Zombie in house: 3:00

You almost sleep. Guy near you shout straight to you face "Dont sleep!!!"
And that’s a dead end page. Am I being too generous giving this linear garbage a 2?

In the words of Marlin the Clownfish:

"You know, you're really cute! But I don't know what you're saying!"

Oh boy... You apologized for your English at the start, I know, but at least learn some basic grammar before making a storygame. Other than the English, though, the characters barely had a personality, and there was one paragraph per page. I chose "go sleep" and there were no links, forcing the reader to go back. At least make a link that goes to the last page.

1/8 for me, sorry :(

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I see why apologize for your english.

Grammer errors almost everywhere
Short story
Practically no character development
The paragraphs were extremely short and uninteresting
Pointless Items
1/10 Would rather eat a rotten tomato

I have to give you props for putting the story up. Not many people have the guts to put up their stories, but you Sir are one of those few. This being said, I do have to say the story isn't all that good. For one thing, it jumps around from point to point without any kind of real plot. I went from having the option to sleep or talk to the guys in the car to falling into a room and being hit on the head with a falling gun. Another point which detracted any enjoyment is the grammar. I could barely understand was what going on for the 3 minutes it took to play your game.

Pretty good but grammar is bad

Please make a really long part two because I enjoyed it

It wasn't that bad although you could work on your English. I won't blame you too much on that as you are from Poland. I also think the maturity should go down, the only bad thing in there is the word "Motherfucker", it's not even gory. I think you could get higher ratings by unpublishing this and fixing it up a little.
-Icestorm

Its alright