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Avery's Animations

21 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/2/2024 2:40:36 PM

So, I've had a really hectic past two or three years where I've not really been able to get into the writing headspace and barely gotten any writing done. What I have been able to do though, is lots and lots of drawing! (I can draw no matter how hectic things are.) And playing around a lot with Opentoonz.

For the past three years I've been planning on throwing myself back into writing by taking part in the novel writing month that shall not be named, but the last two years, some big family emergency always turned up around the September/October/November period that left me needing to act as a carer for some family member or other, and I would always promise myself, I'd get some writing done when things calmed down.

... Well, things have finally calmed down! And so I decided to combine my love of writing with my love of drawing and animation to put together a youtube channel. Mostly I'm going to be focussing on things like book reviews and little animated shorts, but right now I have put together a daily vlog for October about how to go about preparing to write a novel.

Probably won't be very interesting for now, since I know that Preptober and NaNoWriMo have never really been big on CYS, but I figured I'd share anyway in the hopes that some people would squee over my chibi little animations while I unintentially promote a company who apparently support AI, scammers and pedophiles. ^_^

 

Avery's Animations

21 days ago
This is my first time hearing about any NaNoWriMo controversies. Yeah, those are some pretty bad ones.

Well, good luck with productivity and all that next month!

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

Thank you! No reason to let those pesky pedos stifle my creativity, right? ^_^

Avery's Animations

21 days ago

"I unintentially promote a company who apparently support AI, scammers and pedophiles."

I thought you were long done with CoG.

This is cool though, now you can get your channel mentioned in the CYS Media thread.

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

CoG had pedophiles? I must've missed the memo on that one.

And thank you! That's a nice idea. I should make some videos doing playthroughs of different CYS games. ^_^

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

At least one of their "authors" got busted for child porn or something. Another one beat his boyfriend/girlfriend. Etc. Honestly not too surprising some of them are going to be mega degenerates.

They've been having a few folks trying to use AI to write their games along with using AI art recently too. Along with the usual "I'm really writing! Give me 2000 dollars in the meantime!" scamming/E-begging.

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

Oh, okay. Any idea which author it was? (Its Gower isn't it? I always got pedo vibes from that guy!)

"I'm really writing! Give me 2000 dollars in the meantime!" Melting Penguins by any chance?

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

I looked back at the info I got and it was some guy called Nicky Dick which given the name should have been an obvious degenerate. It wasn't child porn though it was merely a leaked text chat grooming a minor!

There was a small list of stuff like Paul Wang getting arrested for domestic violence. Some dude named Zape getting killed in a Brazilian Flavella raid. I knew about Malin going to an insane asylum due to folks accusing him of being associated with Nazis. (Though that's pretty easy nowadays)

MeltdownPenguin is just the obvious culprit concerning the wanting money and not writing, but there's tons of authors that don't actually write and just beg/scam on Patreon. Though given that CoG doesn't pay them shit anyway, I suppose it's inevitable. As for Meltdown she's technically not even with Cog anymore due to their NFT shit. She's still e-begging and whining though.

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

She's cleared to return on December 1st, 2024.

I sincerely hope she does just for the lulz

Avery's Animations

21 days ago

Wow pretty cool stuff! I like the art style. Best of luck with Youtube!

Also not sure what you are using to record but might be good to check your settings to make sure you're recording in mono as opposed to stereo. For me, it sounded like you were only talking on the left side of my headphones - not sure if that was intentional or not!

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

Thank you! I really enjoy the crayon style because its so simplistic and quick to draw.

And thanks for bringing that up. I haven't been using headphones when I playback the videos, so I never noticed. I only use my phone to record, so I guess I must've been holding my phone to the left or right while recording. 

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

Thanks for subscribing BTW! (Either that or someone who just randomly has your same profile pic.) ^_^

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

It was me. Gotta support the CYStian Kingdom. 

Avery's Animations

21 days ago

I love this! Your cute little animations and all the funny quips are so charming! It's a shame NaNoWriMo isn't what it used to be. :(

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

Yeah, from what I heard it was all rainbows and sunshine while Chris Baty (the guy who actually invented NaNoWriMo) was in charge. After he stepped down, it all went to hell.

The next guy who took charge was a full on boss bro who constantly hounded all the members for donations. Especially the regional volunteers, which is like... These guys are working for you FOR FREE and you're asking them for money? Classy.

And the most resent person in charge seems like she's taken on NaNoWriMo as her own personal vanity project and has apparently said to other members of staff, "I feel like we should just get rid of the NaNoWriMo forums because I never use forums. I just go on writing retreats." ... So... Yeah... Let them eat cake. ^_^

Avery's Animations

21 days ago

I had to look up what even all the drama was about Namo-Ramo (That's how I've always spelled it.)

In case anyone is interested.

https://www.wired.com/story/nanowrimo-organizers-classist-and-ableist-to-condemn-ai/

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

Oh, that is just the tippy top of the iceberg. There's a massive google doc that goes into detail on all of the scandals starting way back in 2022. One of the videos in my vlog is entirely dedicated to going over all the NaNoWriMo controversies. That was probably the most fun video to make.

https://nanoscandal.com/

Avery's Animations

19 days ago

I had heard about the original AI statement, but was unaware of the degree of fallout.  Wow, what a dumpster fire that has become.

Avery's Animations

19 days ago

Thanks so much for the subscribe! ^_^

Avery's Animations

20 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/2/2024 2:40:46 PM

Just released my second video. Slightly more nervous about this one as this is the first time I actually start giving advice and looking back, I'm not sure if the advice I give is actually any good. (Its probably fine. I'm just over analyzing.)

 

Avery's Animations

20 days ago
NaNo sucks but these are really neat. Good luck with your writing, whatever month you try to buckle down in.

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

Thanks Miz! Since NaNo has been banished to the shadow realm, I say we combine two time honoured traditions and rename it NoNutWriMo. ^_^

Avery's Animations

20 days ago
finally a competition I can lose instantly instead of waiting months to lose

Avery's Animations

20 days ago

Pinned the thread.

And glad you clarified you actually don't like Humbert Humbert from Lolita. (He has a retarded name too)

Avery's Animations

19 days ago

Always find it hilarious when I see book/movie reviews of Lolita talking about how much the reader hated Lolita and felt so sorry for Humbert Humbert and I'm like... Really? ... That guy? I mean yeah, the book was amazing and Lolita was insufferable but... That guy? Really? O.O

And that you so much for pinning the thread. I feel so special! ^_^

Avery's Animations

19 days ago

The animations are really cute! And best of luck with your book, I hope it goes well.

Avery's Animations

19 days ago

Thank you! I'm a little over 54,000 words in already, so if I actually manage to reach my word count by the end of November, my first draft should be finished. ^_^

Avery's Animations

19 days ago

These videos are pretty high quality. I can definitely see the amount of time/effort put into them.

Good job.

Avery's Animations

19 days ago

Thank you! Going to have to get considerably stingier with the quality of the animations in the November videos though, or there's no way I'll be able to get them all done in time. 

Avery's Animations

19 days ago

You could do less videos, but keep the quality.

Avery's Animations

19 days ago

Nope. One video for every day until 30th November. The Preptober videos should all be good since I've had loads of time to work on them. The NaNo videos are more for accountability than anything. I want to give at least a word count update everyday. So, maybe use a still image for those ones.

Avery's Animations

18 days ago
Commended by Tim36D on 10/6/2024 7:08:16 PM

Didn't bother sharing the last video since that was all about choosing a genre, which isn't really something I think anybody here has any trouble with, but the next few videos are all about character creation, which is much more fun!

 

Avery's Animations

18 days ago

I just like how you speak, it’s always slightly chipper and upbeat. It’s even funnier when you’re talking about something dark like the guy that almost killed his wife.

Avery's Animations

18 days ago

And then the little boy cried out in horror as he watched his father mercilessly beat his puppy to death... YEY! ^_^

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18 days ago
Commended by Sherbet on 10/4/2024 5:38:20 PM

british

british

Avery's Animations

18 days ago

Avery's voice has been described as "aggressively British"

Avery's Animations

17 days ago

Innit. ^_^

Avery's Animations

17 days ago

She very much has that Stereotypical middle class British accent. When you speak like that here there's a +1 chance that your parents probably went to university. 

Avery's Animations

17 days ago

Joke's on you! My parents were both uneducated bums. ^_^

Avery's Animations

17 days ago

You forgot to call him a wanker.

Avery's Animations

17 days ago

I thought that was obvious... He does know he's a wanker, right?

Avery's Animations

17 days ago

There's a moose loose aboot this hoose.

You got a haircut! I love it! <3

Avery's Animations

17 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/6/2024 9:39:32 AM

Most recent video just came out. Not one of my favourites. The advice is pretty basic and obvious... But it does contain one of my favourite pieces of advice that I do give in the series which is... If you start writing a story and you like one of your side characters more than your protagonist... Make your side character the protagonist! Tada! Your novel is now 100 times more fun to write. You're welcome. ^_^

 

Avery's Animations

17 days ago

There's been more than one occasion where I ended up liking a side character I was writing so I expanded their stage time a little more.

Conversely there's been a few side characters that I meant to write more on, and then I just didn't for whatever reason. (Usually due to the story idea going in a different direction)

Avery's Animations

17 days ago

Too many characters, not enough time.

Avery's Animations

17 days ago

An example of each were from Eternal. One was Decena who originally wasn't going to get as much attention as she did and was going to get killed off due to going mad and attacking you. That path never happens though since I changed things severely with her.

The opposite example was this elf character who I can't even remember what his name was at the moment. I was planning on him playing a larger role, but probably due to focusing more on Decena, I ended up eventually just shoving him in the background and he gets a passing mention much later getting killed in some battle lol.

Avery's Animations

16 days ago

So glad you expanded on Decena. She was one of my favourite characters! ... As for the elf character, I don't think I even remember there being a male elf character in Eternal so... Meh. :p

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Flevas. And I will say he did have some great scenes. He rose through the ranks, freed his people, revenged himself on the humans, and ultimately got replaced by a female elf that the Eternal could bang on the side. 
 

Such is life. Also, Christ! Your voice is not what I was expecting. I've seen in posts before that you were British or something, but hearing your voice, I literally jumped out of my chair so fast my mom asked me what was wrong (she's deaf).

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

What were you expecting? Full on Essex chav accent or Dick Van Dyke in Mary Poppins accent? ^_^

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Bullet Tooth Briar

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15 days ago
Commended by EndMaster on 10/7/2024 1:05:20 PM

Very educational. I shall incorporate this information into my lessons. ^_^

 

Avery's Animations

15 days ago
possibly the greatest video I've seen this month

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

I think its very important for men's health that they know how to differentiate what kind of balls they have. ^_^

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Honestly? With how chipper you are, I was expecting a voice that didn't sound like I'm getting robbed for a pack of smokes in the back of an English pub

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Don't forget the lighter! ^_^

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Yay, another featured comment for my profile page!

That comeback was too good not to immortalize 

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Innit, cuz. ^_^

Avery's Animations

16 days ago
Commended by EndMaster on 10/6/2024 7:02:18 PM

Here's a video all about how your stories should ditch the honkys and be full of tits, faggots and trannies instead, because I'm super woke like that. ^_^

 

Avery's Animations

16 days ago

I'll be extra sure to watch this one.

Avery's Animations

16 days ago

I remember watching a YouTube video of a little girl who had a bookshelf, and her mom asked her to take all the books off the bookshelf which doesn't feature a female main character, and by the end of the video there was probably about 15% of the books still left on the shelf. Cool video! 

Avery's Animations

16 days ago

... In all fairness, where does the mom think all the books on her daughter's bookshelf came from? Maybe she should've bought her daughter more books with female protagonists. :p

Avery's Animations

15 days ago
Imagine having a kid that reads enough to have a whole shelf of physical books, and then trying to make her feel bad about them lol.

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

"Okay sweetie. Now find all the books with a non binary protagonist."

"Mummy, I'm sleepy and I just want to read Thomas the Tank Engine."

"Oh, Thomas huh? Another MALE protagonist!"

Avery's Animations

16 days ago
It is now my turn to say wow damn do you sound British

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16 days ago

It's Bri'ish, Enter. Say it with me, B-R-I-'-I-S-H.

... Very good. Now we move on to the advanced class.

Bo''le o' wa'er. ^_^

Avery's Animations

16 days ago
Last time a Dutchman tried to speak British you got sayings like that's another cook.

Don't think I'll be ready for that advanced class just yet

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Next lesson is 'Arry Po''er. ^_^

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15 days ago
Ha''y ... now the monkey comes out of the sleeve!

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15 days ago

What? No. We say the Rs. Who the fuck doesn't say the Rs?

Avery's Animations

15 days ago
Damn bette' luck next time

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rhoticity_in_English

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

Okay, I'm super confused now. I keep listening to both of those "farmers" and I can hear the R in both of them so... Maybe I'm so Bri'ish that I don't even know what an R sounds like?

Avery's Animations

14 days ago
B'i'ish

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14 days ago

Literally same, lol. To me the British version just sounds a bit more elongated when pronouncing the words. 

 I can tell some british accents/people don't pronounce the T in a lot of words but i couldn't hear it in that particular example. Well I've learnt something today because I say it like the non rhotic example. At least that particular word. 

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Wha' exac'ly do your pe'ple have against the le''er t in the middle of a word?

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15 days ago

Duh. We're Bri'ish. We harvest all the T for drinking. ^_^

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15 days ago

Nice lol. Here in America, we just throw it into the nearest harbor

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

I know. That's why there's a shor'age.

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16 days ago

“Chop off their dicks and slap a pair of boobs on them.”

Lol

Catalina, Semra, Tanya and Suzy. I’ve had 4 major female protagonists.

Semra is also black and bi.

I have achieved diversity mastery. I can now make all the rest of my protagonists straight white guys as usual. (Oh ok, I'll throw in a white woman every now and then too)

Avery's Animations

16 days ago

Does drow count as black? I never thought of that.

... But yes, your characters have always been pretty diverse in terms of gender, race and sexuality, so... Congratulations on being the wokest writer on CYS! ^_^

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Even your female supporting characters contribute to the story meaningfully. When you look at characters like Alison, Tanya, Marina, and Eidolith, it's pretty apparent that anyone who accuses you of being biased never actually read your stories.

There's a huge difference between diversity and pandering.

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

But I like pandas!

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15 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/9/2024 9:11:21 PM

New vid! Advice is very basic but I think it stands up. If anything, people should always keep a record of their character's basic appearance so that they don't have to constantly scroll through everything they've already written to remember what their character's eye colour was.

 

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Probably my favourite one yet. Very informative, and gets straight to business. It really highlights how critical it is to flesh out our characters before we write anything down, especially side characters. Loved the dark secret one too, you can really add so much complexity to the plot with it. Not sure if youre a teacher of any kind, but you would make for a good one. 

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Thank you so much! I think so too. I would be like Miss Trunchbull and throw little girls over the fence by their pigtails. It would be glorious. ^_^

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14 days ago

miss trunchbull unironically terrified me as a little kid. Swear I had  a nightmare where she forced me to eat a massive chocolate cake made of her blood sweat and tears. So please, for the kids sake, no kiss trunchbull. 

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

No kiss Trunchbull? Dude, I said I wanted to be like her. I didn't say I wanted to kiss her. I mean I know my waifu list is pretty unconventional, but I think I'll swipe left on this one.

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Usually I just make a “notes” page and divided up between the important people and places. 

With the people, I’ll just add a small note of who they are in relation to the story. Elaboration on them occurs based on how important they become in the story.

The main thing I focus on more is major events. Usually a small timeline of what’s supposed to happen in the story depending on the choices or if it’s going to happen regardless of the choice just in a different way, which also can alter the importance of a character's role/personality.

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

I have to have at least 3 notes pages. One for chracters, one for worldbuilding and one for plot points. ^_^

Avery's Animations

15 days ago

Yeah I'm usually using Word, so it's typically one document with multiple pages that I scroll through. Lol

Of course it also depends on how long the story is too. Longer stories tend to have more notes of course.

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14 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/9/2024 9:11:50 PM

Day 8 is out! This video was particularly fun. I especially loved assigning all of my characters their Szondi personality types.

 

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

Your stories have been really helping me with Sherb's contest entry. I appreciate you!

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

Awh! Thank you! ^_^

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

I wonder what different site members MBTI types are. Last time i did it i got advocate, but before that id always get mediator. I think i just became a bit more 'pratical' as i've gotten older, which was enough to shift it. 

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

Well, Avery did leave a link to the personality tests in her video. So... I guess site members could find out 

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

I believe I am an Architect. ^_^

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

So have you been linking your videos to some Namoramo community or just here?

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

Mostly just here. I've posted on a couple of discord threads, but in general the NaNoWriMo community is pretty much non existent since the forums closed.

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

Surprised there isn't a reddit or discord specifically for it. There's usually one of those for everything.

Avery's Animations

14 days ago

There's a reddit. Should have posted something on there really. There's a few discords that I joined but only one I use regularly.

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13 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/9/2024 9:11:07 PM

So this is the last video I made on character building. I wanted to include it as part of the last video, but the last video went on for way too long so I ended up having to split it into two parts.

 

Avery's Animations

13 days ago

Hey a Clockwork Orange reference in this one.

Avery's Animations

12 days ago

I eventually settled on "Hello my little droogies" as my go-to intro. ^_^

Avery's Animations

12 days ago

Your videos on character building have been fantastic! To explain, a lot of the reviews on my previous stories have centered around two common complaints. 
 

1)  Character development, which I'm trying to work on in my newest story with your videos (hence why I've been fleshing them out before I actually write my story)

2) Showing vs. Telling. Apparently a lot of stories (mine included) tend to explain to the reader what they're seeing and experiencing, rather than finding a way to "show them." Honestly, I find it confusing, and I think there might be a fine line between detailing something vs over explaining it? It'd be fantastic if you have the time and could find it in your Union Jack heart to make a video explaining the difference and giving us some good ideas. I've read the Price of Freedom, and it's breathtaking, but I struggle to apply it to my own writing, and I'm sure others out there do as well.

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12 days ago

The price of freedom was one of the first none end master stories I read. Maybe my mind is hallucinating and playing tricks on me, but I remember reading it, and being absolutely devastated that it wasn't finished? And I came back like a year later, and it wasn't finished? But again, I MAY be hallucinating, but I swear that was the case, where she was promising a part two or something. 

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12 days ago

It's finished. But there's a sequel that's supposed to come out. I think innocence lost is part of a series

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12 days ago

"Supposed to come out" It's been five yearsss lol

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12 days ago

Oh yeah, it will totally be coming out any day now... >.>

But yeah, I really do need to get back to work on Brothers in Arms. At first I completely threw myself into it, then I got really ill and took a step back from writing for awhile. I think, for a long time my brain assosiated writing with being ill, and I was afraid that if I started writing I'd get ill again. Doesn't make any sense but brains are weird like that. Then my confidence started to build and I got more in the mood for writing again, but a whole bunch of life drama kept happening one after another for about three years straight. I got quite a bit of drawing done in that time but very little writing. Now things seem to be calming down a bit. Knowing my life it's probably a "calm before the storm" situation and all hell in going to break loose in a month or two, but I am determined to get as much writing done as I possibly can while I actually have the opportunity. ^_^

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11 days ago

Okay well,I hope so! 

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12 days ago

I'll be completely honest, I'm not sure I ever caught on to the difference between showing vs telling. I mean I've heard the phrase "show don't tell" about a million times, but if you asked me to give you an example of showing instead of telling, I'd be at a loss. A lot of the stuff I write (when I'm not writing interactive fiction) is first person, which is literally just a character telling you everything that happened to them. To me, the only difference between showing and telling is that showing is just... Telling but with more emotion? I don't know. I should definitely research the term a bit more until I figure out what the actual difference is.

Avery's Animations

12 days ago

The whole show vs tell thing is sort of something everyone screams about a little too much anyway.

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12 days ago

Honestly, dude, no rush on the story. I understand you have a bunch of projects, and you've been super busy in the past. I've been there. Fuck, when I was writing Terrorist, I was going through homelessness and a really bad relationship. Hence why it's a lot more violent: I just wrote down every depraved thought I had, Eric Harris style. 
 

As for showing vs. telling, it's still only one facet of a good story. I feel like as long as the plot and characters are good, the story will be fine. Branching also helps, I guess. But plenty of successful stories have limited branching.

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11 days ago

Damn, that sucks. Really sorry you went through that.

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12 days ago

The way I see it, telling is what you could expect to see in a textbook. It occurs when the writer appears to be giving you a summarised version of the plot rather than actually creating immersion through sensory details, pacing and description. This also includes using excessive adjectives. For instance, "it was a gloomy day and she was very upset" vs "grey clouds dotted the horizon, signalling the storm within her own mind".

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12 days ago

Ohhh. So, just to see if I have this right...

 "The troops advanced upon the fort" is telling.

"The sounds of thunder echoed across the landscape... wait, no... that was the steady pounding of 50,000 pairs of boots marching  upon the fort, its stone spires reaching out to the sky like the hand of a drowning man." ... showing?

 

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11 days ago

Telling:

My stepmother was angry at me. I needed to run away from home.

 

Showing:

"You fucking son of a whore, get your stupid ass down to the kitchen- now!" my stepmother yelled from downstairs. Metal pans clanged to the floor. My stepmother was probably searching again for her favorite cast iron skillet to use to chuck at my head. There was nothing I could do to placate her when she was in one of her moods.


Telling:

I stole a credit card from her purse.

 

Showing:

Sneaking into the master bedroom, I grabbed her purse and rifled through its contents. I needed something that could get me all the way to Kentucky. A plastic earring? No. Three nickels? No. A tampon. Hell no. A shiny piece of plastic? Wait, that's her credit card, expiring several months from now. Just what I was looking for! I dropped it into my pocket and closed the door on the bedroom and mess I made behind.

 

Telling:

Jennifer cooked breakfast for her son, Gene. She forgot to make bacon, his favorite breakfast food, however.

 

Showing:

She turned on the gas stove and left it on medium before drizzling some olive oil into the frying pan. Jennifer then cracked an egg on the counter and dropped its contents into the oil. The sizzle from the frying eggs could wake even the heaviest of sleepers. Sizzle ... the bacon! That was Gene's favorite breakfast food. How could she forget to make it? It was too late to use cooked bacon grease to fry the egg now.

 

Telling:

She greeted the man.

 

Showing:

"Hi."

Avery's Animations

12 days ago

This one's about choosing from different POVs. (Of course I made a point to mention Interactive Fiction when I talked about 2nd person POV.) ^_^

 

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12 days ago

Amusingly I’v seen some fucktards have called various interactive fiction as “gaslighting the reader” because the story is telling “You” what you’re doing regardless of whether that’s what you’d actually do in “real life”

Of course even if this is remotely true, it just makes me enjoy writing IF even more since I like gas lighting people.

“So you genocided entire village.”
“No I didn’t.”
“Sure you did, trust me. Next you’re going to rape the princess.”
“I would never!”
“Yes you will. You’re doing it right now. Turn to the next page.”

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12 days ago

Never mind the fact that like a bunch of cucks, they continue to play the IF instead of just walking away.

Avery's Animations

11 days ago

LMAO!

"Dude, stop raping the princess! That is seriously fucked up!"
"I'm not!"
"What does the game say?"
"... "Ouch," says the Princess. "That hurts. Stop raping me." "Never!" you yell as you carry on raping her. "I love rape! Rape is my favourite thing. Second only to pedophilia and beastiality." "Well, there's a puppy over there," the princess points out. "Wouldn't you rather rape that instead? That would count as both pedophilia AND beastiality." "Don't mind if I do," you reply as you drop the Princess in the mud and happily approach the puppy."
"DUDE! WTF is wrong with you?"
"I don't know! I can't stop!"

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11 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/11/2024 6:09:30 PM

So, this video talks more about setting... I tried but its pretty easy to tell that I care a lot more about character creation than I do about worldbuilding. That's something I need to work on.

 

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11 days ago
Worldbuilding is fundamental, NO COMMENDATION FOR YOU.

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11 days ago
Ugh fine, but just this once.

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10 days ago

Yey! ^_^

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11 days ago

Pretty sure that's why I tend towards fantasy settings. It's just easy to hand wave various things in the world and you can fill in blanks later if need be.

One day I might try that Edutainment style story about Aztecs though if I get really motivated on the whole research thing. (Unless Will ends up beating me to it)

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10 days ago

Just think of all the lovely human sacrifices! ^_^

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11 days ago

Just going to say that you're not overly chirpy, give yourself some kind words!

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10 days ago

I am... Just the right amount of chirpy? ^_^

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10 days ago
Commended by Tim36D on 10/12/2024 9:35:52 PM

As I hope Mizal will be happy to know, I did do a video on worldbuilding. ^_^

 

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10 days ago

I haven't been doing any homework this whole time and will continue to not do so.

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10 days ago

Bad EndMaster! Detention after class!

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10 days ago

I love worldbuilding and it is probably my favorite thing to do when creating a new story.

Very good video.

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9 days ago

Thank you! I try to keep the categories relatively vague when it comes to world building, because there are so many little random things that might apply heavily in one world and not apply at all in another. Especially when it comes to magic systems and complex shit like that.

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8 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/16/2024 2:08:10 PM

Didn't bother posting yesterday's video since it was pretty useless, but today's is looking at my favorite story outlining process. Works pretty well for IF too. ^_^

 

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8 days ago

First I'm hearing about all this pants stuff. Had to find the other video to figure out what the hell "pantsers" are. Really I think that video would have been fine to post, if only for the hilarious use of the word "pantser" multiple times.

Anyway, plantser leaning more towards the plotter side.

As for this video I'm usually outlining the events for the story and potential changes of those based on the choices made. Some endings are already planned even before the beginning is written.

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8 days ago

The Jot, Bin, Pants method! First you jot down all of the ideas that you have for your story. Then you screw them up and throw them in the bin because they're all crap. Then you find some guy you have a grudge against and pants him. It'll make you feel so much better! ^_^

I guess you've got WAY more stuff to keep track of because your stories branch off into so many different directions. I can't imagine what the outline for Rogues looked like.

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7 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/16/2024 2:07:54 PM

And here's an explaination of the Plot Roller Coaster outline for people who love pants. ^_^

 

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7 days ago

Animating Frodo and Sam's little roller coaster ride was particularly fun. ^_^

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7 days ago

There’s also the “Shaggy Dog” story that just leaves the roller coaster hanging high up with no climax and the riders have to climb down themselves complaining the entire time. (Or sit there and starve to death)

But yeah as more of a plotter I usually have complex roller coaster with multiple major struggles to get past before moving on to the next one (or final one).

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7 days ago

This one's probably my least favourite plotting method, but it can work if you tweak it a lot. ^_^

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6 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/16/2024 2:07:15 PM

Classic Hero's Journey outline. Still a bit simplistic for me but can't really go wrong with it. ^_^

 

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6 days ago
Looks like I've got a few of these to catch up on.

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6 days ago

Can posts be commended by multiple people? I swear to God I've had two commendations on the same video before.

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6 days ago

Lol called Leia a bitch.

In a CYOA, refusing the call usually just results in an early ending.

Pretty sure I've followed this outline without realizing it more than once, though "hero" probably wouldn't be the word for the protagonists.

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5 days ago

Should've gone with cunt, shouldn't I?

And yeah, never goes very well when the "hero" actually has a choice.

The Wizard Arrives:

"You are the chosen one the prophecy fortold!" says the wise old wizard. "Come with me, and together, we shall save the world!"

- Sure, let's go!

- No thanks. I'm washing my hair tonight.

No thanks. I'm washing my hair tonight:

A piano falls on your head. Try again.

- End Game and Leave Comments

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5 days ago

Piano suddenly falling on the protagonist's head is a classic. Right up there with the protagonist deciding to take bath and for some insane reason decides to watch TV while doing it which then promptly falls in the tub for a shocking ending.

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5 days ago

And don't even think about turning off the alarm and going back to bed. There's no surer way to invoke the wrath of the Interactive Fiction Gods. >.<

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5 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/17/2024 8:52:32 PM

Now we shall rescue some cats... Everybody likes cats! ^_^

 

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5 days ago

Too fucking complicated, the cat can save itself.

It’s a cat, it probably doesn’t want to be bothered in the first place.

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4 days ago

Heard a good story once (think its supposed to be true) of an old lady who called the fire brigade over to her house because her cat was stuck in a tree and couldn't get down. Firemen used the ladder, grabbed the kitty, gave it back to the lady. The lady was so happy! She invited all the firemen in for tea and biscuits. The firemen graciously accepted, congratulated themselves on a job well done, got in their firetruck and drove away... Ran over the fucking cat. ^_^

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4 days ago

Shaggy cat story.

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4 days ago

An absolute... Catastrophe! ^_^

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4 days ago
Commended by Mizal on 10/18/2024 6:43:31 PM

This one I like! Lovely and detailed and complicated! ^_^

 

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4 days ago

All your video are popping up in my youtube recommendations so I'm actually seeing these almost as soon as you post them there as opposed to waiting for them to be posted here.

Anyway, I think I use an altered version of this. It's more like 9 "boxes" keeping track of some basic storyline ideas for each major path.

As for the Harry Potter, they changed it mainly since "Philosopher's Stone" is sort of a concept linked to alchemy and yeah most Americans wouldn't bother making the connection. Sorcerer is obvious though.

And yes while a philosopher IS something here that most would still know (Like Socrates or Plato) Sorcerer would still work better here since it falls under the American Kirby is Hardcore change.

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3 days ago

Yes, but the "Philospher's Stone" is a thing. The "Sorcerer's Stone" is not a thing. It would be like if some English guy wrote a book called "King Arthur and the Quest for the Holy Grail" and they published it in America under the name, "King Arthur and the Quest for the Holy Cup"... It isn't a thing!

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3 days ago

Doesn't matter, sorcerer over here is going to sound more "impressive" than philosopher. 

Connecting Harry Potter to "sorcerer" makes him sound like the up and coming powerful wizard type he ends up being.

Connecting him to "philosopher" though just makes him seem like he's going to be pontificating in a toga and getting molested by his teachers.

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3 days ago

I would WAY rather read that book! ^_^

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3 days ago

Probably won't be sharing any videos for a few days because I don't think any of them would be useful for CYS... But this one is about blurbs. CYS games have blurbs. ^_^

 

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3 days ago

I tend to keep the story descriptions short and try to use one word titles.

But I have been known to do the more "cinematic ad" when posting in the forums announcing the new story.

Like I used this for Rogues:

Endure the dangers of living in a fantasy world!
Be part of the problem because hey everyone else is!
Experience the life of an outlaw!
Experience all the odd twists and turns in the life of crime!
Experience multiple ways to die ranging from horrible to REALLY fucking horrible!
Experience the joys of performing despicable ranging from but not limited to mundane murder to slavery!   
Have sex with several lovely ladies, human and non-human alike with the potential to romance them and even make them your waifus!
Have the inclusive option of choosing your gender and orientation! LOL JK This isn’t a fucking CoG story, you silly faggots!
Twelve different epilogues, and one with a very special extension!
Rise from a small town thief to become everything from a smooth criminal overlord to a law-abiding jack off!
Even travel through fucking time!

And probably a whole bunch more stuff.

Enjoy.

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3 days ago

I am so ashamed of the fact that I haven't read Rogues yet. I should do a let's play of it once November is over! ^_^

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3 days ago

Just realised something that's curious. What is Rogues doing in Fantasy when most of your other games are in Grimdark fantasy? Rogues not grimdark enough to make the cut?

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3 days ago

There's more "hope" in that world in general since its a bit more "traditional" fantasy. While there's certainly bits of it that can get a little dark, it's not like that's the entire world setting.

Or at least there isn't a necromancer ascending to godhood genociding everyone on the planet or a world where a genetically and magically altered super soldier is putting everyone to the sword that doesn't fall in line, not to mention all the sadistic dark elves and insane dwarves that inhabit the place.

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3 days ago

Boo! Boring! Won't bother playing that one then. :p

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3 days ago

Funny enough you actually have played through at least one path of it since I remember you saying you initially hated one of the waifus since she was annoying (She was sort of meant to be) but later in the story you liked her since she became a different person. So you said you were looking forward to go through the other paths when you had time.

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2 days ago

Hmm... I think you might be thinking of two different people. I did start playing it and said I found one of the waifus annoying, but I never finished it or ended up liking her... Unless I have a really bad case of amnesia.

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2 days ago

Oh yeah you're right, I checked the old PMs. I knew you hadn't finished it but I thought you got further in the story where the character changes a bit.