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28 days ago
Commended by EndMaster on 10/23/2024 6:18:20 PM

Okay, THIS video was a fun one to make! So, once I got more than a third of the way through my vlog I finally heard about the NaNoWriMo controversies, and the more I learned the weirder and weirder it got. Even after I finished making this video, I found out even more stuff that was even weirder! I should do a really long deep dive video into the NaNoWriMo controversies some day but this sums up the basics.

The whole forum culture of staff/moderators fucking up, banning or deleting comments from people who mention the fact that they fucked up, throwing in some carefully worded non apology in an attempt to rewrite the narrative and save their own asses before locking the threads so nobody else can get a word in, eerily reminds me of another forum I used to frequent. >.>

 

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28 days ago

I've just recently heard about all the Nano drama as well.  It's pretty crazy.

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28 days ago

I wish I'd held off on making the video a little longer because after I finished it, I learned a bunch about the Moderator who was alledgedly grooming minors and apparently there's this absolutely crazy history with her where she faked her death a bunch of times but also her wife apparently died and some time after her wife died, she would log in to her wife's old accounts pretending to be her dead wife and claiming her dead wife was still alive... And apparently now she's supposed to actually be dead but not 100% on why people think that she's dead now after she already faked her death a bunch of times...  I really need to do a deep dive. ^_^

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28 days ago

Oh wow.  I've seen a couple deep dives on it, SavvyReadsBooks did a good one, but I'm not sure she touched on that, or I missed that part.

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28 days ago

I saw that one! ^_^

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28 days ago

Kiel's a Nanoramo mod now?

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28 days ago

And dead, apparently.

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28 days ago

I've only gotten to the AI part so far, but the fact that they're using the terms "classist" and "ablelist" just confirms they're all faggots on top of harboring degenerates.

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28 days ago
I said NaNoWriMo sucked a long time ago, glad history has proven me right.

But ooh, let's hear about the "even weirder".

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28 days ago

The even weirder mostly focusses on the Moderator X situation and just how absolutely nuts she was. So apparently she had a long history of faking her death on multiple occassions with multiple different accounts. Not only that but apparently she had a wife who actually did die and after her wife died, she would log into her wife's account pretending to be the dead wife and saying that she wasn't actually dead... But now people think that Moderator X is actually dead because there's apparently an obituary and posts from family members mourning her death... But then, I imagine an obituary and a few RIP posts from friends and family members are easy enough to come up with when the FBI is looking into you for child grooming, so... Who knows?

Also I learned a little about the woman who is currently in charge of the NaNoWriMo organisation (she took charge after all the pedo stuff but before the whole AI debacle). Obviously a lot of people are pissed that the NaNoWriMo forums have been closed for over a year now and people have been suggesting that she open the forums again. Apparently she thinks they should just get rid of the forums all together because she doesn't use forums to communicate with other writers. She just goes on writing retreats. So she thinks NaNoWriMo should be promoting writing retreats instead... So... Yeah... Let them eat cake. ^_^

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28 days ago

The whole point of using the internet is so you don't have to actually interact with these degenerates in person. You go to a writing retreat for Namoramo and you got a good chance of stumbling into a Diddy party apparently.

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28 days ago

Lmao, ain't no party like a Diddy party. 

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28 days ago

Cause a diddy party don't stop till the fed investigation pops.

 

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28 days ago

Female pedos seem kinda rare. What a weird woman. 

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28 days ago
"woman"

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27 days ago

I don't get it. I've heard she's a female. I've heard she's trans. I'm confused. Is she biologicallly female but identifies as male or vice versa? 

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27 days ago
Oh I have no idea about the NaNoWriMo creep, Avery might know. Just seemed like a good possibility, especially since it might explain some of the weird unwillingness of the others to ban her or to let her even be criticized. But then maybe not, like End pointed out, being biologically female didn't slow Kiel down.

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27 days ago

I think that the mod from NaNoWriMo was a cisgendered woman, but not sure. From what I understand the unwillingness to ban her stemmed from the fact that she was apparently dying... Though I'm not sure why the mods bought that considering she already died like a dozen times before.

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28 days ago

I dunno, it's starting to come to light a bit more given all the female teachers getting into trouble with their students.

Not to mention right here on this very site, Kiel was female and was an insane pedo groomer.

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28 days ago
The parallels with Kiel are indeed very strong. Not sure if there's enough for a full bingo card, but damn close.

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28 days ago

I always assumed Kiel was a boy. There was one time I was even going to make a joke that Kiel couldn't have groomed me because I'm not gay lol. How old was she? 

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27 days ago

Mid 20s or so.

Kiel was a "boy" in that she kept presenting herself as one. Came out later that Kiel had been female though heard she got the surgery or something later on.

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27 days ago

You think child groomers only go after gay kids? I think it goes a little more like:

"Come here, little boy."

"But I'm not gay!"

"You are now. Surprise!"

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27 days ago

Yeah I guess so. If I ever had my own business I'd be super wary about hiring minors its just.... Not worth it lol. At one of my old jobs there was a girl that had a crush on me, that got exposed, she was 16 and it's like bruh. 

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27 days ago

Too old for you, huh?

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26 days ago

She actually thought I was younger than my age lol. I've sadly been both cursed and blessed with a slightly more boyish face, which I very much have a love - hate relationship with (probably for obvious reasons). People will typically assume I'm 18 based on my looks alone, it gets bumped up based on howI act though it seems

 

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28 days ago
I like how it's not, "No one wants to deal with the stress and drama or potential liability" but "just bring the kids on your OWN jet dammit".

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27 days ago
https://knowyourmeme.com/memes/events/nanowrimo-grooming-controversy

Found some more screenshots about the situation. Learned two things: this mod was apparently the only one specifically in charge of minors on that forum, and the kids had to make their own site to complain about a situation where a 17 year old was "dating" an 11 year old and a lot of uncomfortable public RP was going on between them, while the mod did nothing.

And secondly, they weren't just running "a fetish site" but specifically an "adult baby diaper" fetish site, lmao.

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27 days ago

Of all the fetishes to have lol

Stuff like this makes me feel vanilla

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27 days ago

This fetish is definitely chocolate >.<

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27 days ago

THANK YOU!!! OMG, thank you so much! The main question I had about the situation was, "What the fuck was the fetish site this mod was running?" Because basically, the staff got given evidence of the mod sending kids to the fetish site and they just ignored it. My initial thought was, "... Maybe it's not really a fetish site? Like, maybe it was a website for something relatively incident that can sometimes be considered a fetish, like cosplay or something. And the "fetish content involving minors" was actually just minors wearing cosplay? ... And the reason the staff didn't do anything about it is that they took one look at the fetish site and figured, "Nah, this isn't a fetish site. This is just christian parents screaming "Won't somebody PLEASE think of the children?" over nothing." And moved on." ... But nope. Adults wearing diapers can't really be considered anything other than fetish content... I mean, unless it's like a Dick and Dom skit or something.

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28 days ago
Okay but seriously, NaNoWriMo forums were apparently just CoG with the addition of a child predator ring. Anyone who hasn't been watching these should make a point to at least watch this one, holy shit.

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28 days ago

Avery, it's so great to finally get to hear the sound of your voice. Love your working-class British accent. I've always loved British accents, but then I grew up watching "Doctor Who". I actually finished writing a short novel last spring. But thanks for the tip on this contest. Although I don't have the time to do any hard-and-fast power writing. I'm like you; I just write whenever I can get around to doing it. Glad you're trying to stay active with some sort of creative endeavor. 

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27 days ago

EXCUSE ME? Working class? I am fucking posh, god damn it!!!

But thank you very much! Congrats on the novel! What's it about? ^_^

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27 days ago

It's a Sword & Sorcery novel. I can post a link if you want. But it's actually a follow-up to two stories I wrote. Please excuse my mistaking your posh accent for a working class one. Hope you're doing well.

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27 days ago
We've all been deceived, when she's not faking it for the microphone she actually just sounds like Oliver Twist.

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27 days ago

All part of my evil ploy to make myself more relatable to the peasants. ^_^

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27 days ago

Does it work as a standalone or only as part of a series?

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27 days ago

I think you could read it as a stand-alone if you wanted to. It's always a commitment, though, to read a whole novel. Here's the link if you have the time. It's called the Divine Diamond Highway.   https://www.booksie.com/717865-the-divine-diamond-highway

If you want to tackle something shorter, here's a link to the first story of my character, Syndeeka. It's called "The Inevitable Corpse Season". https://www.booksie.com/664462-the-inevitable-corpse-season

The main character is an ex-prostitute living in a quasi-African city-state type kingdom who becomes an apprentice to the court astronomer before she becomes an itinerant warrior-for-hire.  

The Inevitable Corpse Season

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26 days ago

Sounds awesome! Thank you! ^_^

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25 days ago
I think the Inevitable Corpse Season was the one he posted an excerpt from here. It made two things clear: 1) Thomas writes jaw-dropping, professional level prose, rich and immersive. 2) It was actually wild the forum didn't have some kind of character limit to break up 17,000 word posts. (But it does now, dw.)

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25 days ago

It always feels weird hearing someone address someone called Thomas which isn't me, uncanny valley feeling.

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25 days ago

Thanks, Mizal!  :)

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25 days ago

Hey the Writing Community and Writing Group videos were sort of interesting.

I particularly liked the part about contacting a moderator if another member was being abusive to you so that proper action can be taken like getting banned.

That sure is a wild concept. Wouldn't work here though, we wouldn't have anyone left.

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24 days ago

"Mr EndMaster, sir! Ford called me a faggot!"

"... Well, were you being a faggot?"

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21 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/30/2024 5:44:53 PM

Didn't bother posting the last few vids since most of them were strictly NaNo focussed and none of them would have been relevant here. But I guess this one could be useful. How to open a story with a gripping hook. Guess it could transfer to IF, though since its such a niche genre, an opening of an IF game only really needs to be written well and thats a gripping enough hook for me. ^_^

 

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21 days ago
On the contrary, you haven't played a game since April 2022, you must be REALLY picky about those openings.

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21 days ago

Fuck me, its been a long time! >.<

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21 days ago

I get an idea about something I'd like to read, I write it, then a bunch of internet folks stumble upon it.

And anyone who doesn't like it gets busted in the mouth.