I would love to get some more feedback on my story, "Recursion Theory". However, I'd need a mentor that would be willing to play through the game as updates came out, as a lot of the experience comes from the coding and graphics. These updates would be large but slow (a month or two in between).
Preferably, they would be someone who likes the concept of time travel / 'Groundhog Day' type stories, and is interested in exploring through different choices to see what new results arise (completionist playstyle). They should also like the idea of reading through a well-developed plot that that, though extremely interactive, may have an overall linear direction.
Ideally, I would also like someone that likes the characterization of the protagonist, since the narration will be influenced by his perspective. He values being empathetic and a good listener. He tries his best to be patient, but sometimes he'll lose his patience and have sudden angry outbursts (which he's usually quick to apologize for). He doesn't take life too seriously, and can sometimes be mischevious. In serious situations, he can be quite introspective.
I don't really need any more feedback on chapters one and two, except general thoughts, but chapter three should be out soon. If anyone is interested and wants to read through the first one or two pages to see if my writing style is a match for them, they can find it here: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/recursion-theory- . (I've been told that my story starts off slow and picks up suspense as it goes on, so don't be alarmed if nothing dramatic seems to be happening right away. I'm planning to fix this later.)