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@Xx_MLGswag360Noscope420blazeitShrekFaZeWeedEveryDay_xX

...what. No. Seriously. What.

No. There will be no Rule 34 artwork, Ford. Especially not of...just, no.

Damn. I like leather.

Yes, I've got that magic touch. ;D

So, do we start writing?

Well the prompt has been posted.

So, yeah? I guess I'll procrastinate work on it.

I'm not very good at writing those prompts.......plus I need sleep ;_;

You don't need sleep. quiller doesn't sleep a lot.

I'm on like, 17 hours a day! And God, I've never seen Quiller off D:

Healthy!

Don't you mean the Zaglist?!

That wasn't punny. -_-

Sorry

http://youtu.be/dj20Ao4Vw9w

That is one depressed sounding airhorn.

It's MLG m8. D0 y0u kn0w wh4t MLG 1s?

Does a Maori man hate fried bread?

?????

1 d0nt g3t 1t.

Xx_$$$NoScope3XWiggle$$$_xX

The answer is no. Maori men LOVE fried bread, and i don't know what MLG is.

:O

You. Don't. Know. What. MLG IS???????

This video explains everything, my friend.

1. I only looked at the title of the video. 2. You meant Major League Gaming??? I had heard of it but i completely forgot about it.

MLG is comprised of little links and vines.

For example, Smoke weed every day, John Cena, Oh Baby a triple!, Illuminati, and etcetera.

PM me if you want to know how to stop Operation New Order. Every person counts........

Mason the derailer strikes again! This has gone waaaaaaay off track.

No, I'm stopping this nonsense.

But I'm serious about Operation New Order..........

Yeah. MLG is an very real thing. But, there's a lot of jokes and memes about it.

Well, now anyone who was curious as to what became of Nikki at the end of TOW has an answer. You're welcome. :D

xD I take it you were one of the people wondering, then?

Unfortunately, I never did get the hidden epilogue. Really not sure what I'm missing but I haven't had time to replay it (it's quite a lengthy game!).

Great prompt by the way. Curious to see who this Aria is (aside from the obvious hints), and what the how the epilogue actually ended.

xD I said don't read it if you haven't finished the game...! *Kermit flail* 

Thank you for the compliment, though.

Are people still allowed to join the art giveaway writing contest?

if not i will just let myself out..

Pretty sure, just PM quiller so he knows you joined.

Youre amazing Quillier, ha ha.

Neat, thanks. Glad to see youre back to doinh crazy shit man, ha ha

Wow, this thread went completely off topic amazingly fast.

Here, I'll give some feedback on the actual entries: Got to say, I'm impressed and intimidated (intimipressed?) by the number and quality of the entries so far. Bilbo's miiiight be my favorite, all the attention to detail really sets the scene and it really does hit hard with that 'coming home after a long journey, story is winding down' feeling even in the first paragraph.

They're all so good though, and the two prompts work great together. You're going to have to make us work a little harder at combining them next time, quiller. :P 

Sadly, I think it started off topic and slid downhill from there.

I was very impressed by the level of writing in all the entries. I was expecting maybe a paragraph or two describing a character's thoughts, but everyone wrote these super impressive scenes, complete with dialogue and character interaction. It makes me wish I could go and read the stories that led up to them. And also making me wonder if I should raise the bar for what's considered 'outstanding participation', or kill myself awarding everyone who's earned a participation prize. I just may be forced to do the latter if this quality keeps up, haha.

And I'm just being nice and giving you guys an easy pitch to start off with. They'll get harder for those of you who like challenges ;)

I think the reason they're all so long is because absolutely everyone is combining the prompts and that adds a lot of dialogue.

Well... I know it's late(and I already posted it), but could I be added to the taglist as well, please?

@Steve24883

Wow... humanity ended with a lie. Anyway, great ending, though I'm not sure I'd like to read the entire story, considering I have just seen the ending.

Thanks. Well, at least humanity went grinning and partying rather than terrified, waiting for the end.

Yes, holy shit, that one was depressing. :D  Can we hit the Go Back button a few times and get a happier ending?

Well, maybe five minutes after that the aliens just died because Deus Ex Microbes like War of the Worlds.

Surely I'm not the only spiteful SOB who wants to reply to everyone of the WIP stories like a massive troll? No? Just me?

Oh, I will. There's a debate on religion AND Trump that should distract me.

With the number of responses the thread has gotten (and the number of people responding to the wrong post...) he might need a new one for every prompt, at this rate. Can you imagine what that thing will look like a few days from now?

I think we need to just be grown up enough to admit that iavatus kicked all our asses here.

I admit to nothing. :P I am happy with what I wrote.

He can write the greatest piece known to man, he's still a filth, filth newbie.

True!

The quiller should make a rule saying anyone who hasn't been a member at least a month is automatically disqualified. Last thing we need is a newbie in there, newbing the place up with his confused newbish ways. Pfft.

All in favor say aye! 

Well, some n00bs are pretty competent.

Competence has nothing to do with it. They could be the greatest writer in human history, but still, fuck them, because they're newbies.

newbies aren't even real people

I say we build a wall.

No. No walls. Only fences.

Or maybe a laser barrier?

Or a fence.

Or maybe a magical force feild?

Or a fence. ^_^

Or perhaps a giant mound of zombie Trump clones that encircle the area? :P

Or a fence. I like fences.

"You gotta remember something - It's not a fence to keep me out, but a fence to keep you in"

-Rorschach, the emo poet years.
 

Aye!

Mizal: The quiller, should make, a, rule saying, anyone who, hasn't, been a member, at, least a, month, is automatically, disqualified.

You were missing a few commas.

XD

Commas are your thing.

May'be MY th'ing will be the com'ma's mir'ror im'age.

I wrote the worst piece of shit... >.>

You wrote way better than my crap ^_^

It's not bad, dude. I've seen WAY worse. Trust me.

Nah, yours was good. Got the sense it really was the ending to a much longer story, and one I'd like to read.

'Edna' is always going to be first and foremost the name of a tiny tiny Texas town for me though, so I had to laugh at picturing the elf queen or whatever called that.

I know I'm hella late, but do you mind adding me to the taglist?

Reading over mine... aw, pretty rushed piece of shite ;-;
 

Draw a rock wearing a redsocks cap !

Edit : 70 or so hours with no sleep for the win!

Edit Edit : and a lot of redbull .

Yours was a complete short story in itself, pretty much. If that's what you consider rushed I'd like to see what you can do when you take your time...

Welp.

That was a lot more serious than I intended.

Thanks, Quiller!

I think I need to even out the "serious :  funny" ratio with my second prompt, though.

Anything I could improve on? (Also, could you tag me?)

Thanks, dude. I'll definitely take that into consideration for the next prompt.

One sort of interesting thing about this prompt is finding a balance between treating it like the true ending of a story, but also having to introduce characters and concepts to readers seeing them for the first time. Ideally we'd avoid exposition and recaps, because theoretical readers would already know all this from following along with our theoretical story, but at the same time it's a lot to throw people into the middle of for the sake of the prompt.

Oh my god Malk! Why u no cute, devilish hamster? :o

I'm sorry?

Who the hell is that guy on your pic? His stomach.......god, it reminds me of the fat kid on Tuck Frump.

My drunken uncle Sergei. 

So a couple of comments on some of the work (good job, everyone)--

@bilbo This is a strong piece. I am interested in reading what you write in the future.

@breezy134 Pretty dark. I like it, although it seems somewhat rushed at times and I think you should improve your transitioning.

@wigglewigglewiggle Interesting idea I guess, but I was somewhat confused at several points (why did she bother going on a journey in the first place? How did she hallucinate the people she met on her travels and yet realize no one was at her town?)... And you shouldn't have had to clarify your story. I suggest writing maybe the last few entries of the protagonist's journal in order to show her adventurers in a more detailed light, and from here perhaps hinting at things being not all they seem, and perhaps leaving it up to the reader's interpretation. And of course making sure not to leave plot holes.

@Malkalack Nice work. I'm getting a serious Fallout vibe from it. I really wish I could read more haha.

@Timeless_Sakura Kind of confusing to follow. Just a tip, you create a new paragraph every time a different character speaks.

@Claw2k11 Interesting concept. A hero who isn't all that he seems huh?

@Aman Piques my interest, wish you wrote more.

@iavatus Awesome. Please write more!!

@DerpBacon Nice. From what I understand, Guillermo is a demon hired to kill demons, except he made a pact with the devil to save them?

What about mine? I know it's crappy, just want to see how crappy.

...Basically. He was supposed the kill the demons by the orders of the king, but he couldn't considering he made a pact with the Devil years earlier.

That's...exactly it.

As I have already mentioned, it's no use if the story is something too predictable, it'll have little to no impact on the reader if they get the general gist of the story. In a story(at least in my opinion) you need to surprise the reader at what's happening so that he'll stay hooked to said story. And having a hero who actually values his own life and not the lives of others is one of the things that would surprise the reader.

?The character is also from a offsite RP I have created if it interests you in any bit.

I'm never automatic-writing for a prompt again, unless I find some way to keep my improv on track. That became a worldbuild rather than a story's ending. It was nearly inscrutable without a good 20 minutes trying to piece it together into a sense-making plot.

I feel the same about mine. More of a plot summary than a final page, I feel.

My new prompt is more of a joke than a story :(

Congrats Sent and Iavatus!

And good job to the rest of you ;)

Not sure how I feel about mine.

On the one hand, I feel like I did a good job with the story and writing.

On the other, I feel like I've skewed the "Serious : Funny" Ratio from a 2:1 to a 4:1.

Yeah... I'm going to stay out of this prompt, I'm not that good at combining funny things and tragedies as for the second prompt I have a general idea, but I'm not sure how I'm going to put in a post. So yeah, sorry, but staying out of these two Prompts. Don't forget to tag me for the next Prompts though.

In the first prompt I wouldn't really have a problem if it would tell me to make either a tragedy or a funny situation separate from one another, but I really have no idea how to combine the two...

It's quite a nice story and I enjoyed reading it, but I would make the sexual parts more ambiguous or the posts might get deleted. I also hope that you don't mind me saying this, but I fail to see the either of the two from the first prompt, but I assume(I'm not sure) that the ending is supposed to highlight that it was tragedy that became funny in hindsight(but I could be wrong). The second prompt was well done, congratulations on it!

Don't feel bad, as a short story it was a great one(better than a lot of things I came up with anyway :P).

Hey, mine is probably the most cliche out of all of them. Don't feel bad. even though that means i suck at writing

Just woke up, and I'm a little confused both as to why people (Mason) are still posting non-story comments in the other thread (seriously let's shoot Mason), and why people are grabbing spots with 'WIPs'. Is space suddenly at a premium over there?

Theres only been like 2 for today. (Me and Malk, I believe?) (WIP's i mean)

Thats like 2 more then needed, ha ha. Esp if your WIP is a paragraph long. Like, if it was any longer, then maybe you could explain it as needing vritiquing or help as to where it should go now. But it gives us nothing.

Think @Steve24833 just threw down the gauntlet.

That was pretty great. I love it when people manage to turn these into complete short stories. Love to see if anyone manages to top it.

I agree.

That story was fucking savage, man. Amazing job, Steve.

Well, happy endings(in my opinion at least) are too predictable. If it has a sad or twisted ending the it'll that more impactful towards the reader.

Thank you, Mizal, quiller and Tim. I'm glad you appreciated the puns threw in.

I posted one! Please critique! I'll try to get one for the other prompt done...

My only qualm was that I didn't really know how or why she was so great at deduction, or where she got these skills from. There was no way of verifying these facts other than hearsay. For all I knew, she could have been completely insane and got him to falsely admit to killing her brother just to save his eyes, and that seems more likely than not, judging by the fact that he's suddenly tied up over a canyon. Somehow I feel more inclined to believe the guy tied up in the chair about to get his ass murdered than the girl with a sharp object and a symbolic recorded message that she listens to over and over again...

A double post 23 minutes apart.

This is what happens when you click "Open link in new tab" on the post message button, and then forget that you posted it when you see the editor open.

My story is real *******************************.

Have fun guessing what word it is XD

I tried to make something that was tragic funny with time, and then make something funny tragic with time/fridge horror.

Did that work, or was it a bit too undercooked?

I enjoyed it, ha ha

I liked it.

My headcanon is that the two Davids are the same one, and Sigmund was the guy breaking into his house.

or is that actually canon

That's the actual story I was going for. I probably should've made that more clear in the prompt transition, but I'm going to blame you so I look smart.

It's ok, man. I'll take the bullet on this one.

The only issue I had was yours was that it didn't really sound too much like two elderly men talking to each other in a nursing home, calling each other 'bro' and so on.

My initial idea was that they were old people from our time, but then I swapped out that idea for modern octogenarians because I didn't feel like the sci-fi details were necessary, and it was more difficult to remember that they were, in fact, old dudes. So I guess Sigmund and Dave have just spent a lot of time on the internet when they didn't have much else to do.

When are you drawing the cards or whatever you use?

I bet you'll choose Sent for personal?

Damn't Sent! I just ruined your chance. Sorry.

I wish I will be chosen :P

I am of need for a background pic for my secret, hidden game. 

Tired and not feeling well, but dammit, I wrote a thing now gimme my point.

Heh heh, that is what I was like about my crap.

Thanks! Yeah I was too wiped out when I got home for an attempt at putting any characters through serious emotional trauma, and that was ground everyone else had already covered anyway.

Only did prompt 2 but I'm making it canon now that the tragedy part comes in months later when crewmembers start randomly disappearing, because it turns out giant lizards are more palatable than anything they serve in their cafeteria. :P
 

Awwww! I will never be picked :(

I just made a good story! Hope you like the plot twist ;)

@iavatus

Here's your prize! Hope it turned out somewhat like what you imagined!

Sorry for the questionable horse-drawing skills. I tried. ^_^;;

Questionable? That was so good, I wet my pants. XD

That was excellent my friend!

ahahaha! Thats awesome!

Gonna print it off and frame it. Not even kidding. We both squeed, loudly and proudly, when we saw it.

Especially the pretty star sparkles. And the unichorse is great too. Horses are hard, but you got it.

Thanks again!

oh my god

I can't get over this. That is the cutest freaking thing.

Godamn I cant write this for the life of me. Been sitting hear for a few hours unable to even write the first paragraph. XD

Voila! Not my best work, but I thought it was kind of neat. 

Holy hell steve how do you crank these out. 

Thank you, Aman.

This one was as amazing as the last one, if not even better, good job! Especially with that nice twist ending!

I'm not sure what happened there.

I really, really like writing about superheroes, apparently.

Actually I'm kind of annoyed at myself now because I've been writing all these words, but not for the thing I'm supposed to be writing, and meanwhile there are all these new stories piling up on the main page I've barely looked at. 

the_quiller, what are you doing to me man

Congrats for your 1,000th point quill!

We're all part of the Quiller hivemind now, paid in praise and pictures. It's a good deal.

I think what just happened there was you absolutely destroying everything this round. Amazing work Mizal.

Thanks! :)

I was pretty happy with this one, actually, but it was just so long. I was just sitting there looking at it like, 'I'm not really going to dump this entire thing in the thread like this, am I?'

....but then I went in and a lot of the others were pretty long too so then I felt better. Can you imagine if we all wrote this much every week?

I'm even kind of tempted to tack on some choices and stick this one on the main page. Doesn't help that I have the character's whole backstory and relationship with the shady SHIELD wannabes in my head now. Might have to expand this one some day.

@iavatus

wtf

Your mind is a strange place. (I am very okay with this :3 )

I thought of the word confrontation, and was reminded of a quote about villains behaving uncharacteristically.

"The twinkies are in aisle 4" Voldemort pointed out helpfully.

And a 'modern' confrontation, is generally small - a car spot, cutting in line, etc.

I know you did it as a joke, but is there a trope (and I'm sure there must be, everything has a trope) for when enemies in a comic book or TV show or some other kind of series have these random accidental encounters or cameos and they're both just like 'whoops, hey not in the mood today' 

Here's some more prize artwork:

@mattstat716 's request for fan art of a blaze mob from Minecraft (colored because I can't shade fire for the life of me):

And @ISentinelPenguinI 's request for an interpretation of Sir Ricard and his tentacle steed. This is going to be that one drawing I come across years later and wonder 'What was I smoking when I drew this???'

Wow. Just, wow. That's also excellent. I don't even wanna know how a squid bridle would work.

Done it again, you scribbler of pictures!

"The Quiller 2016" This should go in a museum XD

I wonder, how did you come up with that name? And also, I don't think I can respond for a while because I am suffering eye damage at the moment. Probably should be normal by tomorrow lol.

I want to just sort of... set that squidmount down, in random forums, with no explanation.

@iavatus

That was some of the funniest shit I've ever read.

Pick more than one and just resign yourself to doing absolutely nothing but drawing from now on. :P

I've really been enjoying this though, I just wish I could keep up this kind of word count as a regular thing. I basically only work on my own stuff first thing in the morning, by the time I get in from work my brain needs a rest, but I'm proving to myself now that I can, with a little motivation.

I keep wanting to expand these and turn them into full stories now too. It's going to be a bad bad temptation when I'm trying to focus on my actual WIP...

*bops you with newspaper* Bad Mizal, don't suggest that. Quiller has stories to finish...!

I don't think I did very well, but I wasn't sure I'd actually get around this this today, soo... *shrug* success, I suppose. Hope you enjoy it.

If that's your not "very well", I fear what you can do at your best. 

:P Depends, we'll see how Devil's Chess and Temple of Fate end up--though, I'm probably not going to do any more prompts. It was fun, though. 

(Haha... truth be told, it bothers me, too. Layne, Nikki, Darren/Selene, and Gabe/Hannah are all technically viable options if you look at the two games as a whole, but here's what got me to reconcile this: Nikki and Darren / Selene were never supposed to meet Fate in the first place. TOW, as I've said before, is not a canon event. It's a spin-off, a tragic timeline that only happens if Gabe/Han or Layne fail in the first game. I couldn't even tell you if the love interests of TOW would ever exist otherwise, or what kind of people they'd be in the normal timeline. And if Vidia is stopped, why would Fate become Jace / Kyra at all? Maybe Melissa is the last of her kind, and... maybe she should be. If that's the case, we're back to two main characters, and in that event, I'd probably pick Layne due to the third romanceable character of GOLAD. Sooo... there ya go. Problem solved. xD No Nikki. ... >_> I'm not sure I actually made anything better.)

No, no you did not. ;_;

Although my main problem is that I pretty much want every single possible pairing within the trio of Layne, Melissa, and Gabriel/Hannah to live happily ever after with each other...but I also want Nikki from TOW to have a happy ending. But then, in canon reality, Nikki never even meets Kyra/Jace because they never existed (and, in fact, would have died a thousand years before Nikki was even born, IF Nikki was even born at all...owww, my heart), but the alternative if TOW happens is that Layne watches Kyra/Jace die, then murder-suicides Gabriel to save Aria. No. Nonononono. None of these are okay, dammit.

How do we write so much? It's simple: caffeine.

To be fair, you also draw like a boss. I'm fairly sure most of us are one-trick ponies. It also doesn't hurt that in this case we get a prize while most of the time when we write the prize is just whatever you wrote. To be perfectly honest, I'm lucky if a write two pages most weeks:)

I am still in the drafting stage of my story. I am currently reading articles and Stephen King's suggestions to try and make the horror in my game.

Haha! got mine done with an hour to spare! Didn't know if I could turn one in today.

@the_quiller

How many "days" will there be?

I better come up with a good story. Mine are pretty bad so far.

Hmm.....okay. But I do need to step up on my game. And if not art, I mean, my writing skills are pretty below average compared to other CYS members. I will try a new attempt.........

Wait, so I won the lottery pick? Nice. But, I get to request a drawing?

Oh, heh. Sorry about that, my ZagHero account was being problematic. But thanks to the Mods, it's all good now. Hmm. What to request... How about a buff looking and heroic version of my pencil-wielding avatar? Thanks buddy.

Yeah, just keep him pale and heroic. :)

Edit: Or maybe a cape? That would be nice.

Hey Quill, so only the final lot will have color?

I like the sketchy and cartoony feel.

But quill, then what is the point of doing these prompts if the best is at the end? We would just spoil our chance at something better, right?

Oh, so you are saying the prompts we write help the end one? Oh, that makes a lot more sense. So basically the ones we are winning now is just for "lot and likes"?

Yay!

Ahhh, that is insanely good.

Right now I'm excited enough just about my sketch. :D I'll need to think over what I want a little longer, I'll probably request a one I can use for cover art for a story I'm working on, just need to figure out which.  

Okay i won't be participating for a while because of schoolwork. Probably be able to again in like 3 days.

I won't be participating till after spring break due to my family going on a vacation. (I also can't see the image till I get home, so gimme a sec quiller)

@Steve24833

I thought it was going to be another 'assassinate Hitler' time travel cliche, and then I thought he was going to wind up back home but in the past and wind up being the skeleton he found, but what actually happened, that was fucked up. :D

You might want to give it a quick proofread though, looked like you might have typed it up in a hurry. For instance in the last sentence, Alan is referred to as John.

I love it.

This is the best Hitler story ever.

Meh. Sorry, feelin' lazy.

Well, it made me chuckle a fair bit. It was really funny.

Thanks. I guess I shouldn't be so down on it, it's starting to grow on me a little. I'd planned more of an actiony story about getting recruited by time cops, but it was getting too complicated so I just came home and sat down and wrote this one instead.
 

Aw, okay.

Darn, I think iavatus was trying to hustle and get something out since he had the extra time with the delay.

My theoretical possibility at getting a lottery pic, noooo....

The moral of the story?

Don't litter.

It could save your life.

What!? Why aren't we doing the lot?

Not enough entries, m8.

1v1 m3 for FaZe Clan Leadership m8.

I choose to believe that means I won every one I entered in, and you're just being nice and giving pity sketches to others.

But seriously, there's been some amazing works done, and hopefully everyone is getting a lot out of it, by having these 'deadlines' thingies that I keep hearing of.

So, question on the new prompt: is it enough if the character just realized that their lives and events thereof are being manipulated or controlled by a higher being and that they have no real agency, or do I literally have to make them (at least moderately) aware that they aren't real?

Any thoughts on the end result?

@the_quiller

.... >///> I didn't think to check it because I expected to not get picked.

Augh, three prompts. This is going to be rough. But I'm getting those extra points one way or another, dang it...
 

@the_quiller

Does it give you three lots for two prompts as usual? What does three prompts give you? I am assuming three as well.

It's explained in the same post he gives the prompts in.

Wow this prompt is crazy ha ha. 

Yeah, these were freakin brutal.

The hardest for me to figure out how to work in was the one for being aware they're in a story. Seems like others are having difficulties with the 'Tomato in the Mirror' bit though, or maybe just not a very clear understanding of it. Unless it can be used in a much vaguer way than I thought.

Please don't read my shit. Lol.

Alright, I feel sick for writing a yu-gi-oh fan fic, but fine. Damn you Quillier! And your art contest!

Quill, you gonna answer my question?

Does it give you three lots for two prompts as usual? What does three prompts give you? I am assuming three as well.

So how many lots did we get for three? Sorry, I'm a little fazed right now.

No problem.

Just in case I wasn't clear enough in the post:

**Writing just one prompt - 1 point
**Writing two separate prompts, or writing two prompts combined into one entry - 3 points
**Writing three separate prompts, or combining two prompts into one entry and writing the third prompt separately - 5 points
**Writing all three prompts combined into a single entry - 10 points

Ah, thanks Quill. Just to make sure, I got "10 points"?

But isn't tomato the one where everyone is acting all weird? I'm confused.

Oh, okay. I'm really confused at the moment. Probably sleep loss.

Okay, I think I made it stick to the tomato thingy.

Yes, Batman realizing that he's been the villain all along would technically count as a tomato in the mirror moment.

I'm giving you the points on technicality in the name of being fair, although, in the future, please try to minimize using asterisks (like this: *actions*) to tell a story. I'm not bothered at all by the different levels of writing ability everyone has, but I am bothered when there's a clear disparity in the amount of effort people put into these prompts. Participation is optional for a reason, and if you're really not in the mood to write, then please don't submit something just for the sake of increasing your lottery points.

I'm saying this only because I know you can write better than that. The art is just bonus motivation and a personal thank you to everyone for their time and effort, and the lottery system is my way of being impartial as to who gets the final prize (since, as much as I'd love to draw something for everyone who participated, attempting to do so would probably kill me); the real point of these prompts is the exercise your writing ability.

Sorry, I have run out of ideas and I tried to make something creative. Sorry.

Okay. I probably should've put more thought into it. 

Don't give me 10 points then. Only 3.

Really? The only problems you had were the asterisks?

Okay I changed it.

Sorry.

Only 5 people have wrote this time.

He didn't say anything about your creativity, I think the point was the whole thing was written more like a post for a low effort forum RP (*turns off the camera* and so on) than any kind of attempt at a story. And you do know the difference, your other pieces were legit attempts.

e: which he's already clarified above. Missed that one, whoops.

Translation: *smashes the computer, throws things, takes three Valiums and has a little lie down, comes back and types a very nice and polite trademark quiller post*

I'm sure there's plenty of other examples in fiction, but there's a scene in John Dies at the End that personifies that trope for me.

... @Aman

I wasn't aware you were a Yu-Gi-Oh fan. (Or was I? Hm.)

Yugioh was the shit back in the day, ha ha. Had ALL the cards.

I never got what that was.

I still have mine somewhere...

*Checks boxes in corner*

EDIT: Found them! I remember this fucking card: I summon Victory Draaaaagooon!

Yes you did.

Hey, Pokemon bridges the age gap. And I can admit I still like Yu-Gi-Oh. There are a lot of good memories I associate with that series... (and YGO:TAS was the best abridged anything ever.)

The cool kids true nerds played M:tG, sorry.

I have a set of those.

"Back in the day" ... xD *still kind of a fan*

@iavatus

....there are no words. (except a polite request to bring enough drugs for everybody, next time)

Nice seeing the continuing adventures of Steve. :D 

....I'm sure he'll get better.

There's only enough drugs in the world to channel Steve for a limited time.

Beast mode! Or as the fat man says, Feast Mode!

@the_quiller

'And a flea flees, donating a brightly coloured sewing tomato to the mirrored sunglasses as a final confusion.'

Give this man ten points. :P

Hehe, iavatus is a very funny writer =D

I'm high on life. Or maybe coffee. Coffee is the good shit.

Steve's a fun char to write for. Bloody difficult, but just turn things a bit sideways, use a lot of alliteration and other obvious literary tricks and have him bounce around doing stuff. Needs a few revisions before I'll be happier with it, but I'm always happy to take him out for a drive.

And cheers, that was just a cheap joke that got thrown in last minute. But hey, fits the letter of the trope, if not the meaning.

So we are not doing the lots?

So, tomorrow it all ends, huh? So sad, Sally the Cow never got her cheese.......

God, we need a ninth person D=

yew caaain't take the skyyye from mheeeee

God Iavatus, how are you so funny and good with codes?

Oh, these are nice ones.

I was expecting something truly impossible, after today's. :P

My story will be about the notorious Teletubbies dangerously messing with the Barney gang in a world controlled by Squidward. Yep. I am out of ideas xD

Actually, I would have the Teletubbies as space-faring plundering pirates and the Barney Gang to be a modern moffia. And yes, the spongebob shit will be comedy. Does that count as Sci-fi, Modern, and Comedy combined?

And basically it is a world of villains, which is why Squidward, the Teletubbies, and Barney will be in it. Also, a cast of characters will have a guest appearance, such as General Zod, Curious George, Ronald McDonald, Evil Star Trek, and others!?

Does that count as a world where villains win? Cause that will be the intro, the villains win and the world is now a dirty, dirty place called New Earth.

Ahaha! That'd be perfect.

"Yarrr, first mate Tinky Winky, launch grapples and lets get this pinata open"

I'm sure you can come up with something funnier though. At least I found a funny idea xD

Monday:  Prompt 1: Write an autobiographical piece, as told by a 14th century wainwright.  Prompt 2: Write a scene in which your character expounds on the benefits of flossing twice a day, in iambic pentameter. Prompt 3: Do not use the letter E.

Please no. Why did you give him ideas?

And so in passion do I loudly cry:

"Was living naught but flossing day and night?

Bright mouths cry words that sigh all wrongs to right!"

What is with Quillers these days! My aunt owns one, and she says he is being more naggy then usual. I think it's Quiller Mating Season or something. Then again, their water bowl is replaced by a coffee bowl and the only thing they have to entertain themselves is a pencil and paper.

It may be, or it may be a different Quiller. They are getting more common these days.

Quill, it will be chosen at what time? I suppose 11:10? I'm not really keeping track.

And here's another sketch request completed, for @ZagHero , who asked for buff and heroic version of his avatar sketched in a sketchy and cartoony way:

Haha! Lol! It's somewhat majestic.

Oh, nice! It's different than I imagined it.

Oh no, it's cool. I thought of something more.. dramatic.

Y'know what, you did really good! Just noticed how you copied the stance of the dude. :P

Haha! Thanks though.

The slenderman as a romantic comedy? ... Somebody make this a thing. I want it to be a thing.

In case anyone needs inspiration whoops, my hand slipped and this abomination came into being:

I ship it.

xD Who's the lady? (0.o Did I just accidentally use my sketch request? ;_; Nuuuuu....! Though it is adorable.)

O.o The girl from the ring and Slenderman. xD I like it. 

... And that gives me an idea. 

Noice. Just needs a laugh track now.

Sketch of the character Eidolon for @mizal , with fancy lettering as requested. Thanks for sending me very well-written character description, and let me know if there are any details I overlooked or got wrong.

That's beautiful...

Haha... noted. :D How good are you with wings?

Oh, feathery. Considering its me asking... any guesses as to what I might request that would involve wings? :3

Yes, please. :D

@the_quiller - Hey, just a reminder in case you forgot. Sorry if you're busy.

Eeeeeeeee!  

It's perfect! You just made my morning. :D

I'm...just gonna sit over here squeeing awhile, and be even more insanely jealous of your talent.

Great job Quill!

Man, @BerkaZerka could destroy this round of he wrote a cowboy bebop story where the villains win. Just sayin'

*looks at iavatus's story, looks at WIP on screen, tearfully rage-deletes*

I didn't want any more stupid art anyway. :[

Don't judge him. That's how you got your drawing ability.

Haha, nah I'm still working on it. Just need a few more minutes.

Quill, when are you drawing the lots?

Awesome, glad bilbo managed to get one in too!

Mine's up, finally. Sorry for the delays, seems to be a difficult day for keeping my butt in a chair in front of the computer.

Sorry for the quality. I've been traveling the past two days. I should be able to invest some actual effort into tomorrow's prompt.

I don't think I have been able to keep up either.

I always enjoy your writing, bilbo, and just glad you came through at the last there so that the_quiller gets to do twice as much work now. :D

Mason, yours was a big improvement over yesterday's, I could tell you spent some time on it.

Ah, here comes the final lot. *Crosses fingers*

Congrats on winning a sketch, bilbo. :D

And Tim! (He will get the reference)

Fuck.

I was looking over my second prompt, and I found some mistakes:

"Suddenly, out of nowhere, a fucking BLACK HOLE came Out of nowhere"

Damn it.

No one blames you. We all make mistakes. Good to know you care for grammar and punctuation, though.

I also made a pun, subconsciously:

"He tried holding on to a dead tree, but it was a Fruitless endeavor"

*buh dum tssss*

Almost as bad as the puns in my first game.

Ah, Quill, you are having fun aren't you? What if I manage all of them, put into three stories? That would be one crappy post xD

I'm probably going for at least five.

I mean prompt. Or is that a joke? Quiller, you have me confused XD

I can see how to write a story with eight, maybe nine. But I can't see how to write it in under 3000 words, and anything bigger in a forum post would just be obnoxious...

*Sees post >_>*

*Is already planning to do all 13*

*Currently eating midnight breakfast*

*Table flip*

('?')

I already know that i could combine three of them into the story really easily.

(0?0)

I already have mine. I just need to write it.

;D

@the_quiller

You evil, evil bastard.

How long were you planning this? :P

From the start, of course.

*Slow clap*

I see this.

I've already thought of the outline for all of them.

Well, I couldn't mix them all in and I know someone will surpass me and I know that I probably won't even win(probably thanks to some grammar errors I missed) but honestly, I'm proud of this little piece of fiction that I have just created.

Let's see if I can squeeze this in...(haven't had time for all the other prompts. That, or I forgot about it since I also forgot to ask to be included in the tag list. >_> ) 

I'm gonna attempt to include all the prompts. Already got 3 of them down. 

(...this is possibly going to turn out to be a hidious mess.)

For this prompt:

Prompt #12: What if the heroes failed, and the villain succeeded? Write what would happen following a villainous victory, to either the characters or to the world around them.

What if there's three parties? 1 hero, 2 villain. Hero is dispatched quickly, so it's villain vs villain. Does it matter which side wins then, since the hero fails and one of the two villain parties succeed? Or is this strictly a 2-party prompt, 1 hero and 1 villain?

Quiller, you are in my story xD

'cause you kidnapped adopted Bob from VegiTales and did hideous experiments to give him arms/legs?

I like that idea.

Even better.

You kidnapped both of them, then got a case of the midnight munchies about the time Larry mysteriously disappeared?

There goes my childhood. No, it died years ago, my bad.

Sorry, just I thought it was a good, funny change. Will consult you in the future.

So. That happened. All 13 prompts. It was awful. Why did you make me do that? xD

WHAT THE FUCKING FUCK FUCK!!!!!

I....I surrender oh m-mighty Kiel, d-do what ever y-you want with m-my money and house. T-take it great one. I s-surrender, l-lord.

Who, me? *innocently bats eyelashes* I never said you had to use all thirteen! That was entirely your own choice, right?

I may have suspected that certain people would probably half kill themselves because of their obsessive perfectionist tendencies, but you can't prove anything!

That being said, I read your entry with slack-jawed awe, both at how creative and coherent the final result was! Fantastic job, man.

HAHAHAHAHA! But, don't get me wrong Quiller said a special prize for those who did all 13, eh? What is that special prize, huh? Eh, Quilly quilly quilly? Oh, don't run away ol' pal. LETS PLAY HAYAYAYAHAYAYahahahagaHAHAHhahahahahahaahahahahah,

Did you like my crazy fit :)

xD I'm surprised it was coherent, since I started planning it as soon as I woke up, and I barely remembered how to spell my own damn name at the time... (I know because I had to make a phone call minutes later and struggled with it, lol.) I'm glad you liked it, either way.

Oh, yes I can. You know me too well not to realize I'd be one of those people... :P

Your stories aren't bad, they are above average. Just saying.

Well, it's a true fact. And you get bonus, because you are a writer.

Basically I said that if you are striped of your ability as a writer you would be crap. Just kidding lol.

xD It was most definitely not awesome, but thank you for thinking so, and doubly so for saying it.

I deeed eeet

Is it gud

Depends, m8. 

I tagged you for a new RPG if you want to play......?

I'll play if there's more people. I like post, beeteedubs.

Thanks! I told you I was gonna do it!

Personally, for me, I had the outline already for each prompt.

You really did do a fantastic job, Tim. Congrats.

You as well, Kiel, for what you had to work with. I was laughing the entire time!

xD Yay! That was the intent. I couldn't think of a plot I'd take very seriously, so I figured I'd just enjoy myself.

To be honest, you had me at "dastardly bath". XD

What about, Dastard!

Dun Dun Tis!

Because not everything can be pure evil--but most things! xD

(It may have helped that it was proceeded by something as silly as my horror/romance.)

The fourth wall breaking was even better, for me. The cheat codes and commentary were too much for me to handle!

I like to imagine that the Masked Dark Lord person was actually a parallel for Kylo Ren.

Well there's no way I'm finishing this, and what I have is too much to just throw into a thread.

I guess I can make a temporary storygame just so I can split it up over a few pages and post the link?

Just post it in the thread, mizal! It can't be THAT long... right?

Yeah, I think that will work.

Um! *Raises hand*.  Can I somehow steal all of their points? No?, okay fine.

It's a little over 4500 words, so I did the merciful thing and linked it.

And now iavatus apparently did something amazing again so I better go check it out.

@iavatus

And then fucking Iavatus walks in, smug grin on his face and the writers sobbing in doubt. He just twirls his pencil, blows it out like a western six gun, then slides it into his pocket like some western cowboy. Quiller, experiencing terrible surgery to stop his jaw from falling to the floor, just puts his head in his hands. Iavatus made a fucking prompt again.

And it was fucking good.

He's not even done! Look at him go!

My God, he is a super mutant!

#Fallout reference

Cheers, fellas. It was a lot of fun writing it, trying to get a good mix of suspense and horror. Admittedly, writing the penultimate scene first to show the outcome, and the realisation meant the horror started at high octane (hopefully), and could just work the suspense and write the path to it, instead of spending a lot of time building up the slow creeping horror.

Inspiration drawn from Saya no Uta - of a man seeing the world through fucked up glasses.

@iavatus

You did it again. Holy crap. I am in awe.

This kind of horror should become your new thing. :3

@iavatus - prompt example list, plz? (I don't know if Quills cares, but my fried brain wants to see how you did it.)

@mizal @iavatus

Ten

Thanks :D

I can't take any credit though, my phone was the one that made this possible with its heroic sacrifice, dying so that I could write with no internet access or calls or texts distracting me.

ty, ty. Thought the measuring system was out of 8 for everythign here, but happy to break the scale :D

@bilbo

Damn, another impressive one! I can't remember if I've mentioned it, but I've loved all of yours so far, and this last one is the best yet.

Thanks! I've like your style as well though I haven't read your one for this yet (I'm actually still editing mine, I just wanted to make sure it got in in time). I look forward to all three thousand words though:)

4500 words :)

Just a fair warning it's probably a little rough, I didn't really have time to proofread and I'm not sure I can bring myself to now, been staring at text on a screen for far too long and my eyes aren't very happy right now.

I'll definitely be cleaning it up and working to finish the second half over the week, figure if I've already done this much I might as well.

Still can't believe you managed all the prompts, wow.

Seeing all these fantastic short stories makes me wish the site had a section for linear stories too...

I liked what was written! I feel like you really know the characters and like the story has a definite direction!

Aye, everyone, every single person who did something for this, or any of these previous prompts, deserves a pat on the back. Short time limit, interesting prompts, and there's been some glorious words words words written.

Cool~ looking forward to seeing the results.

It was fun. :D Thanks for hosting it, Quills.

We love you, too. ^_^

^This.

Thanks, Quiller. I had fun as well.

<3

Yeah! Woo! It was good getting to know you Quill, this was a quilly experience. It is a good start for new potential of writers.

This was lots of fun and got all of us writing. I hadn't heard most of the participants' writing before. Thank you for hosting this, Quiller! 

Now you know how crappy my writing is! Yay!

Yes, thanks a ton Quiller. I was amazed at the amount and quality of the responses. And no idea what magic you worked here, but I can't remember the last time I was able to just bulldoze on past my writer's block like that.

I'm going to try to keep a semi-respectable word count going even now that it's over, though I admit it will be strange not having to spend every moment of free time feverishly typing...

@bilbo

Dude.

That was fucking depressing, man.

Tenouttaten.

You have some grammer and spelling mistakes, but other than that, great job.

Eyyyyyy @mizal hi 5

0-0/

Come on, don't leave the poor guy hanging!

Ah, another victim of the saddening "no-return high five". So sad. Let us give him a moment of our time. *National Anthem of super crappy <insert enemy nation here>*

My arm's starting to get tired.

Hard to type with one hand.

Um......but don't you always use one hand? *Points to Gatling arm.*

Well, at least you have hands.

Yessss, vindication for all those hours of words words words

when in doubt, just type everyone into submission

I'd return the hi5 but but fingers are frozen into the typing position now.

Still waiting.

Starting to look like I'm a Nazi.

Pls.

9-9/

Well we can't have that.

o-o/

hi5 for being awesome

*Clapping sound of a virtual high five*

Yeeeah!

But seriously, your entries were AMAZING!

Damn't! Well......good job guys.......yay. Well, that was very well-written stuff. That's all I have to say.

But then again I have lost every lot I participate in. Wow, I know right xD

At least I helped my writer's block :[

Thanks again everyone for making this contest so much fun! Since this one went so well, I'd love to do something like this again soon, as long as my real life schedule allows. Although, I'll have to finish all the artwork I owe people now, so excuse me while I handcuff myself to my art tablet for about a week! XD

Can I have sugar with that tea?

Thanks for having us, Quiller! It was really fun and I hope we can do this again!

OH SHIT I FORGOT I WON ART.

You did. So did @Steve24833 , who hasn't sent me a request yet!

@the_quiller

You did the lottery pick, but what about picking a favorite for the day?

You just thought you were free. We'll wring more art out of you yet...

Oh yeah.

Would you kindly?

Haha, this is payback for dumping all 13 prompts on you for the last day, isn't it?

Yes. Yes it is. They were pure evil the first time around, and doubled down (or has that been adopted as only applying to Trumpy-ness?) the second time around.

If you do choose a personal vote, I nominate @iavatus, @bilbo, @mizal, and @Kiel_Farren for The Ice Bucket Challenge consideration. They all did wonderful, not only on the last day, but throughout the week as well.

or mason for a pity vote, if that's your style.

Ah well, I didn't win any art, but I did sort off get past my writer's block with these things and got a few ideas for my storygames, honestly, contests like these should be held more often, even if there isn't a prize(like this).

Well, I'll improve my writing and win this the next time quiller wants to challenge us like this. Cheers to the winners!

I saw your art and it's amazing(compared to anything I could draw), but not good enough for what drawing I have in mind, only quiller would be able to draw the character I have envisioned in my head...

Congrats Mizal and Tim for doing literally everything! You guys are crazy! Congrats to breezy for the ultimate raffle win though!

Thanks, Aman!

This whole contest was really fun!

For everyone waiting on art that I still owe ( @Aman , @Tim36D , @Kiel_Farren , @bilbo , @breezy134 ) I promise I'm working on them! I'm also working on them all at the same time, so expect a huge art post soon!

And @Steve24833 , if you already sent in your sketch request, I must have accidentally missed it. If you would still like one, would you mind resending that request?

Awesome! :D

I expected nothing less! Hope they get done soon! :D

Oh shit I havent actually sent you anything yet ha ha. 

Don't worry, I sent it in after I wrote it

XD its an amazing btw

Ty :)

Just sad it can't be full colour (Quillster reciprocates these feelings)

One day Quillier will do another comp and we'll force him to color it up ha ha

Sorry that the artwork is taking so long! Real life is curbstomping me right now, hah...ha. Anyway, here's what I have done so far, and the other's are nearly done (except breezy's, which still needs to be colored, asdfghjkl)

Please accept the slightly neater quality as my apology for the delay

@Tim36D , the selfie of our avatars you requested:

And @Aman , the ridiculously epic and elaborate scene you sent me, which I got a teeny tiny bit carried away with (let me know if you want a larger version).

Hope they're close to what you imagined, I'll be back with the other pics as soon as I get done with them!

OMG Quill, that is beatiful!

Oh dear. That is about the most elaborate and ornate selfie stick that exists.

Nicely drawn, as always!

Haha! I really like Tim's reqested picture.

Yeah, it's awesome. The other scene is pretty epic as well.

Wow, fantastic work quiller! You put a ton of detail into these.

Aman, I gotta know the story on that scene.

I am also curious. I think it's one of my favorite things Quills has drawn thus far.

I feel you there...

Of course ha ha. 

I'd post it myself, but posting giant blocks of text with a phone farks everything up

*chuckle* Interesting. Reminds me of some of the things I've written in the past, particularly a fanfic character... this sounds like it would make a good foundation for a storygame.

I believe many role-playing sessions would be great for storygames.

Eew no ha ha. Most rps are definitely not fit for literary conversion. Sometimes maybe you'd find a character who's extremely interesting so you could write a short story about, but most (if not all) rps are very much cliched nonsense. 

Sure, but that's why I said foundation. I've gotten a lot of ideas via screwing around with silly, informal RPs. I haven't really sifted through your RP on BHB (or any I haven't tried to participate in, to be honest) but these characters do sound like they could be part of a compelling narrative.

It helps that VTM is generally built around telling a compelling story, and I could (and have, mentally), written such stories and keep them in mind when I GM the game so that I can try and steer the players towards the desired outcome (and it usually works out).

It helps when you've got an awesome crew too. Seth, Berka, Aman, D and Forge have all been amazing.

Fair enough.

Mmhm, nothing can replace a good RP partner. You can have the best plot in the world, but if the other person isn't or can't make a good effort, it'll still turn out to be garbage.

An VTM game run by Drak with nearly all of the best writer RPers?

...I would like to announce that all further artwork will be delayed indefinitely until I'm done binge reading those RP logs over on BHB

I'm kidding. About the delay. Not about the binge reading.

Amazing!

Holy shit sweet. That is awesome. Thanks so much quillier, ha ha. Now I gotta go show it off to everyone on bhb ha ha. 

I say it's better when you make up the details. 

XD please, as if any of my posts are detailed. But yeah, duh. XD Not a finished RP, (we haven't even gone through our first century), but we've been going strong for the past year and a half. How else would Drak and I have such a detailed character we'd both be fangirling about, ha ha. 

... And now I've pictured you and Drak fangirling. This has been an odd day. 

Yes it has.

Wow that's beautiful quiller :o

It's... amazing. It's even better than I imagined!

I will cherish this always. Thank you, Quiller.

You sure you don't want to change your mind on that?  It is a very cool avatar.

For some reason, (probably because we can't see each other under the cloak of the internet) I pretty much base your personalities in your avatar.

I imagine as Quiller as some very nice gentlemen, Tim as some cod fan, and Kiel as some clever Mage who beats up people.

COD? Really, Mason? Just because I speak write with an accent, I automatically love the Call of Duty franchise? I feel offended.

You should be.

I know, right? Look at this CLOWN!

No offense, man.

None taken.

Stay out kiddos

*flex* Damn right, I do. ;)

Enjoy your rest. ^^

(Nice trolli--wait, that link actually... goes somewhere...?)

... You actually made me blush. Congratulations, I didn't think anyone on here could manage that anymore. 

Nooo... no regrets. :P But yeah, initially, it just took me to your test game page, so I thought you were purely joking. When I clicked  it again to actually play your game... xD well. (You're welcome, @Ford )

Too late. I saved it.

:3 Just kidding ... or am I? :P 

Damn it, Kiel, I was getting ready to blackmail him for more art.