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I am in need of an editor who will look over my game before I wanna publish (not right now but I need an editor so I don't search last minute) I ask for someone over 100 Xp has been an editor for 2 games and is high school or higher but I will take others if no one meets that criteria.

Over 100xp: Doesn't actually mean much. The least that says about somebody is that they've rated a bunch of troll stories for the free point, and, more often than not, it's true.

Has been editor for 2 games: Maybe 20 people on the entire site have done that shit, including the 15-17 who are rarely/never on anymore, and that's a generous estimate.

Highschool age or Higher: You'll get a lot farther just saying "Must not be an annoying twelve year old".

In other news, I need a person to caddy my golf bag, just so I don't have to carry the bag in a last-minute rush everywhere I go. I need someone who can boil spaghetti, has mastered more than one type of Kung Fu, and is of the legal age of consent in most states.

. ... Ooookkkkk

RE: Your ad what I read

I noticed you were looking for a caddy carrier/spaghetti boiler/Kung Fu master/I won't ask why, and wondered if this had to be all rolled into one guy, or if four individual guys in a box would do the same job.

I only ask because I still haven't got that spaghetti al dente.

By the by, can you explain to me the different sticks in golf? Then, having done that, could you explain why cricket only has one stick? What if I want to hit the ball gently? The stick is way too big!

Hope you find the guy for you anyhow.

You don't need to know anything about the golf sticks! It'It's not like I would need golf sticks to improve my golfing, I mean, it's not like he asked for good grammar and writing skills in an editor, why would I need golf knowledge in a caddy!?

If he means the gladiator game, you can read it right now and form your own opinions.

Is your goal to be a jerk to everyone?

Excuse me?

I'm not sure I follow, you'll have to clarify what specifically you found offensive about that post.

Really make your own opinions. And remember when you just insulted my story for no reason? 

Ok I'm a vegetarian and judging by your profile picture we would never be friends

It's a buck's skull on a bush.

That can happen in the wild you know. Animals eat the carcass and toss around the bones, and the remaining flesh dries out from the sun and crumbles away from the bone, leaving behind a perfect skull.

Those animals are disgusting and WRONG and morally bankrupt for eating meat though.

Are we talking about the 'click once to live or die' thing that was removed for not being a CYOA and not meeting site standards?

Because I'm pretty sure I wasn't the only one who rated it, and obviously I wasn't the one who removed it.\

And you're still not answering my question of what was so offensive and upsetting about my response to IAP's post.

Classic Mizal, being a massive bitch to a guy who's done nothing wrong. Get your house in order, Mizal.

I will admit, Mizal can be a jerk. However, insult her where it's due, not for no apparent reason. She was being helpful you dickwod.

I do care about it is just a really long story and I don't want criticism for my junior high writing

Ok I'm mostly deciding between you and derpbacon 

Ok how do you proofread?

Um. No thanks.

The story in question is open for viewing, whether his 'heart is really in it' or not is a matter of opinion, which is why I suggested you have a look for yourself.  Somehow this caused a meltdown but meh, that's the internet for you.

100+ EXP =/= experienced writer. Keep that in mind.

I will keep you in mind if no one else offers I will take you I just prefer someone with a published story as I notice you have seven unpublished stories

@DerpBacon, really, you're getting a bit above your station here. Offering advice to a newbie with no less than seven unpublished games in your profile? The nerve!

Excuse me a noob? Oh wow considering I can easily make a better liked game than you

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DO YOU EVEN KNOW WHO MIZAL IS

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"I like Criticism it makes you strong- Lebron James."

It's so funny you have that quote in your profile when you seem to be incapable of liking criticism.

I do just mizal knows we hate each other because he insulted my story for no reason

Mizal is a she, and everyone insulted your story because it was awful.

Oh I see your one of mizal's friends.

I don't even like Mizal. I don't like half the people here because I don't know them. All of them come off as narcissists to me because I've never met them and I know them exclusively from their forum posts.

They don't even like me. I'm annoying over the internet and can come off as a troll.

What matters on this website is writing good storygames. People could hate EndMaster on this website and despise them but they're still going to admit he's a good writer.

Sure (Sarcasm)

look i'm tired and in a bad mood right now. things have been stressful at home lately for me, so i started to revert back to the internet personality i had on other writing websites that make people love to hate me.

my point still stands, i just could have explained it in a less asshole-ish manner instead of acting like a douche.

sorry.

Yeah I'm sorry too I should've  just taken your criticism but not mizal's

it's cool, it's cool.

Swedish, didn't your mother ever teach you not to apologize to trolls? Dude's going around deliberately antagonizing everyone in this thread, it's okay to tell him to fuck off.

People thought I was a troll when I first started out writing. Straight up broke my will to write, made me feel like crap, lead to a period of depression and near-suicide, and then finally passed once I learned proper grammar and started to write for myself rather than for than for the admiration of others.

(although I think they had much more severe threats and insults than the ones on this thread)

So no, it's not okay. If it wasn't okay for me, it's not okay for him. I'm not going to put someone through what I went through just because I'm having a bad day.

You wanna do some duels or make a game together? I prefer duels :D

Your the only troll here

Mizal isn't a troll.

Meh, I think she is

She's been here for five years. She's not.

So an experienced troll?

Does this look like a troll story to you?

A really experienced troll who can cover their tracks?

OH FUUUUUUUUUUUCK YOU

I TAKE EVERYTHING BACK. MIZAL SHOULD FUCKING EAT YOUR LIVER.

I fucking share something personal to me that I live with every day and you act like this. You really are a troll.

EDIT: Actually I should eat your liver. I've had an interest in that sort of thing for a while now. Mizal can tear it out though, I suppose?

Yep friends with mizal alright

Think I'll leave you to it, Lemons. He's not very good at this troll thing, too dull and unsubtle and not really worth much time IMO.

Shit, I'm not even supposed to be in the Lounge...though this is a thread that belonged in the Workshop anyway.

Either go full blood and make an apology thread,or don't apologize, especially when you're in the right. 

Apology threads are so last month. It's all about the anniversaries now.

Meh, Robin's a troll, I already had all the interaction with him I cared to back when he was sending outraged PMs about his one-click 'story' being unpublished.

No I understood that you just said it wasn't a game or a story which was completely stupid because it was obviously a game 

exactly, it was a game and not a you're storygame like you're intended to write here.

Yes and Seto made me realize that and I understand why it was unpublished it was just mizal's reaction that ticked me off

Nothing wrong with being new.

Thank you because being new to this site doesn't make you a bad writer

Yeah, but you aren't exactly doing yourself any favors. Just take the criticism and move on

Ok thx

Yeah. But they are a reflection of... um, effort in general?

What is?

How did you do that?

She posted a GIF.

How do you do that?

On phpbb you'd post a link with an [img] tag. Here? Probably html or something, I dunno.

Oh I will probably figure it out once I'm on this site for a little longer

Quantum physics and plenty of apple juice.

I read your profile and you said your friends with Seto I will tell you right now he is a great guy because as soon as I got this and I needed help he helped majorly and now we are still talking and are great friends

Friends? Lol, it simply says we're currently sharing the same backgrounds on our profiles. I don't have any friends. Though I am happy for you that you found someone that you can call that on here! :D

Oh but also how do I use a background?

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Are you interested in having the same one as me and Seto as well? I helped eshspoyeofdoom with his if you're curious in others, other backgrounds I mean.

Edit: I forgot he reverted back to the plain one, oops. I don't feel like editing this too much though. *shrugs*

Virgin sacrifice and a close working relationship with Satan.

I'm done I will just make the story on my own

No one's forcing you to do anything, bro. Just make quality storygames if you're actually going to write.

I find it funny that Robin singled out Mizal because she was female.

Robin is obviously just another typical knuckle dragging MRA misogynist. No more need to pay attention to him.

So as I'm reading over this thread, it occurred to me that you are in junior high. In that case, I laugh at you. Even as we are fellow junior high students, I have to laugh because the words I have written here are possibly superior to what you've written in nearly every way. If you're going to request a experienced proofreader, I hope you are experienced yourself or prepare yourself for blunt criticism.