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Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

It's a writing site for ******* sake, surely stories with plots, named characters and properly presented dialogue is not asking for much, it should be the minimum standard rather than something fan-fic writers, WC fans and the guy who likes Spiderman hope to be able to do one day :D - Will11

Having a comment featured (2 points)

Recommending a comment for featuring (1 point)
Recommending a user's excellent aid in the last six months for points (1 point)
Recommending a tag change for a storygame (1 point)
Recommending a storygame for movement to a different category (1 point)
Recommending a storygame for a change in maturity level or difficulty level (1 point for each)
Recommending a storygame for featuring (1 point)
Recommending a storygame for unpublishing (1 point)
Recommending a comment for deletion (1 poin
t)

So, in other words, if you go, right now, and find 5 storygames which are not properly tagged (there are literally dozens of these out there), then you'll get 5 points.

Catch #1:  To get points for recommending something, I have to agree with you. If you recommend a story for featuring and I don't feature it, then you don't get the points. This is to prevent people from gaming the system. Don't worry, for most of the above recommendations, you won't get rejected often if you follow proper procedure. (Except maybe on the "recommending for featuring.")

Catch #2:  Recommending a storygame for unpublishing trumps all other recommendations.  There is no point in spending our time removing comments, featuring comments, adding/removing tags, changing categories and maturity levels on a storygame that's going to be unpublished a week from now.

Recommending a comment for featuring:

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A hyperlink to the storygame
- The comment that you think deserves featuring (copy and paste it)
- The username of the person who wrote the comment (doesn't have to be the exact username, just enough so I understand who it is)
- If there are already 3 featured comments on the storygame, you also have to let me know whose comment you think should be replaced.
- If I agree, you will get 1 point and the person whose comment is featured will get 2 points. If you are reccomending your own comment, then you only get 2 points.

Note: No points are awarded for recommending/featuring comments on games that are soon to be unpublished.  It's a waste of time on a story that's going to be removed anyway.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A hyperlink to the storygame
- The comment that you think deserves deletion (copy and paste it)
- The username of the person who wrote the comment (doesn't have to be the exact username, just enough so I understand who it is)

It has to either have spammy punctuation, flame the author, be completely incomprehensible, be a duplicate comment, or not actually be a comment (such as "..." or "poop" or something).  

Note: Do not recommend comments on Endmaster, madglee, or Tanstaafl's games for deletion unless they are spammy or deformed. Basically, they like to read their flamers so don't rob them of that.  
No points are awarded for recommending comments for deletion on games that are soon to be unpublished.  It's a waste of time on a story that's being cleared out anyway.

Recommending a user's aid in the advanced editor (post must be made in the last 6 months)

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- The user who provided the aid
- A hyperlink to the post where he provided the aid

Recommending a tag change for a storygame

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A hyperlink to the storygame
- All of the tags you believe the story should have

Recommending a category change for a storygame

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A hyperlink to the storygame
- The category you believe it should be in
- A short explanation of why

Recommending a change in maturity or difficulty level for a storygame

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A hyperlink to the storygame
- The change you think should be made
- A short explanation of why

Recommending a storygame for featuring

 

Recommending a forum thread for deletion

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A hyperlink to the thread
- A short rationale for why

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A hyperlink to the storygame
- A short explanation of why [specifically, you must describe how it fails to meet minimum site standards]

    • After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, the storygame is rated 1/8
    • After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, the storygame is rated 2/8 and its length is 1/8
    • The storygame has all of the following characteristics:
      • Grammar and style poor enough that it cannot be ignored
      • A plot which is poor or nonexistent
      • Poor pacing (usually characterized by frequent and unpredictable end game links)
      • A lack of important decisions
      • Unbelievable or overly cliched dialogue (if dialogue is present in the story)
    • The storygame has "dead" pages- pages with no links or way to proceed.
    • The storygame's central concept is pornographic in nature
    • The storygame is not a storygame and is instead intended to fulfill a goal such as communicating with another member (including all inside jokes) or advertising a product.
    • The storygame is explicitly described by the author as a "troll" game, or intentionally poor quality.
    • Any unfinished story rated 4 or less which has been published for over six months.
      • What qualifies a story as "unfinished?"

        1. Specifically stating in the description/text of the game that it is a "demo."

        2. Ending abruptly with a notice that it will be continued later.

        Games that say they are the first in a series are not automatically considered "unfinished." As long as the game itself is complete, even if the author never returned to write a sequel, it is not up for unpublishing.

         

If you don't follow protocol, either there will be no negative repercussions, you will be ignored, or I'll take your advice and not reward you with points. Following protocol expedites the process for me so I don't have to spend a lot of time making changes.

To summarize: post here (for the most part) with recommendations for who I should reward / what I should change and I'll reward you with points. Take a second to check the posts above you and see if someone else has already made the recommendation.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

And I'm starting another one. From the last thread: 2 pts to Kiel, 4 pts to Will, 3 pts to James, 2 pts to Nightbird, 1 to Wolfmist.

Raven, I need a clickable link for the WC comment you want featured.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Here you go.

I'm doing this on my phone anyway. The comment is pretty good in my opinion.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Okay, done.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Heh, I love this thread's name. Based after the Spider-Man storygames?

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Yep. I like the thread's name too. :P

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Yep. 

Our next thread will be Draw My Attention (Kakurenbo Gaiden.) XD

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

I'm waiting for when you call one of them "Draw My Attention: The Attentioning"

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Again, this is the new thread. If I missed your post in new beginning, please repost it here.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Why do people think it's amusing to,waste my time with troll games?

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Beat me to it, Malk.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing: Choices of Death 2.


After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, the storygame is rated 1/8. This story game has 41 ratings and has been published for 15 days

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing: Choices of Death

After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, the storygame is rated 2/8 and its length is 1/8. This story has received 39 ratings, has been published for 15 days, is rated 2/8, and has a length of 1/8. Oh, and this one's rating has now already dropped to 1.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

iggih mentioned this one, and I don't know if it was unpublished and then re-published, or if it never got unpublished:

college. After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, the storygame is rated 2/8 and its length is 1/8.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing

After the ministry interview. After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, the storygame is rated 1/8. This story has received 20 ratings, is rated 1/8, and has been published for 9 days.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing: SPIDER-MAN:Rise of carnage Part III New Goblin strikes back.

After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, the storygame is rated 1/8. This story has received 18 ratings, has been published for 7 days, and is rated 1/8.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing: SPIDER-MAN:Rise of Carnage part 1.

After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, the storygame is rated 2/8 and its length is 1/8. This story has received 33 ratings, has been published for 11 days, is rated 2/8 and has a length of 1/8.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing: Life of Corza.

The storygame has "dead" pages- pages with no links or way to proceed. The author, in the introduction, explicitly states that the story is not complete. From the author:

I'm going to be going with some friends for a few weeks and I've decided to publish what I'd consider an alpha of a story to see what you guys think so far. Keep in mind that there are a very limited amount of choices in this and you're going to run into a ton of end game links that don't have any actual wording.

The community seems to agree, as both the comments so far request that the author not publish the story until it is finished. In addition, the author has mentioned that they are going away "for a few weeks," meaning this story may languish in this state for a long, long time.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

All 7 of Ogre's recommendations unpublished.

Do let me know if you see people republishing a story that was taken down before.  Sometimes they've edited it, sometimes they haven't. 

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a Story Game for unpublishing:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/shoot~2dout-at-new-york-city~2e

It's racist towards Muslims who are depicted as murderers and muggers. Just read a page or two and you'll see what I mean

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Done.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

How come he does that? Also, Why The Hell He Keeps Writing Like This?

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Some people are too stupid to change.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Bevan re-publishes his games again. Can you please un-publish his games?

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

For some reason I find people like him REALLY irritating, either he is determined to get himself banned or he is literally too stupid to know better :( Or he's a trollish person. Either way it's depressing.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Agreed. He has been annoying to Kiel_Farren, you, and many other people. I don't know if he's too stupid or he's a troll.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
This is why I think storygames that don't meet the minimum standards should just be deleted instead of unpublished.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

It's a little more difficult. I have a one-click button to unpublish, but to delete I have to go manually and erase the pages.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
I wonder if the loss of 15 points would be a motivating factor...

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Or I could just change the stories to something more interesting. . .

Nah, too much work. XD

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Indeed, he has apparently re-published all the following games that were unpublished. I don't see any changes in them myself:

Shoot-out At New York City.

SPIDER-MAN:Rise of Carnage part 1

SPIDER-MAN:Rise of carnage Part III New Goblin strikes back.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Don't unpublish any of those! Kiel's amazing reviews brand them!

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
I think "Shootout at New York" should be unpublished, at least. Kiel didn't even attempt to redeem it with a funny review; it offended him and everybody else.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Yeah, that's understandable.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Agreed, that one should be removed, but not the Spider-Man series.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
Yeah, the Spiderman games can stay, I guess.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Unless Kiel_Farren uploads every single review he made on those games on the forums. If that happens, we can say goodbye to the games.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

It makes no sense to have the reviews but not the games. It's only funny if you have the games.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Ehh...

This could be a reason to why we should have a storygame category dedicated to the garbage storygames that has parts of the story or reviews that are too precious to take away.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
You sneaky, sneaky wolf.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Heheh....

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
The games provide the context necessary to understanding the comments.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a comment for featuring:

Okay, first off: this storygame is such a welcome relief from the huge pile of short, uninteresting games that have come out lately. It's well-written, the scripts and variables all work (as far as I could tell) and it all makes sense as one coherent package, including multiple chapters released together, instead of multiple truncated attempts at a game (which has become far too common). 
Glowing compliments aside, the one aspect you could definitely improve on for next time is the transitions. the first chapter especially seemed like each page was totally disconnected from the next. A problem was posed, I picked a solution, the results were displayed, and suddenly a totally new problem was happening. Give me a story or something to drive me through the 1st chapter; by the time the 2nd and 3rd chapters came around, the game moved forward with a clear sense of overall purpose and direction. (although it was a little slow at times). The statistics drove a decent portion of the game, but it's the characters that make it come alive--and we don't deal too much with the characters in the first chapter. Once I stated getting a feel for who everyone was, though, everything started flowing much more nicely. 
As a final compliment, your knowledge of Greek mythology is awesome. I loved all the references during the military upgrades selection (what were those Valkyries doing there, anyway?) the mythology added a little flavor to the game, and I appreciated it for that. 

All in all, a great storygame, and I'm definitely looking forward to #2!

-- MagmaArmor0 on 5/18/2015 10:43:49 PM with a score of 45

 

Link to storygame

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing: The Kinda Weird Day.

After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, the storygame is rated 1/8. This storygame has received 34 ratings, has been published for 8 days, and is rated 1/8.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Done

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Thanks for the link, and I don't feel bad at all about not being able to find this thread because just look at that title. :P

Do I need to repost those four games I mentioned needed recategorization here?  Oh, and recommending for unpublishing: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats-your-life

Based on the 'this storygame is terrible in every possible way' failure to meet minimum standards. For my explanation I present the full transcript of my entire playthrough:

Stonefang: the kit is born!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Dawnlight: thank Starclan

Daykit: what his/her name?

u: .......

Dawnlight: his/her name is *insert your kit's name*

Daykit: great name

Cloudkit: I'M TRYING TO SLEEP!!!!!!!!

     >>>u: ok *goes to sleep*

Zarkpaw: hey Daykit i heard your mom talk about the ceromony today

u: um.... Daykit come on

Daykit: y?

u: we don't need to hang with Zarkpaw and besides we need to groom ourselves

Daykit: ok *grooms self*

u: *does the same*

Treestar: *calls clan to a meeting*

Treestar: Daykit from this day until u earn your warrior name u will be own as Daypaw and your mentor will be Stonefang *turns to u* (insert kit's name) i'll let u pick the path of a medicine cat or warrior

        >>>u: I want to be a Warrior

Treeestar: ok *insert cat's name* ur mentor will be Dawnlight

u: ok

Dawnlight: follow me

       >>> *the end*

i know this is short because this is my first game and this is a cliff hanger so bye ;)

    end


Unless it's all just a joke...in which case well played Nightshade888, well played indeed.

 

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

It is so bad that I cannot take it fucking seriously. I mean, in kindergarten I knew how to fucking write better than that. And if it is a joke, then it is quite entertaining. Even then, it seems she is seriously content with her story and that it is her first one.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

I don't even think she actually tries. If she puts efforts into her storygame, it would be much better but I think it would still end up with a bad rating.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending changes of category:

All of the games below are in "School-based", yet none of them take place in a school.

Climate Change Adaptation (Move to Edutainment)

Escaping Dystopia (Move to Everything Else or Modern Adventure)

The Expedition Along The Coast of Africa (Move to Edutainment)

The Broken Plane (Move to Modern Adventure or Fantasy Adventure)

CYOA Final History Project ( move to Edutainment)

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

New story needs recategorization: Warrior Cats, Apprenticehood

It's listed as Fantasy Adventure.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a comment for deletion (Yup, I'm recommending my own comment):

Definitely one of my favorite!

-- Raven47 on 5/22/2015 12:56:18 AM with a score of 45

And this:

More free points for me! Thanks! ;)

-- Raven47 on 5/22/2015 1:54:47 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/achilles

?http://chooseyourstory.com/story/escape-the-house

 

Reason: Accidental double post, sorry. I don't know how I double posted even though I didn't click more than one time.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Bumping this in case you didn't read the edit.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Didn't see a double post on escape the house. Someone else must've cleared it.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending unpublishing: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/escape-the-house

Reasons:

you are dared to go in a haunt house by your friends

>>>do the dare

as you go in the house by the thick wooden front door as you walk in the house the door slams shut then you hear a screeching you need to get out of hear

>>>use a window

they are bored up

>>>back

>>>kick down the door

you kick at the door you cant kick the door down and the creatures hear the sound

>>>then

the creatures impaled you

End.

I know this one was just created but can...can we just put it out of its misery?

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Eat.Sleep.Kill.Repeat needs a category change from Fantasy to Modern Adventure. There's no magic at all except for the magic of stabbing.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

done and done

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
TL;DR - sorry. Can I recommend my own comment for featuring? xD

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

It was an epic comment.  It's too bad that you spent so much more time on it than the author did on the story.

Comment for Deletion

9 years ago

(Left on Eat. Kill. Sleep. Repeat.)

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/eat~2esleep~2ekill~2erepeat

Hello y'all. Ha ha I'm pretending to be southern!
-- Fiercerose123 on 5/22/2015 8:29:34 PM

Reason: This is just Fiercerose123 trying to be "witty", and contributes nothing.

Comment for Deletion

9 years ago

Done.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Recommending a storygame for deletion: doll house (purposely lowercased)

Reason: The storygame has absolutely no choices at all. The plot seems nonexistent- all I understood is that I play a cat. Based on how it is worded, I don't understand the purpose of the game. Is it a rhyme, a poem, a song? It's just a cat talking, really.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

@Bluefur You have been summoned before the jury. Explain your involvement in this mess.

Seriously though I don't want it unpublished yet, I want to see the automatic rating calculating thingy shit itself when it has to deal with this:

I mean what even is the 'standard deviation' here?

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

I was added as a co-author without notice. I feel ashamed now. I have not even touched the story, so please understand.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Seems Silverwind is trolling you and the rest of the site.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Especially me. I am suspecting her to be one of my rival/friends. They enjoy inflicting pain upon me, and also know of my addiction with this site.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Well I feel stupid now but I'd never even heard of that song. It's pretty blatant trolling with a side helping of plagiarism though so yeah, I sense this one won't stick around much longer.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Also, I did not even receive a notification informing me of this. Silverwind joined today, and I checked all my notifications in the past two days. There weren't very many, none of which even mentioned co-authoring something.

Seth, please fix this...?

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
no seth can fix - alexp fix, but time no - so say we is 'feeture'

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

3.4

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
...I may have rated it 8/8 7 of those 12 times...and with the amount of points I have it's a pretty heavy weighted rating xD but I knew it'd be deleted so w/e

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

You can't rate it more than once, for it to be counted.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
I know damn well how it works. But the number of ratings increases regardless :3

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

Yeah it says your most recent rating is the only one that counts. Unless you did it from seven different accounts or something...which seems ridiculous until one realizes that you're the man that's voluntarily read through 95% of the stories on this site and so you're clearly insane and might be capable of anything.

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago

It's encouraging to know the veteran site-users are working to help the trolls :)

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
"veteran"

Draw My Attention (Rise of Carnage)

9 years ago
*90-97% of stories - on two accounts