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Writing Exercises Restart - Week One

9 years ago

Week One - This will thread will contain a week's worth of writing exercises to be completed each day. I'm going to award W.P. (writing points~) for completed assignments, and to give myself less math this time, it's 1 W.P. per regular assignment, 5 per bonus. If I make a super bonus assignment, I will tell you what it's worth individually.

You may do as many or as few as you please. Anyone is allowed to join up at any time, but please let me know in a PM if you want to be added to our tag list because only people on the tag list will be awarded points. Also, you may leave the exercises at any time. Please tell me if you wish to be removed, though. I will not remove you unless you request it.

Our goal here: Fun, encouragement of young and old writers, and self-improvement. :D

ONE IMPORTANT RULE: PLEASE DO NOT REPLY TO ANY OTHER WRITER'S POST. I will create a feedback thread, please use it. My insistence on this is to ensure that other writers can edit as needed, and while it is possible to unlock posts, it's best not to create any more work for our admins / mods than necessary. Thank you for your cooperation. =) 

Writing Exercises Restart - Week One

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Monday! Let's start slow with a week on brevity.

It's important to understand that sometimes, less is more. To that end, let's resurrect one of my favorite formats of exercises--sentences. First impressions are a big deal; if the first sentence of your story can't grab your reader's attention, or worse, pushes them away, it's not likely they'll bother to keep going. Craft your words carefully.

Write five sentences, each one based on one of our story categories here at CYS: Fantasy, Modern Adventure, Sci-fi, Edutainment, School-based, Mystery, Puzzle, Fan-fiction, Love, Dating, or Horror. (Everything else does not qualify, sorry.)

Note: As people have had trouble in the past keeping it to a single sentence with their entries in order to get their point across, I will allow each of the five items to be 1-2 sentences, but the point of this is "say more with less."

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@Will11 , @TheNewIAP , @Ogre11 , @Kwism1127 , @ecoLyte , @FazzTheMan , @ISentinelPenguinI , @Ford , @betaband , @Claw2k11 , @SonicTurboTurtle , @DerpBacon , @Romulus , @Chris113022 , @galobtter , @Swiftstryker , @MadHattersDaughter , @At_Your_Throat , @LeoScales7 , @Tim36D , @Jibble , @NightBirdBlue , @3173v3 , @BenCrucifix 

P.s: I apologize for the delay today, Monday and Tuesday will likely be slow starters for me due to my work IRL. I may, in the future, request that another member post on one or both of those days so you don't have to wait as long. Happy writing~   

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Fantasy: Sitting by the riverbank coughing up blood was not your proudest moment.

Modern Adventure: Time slowed down as you pulled the Bereta M9 from your waist and sent a bullet through the cop's face.

Sci-Fi: Earth looks so close. You reach out for the shrinking blue and green marble with your young and stubby hands, but the window stops you from touching it.

Romance: The way he looks at you is unwanted.

Fanfiction: "I have feelings for you too!" you yell at Ebony as you drink a small vial of blood.

 

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Top-Rated: What? That's a category, right? ;)

1. Fantasy: His armor clanged as the sword slammed into his chest, almost knocking him off his feet.

2. Modern Adventure: The massive explosion shook the 7-11 and could be seen for blocks in all directions.

3. Sci-fi: The dial on the main oxygen tank clicked at it reached zero.

4. School-based: When the alarm sounded for a lock-down, the look on Mr. Thom's face said it all: this one was not a drill.

5. Love & Dating: Jim looked up at the jeweler and said, "It's perfect, I'll take it, she'll love it!"

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Monday Bonus:

1. School + Science Fiction

Bryant’s mouth dropped and the class all looked as he pointed out the windows at the flying saucer that just landed on the football field.

2. School + Fantasy

“Pay Attention!” said Grog as the club slammed down onto Gornog’s fingers, breaking at least one of them.

3. School + Love & Dating

John leaned forward and kissed her as the locker exploded behind him.

4. School + Horror

The three girls slowly moved closer to the locker, but jumped back when there was a loud bang from inside the locker.

5. Science Fiction + Love & Dating
He reached out, touched her helmet, and wished he could once again feel the warmth of her lips.

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1. Fantasy: Flames danced around his fingertips as Damian approached the ebon throne. 

2. Modern Adventure: When the planes first arrived at the horizon, nobody suspected an attack. 

3. Edutainment: Sing, o Muse, of the the rage of Achilles, son of Peleus, that brought countless ills upon the Achaeans. 

4. Mystery: That despicable picture of the woman's mangled corpse was on the front page of every paper. 

5. Horror: One cold, foggy winter's day, a bone-piercing shriek disturbed the morning's silence in the little town of Ashcroft. 

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*cracks knuckles*

Modern Adventure: Timmy stood alone in the mall, his mother having left him on accident. It's going to be hard to find her in a place so large.

Horror: As Dave slowly walked toward the door, he felt a chill down his spine from the horrifying thoughts of what he might find. When he opened it, he saw the horribly mutilated corpse of his friend Mark, which had been disemboweled, decapitated, and his torso impaled on a spear...

Mystery: Charles had finally found out whose fingerprints were on the knife lodged in the victim's chest, and he exclaimed: "I have your murderer!"

Fantasy: As John, a measly peasant turned hero, ascended up the tower he could hear the roars of the dragon grow ever louder. But with his sword, he knew that he could triumph over the beast.

School-based: Elliot sat in his classroom, bored as usual, when he accidentally dropped his pencil. The teacher shouted about him disturbing the classroom, and threw a ruler straight for Elliot's face in an attempt to kill him!

:)

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1. Sci-fi: As his face was shined upon by the bright colors of the third moon, he uttered a cry of disbelief.
2. Modern adventure: Fearfully they hid in the bushes, their weapons readied, careful to avoid rustling the weeds as it would bring attention to their presence.
3. Fantasy: A sudden gust of wind swept her thoughts away, up and in the never ending sky as she stood watching over the crystal clear lake, with its depths mirroring her expression until the ripples made its way to her reflection.
4. Mystery: Filled with fear and reticence they stood -- no, they trembled -- as the voices numbed their senses, devoured their will to escape and made them do exactly as they were expected to do- freeze.
5. Horror: ''I would have killed you -- I would -- if not for your ability to amaze me again every time; your will to escape, it's so powerful, yet so fragile.''

Could somebody remember me to do these before I go to bed at night? The combination of awkward time zones and posting late didn't work all too well.

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  1. Fantasy:  The whole realm had once trembled in fear, refusing to even utter the name of this frail, pale creature now limp and in shackles, and will again before he draws his final breath.
  2. Modern Adventure:  As the engine roared to life, pulling the cable taught across the gorge, the mountain let go leaving us with only one avenue of escape.
  3. Sci-fi:  That trail of goo leading from the laboratory was, in fact, the entity that we had all overlooked.
  4. Mystery:  As strange as it may seem, this is one case where logic and reason would have only impeded our investigation.
  5. Horror:  The tingling sensation, stretching from her scalp to the base of her spine, was his loving, yet vile, caress.

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  1. Fantasy: You awaken with a slight headache, twinge in your gut and the cursed seal slightly larger on your hand. She couldn’t possibly have possessed you, right?

  2. Romance: I was once immune to my thoughts, my fears, my dreams, and yet she leaves me here once again, basking in the radiance of her warmth, my Sun.

  3. Sci-Fi: Stepping out of the vat of liquid nitrogen, James flexed his muscles with anticipation for what was to come.

  4. Horror: Dear Diary, Daddy told me to get the knife. Is he going to kill Mommy again?

  5. Mystery: I was sure that I was clueless, that is, until he pointed the gun at my head.

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I am more of a reader than a writer, but I think I will at least try this one.
  • 1. Fantacy: Danil was awoken in the middle of the night by the smell of blood and sound of growling in his little house. He thought: "What monster did you send me this time, Alexanderus?"
  • 2. Si-Fi: The ship was full of shouting, people were running like crazy, there was a loud emergency alarm; but I couldn't do anything, I was tied with strong ropes, so all I could do was just to wait for this enemy that I did not know anything about to blow us all up.
  • 3. School-base: Danny, my best friend, was talking something to me, but my thoughts were away from him, away from my lunch (that smelled bad, anyway). All I had in my mind was: school library, 19:30, it's importent.
  • 4. Ron could not see anything around him, but he could hear this thing and he knew that it was eating his best friend, but what could he do?
  • 5. Mystery: Mor clews he got, more confused about who was the person he was searching for he became. It sometimes seamd like this person was somehow magical, because now he could not find it, and all it left was a cloud of mystery.

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Fantasy: "ON ME!" the hardy hammerdwarf militia commander, Urist, shouted as he raised his iron shield, his voice booming over the ruined, gore-strewn dining room whereupon the mighty Demon Lord Vcinz was busy slaughtering scores of dwarven citizens with each swipe of his claws and tail and teeth, pooling the ground and staining the walls and furniture with the blood of those who had built them. However when no fellow soldiers responded to his call, Urist cast a quick glance and realized, to his growing terror, he was practically the only survivor of the brutal massacre, save for some slowly dying around him -- he winced as he heard the shrill cries of pain and mercy and prayer -- and the room was now very quiet, save for the Lord's cruel, crackling laughter... Urist turned and suddenly fled, dropping his shield as tears poured down his cheeks, blindly romping through the now quiet, blood-spattered, and eerie halls of what was once the grand glorious dwarven fortress of Mountain Rock until the Demon Lord had awoken.

Horror: He stalked with the precision and grace of a lone hunter hunting its prey, for surely his victim tonight -- and the ones thereafter -- had all made a horrible mistake by providing him the beacon of which to track down their kind, the Smoke; yes, this is why he drew his coat and tracked their kind each twilight -- he was doing the world a favor by eliminating those who polluted the earth and their bodies with each careless drag and release of the Smoke. He thought upon this and grinned smugly, as he came upon tonight's fool and in one fluid motion, drew his blade, covered the sinner's mouth, slid the blade under his neck as he thrashed, before cleaning the metal with the sinner's own clothing and holstering the deadly blade, then stalking away as blood began to pool at his heels.

School Based: He smiled, which was a very rare thing for Michael to do; in fact he had smiled throughout the day as he was beaten by his mother and then those heaving neanderthals once he got to the hell that was school, as his books were stolen and ripped, as his teacher failed him, all through it all. For today was a very different day, or at least was going to be a very different day, and Michael smiled and whistled a light tune as he hurried to his locker, in order to retrieve his dad's semiautomatic rifle he had hid in his backpack, he could see it play out in his mind; the Final Act, just after the last bell rang and all the hapless neanderthals poured through the school doors.... only to find Michael, waiting, and smiling as he did so.

Alternate Ending:

...and he smiled and whistled a light tune as he hurried to his locker, in order to retrieve... well first he had to maneuver around some kid beating on a drum, but then he finally got to his locker and then retrieved... his dad's marijuana bong and a can of Mountain Dew he had hid in his backpack. He headed to the bathroom where he could relieve his stress and troubles in peace.

Modern Adventure: He had set up a makeshift medical base at the rundown household two hours before the shelling began, and since then, only more and more wounded had poured through with seemingly no relent, overwhelming him, his clothing and body being caked and drenched in sweat and blood, not belonging to him. The house he was based in had once been owned by a native, as evidenced by its primitive quality and several pictures upon the mantel which depicted a happy, native family, including a small young boy -- which was why he was so surprised to find that same young face, now in military camo and severely bleeding from one leg, gingerly opening the door to the house and slipping inside, only to find his childhood -- where he could die in peace -- had been overrun by the foreigners.

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Fantasy: A girls screams of terror filled the night as dragons flew overhead, but they quickly turned into laughs of wonder when they pirouetted and began an elaborate mating display in the sky above her.

Horror: The door to the basement creaked open slowly, and Charles stepped nervously into the dark room.

Sci-fi: Julie gasped in surprise when she stepped out of the time machine and found herself in her childhood bedroom, a younger version of herself sleeping before her.

Mystery: When the fourth victim was found I finally admitted that I had been wrong to claim we weren’t searching for a serial killer.

Modern Adventure: John couldn’t help but stare when the out of control train went crashing into the car stuck on the level crossing.  

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Fantasy: "So what'll it be?" The innkeeper whispered as he handed a stiff drink to the cloaked figure. "A high task, I'll take it."

Love & Dating: Grasping the one thing she had left behind, you drag your battered body out of the mud, determined to live and see her once more.

Horror: You looked at the mirror once more, despite knowing that you didn't need to see her to feel that she was right behind you, watching.

Mystery: The suffocating fog clung to your coat like the dead hands of those buried beneath you. Yet you could make out the slight depression of footsteps; leading to the woods.

School-based: Taking slow steps to the cafeteria, he desperately looked for someone familiar to sit by. Failing at that, he brought his tray to one of the less occupied tables, keeping to himself as he quickly wolfed down the sub-par meal.

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Fantasy: As he kneeled in his shining armor, the reflection of this man so praised for his prowess, was now trembling in fear.

Modern: "It'll be alright, sweetie. Daddy will make sure the bad guys don't bother anyone anymore," I said over skype, 1 hour before another operation - here in Afghanistan.

Love & Dating: As she stared into my eyes, the sky above us lit with fireworks and made the moment all the more magical.

Horror: "Honey are you alright?" I asked, rolling over in bed, to which she replied "I heard the scream too."

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Fantasy: "Rule one to becoming an apprentice wizard: Don't point your wand at me."

Modern Adventure: Like Mom always said: "If the bitches dont give you the money, you give them the backhand."

Mystery: Falling is all you can remember. The long fall from the twenty story office building into the cold, blue water, then darkness.

Sci-fi: "COMMANDER! THE ENGINES CAN'T TAKE ANYMORE STRESS! WE'RE GONNA CRASH!"

Horror: The pain is too much. You plead for them to stop, but they keep stabbing you slowly, at a set pace, into your exposed abdomen.

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I know I said I wouldn't be joining you guys this time, but 3J's offer of points was too tempting. Please can you add me to the list?

Fantasy
Serrene had never felt more in control of her life than now, among others like her at the Temple of Gunri.

Sci-Fi
Millennia ago humanity looked to the galaxies, but now it looks for Earth.

Love & Dating
You never thought of yourself as the romantic type, but hey, maybe you were wrong.

Modern Adventure (changed this one completely because it sucked before)
"Hey kid, pass me that bomb over there, won't you? Wouldn't want you to get hurt."

Fan Fiction
Everyone knows that Cinderella supposedly lived "happily ever after", but what does that actually tell us?


Bonus

Fantasy, School-Based and Modern Adventure
I thought it was going to be just another normal day at school, stuck in classes for four hours straight then stuck in the library for another five hours, but little did I know that this day was going to be one extraordinary day.

Fantasy, Love & Dating and Horror
Jacob was just lying there in the fields with Faye, watching the clouds, vampires and birds flying by, the soft scent of lavendar flowing in the breeze..... wait, vampires?

Fan Fiction, Sci-Fi and Edutainment
A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away, a wild anooba stalked its prey, waiting for the perfect moment to strike.

Fan Fiction, Edutainment and Mystery/Puzzle
In all his years in the MGB, Leo Demidov had never seen an incident quite like this, even though he was often the first taken to cases that the state wanted to cover up.

Fan Fiction and Modern Adventure
"My my, it's been such a long time, CYStia," said TSR, licking his lips as he gazed at his computer screen.

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Fantasy: James wondered not for the first or last time the whole question of why anyone would make a deaf werewolf.

Modern Adventure: Mina stared at the starving child as she took a bite out of her granola bar, " Look kid, if I gave you some, then that would mean less for me."

Sci-Fi: Minutes turned into hours as the sabotaged ship and its crew remained in the perilous position of being stuck between space and hyper space.

School-Based: The young girl took a step into the Academy, which was to be her new home as long as she didn't flunk out.

Mystery: The body lying on the ground was charred beyond recognition, but the series of graffiti that lead to the corpse was just like the ones seen at the other five victims of The Spraycan Killer.

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Sci-Fi: The gigantic goat was made to kill, and it knew it's purpose in life. 

Fantasy: The priest brandished his cross and began to intone, "Back! Back ye seven-tongued devil! Back to the abyss!" 

Horror: My reflection is surprisingly warm to the touch. 

Modern Adventure: She barely even noticed as I casually broke a hole in her suit with the bolt-cutters; she did notice when it propelled her into the depths of space. Good riddance. 

Fan Fiction: "See you in Hell." The winged, gnarled figure growled as it carried the rebellious youth into the air... 

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Sci-Fi : "Daddy, none of my kids are tall like I wanted...I wanna trash these and start over!  Stupid, sub-human trash!"

Fan-Fiction : "Do you feel it, Mr. Krabs?"

Fantasy : We stood on sand, hand in hand, on the journey to our Enlightenment.  What greeted our feet were the pulverized bodies of millions of our failed predecessors, swirling in grains finer than the seconds counting each era unto its own.

Mystery : "We can't rule it a homicide, Maria; even you said he shot her while she was still inside!"

Horror : ...shhh...

Bonus :

Sci-Fantasy - Isabelle kicked the sands in frustration, out of disrespect for her predecessors that she refused to admit were hers.

Sci-Mystery - She was sobbing now; the only one in two years that could meet all the height and weight quotas she desired was now gone.  Her effort was for naught.

Fan-Horror - Mr. Krabs...just...be...quiet.  It'll go faster this way.

Fan-Fantasy - Spongebob...it's just another damn sunrise.  We're going back to work.

Fantasy Horror - And then the sands shifted.

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Ninja edit;; sorry, ignore this.

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Tuesday! - Pick one of the sentences from yesterday and imagine it as part of a story. Write a summary for that story here. Bonus: Write the first paragraph of that story.

(As I accidentally left off the bonus from yesterday, here it is, so you can do it today if you wish: Bonus: Write five more sentences, this time combining at least two genres. And, again, one sentence preferred, two sentences maximum.)

 

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@Will11 , @TheNewIAP , @Ogre11 , @Kwism1127 , @ecoLyte , @FazzTheMan , @ISentinelPenguinI , @Ford , @betaband , @Claw2k11 , @SonicTurboTurtle , @DerpBacon , @Romulus , @Chris113022 , @galobtter , @Swiftstryker , @MadHattersDaughter , @At_Your_Throat , @LeoScales7 , @Tim36D , @Jibble , @NightBirdBlue , @3173v3 , @BenCrucifix , @31TeV

P.s: I apologize for the delay today. Tuesday would not have gotten this slow of a start, but I just found out I have a spinal injury which is causing my hands to periodically lose sensation. >_> I need to get an MRI sometime soon. I should be fine, though, long term. Also, great job yesterday, everyone! Awesome work.

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Really sorry I couldn't get to the Monday exercise. It's going to be like this every Mon-Thurs, unless there's a day off or the weekend starts.

Sentence: "So, what'll it be?" the innkeeper whispered as he handed a stiff drink to the cloaked figure. "A high task, I'll take it." (Fantasy sentence from ecoLyte)

Story Summary: Deceived. Tricked by a dominant. It's one thing the king of the mighty Pehan Empire will regret, sooner or later. The king should have told the truth to the empire's residents before any real threats begin to rise. It was too late. A cloaked figure known only as the Shadow pieced it together. These monsters...they were under the rule of the king. A ruler should protect his civilians, but this was different. "They're just for use against the enemy," the king had spoken. That wasn't the case at all. Those creatures were to be used against the Pehans, who were loyal as if bound by a powerful magic spell. But one day, hell would break through, and the Pehans would need to figure it out: their ruler wasn't on their side. What did they have? What did they have? The king had a massive military, the monsters, wizards and mages. The Pehans had nothing except their clothes and their tools. But they did have the Shadow, a legendary renegade.

First Paragraph: A setting sun brought the attack. Rumors were passed along about some mischievous entities appearing on the outskirts of the empire's lands. At first, the group didn't seem like a threat, but they've managed to capture a caravan of troops marching back to the castle. A soldier looks around, his weapons on a rack and his hands and legs bound together. Humanoid figures glanced at the men they've taken prisoner and exchanged looks before nodding. They lift their hoods and pull them back simultaneously, revealing...normal human faces. One person, however, does not remove his hood. Unlike the light gray robes of the other figures, this man has an obsidian-black robe and hood. The fearful soldier examines the men who had attacked him and freezes. Farmers, blacksmiths, and shopkeepers from the Pehan village nearby. These aren't dangerous mages, they are rebels. Although they lacked any magical powers or skills that would deliver a great threat to the king, they've proven their strength by taking down heavily armed infantry.

"You are to stay in this hut and obey all of our orders," the black-robed figure commands the soldiers. "We have all of your weapons. We may be from a lowly village, but we are stronger and more cunning than you think." The rumors were false. A trick. "Your puny king deceived us all. His little pets can destroy his entire empire. I am here to keep every Pehan citizen safe, from the oldest of elders to the youngest of children." He paces around the captured men, his face unseen. "In the darkness, I fight. I fight to protect, for I am the Shadow."

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Funny, I'm already writing a story for my Mystery sentence. I'll just go with my School-based sentence.

Summary: After dodging the ruler, just barely, it flies right into the student behind Elliot's face. However, the student is unharmed. Then, the class starts to gang up on him and he escapes the classroom. Then, the rest of the school starts going after him. After fighting off the hoards of students, Elliot makes it to the principal's office where he learns that the principal brainwashed them all to attack Elliot because Elliot's parents were the only ones who didn't show up at parent-teacher conferences. Elliot and the principal laugh. The end.

Bonus paragraph: *insert sentence* "Ah!" Elliot shouts, ducking. The ruler grazes the top of his head, then breaks as it hits the student behind him. The student, somehow not screaming about the fact that there are dozens of splinters in his face, then starts to strangle Elliot! Elliot does manage to get the student off him, but then the rest of the class go after him! "Today must be a Thursday... I hate Thursdays."

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Bonus for monday: 

1. Horror and Mystery: When the trail of savage animal attacks grew longer and longer, Emily Aleford, hunter extraordinaire, knew she had to come out of retirement. 

2. School-based and edutainment: When Kyle entered the classroom, he saw his classmates already sitting ready for their geography exam. 

3. Sci-fi and Love & Dating: "Wherever I'll go, I will always love you", was the last thing Mark transmitted, before the screen went blank. 

4. Mystery and Modern Adventure: As his helpers removed the stone slab in front of the temple entrance, a cold wind blew out Marcus' torch. The golden statue of Quetzalcoatl was now within reach. 

5. Fantasy and Horror: When for the fifth day in a row reports came in of fires burning across the Dying Lands, King Aegeus called upon the braves members of the Exploration Guild to investigate. 

Tuesday's assignment:

I choose my horror sentence: One cold, foggy winter's day, a bone-piercing shriek disturbed the morning's silence in the little town of Ashcroft. 

The Banshee's Shriek

The quaint little town of Ashcroft, on the border of Wales and England, is getting ready for Christmas, as the coldest weather in decades descends upon it. As the snowdrifts slowly isolate the village from the outside world, the townsmen are shaken by a string of grisly murders. While secrets and legends about the village's past begin to surface, inspector Edwin Bailey is called to uncover the seemingly supernatural murderer. 

Bonus (might still edit): 

One cold, foggy winter's day, a bone-piercing shriek disturbed the morning's silence in the little town of Ashcroft. In the pale light of the morning's sun, the braver townsfolk headed towards the central square to investigate its source. There, amidst the half-decorated Christmas trees, lay Elisa Doorman, the florist's daughter. Though the local police quickly responded, and screened the square from the public's view, tales swiftly spread across the town. Soon, even the most secluded Ashcroftian knew about the lifeless body, lying in the white snow; about the look of horror on her face; about the apparent lack of a cause of death; but most of all, about the engraved silver comb that lay across her chest.  

 

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James wondered not for the first or last time the whole question of why anyone would make a deaf werewolf.
Summary:

James Lightmen is a werewolf. Not just an ordinary werewolf, he's a deaf werewolf. But it's all confusing to him; why is he here? Why is he deaf? But one terrible night, the already dangerous James Lightmen rollercoaster ride goes on a sinister turn for the worse. He could never imagine the horrors he'd be facing on his own...

First Paragraph:

     James awoke from his tender slumber with a howl of agony. It wasn't the first time he had done this before, but he would be facing things far worse. As James clutched his face, tearing at it with nails that had become claws, he thought, Kill me, kill me now. I can't do this anymore! The moonlight sprayed all over his room as he began the horrible and excruciatingly painful transformation. His legs grew fur and his face morphed into something unrecognizable. As he stood up in pain, he lumbered over to his bathroom mirror. What he saw was a terror beyond words. Blind with rage, he leaped out the open window and landed on the dead grass of fall. Gloomy mist surrounded him as he made the final change....the teeth. James roared as his teeth grew longer and sharper and bit on his lips, instantly tasting blood. He touched one claw to his lips, which had began to form a muzzle, and as he pulled it away, more blood ran down his now-furry face. It was pure agony, and it was all James knew.

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Monday bonus has been added to my Monday post.

Based on what people said on the feedback thread, my sci-fi sentence was the most popular:
"Millennia ago humanity looked to the galaxies, but now it looks for Earth."

So I'm going with that one. It's also partly because I haven't really thought of a proper story for most of the others.

This story is set in the far-distant future of our real life universe.

Not too far after our current time, a terrible apocalypse caused the mass exodus of humanity from Earth. In the rush of the escape to find a habitable planet, the location of Earth was lost. The location of humanity's old home became a mystery, but a new era began for the survivors.

Many thousands of generations and several millennia later, humanity has expanded and colonised hundreds of planets across the Milky Way. The protagonist, Alex, hails from a quiet little rural planet, Mur, dreaming of adventure and travelling across the galaxy. Alex one day gains the opportunity to embark on a mission to rediscover Earth, to see what happened to humanity's original home and to search for any of their kin who might have descended from those that survived the apocalypse. Alex sets off from Mur, making friends and fighting enemies along the way.


Bonus

Millennia ago humanity looked to the galaxies, but now it looks for Earth. Once the proud cradle of all human life, now lost to the aeons, rotting away for all we know. With all our advancement, with all our collaboration with other species of the galaxy, all the technology to travel between solar systems with ease, we still cannot find this planet. Why do we wish to find it so much? Is it a sadness for our once home lost? To pay our respects to our ancestors who died in their billions so that we, their children's children, may live? Do we want to be certain that our brethren, separated by the exodus, are not trapped in some forsaken barren land with little hope for the future? Or maybe it's just simple curiosity. Whatever the reason, I will find it. I swear it on Ashley's grave.

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Bonus :

"Daddy, none of my kids are tall like I wanted...I wanna trash these and start over!  Stupid, sub-human trash!"

  Isabelle certainly had the right to be crossed with her failure to provide fruit.  For seven generations, her family had produced tall, strong individuals that were monsters and among monsters.  Most towered from 7 to 11 feet in height, and were of wide enough by girth of bones and frame to support the weight associated with these heights.  In today's trend, everyone wanted a child they could be proud of talking about, a child that could perform the legendary feats Hercules did.  After all, he was a hero in Greece, so by all means, humans should've been able to wrestle with lions and the like.  Of course, no one had any reason to object, and all the blame went to her weakling of a father.  He stood only at a measly 5'9, and while Isabelle was a good deal shorter than he (she was only 11 at the time, what could they expect?), her growth would be projected to skyrocket when puberty kicked in a little later.  By then, even if height wasn't the trend, at least she'd be lording over her peers with her raw prowess.  Her father was a strange man, by all standards.  He was deficient in all aspects, be it height, weight, girth, and physical potential, but for some masochistic reason, he actually liked his form.  He was content not striving for the best, like one of those rare losers people joke about.  But he was an incredible loser, and actual, real, living loser.  I mean, who the heck else would frown at your kid for tossing out every part of their imperfection?  Every embryo was her flesh, so she had every right to dispose of it, even if she had to borrow a bit of genetic material from her tallest cousin, Josh.

By the Latins' phrase, he could put even her into stupere!  She'd love to call him stupid, but that wouldn't be politically correct...would it?  Eh, she wasn't going to risk her eyesight by looking at the disgusting handicap called the smartphone.  Only Losers like Dad would use that.

Summary :

In the somewhat distant future, humanity has finally resolved just about every flaw of human nature there is...all except for avarice.  People live lavishly like they do in Rome, idolizing the physical traits of man and beast, lusting over anything and everything, be it gold, flesh, or fame.  And there was virtually no impact on the environment, not when humanity took to the stars and changed its base of hedonism to Mars.  Earth was now a romanticized nature park, a garden of Eden that enslaved its crazed creators all the while being slaves to its voyeurs.

So where does our conflict lie, if nearly all of humanity is so...perfect?

The question is...is this where our definition of perfect stops?

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9 years ago

Get better soon, Kiel :D

Fantasy sentence: "ON ME!" the hardy hammerdwarf militia commander, Urist, shouted as he raised his iron shield, his voice booming over the ruined, gore-strewn dining room whereupon the mighty Demon Lord Vcinz was busy slaughtering scores of dwarven citizens with each swipe of his claws and tail and teeth, pooling the ground and staining the walls and furniture with the blood of those who had built them. However when no fellow soldiers responded to his call, Urist cast a quick glance and realized, to his growing terror, he was practically the only survivor of the brutal massacre, save for some slowly dying around him -- he winced as he heard the shrill cries of pain and mercy and prayer -- and the room was now very quiet, save for the Lord's cruel, crackling laughter... Urist turned and suddenly fled, dropping his shield as tears poured down his cheeks, blindly romping through the now quiet, blood-spattered, and eerie halls of what was once the grand glorious dwarven fortress of Mountain Rock until the Demon Lord had awoken.

Summary: In the year 695, the King of the dwarven civilization set forth a small expedition party -- made up of a group of dwarves with diverse talents and abilities -- to establish a colony in a far lands, to keep watch of the struggling elf tribes and another foe of the dwarves, (and virtually all other races) the goblins. As the name suggested, the fortress was carved into a mountain, giving it a nice strategic advantage over any external threats, and it overlooked a sparse forest where a river ran through. In the beginning of the fortress's life, due to the small population that inhabited it, it struggled against several natural threats such as a clan of nearby capybaramen and a herd of crazed elephants, yet its luck improved as during the spring season of the next year, a group of twenty-five migrants arrived, the first migrants of the new colony, hoping to find new life here. Indeed, it began to prosper -- the mining industry of Mountain Rock was booming, as the fortress was the main supplier of precious and rare metals and gems to the Home Kingdoms, of which the Mountain Rock dwarves would also sell to the human caravans that passed by from time to time. By the year 712, the fortress was sprawling and busy, and thanks to the mining industry, the dwarves lived in great luxury and were quite rich. Every room was large and gem-laden, and the dwarves were surrounded by wealth, protected by the marksdwarfs and hammerdwarfs that made up the fortress militia. By 717, the fortress population was on its way of surpassing 1,500 dwarves, made up of mostly migrants that had heard how prosperous Mountain Rock was. So, when the Demon Lord Vcinz emerged from his nearby lair to feast upon the fortress he had so heard about, the dwarves was shocked as their perfect lives crashed and burned. This contributed to the sudden and quick loss of the fortress Mountain Rock -- the dwarves had become drunk in their power, believing they were untouchable from any natural threat (the goblins had left the area many years ago, and the elves eventually died out) and when Vcinz arrived, the dwarves simply could not process what was happening, they didn't want to. At this time, hundreds attempted to flee the carnage, trampling others to death in their panic. The Mountain Rock militia was ultimately ineffective as soldiers got lost or split up in the frenzy -- and in the end, the confusion and panic that had arisen killed the dwarves. Not a single colonist survived -- woman, children, elderly, men, soldiers -- all were killed through various means, mostly by their fellow dwarves through accidents. The souls of the lost and slaughtered gave Vcinz such great strength that many dwarves today tremble in his name, although he has yet to make his next appearance. Anyway, it took almost a full year for the King to realize Mountain Rock was in danger, and he quickly dispatched a small army to check up on them and possibly reclaim the fortress if need be. Only a handful managed to return, and the tale of what they saw at the fortress differs between them, however they all speak of severely wounded and bloodied dwarves with sunken eyes and pale skin with a green tinge wandering the fortress and surrounding areas, attacking anything that moved within their line of vision with the ferocity of starving dogs. They only seem to speak one word, which roughly sounds like the name of accursed Demon Lord. Today, it is speculated that the great megabeast is holed up at the former fortress, waiting for the perfect time to strike again. No one has visited the Mountain Rock colony since the first army the King sent -- and the King himself refuses to publicly acknowledge the colony ever existed. The dwarves live in a fear of the malevolent Mountain Rock fortress and its current keeper, that and the decline of the dwarf kingdom's power after a recent war with humankind,  it would seem the dwarves have entered a dark age of sorts, living unhappy and war torn, to soon die consumed by the Demon Lord. Unless he can somehow be stopped before he swallows the entire world...

Bonus: The wagon had stopped several hours ago, enough time for the dwarves to stretch and examine their surroundings as well as observe the old mountain in the distance that would soon be their new home. To Lumr Nrlmlr, the expedition leader, the mountain seemed menacing, as it kept close watch over the surrounding landscape. She was sitting cross-legged on the ground, absent mindedly twirling the grass and watching the others have a look around while the livestock they brought with them crowded around the wagon protectively. she was desperately attempting to ignore her growling stomach; they had run out of provisions during their trip via wagon to the mountain, and the earliest supply caravan would arrive sometime in the Harvest, just before the Cold settled into the earth. That, and she wanted to give the livestock some time to breed before slaughtering. As such, she had sent some of the dwarves to hunt the nearby wildlife and gather plants and water from the river they had seen earlier as they passed by, but she knew she could make do without food for a day or some hours, what she really wanted was to get everyone settled into the mountain and quickly at that. There were some unfriendly beasts lurking about, and she didn't want to have her entire party massacred. She clambered upward, about to order everyone to the mountain, when she heard a terrified scream to her left. Three dwarves, bloody and their clothing torn, suddenly bursted through the underbrush and Lumr recognized them as Kaml, Bon, and Gronl, otherwise the hunters of the party. "CAPYBARAMEN!" T shouted as the three dispersed, and true to his word, the horrid beasts appeared suddenly behind them, chittering and gnashing their fangs, scampering after the dwarves...

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Monday Bonus:

  1. Modern Adventure + Horror: My heart was in my throat as his heavy footsteps and clinking chainsaw echoed through the house. I knew the closet wasn’t safe.

  2. Romance + Dating: We never spoke, but our eyes made the silent agreement to meet here every morning, to banish the cold from our shivering bodies.

  3. Fantasy + Puzzle: Perhaps the old hag’s warning about the dragon dance would have been useful now?

  4. Sci-fi + Fantasy: “Would you like the plasma cannon or the demon sword, sir? Aliens don’t kill themselves.”

  5. Sci-fi + School Based: My physics teacher’s time machine is totally safe.


Tuesday:

Sentence: “Dear Diary, Daddy told me to get the knife. Is he going to kill Mommy again?"

Summary: If only the things children said could be taken lightly, or can they? Suzy seems to be forgetting something. It’s only a minor detail after all; it’s probably not important. Every morning, she wakes up and gets the strange feeling to leave the house. She walks past the door to her parent’s room, slightly ajar and eerily dark in the daylight. She ignores the smell, a combination of metal and feces. She ignores the silence, ready to strangle her and splatter her blood all over the walls without a moment’s notice. It’s okay, Mommy and Daddy will be home soon.

They’ll be waiting for her.

 

Story (Tuesday Bonus):

Dear Diary,

Daddy told me to get the knife. Is he going to kill Mommy again? I don’t like that, but I listen to him anyway. Daddy’s scary when he’s mad. He and Mommy were yelling yesterday. They do it everyday. I put my head under the pillows and waited. Mommy screamed and I shut my ears tighter. And then the thump. You know the one. It’s like tripping over a rock, only with a knife in your head.  The one where the blood comes out and you clean it up. The one where Daddy tells you not to tell a soul.


The one where he’ll do the same to you next if you do.

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Sentence:  Earth looks so close. You reach out for the shrinking blue and green marble with your young and stubby hands, but the window stops you from touching it.

Story: (From the perspective of the AI) A nameless human is sent to flee earth as a child, living in a small space pod her entire life with only an Artificial Intelligence and multiple terabytes of movies of all genres to keep company. Slowly, she and the AI fall in love. The AI loves her for her humanity, her kindness, and for teaching it emotion. The girl loves it because of it's intelligence, and the beautiful music it creates. When the girl turns 18, programming takes over the AI, and despite its wishes, it is forced to show her videos of what happened to earth. The book ends with the girl killing herself. What happens to earth is never found out.

Paragraph: "Earth looks so close. You reach out for the shrinking blue and green marble with your young and stubby hands, but the window stops you from touching it. This was the first time I saw you." I say with as much warmth as I can manage. The girl smiles. "I'm going to name you Wesley. Like the man in the movie we saw last night." Only 7 years old and she already shows so much affection for me. She is sad. Even my emotionally numbed possessor can tell that. She doesn't want me. She wants a human.

Note: If I ever decide to make this a choose your own adventure story, I will make it from the POV of the girl.

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Fantasy, because why not: "Rule one to becoming an apprentice wizard: Don't point your wand at me."

Summary: You are a young adult, maybe 16 or 17, who have always dreamt of using magic. Unfortunately, all magic is illegal due to a new monarch, no matter if it's destructive or restorative. One day on your way home from farming, a hooded man on a horse races by the road you're walking on, being pursued by paladins. He drops a small book and a strange stick, both covered in symbols. You decided to take it home, hiding it from the guards. This starts your adventure to becoming a wizard.

Bonus:

You are sitting in a library, just finishing an old book from decades past. It speaks of the world before, filled with magical and mystical beings. Magic. Your favorite subject. You have never seen any magic that the tome describes, such as re-growing trees and pulling small animals out of garments. Only fire and lightning, with the occasional healing spell. Never anything non-violent. There are many more books like this one in this library. You had hoped to read them all, but you know it won't be a possibility. This place will be ashes in a few days.

 

I'll probably do the bonus for monday up at my original post.

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Though it's technically Wednesday where I'm at, I wanted to get back and finish Tuesday's task (was too busy to notice).

The suffocating fog clung to your coat like the dead hands of those buried beneath you. Yet you could make out the slight depression of footsteps; leading to the woods.

Summary: Logic, observation, and an irresistible curiosity for the truth. These quality of these traits are what separates the rookie private eye's from the full fledged detectives; from a successfully closed case to an unsolved one; from life or death. You've solved hundreds of cases, catch the most elusive of serial killers, and been in the line of fire more times than you care to count. But when a series of killings show up with no leads, clues, and evidence of supernatural interference; this may just be the last and most difficult case you've ever taken. 

First Paragraph:

"I told you, I don't work with Badges."

"You won't have to." 

The swift reply from the man in a blue uniform followed by the heavy thud of a case file hitting your desk causes you to look up. "What's this about?" You inquire, opening up the folder. "A certain Elizabeth Watts went missing two nights ago. This was where she was last seen and this was her body last night." He pulls out two small photos, the first is the woman in question, smiling for the camera holding a drink. "Local bar by the river. Perisno Inn?" you inquire as you take the two pictures. "That's correct, she was out drinking with her boyfriend. Four witnesses confirmed that she was there at around 9:32 A.M. Stayed for an hour or two than left via taxi called in by the bartender. You look at the second picture, the graphic details of the mutilated body are inhumane, yet you focus your attention closely on the wounds, her face almost unrecognizable from the blood and broke cartilage. "Large cuts to the legs and arm, broken bones, seems more like the work of a large bear than any serial killer." You say as you run an analytical eye over the remaining pictures and files. The officer slowly takes off his cap, stuffing it into the back of his pocket. "What if I said Werewolf?"

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Tuesday: Pick one of the sentences from yesterday and imagine it as part of a story. Write a summary for that story here. Bonus: Write the first paragraph of that story.

Since many commented that they enjoyed the Science Fiction selection, I’ll go with that one. The initial sentence: The dial on the main oxygen tank clicked as it reached zero.

Story Summary: This is a choose-your-own story (Am I allowed to do that?). You are a traveler on a space ship that was headed to Mars and the main oxygen tank has just run out. There is a reserve tank, but the ship was supposed to have returned to earth before the main tank ran out. You have to figure out why the tank is empty, where the ship is now, where it is supposed to be, and figure out how to get oxygen to stay alive until the ship returns to earth or find some other supply of oxygen for the trip.

Bonus: The dial on the main oxygen tank clicked as it reached zero. You can reach out and tap it, hoping it will start up again, but the dial remains at zero. It is not moving. You can hear the clicking and the hiss as the reserve tank kicks in and starts pumping oxygen into the ship. You know the reserve tank was never supposed to start up and there was supposed to be plenty of oxygen to get you all the way to the Mars base. What’s going on?

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Monday Bonus:

WIP

Tuesday: Going for my SCI-FI one.

 A ship has been sabotaged and is stuck inbetween hyper space and regular space. Being in hyper space causes serious strain on the human body and mind. Being in that state that they are in is accelerating that strain. So they really need to either get back to regular space or complete their jump to hyper space to travel to where they need to go. Eventually, they manage to put several plans together. Each plan gets more and more desperate. They try to find the saboteur at the same time. They think that if they can figure out exactly what went wrong, then they can fix the issue easier. The symptoms of the strain progress along with the story. Some new symptoms are identified. Weird things begin to happen, that may just be the crew's hallucinating. The crew eventually puts one final great effort into trying to get back to regular space. 

Tuesday Bonus:

Minutes turned into hours as the sabotaged ship and its crew remained in the perilous position of being stuck between space and hyper space. The ship's captain sat at The Officer's table with his head in his hands. The ship's senior engineer was pacing around the table muttering to himself about weird emissions from the hyper drive and the supplies needed to fix the right engine, which had lost power during their attempted jump into hyper space. The lead scientist on the ship sat at the table, drumming her fingers as she tried to come up with an easy solution to get back to normal space. She had never even heard of a ship getting stuck between. It was a theoretical possibility, but nothing that anyone had ever heard happening. The leader of the Guard contingent that had attached themselves to the ship as a way to transport themselves to the other end of The Earth Empire, where they were ordered to go to, was staring at the table with his jaw clenched. This was way over his head. He barely understood what hyper space was. Being stuck in between space and hyperspace was not easy for his mind to grasp, no matter how hard the lead scientist had tried to explain it to him. His head was throbbing rather badly. The senior doctor was watching all the other officers knowing that they were likely experiencing symptoms of not being in proper space. The doctor was more in touch with the regular crew better than any of the others. He had seen one of the technicians already start to display some classic signs of hallucinations, seizures, and headaches. He was running on the hypothesis that the symptoms of not being in normal space was likely being accelerated by the fact that they were not even in true hyper space. 

 

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Wednesday! - Early start today because my insomnia's got me again.

Write the final paragraph for the story you created yesterday! =D

Bonus: Attempt a 'book end' feel for the first paragraph and last paragraph. (If you did not do the bonus from yesterday, do it now.)

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Damn it. Everything at once yay

9 years ago
Monday bonus
1. Sci-fi + School-Based: When they threw their heads back, the deafening sounds emitted from their throats resonated through the long, narrow hallways and made the students fear the dreaded place even more.
2. Fantasy + Mystery: If they hadn’t shown that kind of interest in the things that happened inside the wooden cabin, maybe they would’ve been free to go upon the man’s command.
3. Horror + Love: His severed arm now lay resting beside the love of his life, engaging him in a romantic hug.
4. Mystery + Edutainment: Nobody had every expected that such a maze as made by such a colossal and inhuman being would make them feel so lost and alone.
5. Dating + Fantasy: The warts on her face were not enough to drive you off: no, that one moment where she shined and brought new warmth to your hart was the moment you fell in love with her.

Tuesday
Sentence: As his face was shined upon by the bright colors of the third moon, he uttered a cry of disbelief.

Every time the third moon comes up -- the bluest moon of the three, and with that the prettiest -- it's time to turn the boys into men and the girls into women. The laborious task is done by the Headmasters, a not-so trustworthy group of Higher Citizens. Every year it's the same old story and it seems to never end. But what happens when one decides to revolt against the Headmasters?

Tuesday bonus
As his face was shined upon by the bright colors of the third moon, he uttered a cry of disbelief. His hands trembled, his face in an awkward frown. Even he didn't know what he was doing. The noise, the high pitched noise that had just come from his mouth in that one moment of surprise, it shouldn't have happened. Whoever was around here probably heard it. His eyes scanned the unorganized mess. The trees, tall and thin, towered over the scene as the layered parts of the forest created a magical atmosphere. The faint sounds of the birds and the strong aroma of the fern trees made the place seem dense, heavy. The ground. It was soft and bouncy. He didn't see symmetry in this; nothing seemed organized, logical. It was not logical. The mess in his head- There it was again, the weeds rustled behind him. Slowly now, turn around and show him your face. Show him who you really are.

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Sentence: "So, what'll it be?" the innkeeper whispered as he handed a stiff drink to the cloaked figure. "A high task, I'll take it." (Fantasy sentence from ecoLyte)

First Paragraph:  A setting sun brought the attack. Rumors were passed along about some mischievous entities appearing on the outskirts of the empire's lands. At first, the group didn't seem like a threat, but they've managed to capture a caravan of troops marching back to the castle. A soldier looks around, his weapons on a rack and his hands and legs bound together. Humanoid figures glanced at the men they've taken prisoner and exchanged looks before nodding. They lift their hoods and pull them back simultaneously, revealing...normal human faces. One person, however, does not remove his hood. Unlike the light gray robes of the other figures, this man has an obsidian-black robe and hood. The fearful soldier examines the men who had attacked him and freezes. Farmers, blacksmiths, and shopkeepers from the Pehan village nearby. These aren't dangerous mages, they are rebels. Although they lacked any magical powers or skills that would deliver a great threat to the king, they've proven their strength by taking down heavily armed infantry.

"You are to stay in this hut and obey all of our orders," the black-robed figure commands the soldiers. "We have all of your weapons. We may be from a lowly village, but we are stronger and more cunning than you think." The rumors were false. A trick. "Your puny king deceived us all. His little pets can destroy his entire empire. I am here to keep every Pehan citizen safe, from the oldest of elders to the youngest of children." He paces around the captured men, his face unseen. "In the darkness, I fight. I fight to protect, for I am the Shadow."

Final Paragraph: It'll all be over now. The Shadow used to have the upper hand, using cunning, as well as the rest of the Pehan rebels, to slowly crush the king's defenses, starting with small groups of five and ending with entire legions. All that the Shadow had to do was to hold the monsters captive, rid the king of his guards, and show the king's lies to every Pehan. Then a dynasty will fall...and another will rise. Unfortunately, that isn't the case. The king's "secret police," the Black Hounds, have caught the Shadow defenseless and taken him to the king. The king decided to finish the Shadow himself. Wielding a massive sword, the royal swings in a mighty arc. The blade swipes at the Shadow's upper torso, but he manages to slam into the king, his sword dropping. The Shadow takes the sword and slowly approached the fallen ruler, who stands at a corner. "No, please," the king stammers. "I-I-I'll be good to my citizens, as I've always done." He knows there are no guards to shout to and no military or secret police nearby to seize the Shadow once again. The Shadow slowly pulls back his hood.

"Jonathan..." the king exclaims breathlessly. He'd figured out the Shadow's identity. But it was too late. Jonathan drives the sword through him, ending the ruler's life. However, his own wound has spilled too much blood. The light begins to fade... Ironically, the light was all that a man known as the Shadow needed.

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9 years ago

Sorry about my late response to tuesday's task. You posted it right after I went out last night :P

Here's all the things.

Monday Bonus:

Sci-fi + Horror: The young boy hid shivering under his covers, desperately trying not to make a noise as the alien crawled in through his bedroom window.

Mystery + Modern Adventure: I couldn’t help but grin when the hidden door opened up in front of me, revealing a cavern where legend says a great treasure is hidden.

Love & Dating + School Based: “You’re thirteen year olds!” yelled the elderly teacher as he threw a pen at the students making out at the back of his class, before spending the next ten minutes ranting about how teenagers never did that back in his day.

Horror + Mystery: When the detective saw the bite marks in the victim’s body he realised this was no normal murder case.

Sci-fi + School Based: Johnny decided that his history assignment would be a good excuse to finally have a go in his uncle’s time machine.

Tuesday stuff:

Sentence: “When the fourth victim was found I finally admitted that I had been wrong to claim we weren’t searching for a serial killer.”

Summary: In the quaint old town of Duckington, there has not been a murder case in almost one hundred years. But when people begin finding bodies it falls to Detective Gareth Penney to find out just what’s going on.

Opening paragraph: When the fourth victim was found I finally admitted that I had been wrong to claim we weren’t searching for a serial killer. The deaths had been so different, the victims so unrelated, I thought it impossible for it to be one man causing this. But murder cases are a rarity in a town like Duckington, and for so many to happen at once….. It couldn’t be that. So I realised that I had no choice but to accept the fact we were looking for a serial killer who knew how to hide his tracks.

Final Paragraph: I stood there, my wife’s bloody body laid bare before me, my mind numb with pain. “You know what I told you is true.” I spun around to see him standing behind me, the blood coated knife still in his hand. “We are all monsters. You just need a helping hand to let it out. I am that helping hand.” He held out the knife, hilt first, offering it to me. “It’s time for you to accept this Gareth.”

I stared at the knife for a moment before I was hit by the realisation that he had won. Taking the knife from him I let out my inner monster and drove the knife into his torso, screaming with anger at the smug smile on his face.

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Sorry I’m late, the week’s been slightly rough but here is my input:

 

Monday

Sci-Fi: Just beyond the horizon she could sense rather than hear a faint noise, it sounded like the sound of a radio when nothing is playing but the volume is turned way up, and two things began to worry her: it was getting louder and it was getting closer.

Modern: With a gun in each hand, the zip-hiss of bullets whizzing all around and pinging off the chrome frame of his hang-glider, the man with no name gritted his teeth and steered his aircraft towards the compound.

Romance: Sweat glistened on his forehead as his eyes met mine and in that instant we knew tonight would be like no other night.

Edutainment: Sitting atop your horse you watch your men fall like corn before the scythe as cannonballs and bullets cut your men down and slowly tears fill your eyes as you watch them fall.

School: Mr Glasscock knew he was accepting a life of ridicule and humiliation when he chose to become a teacher; he never thought it would be this bad but now, thanks to his nights cross-breeding Venus fly traps with hamsters, at last he would have his revenge on Class K4!

Tuesday

Romance: Following an unfortunate accident involving a faulty toilet door lock and an inability to move fast enough in times of crisis Herman was ostracized in his school and made a target for bullies. Finding first friendship and then affection with new young teacher named Hans the two embark on an increasingly dangerous relationship as Germany in the 1930’s is not the best time for a all-consuming love between two men to flourish. As pressure mounts from family, friends and an order for enlistment in the SS will Hans listen to his head or his heart? Where will fate take him?

Note: That might have been an advertisement of a story rather than a summary, I’m more used to trying to get interest than summarizing  :D

Wednesday

Following on from Tuesday's idea:

As he lay on his back and looked upwards he saw the light reflecting off the guillotine blade. It reminded him of the wire-cutter his father had used to slice cheese for him as a child to take in packed lunches on all those summer vacations, to the beaches of the Baltic, to the glades of the Black Forest and to the soaring mountains of Swabia. Those memories of all those people he had met and all those places he had never seen would be gone in seconds.

But it had been worth it for three months with him.

The button clicked, the blade sliced and everything was finished.

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I will update this as I finish the different parts of this week's assignment, as I doubt I'll have the time to do all three parts during this study hall lol

Monday:

  • Fantasy: Poised on the precipice of the void, the calls of the trapped and torment tore at the old soldier's soul.
  • Modern Adventure: Cornered and alone, the Lieutenant and her charge took a moment to register their grevious failure before diving away from AK-74 fire.
  • Horror: The sound was not so easily forgotten, it was terrifying, paralyzing, nightmarish: one's own bones cracking and shifting, skin tearing and dying, blood gushing and boiling.
  • Science Fiction: The old rocket lurched on sluggishly, a weathered veteran piloted by the same, boldly going where none had gone before, the edge of our solar system.
  • Mystery: It seemed like a classic 'who-done-it' case in the papers, but the detectives were absolutely stumped: they had the body of a young girl who was strangled, but no evidence that she had been in contact with anyone, and no way to identify her.

 

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Shit, it was like two in the morning (where I live, anyway) when you posted this! You must really have a bad case of insomnia.

Elliot is forced to shoot the hands of several students with his shotgun, thus blowing them into millions of pieces and the blood splattering all over his already bloodied face and clothes, as he attempts to close the door which they were blocking him from closing. He tosses a filing cabinet in front of the door, blocking it and keeping him safe from the murderous students. As he gets closer and closer to the principal's desk, he thinks over the many horrible things he's done... But no matter. He was going to kill the principal and free what students were still alive. Then, he saw the principal's name: 'Principal Schwarzenegger'.

"Wait, what the hell happened to Principal Lewis?" Elliot asks, scratching his head.
"Silly boy. I am zee principal now!" Principal Schwarzenegger shouts, slamming his massive fist on the desk, which manages to break it in half.
"Shit... So, if I want to save the students, I have to kill you?"
"Zat is correct." Schwarzenegger slides on a leather jacket and a pair of shades.
"Before we fight, can I just ask you one question?"
"I am in a giving mood. I will answer your question."
"Why did you brainwash the students so that they would try to kill me?" To that, Schwarzenegger laughs and then replies with: "Your parents were the only ones that did not come to zee parent-teacher conferences last night. Any student whose parents do not come are to be terminated." Schwarzenegger laughs, and Elliot joins in. Schwarzenegger begins to laugh so hard that he closes his eyes, only for Elliot to blow a nice big hole in his chest. Elliot smiles as Schwarzenegger's insides spill out slowly, and blood begins gushing out like a fountain. "Hasta la vista, baby." Elliot says, before blowing off Schwarzenegger's head in a glorious explosion in which his brains, skull fragments, and clumps of hair go flying. 

     The End

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She was ruined!  That millimeter-wide hole would turn into a scab, and then once it'd flake off, it's leave a scar!  And God knows how difficult it is to get rid of scars!  Heck, if Josh or any of her brothers saw that, they'd be laughing themselves to death!  She'd know it!  The family would disown her, her friends would call her ugly, she'd be forever marred as the laughingstock of Wiltown.

All because Daddy said no!  What kind of right did he have over her?  She was already 11!  Okay, maybe she didn't quite cut the age to be an adult, but she already knew better than Dad ever did many, many times over!

Not that all the whining could help anymore.  It was mostly her fault for wanting too much too early anyways.

Not that it was her choice, was it?  I mean, you were the one playing the CYS adventure.  How could she know she had some random kid plotting her every path?

How would she know?

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First paragraph: One cold, foggy winter's day, a bone-piercing shriek disturbed the morning's silence in the little town of Ashcroft. In the pale light of the morning's sun, the braver townsfolk headed towards the central square to investigate its source. There, amidst the half-decorated Christmas trees, lay Elisa Doorman, the florist's daughter. Though the local police quickly responded, and screened the square from the public's view, tales swiftly spread across the town. Soon, even the most secluded Ashcroftian knew about the lifeless body, lying in the white snow; about the look of horror on her face; about the apparent lack of a cause of death; but most of all, about the engraved, silver comb that lay across her chest.  

Last paragraph: With mixed feelings, Edwin places the box containing the 'Banshee' evidence on the shelf. Taking one last look at the line of boxes about this bizarre case, his eyes glide over the name of Elisa, over Matthew, Janey, Tom, Amy, and Milton. A shudder runs down his spine as he tries to understand the reasoning, that drives a man to end so many innocent lives. Slowly, almost solemnly, he locks the door to the evidence locker, and heads off to his well-deserved Christmas dinner.

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The dial on the reserve oxygen tank clicked as it reached zero. The red blinking lights were a reminder that this was really it. There was no more oxygen in the tanks on the ship. The ship was a dead zone. In a short time, no one would be left alive on the ship. You had always heard that running out of oxygen was a painless way to go. You take a seat on the floor and sit down to wait and see if it hurts at all…

Bonus:
I did that.

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Mystery: The suffocating fog clung to your coat like the dead hands of those buried beneath you. Yet you could make out the slight depression of footsteps; leading to the woods.

First Paragraph:

"I told you, I don't work with Badges."

"You won't have to." 

The swift reply from the man in a blue uniform followed by the heavy thud of a case file hitting your desk causes you to look up. "What's this about?" You inquire, opening up the folder. "A certain Elizabeth Watts went missing two nights ago. This was where she was last seen and this was her body last night." He pulls out two small photos, the first is the woman in question, smiling for the camera holding a drink. "Local bar by the river. Perisno Inn?" you inquire as you take the two pictures. "That's correct, she was out drinking with her boyfriend. Four witnesses confirmed that she was there at around 9:32 A.M. Stayed for an hour or two than left via taxi called in by the bartender. You look at the second picture, the graphic details of the mutilated body are inhumane, yet you focus your attention closely on the wounds, her face almost unrecognizable from the blood and broke cartilage. "Large cuts to the legs and arm, broken bones, seems more like the work of a large bear than any serial killer." You say as you run an analytical eye over the remaining pictures and files. The officer slowly takes off his cap, stuffing it into the back of his pocket. "What if I said Werewolf?"

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"I'd hate to say 'I told you so', but your chances of surviving this case were nil from the moment you got my note detective." Eric gloats as he walks over to your prone body. "I've already notified the authorities Eric. They'll be here any minute now to drag you into the dog house" you bluff trying to get up. The unnatural mist that covers your large coat threatens to pull you into the earth. "You and I both know there's no one coming. No one to save you this ti-" His brief monologue is broken when you throw your left hand out from under you, the mud and sand flying directly at Eric's face. In one smooth motion you draw your handgun and dive for cover. You're not quick enough however as you feel a sharp tugging pain flare up from behind you. You stumble behind the gray tombstone, already feeling the large handle of a dagger protruding from your back. Though the crazed serial killer was a mountain of a man almost a head or two taller than you, he was no werewolf or any supernatural equivalent. Even from the very start of this wild chase, the clues that implied he was a supernatural being were all a hoax. The stage fog machine, paper lamps lit amongst the trees; all just misinformation to confuse and distract any would-be pursuers.

You peak out past the tombstone and train your gun on the small copse of trees shaking, your hands shaking as you try to steady your aim. A flash of movement from the corner of your vision and you react by whipping your gun towards it. Eric charges straight for you, the moonlight flashing off the cleaver he holds in his left hand. The oldest trick in the book, and you fell for it you think as you fire in his direction. The bullet cleanly misses Eric and slams into the dirt behind him, his arm bent back ready to throw another lethal dagger at you. Desperately ducking to dodge the weapon, you sluggishly stumble backwards, the blood loss steadily forcing your body to go into shock. He hits your weakened body like a train, sending you to the ground where you desperately fight to force him off you. Nails, tooth, kicks and punches, the two of you blindly struggle in the dirt before Eric raises the cleaver and brings it down on your face. In a blind move of self-preservation, the cleaver bites into your arm, engulfing your mind in a blank state of agonizing pain. Above you, Eric and manically giggling; the bloodlust in his eyes evident as he gleefully watches your life slowly ebb away. In one smooth movement, you free your right arm from his weakened grip, your gun meters away from you -- you grab the dagger that has been lodged in your back and run it across the madman's throat with as much force as you can muster.

"Holy shit, Gooveman! I need a fucking ambulance over here NOW!" 

Your bloody and mangled body is quickly taken to the nearest emergency hospital -- a task presumed as 'unnecessary' due to blood loss and the paramedics announcing that you were dead. You think back to the chase; one that had you traveling state to state hunting down a serial killer that was always one step ahead of you. You relive the moments of chasing the mysterious figure down the streets of Marslend and the brief shoot outs at the cemetery. 

"A violent life, but one worthy of a detective, now that the case is finally closed." You think to yourself before your body is enveloped into the blissful sensation of warmth.

(EDIT: Too tired.. Went overboard and didn't feel satisfied stopping. Sorry! :P)

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first paragraph (for reference)
Millennia ago humanity looked to the galaxies, but now it looks for Earth. Once the proud cradle of all human life, now lost to the aeons, rotting away for all we know. With all our advancement, with all our collaboration with other species of the galaxy, all the technology to travel between solar systems with ease, we still cannot find this planet. Why do we wish to find it so much? Is it a sadness for our once home lost? To pay our respects to our ancestors who died in their billions so that we, their children's children, may live? Do we want to be certain that our brethren, separated by the exodus, are not trapped in some forsaken barren land with little hope for the future? Or maybe it's just simple curiosity. Whatever the reason, I will find it. I swear it on Ashley's grave.

last paragraph (bonus attempted)
Not long ago humanity looked for Earth, but now it looks to the galaxies. The Milky Way seems so minute now, all thanks to technology which makes spales obsolete. Intergalactic travel will be an affordable and practical reality within the next Mur year. There will be others like me out there, others like Peekillen, others like Beo..... even others like Garth. What's causing this tingling sensation in my arms? Is it nervousness? Excitement? Fear? Pride? Anxiety? Or maybe my muscles are simply getting worn from all this fighting. Whatever the reason, I will find you. Somewhere at the end of the universe, you'll be there, Ashley.

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First Paragraph:

Dear Diary,

Daddy told me to get the knife. Is he going to kill Mommy again? I don’t like that, but I listen to him anyway. Daddy’s scary when he’s mad. He and Mommy were yelling yesterday. They do it everyday. I put my head under the pillows and waited. Mommy screamed and I shut my ears tighter. And then the thump. You know the one. It’s like tripping over a rock, only with a knife in your head.  The one where the blood comes out and you clean it up. The one where Daddy tells you not to tell a soul.

The one where he’ll do the same to you next if you do.

Final Paragraph/Bonus:

Dear Diary,

Daddy told me to get the knife, so I killed Mommy. Daddy liked that, but I didn’t. I killed him too. Molly said that I talk to people that aren’t there, but she’s lying. My Mommy and Daddy are still alive, so they told me to bring her home so they could talk. I killed them. I took the knife-and opened the door for Molly. Mommy told us to come in, but Molly looked inside and threw up. I didn’t like that, so I-stabbed her through the neck and watched her bleed. When I was done, I-asked her what was wrong. She asked me if I could see-his head rolling, mouth wide open as I kicked his teeth out. I didn’t know what she meant. I only knew that Molly was dead, and Mommy was alive. Or was Daddy alive and Mommy dead? Or maybe they were all dead?

I didn’t know any more. I just knew she was next.

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Her body was limp, joints ajar at just the wrong angle. Her eyes were open, although unseeing. There was no note. Her mouth was open but unbreathing. Her body lay there for many years. If I looked at just the right angle in the right lighting, it looked like Her again. The woman I loved, looking out of the window towards space like she had every day in her life.

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Fantasy one:

You did it. All of your friends are out of the burning castle. 

As you turn to finish Azazel, you feel a burning object enter your abdomen. You drop your wand.

"I may not... be able to kill all of you... magic scum... but I can kill you." Azazel says as he twists the fireblade. The pain is almost unbearable. Your rage overcomes you as your hands clasp around his head.

"Same... TO YOU!"

You use the drain spell and see the life slowly escape his body. Then, just before you completely kill him, you use the sonic boom spell... focused to the center of his brain. You hear a 'splurt', but luckily his helm blocks most of the blood and brain. You drop his lifeless body to the floor.

As your adrenaline wears off,  you almost to forget to pull out the fireblade. As you do, however, you feel every burning inch. You collapse.

You're losing blood fast. You try to cast a heal spell, but nothing happens. The sonic boom spell must have wasted all of your Mana. You let the rage of his evil deeds get the better of you. Such a shame.

Your last thoughts as you bleed out in the burning castle are those of the aftermath. You hope somebody will find your body and bury it, but you know it won't be a possibility. This place will be ashes in a few days.

(Sorry if this seemed like more than a paragraph. I just didn't want to leave anyone confused as to why they died.

Hope I qualify for the bonus.)

Never mind

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Thursday! - Invent a life motto for one of your characters. (For anyone who does not have an original character available from RPs, stories, or the general realm of your imagination, please invent one now.) Make up a brief story explaining why they have that motto.

Bonus: Write a scene showing them telling the story to another character and include that character's reaction. Do they love the motto it? Hate it? Agree with your character's reasoning? Disagree? Criticize it? Feel enlightened?

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@Will11 , @TheNewIAP , @Ogre11 , @Kwism1127 , @ecoLyte , @FazzTheMan , @ISentinelPenguinI , @Ford , @betaband , @Claw2k11 , @SonicTurboTurtle , @DerpBacon , @Romulus , @Chris113022 , @galobtter , @Swiftstryker , @BenCrucifix ,@MadHattersDaughter , @At_Your_Throat , @LeoScales7 , @Tim36D , @Jibble , @NightBirdBlue , @3173v3 , @31TeV

P.S. I'll try to catch up on my feedback today--but as an overall? Reading these entries is just a fantastic reminder of how much creativity and talent exists on this site.

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Life motto for Bob, the host of The Quick Dating Game: "I'll have a drink."

Why does he have that motto? Have you read about his job? He has to deal with the general public which, as everyone knows, is a horrible job. He just wants to get away from all the morons who are trying to be funny, or sexy, or cool, and are absolutely failing at it. But deep down? Yeah, he really hates having to deal with other people, even if he is quite good at it. That's why the producers let him keep his job, despite his attitude and tendency to drink heavily.

Bonus:

Don: Well, that was quite a show, wasn't it Bob?

Bob: Don, why are you still talking to me? The show is over, so I'm ready to go get a drink. I'm not even going to go home first.

Don: Oh, come on now Bob, the show is over, you can relax now.

Bob: I plan on relaxing. Didn't you hear me talking about that drink?

Don: Fat, drunk, and stupid is no way to go through life, Bob.

Bob: I'll go through life any way I want to go through life here, Don. And at least I've got the looks to actually make it on camera, unlike you who only can manage to do voice-overs for prize announcements.

Don: Bob, that wasn't fair.

Bob: Screw fair Don, I need that drink now. You get to sit behind the glass in the booth with the microphone, while I have to deal with all the maroons.

Don: Bob, mind if I join you in that drink?

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Wednesday
"If you're leaving this place, I'm going with you". It was her again. You looked at her beautiful face and melted the first time you saw her. She wouldn't ever leave you alone, and you shouldn't either. Her face never lies and you sense true hope behind those eyes and that little giggle. "Fine, as you wish. " And so you two walked off towards the mountains. She smiled. "You're an odd one. " And she was probably right.

Thursday
"Never bond too quickly. Humans come and go: the only one who stays the same is yourself."

I'll just go with Owen (my Barioth). He has some really bad trust issues. Other than that, he's older than any human would be. He fell in love with a girl once. She was gone when he came back from a hunting trip.

I'm really fucking tired so this probably sucks. Badly.

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Life motto of The Hero of Cake (Protagonist from the Hunt For Cake games): "The cake, surprisingly, isn't a lie!"

How he got it: After several games in which he searched for a cake, the Hero of Cake discovered that cakes are pretty easy to find. So, he debunked the saying 'the cake is a lie' with his new life motto.

I know, this is shitty, but it's the best thing I could think of.

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"If you sit there and just mope around, what will you accomplish? Grief gets in the way if that's your use for slacking off." ~Maximus Dante Xerxes (of course)

Why did he pick this motto? Well, Maximus wasn't born a wolf-human. He spent some time wallowing in sadness because he lost pretty much everything. However, he understood that he needed to move on and continue his mission.

Bonus: Jack didn't dare look at the Wolf God after he repeated his motto. Mr. Xerxes was right: grief gets in the way. But it was his family. Parents, mischievous siblings... Alas, Mr. Xerxes experienced the same thing.

He had to move on. Quickly.

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Thursday Jump-in: My imagination...well, I hope, given the fact I'm not even sure I'm awake right now, this makes sense.

Frantic breaths and the clicking of solid boots on the concrete floor were the only sounds through the dim room. Athena hardly breathed, but now, now she decided to might as well force it. This moment, the anticipation of this moment had haunted her for months. Ever after Leah's death, Athena only dreamed to hunt the man who had committed the crime of the century.

And now, here he was, beaten and scarred, terrified out of his mind. His wife had divorced him, his kids were gone. This was Hell, just like losing Sweet Leah.

"You killed the reminisce of one of my very good friends," Athena whispered, eyes flaming yellow and her stance overwhelmingly menacing as she stalked closer. "You killed the daughter of the woman who changed this world. And guess what..."

The man's mouth formed the soft word, trembling, "What?"

"Karma's a bitch."

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"If ya can't touch 'em, they're no-good diamond-stealing dead thieves. Either that, or their just really stupid." -Cornelia Burrnachi
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    Why did Cornelia have this motto? One: because she knows someone stupid that she can't touch, two, she's telling you to trust no one, and three, it ties to the book. She knows a ghost who's really stupid.


Bonus:


Cornelia: "Hey, Cabby."
Cabuvan: "My name is not Cabby, it is Cabuvan.
Cornelia: "Cabuvan schooven, I want to tell you something."
Cabuvan: "What is it?"
Cornelia: "It's just something I thought about.."
Cabuvan: "Please tell me what it is, Cornelia Quartez Burnacchi."
Cornelia: "First thing's first, don't call me 'Cornelia Quartez Burnacchi'. Got it, punk?"
Cabuvan: "I do not know who this 'punk' is, but I agree to your terms."
Cornelia: *forehead slap* "Okay, this is what it is, and I quote: "If ya can't touch 'em, they're no-good diamond-stealing thieves. Either that, or they're stupid.""
Cabuvan: "Hmm. Interesting. Who has said such things?"
Cornelia: "Uhh...you see, umm..."
Cabuvan: *realizes what she said and glares at her* "....."
Cornelia: "Uh, catch you later!" *zoom*

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"I don't need a reason." - Ryu (Guile) Katama.

He had grown up as an underdog, a street rat, a poor kid that had nothing but the rags on his back, a knife, and a prayer that he'd one day claw his way off the streets--and he did. He got stronger, made friends in high places, gained riches, respect, and power. Riches that he often gave away to others around him with hardly a second thought. Power that he used to protect the helpless. Respect to sway the ones around him to show mercy.  

Life hadn't been kind to him, he had the scars on his body to prove it, but he refused to turn away his fellow man when they were in need. If they asked him why, why he would care when others turned a blind eye to focus on their own gain? Well...

Bonus:

The purple-ish haired youth frowned at Ryu silently for a few moments as the crackling of the fireplace provided the only sound in the inn's luxurious room. Ryu paid his surly companion's frown no heed at all, casually polishing the katar blades after he'd finished removing the monster blood left on them.

"You know... I don't get you," he spoke up, finally.

"Yeah, you've said as much before." Ryu replied, putting the first katar away and then reaching for the second to give it the same care. "I don't think I'll become any less confusing just because you're staring a hole in my forehead, you know."

The mage snorted. "Aren't thieves, assassins, rogues--your whole lot--aren't they people who look after themselves? No offense, but what happened in Morroc made that pretty clear and every other assassin I've met never really gave a damn about anyone but him or herself. Why do you insist on helping everyone we run into? Why did you save me when we met? ... It's not like you had anything to get from it. It's one thing to be generous, but you risked your own safety for mine on a whim when I was a total stranger to you. And you've lost a lot more than you've gained by being free with your wealth."

Ryu shrugged. "Maybe it's because I know what it's like to feel hopeless, with nowhere to go. Maybe it's because I know how cold the world can be. Maybe I just feel better, knowing I've changed someone else's future. Maybe growing up on the streets made me daft, or maybe I was always a little crazy, who knows? Who cares? Should you really be complaining when whatever it is means that you're still alive?"

The mage frowned again. "So ... you really don't have a reason?"

"I don't need a reason." Ryu replied, shrugging, as he put his blades away.  

"I don't believe you. No one does anything without some motivation, without any purpose. The only people who I've see that are so free with their wealth and their lives are men who believe they could die any day. You act like a man who doesn't believe in his own tomorrow."

The assassin was silent for a couple moments after that, then he laughed softly. "Isn't that all of us, though? Who knows which breath is going to be your last or mine? ... Why hold back anything? I'm not saying I want to die, but, if I was going to tomorrow, I'd rather leave this world knowing I did everything I could to make it better."

"By throwing your life away?"

"... If necessary."

"You're right. You're crazy."

And Ryu just laughed again. He wasn't going to argue.

(Yeah, I did one. I'm probably not going to participate much because, as I've said, I'm trying to work on Magick Academy and hosting these and my spinal injury--which is giving me crap today, but seeing you all making such an effort made me want to give it a go.)

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I've already got a fairly lengthy backstory written down for this character, so I'll have to condense all that info into a shorter passage. After all, brevity is key this week!
 

"Don't ever feel like you have to go out of your way for the young just because they're young and you're older, Serrene. You don't owe them anything. Not special treatment, not extra protection, and certainly not your life," says Twankil.

"Did I ever tell you about my grandmother? She was very sick from when I was born. Couldn't even wipe her own arse, and my mother had to take care of her every need. An empty and pathetic life, if you could even call it that. An existence perhaps, but not a life. Life is about autonomy and making choices for yourself, and what kind of life is one void of even the most basic of choices? She died when I was still young and it was a relief for the whole family. Nobody wanted to see her suffer like that."

"Eventually, as my own mother grew old and frail, she fell ill with similar symptoms to my grandmother. It seemed as though the condition was hereditary for women in my family. Rather than slowy wait to die in pain and humiliation, she asked me to end her life, and I did. It was the kindest thing I could do. I'd already seen somebody go through all that, and it was just best for everybody involved that it didn't happen again, as upsetting as the act itself was. I've killed so many without hesitation but it's different with family, you know?"

"I don't need to tell you the rest. I didn't want to follow in my grandmother's footsteps and make life a misery for others around me, but neither did I want to be euthanised like my mother. I got to where I was through preparation and painstakingly hard work over years. And then the bastards tried to get me to go get killed in the Tiq. Thought I'd nobly sacrifice myself like a good little decrepit old woman so the spring chickens get a chance to repeat the charade when they themselves are barely able to stay upright leaning on their staffs. Fuck them, I showed them though! We all got out alive."

"So once again, Serrene, you're not young any more but you're still not dead. You've got your own life to live. Don't give them the satisfaction of having that control over your death."

Serrene, who was silently listening, now speaks. "With all due respect, Miss Twankil, I cannot imagine myself dying anywhere outside of battle. I appreciate that you have my best interests at heart. However, I can assure you that I will not be killed in the name of the State or even of Gunri. I believe it is the will of Jedgusn that I fight and die an honourable death, and as far as I am concerned my life and death are in His hands."

Twankil laughs a shrill and loud laugh, a spluttering coughing fit following. "Serrene, since when did you get so preachy? I'd heard that you were getting rather religious in your old age, but you of all people being such a strong advocate for Jedgusn's will? It's creepy, I must say. And you can cut that formal talk crap. What I said about special treatment for young people goes both ways, you know. I hope I'm not looking so old that you feel the need to talk to me like that. Talking of which, as you can probably tell, I'm on my way to becoming like my grandmother myself. I got over the initial illness, but it seems as though pumping my body full of BrGW-XI wasn't going to work forever. When I become unable to feed myself, Serrene, can you promise me you'll kill me? Please?"

Serrene chuckles a little, then smiles grimly. "Oh, to think that at one point I would have relished such a chance, but now it feels more like a burden. Very well, Miss Twankil, but I hope you teach me some compoundium spells in return."

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"There's a madness to my method and a method to my madness." - Nathaniel S. Ircine

"Do you believe I am capable of doing else? To be or not to be sane is the question. Or is it? Isn't the world a little bit more tolerable when you release that inner beast, that instinct, that fear? So many questions, so little time. From the dawn of time to now, this moment, this Planck second, I have been waiting for you. Time is such a tedious thing. The limit of my patience as time goes to infinity is zero. The time to wait has long passed. It's a shame really. I waited all this time to kill you, and now I have my chance.

You won't do me in this time.

Bonus:

“What the hell are you talking about?”

“Ah, there you are Mein, I was just looking for you,” the old man said, surprised at the young man’s arrival. “Now I can kill you. It took you much longer than it has in the past. I’d say about an extra 1,309 days more than the last cycle.”

“I don’t even know you!”

“It matters not, young one. Or should I say old one? You are in fact older than me. Old enough to be my father. Grandfather? Forerunner? I can’t remember. I had to wait eight billion years this time. You can’t-”

“I don’t have time for this!” Mein was growing increasingly frustrated. All he wanted to do was go the mall and buy the new PS4, only to be stopped by this man on the side of the road. Mein has always been bound by an unnatural compulsion to help others, whether they were in danger or not. His parents often had to punish him for talking to strangers and vagabonds-he just couldn’t help giving them money, or going with them to their cars.

But now he regrets his curiosity. Mein had enough of this ludicrous behavior. As the old man appeared to be getting more involved in talking to himself, Mein attempted to run away as fast as possible. An old man could not possibly catch him, right?

“I told you that I was going to kill you.”

The old man just appears in front of Mein. In an instant, it seemed as though he disappeared from existence, only to will himself back again. Before Mein could even comprehend the shifting of reality, his chest explodes. Looking down, Mein realizes that the doddering old fool must have ripped Mein’s heart out of his chest. What was once solid muscle and bone is now a gaping hole, devoid of anything, including blood.

“You can’t run this time, you can't run from time. You WILL save the universe again, even if your subconscious is telling you otherwise. I will break you. I will use you. You will save the universe again.”

“We Cursed ones are doomed to fulfill our roles for all eternity.”

Mein could hardly hear anything anymore. Everything was a blizzard of white, a wall of deafening sound, an overload of sensations.

“Welcome back, Mein Caractre.”


 

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9 years ago

Life Motto for Hans: "Why ruin a good story with the truth?"

Explanation: The man is a compulsive liar and inveterate charleton who makes a game in life of steering honest young men down a darker path to over-indulge in alcohol, drugs and sex for Hans's own amusement and to help him justify his own life choices. Handsome and charming on the outside despite his years of self-abuse he is still able to captivate and control even highly intelligent young students with his creative stories and no lie is too extreme if it is convincing and serves his purposes.

Nice guy :D

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9 years ago

"Be sure to 'ave danced your dance 'fore the Devil knows you're dead..."

In an alleyway, some hours past midnight but still too far from dawn, a stooped man stands in a dark corner. The corner is so black that he might have gone unnoticed, had he not been swaying slowly from side to side. He burps softly and the wind carries it away. The man turns his eyes upward at last; eyes filled with great worry suddenly relax.

"So, 'ave you danced your dance?"

The speaker stands but a few feet away. He is tall, with broad shoulders, and great green eyes. He stands casually on the cobblestone; he is comfortable in the darkness. Grinning a wry grin and with a slight cock of his head, he slowly -- almost casually, -- leans forward and plunges a knife deep into the stooped man's viscera. Viscous blood coats his hands and stains his tunic. It plummets to the cobblestone, and within the silence of the night, a sigh of relief echoes outward from whence it came.

WIP-Do Not Reply!!!

9 years ago

Monday Exercise

 

Fantasy: With his blood boiling his body from the inside out, Timothy Higgleston knew that today would be the day he dies.

 

Modern Adventure: Being arrested by female police officer in the strip club was most likely the most embarrassing moment of your life.

 

Sci-fi: The alien stares a Barbra with huge bulging eyes, stepping towards her with a hungry look, it starts speaking in a language unknown to Barbra.

 

Education: Hearing the gunshots from the enemy safe-house, you know that your target is inside. Quickly racing inside the building with your fellow soldiers, you are horrified that Adolf Hitler had not shot at you and your team but at himself and his wife with his own pistol, a Walther PPK 7.65.

 

School based: "Oh God, I'm late!" You exclaim, dressing yourself already twenty minutes late for your first day of high school.

 

Mystery/Puzzle: The dragon statue's arm swivels upwards opening a secret passage on the opposite wall. Tomb raider, Alfred Kennedy giggles with delight.

 

Fan-Fiction: Bartman evaded Chief Wiggums taser and ran for cover behind Wiggums' son, Ralph.

 

Horror: Dangling from the roof on a noose was Danny Ridge. His neck snapped at an awkward angle from the rope,he should be dead, but Danny was very much still alive.

 

Love and Dating: Alexander handed the rose to Sarah. "This is for you." He says blushing slightly.

 

 

Monday Bonus

 

Fantasy/Modern Adventure: The Angel was obviously part of Michael's choir, for even in the dark underground Alice could see his flaming wings.

 

Sci-fi/School based: "You are all here to become a flight commander, but I will tell you if this course does not break you, the enemy will." Drills the Instructor.

 

Mystery/Horror: Looking at the dead, lifeless body of Kathy Simpson you notice something. Her throat has been ripped out and and her body is clear of all blood.

 

Fan-Fiction/Love and Dating: Shrek seemed delighted with Thomas for leaving his family just for him. Thomas looking up at Shrek saying. "Shriek is love, Shrek is life."

 

Fantasy/Horror/School based/Fan-Fiction: The demon roamed the math corridor with Billy's broken body in it's jaws. Mandy and Grim look wearily out the window of the supply room.

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9 years ago

Only two days late this time :P

 

“The gods put us here for a reason, and that reason is to have fun.” – Zed (A side character in my upcoming story game)

After his mother died in childbirth, and his father became a drunkard pirate, Zed hasn’t had anyone to teach him important life lessons. So he made up his own ones, mostly involving reasons to get drunk and find attractive women.

Bonus:

Zed leaned back in his chair, a mug of lager in one hand, the attractive girl sitting on his lap held in the other. “You need to lighten up Richard,” he said, before taking a gulp of his drink. “Don’t you think so?” he asked the girl, who nodded eagerly in response.

Richard sighed, shaking his head glumly at his friend. “I’m not like you Zed. I actually like to try and be responsible every now and then.” He took a sip of his own drink, wincing at the strength of it. “What even is this you’ve given me?”

“See, this is exactly the sort of thing you need to stop doing” said Zed. “Who cares what the drink is? Just enjoy it!” He took another swig of his drink, before looking back at Richard. “There’s no need to worry about what’s in it. Hasn’t killed me yet, won’t kill you either.”

He watched Richard considering this, and smirked happily when he took another sip of his drink. “See? You can enjoy yourself.”

“There’s a difference between enjoying myself and doing what you do,” said Richard with a glare. “How many girls have you slept with this month alone? Three? Four? How do you think the gods feel about that?”

Zed almost choked on his drink when Richard said that. “The gods?” he asked incredulously. “The gods encourage it. Look at Lucy here,” he said, gesturing to the girl sitting on his lap. “Do you think the gods would have put a beautiful redhead like her here if they didn’t want us to sleep with her?” He leant forward, eyes meeting Richards. “The gods put us here for one reason, and that reason is to have fun.” Leaning back, he took another gulp of his drink. “Why else would they give us drink and women for?”

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9 years ago

Thursday:

"Where there's a will, there's a way."

A saying Vince has taken to heart over the past 17 years of his hellish life in a dystopian city governed by vampires. His mother was taken captive as a human slave, where his father took a liking to her and made her his personal servant. There, she gave birth to Vince Meister, a young sickly half-blood who barely managed to survive as a newborn. Though he was known as a half-blood, his vampiric powers never seemed to develop, causing many to shun and laugh at him. During classes however, he made up for his lack of physical prowess with knowledge and science, slaving away at new chemicals and potions wherever he could.

After being chased out and hunted down by rival vampires, he braved the cold desert and forged onwards to the nearest  rebel stronghold he had heard rumors of from books and maps. From fighting off vampires who far exceeded his own abilities, and striving to survive no matter what, he adopted this motto and strove forward in search for a way to cure the blight these vampires have set upon the world, as well as the reason for his mother's disappearance.

Bonus:

"Never give up, as gimmicky as that sounds; to give up is to stop searching for another way."

Vince says, stirring the ashes of the campfire with his short staff. It was rapidly getting darker as he spoke to the young girl leaning heavily against a nearby tree.

"Easy for you to say! You took those two ghouls with ease." She pouts, laying down in the grass.

"They're too strong, and way too fast. There's no way a mere human like me will win against those monsters."

"If strength and speed were the only things that made humans strong, than the human race would be extinct way before you and I could have this conversation." He replies, breaking out the meager camp rations he had packed with him. He had only packed enough for himself along the way, handing the hard loaf of bread to the girl. "Where there's a will, there's a way. Humans have always taken this to heart. No matter how strong the Vampires were, they could never find and kill all of them. With no superhuman powers whatsoever, they were able to fight back and even managed to survive and thrive in there stronghold somewhere west -- or so the stories have told." 

She chews on the bread attentively, as the fire flares to life, its green flames flickering through the woods.

"Cunning, knowledge, science, will. Countless attributes that the Vampires will never understand. They look down on humans as inferiors and beast. They underestimate humanity, and as long as there are people who stand against the vampires; humans will outlast them."

A brisk chill runs over the clearing, and the cacophony of many birds crying as the flew away can be heard. You quickly extinguish the fire with a few drops from one of the vials you keep on your person. "Lets leave. We've overstayed our welcome it seems." Packing your items into a small bag slung across your shoulder, you turn to find the girl standing around idly, her dirty clothes evidence of the long travel and lack of hygiene. 

"You don't understand Vince. No matter how much you are willing to kill or survive, they are plains above what humans can do. I have seen my family torn apart within a mere second. Can you do the same to them?" She asks, questioning his words. "It's impossible. It's delusional even."

Vince gives out a grim chuckle, the fatigue in his eyes from the many days of hard travel showing.

"I don't know if I can do the same thing those creatures of the night can.. But I intend to live long enough to find out."

Been a long week for me. Finishing these exercises as quickly as I can. Quality won't be the best, but I hope I did these correctly!

 

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9 years ago

Friday! - Write a short drabble (usually a "work of fiction of 100 words" or less) about an object near you. Can be silly, serious, happy, sad, utter nonsense, whatever. The point is to make something interesting out of the mundane around you by choosing your words carefully instead of using hundreds of them.

Bonus: Write a drabble-sized review OF your drabble--from the POV of the object itself. (Because it seems like fun.)

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9 years ago

@Will11 , @TheNewIAP , @Ogre11 , @Kwism1127 , @ecoLyte , @FazzTheMan , @ISentinelPenguinI , @Ford , @betaband , @Claw2k11 , @SonicTurboTurtle , @DerpBacon , @Romulus , @Chris113022 , @galobtter , @Swiftstryker , @BenCrucifix ,@MadHattersDaughter , @At_Your_Throat , @LeoScales7 , @Tim36D , @Jibble , @NightBirdBlue , @3173v3 , @31TeV  

(This week has been an amazing start. Thank you all for your participation, it's been great to watch. Because some of you experienced some unfortunate inconveniences--and so did I, frankly--you will have until the end of Saturday to finish up as a grace period. Besides, I could use some time to catch up on feedback before tallying all your entries up.)

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9 years ago

To be honest, I am a bit of a slob. I like to eat at the desk in my bedroom, and over time, a small pile of garbage has formed next to it. Now, you might not think that's a big deal, if it stays within the limits of proper hygiene, but I have a bit of an overactive imagination. While I am typing this, I am being stared at by drooling juice boxes, the life sucked out of them; by moaning hamburgers, half-eaten, half-rotten, lying on a plate of rattling chicken bones, while a shrivelled tea bag is yelling out, perpetually drowning in its half-emptied mug. The vengeful, decaying corpses of my consumerist greed. Now, usually, this just makes me chuckle, my hyper-active brain playing tricks on me again, but I could swear that that pile of trash was further away when I started typing this story...

Bonus: "Hey! Hey Noodles! Hey! Do you see what that guy's writing about us? He really has some nerve doesn't he? First, he doesn't even have the decency to properly finish us, or even to throw us away, but now he's bashing us as well? Well I'm not taking it, I'm out of here man. Can you poke Donut for me? Yo, Donut! It's me, Hamburger. Do you see what that guy's writing? I know, right? Let's get out of here. Can you carry Gingerbread Man, I think he lost his legs or something? What, Tea Bag? Nah, leave that whiny piece of trash behind."

 

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9 years ago
The alcohol prep pad lay there, waiting. It had been waiting a long time, and still it waited. One day, someone might need it, and it would be ready. But until that time, it would continue to wait. And wait. In fact, it had been waiting so long that the edges of the package had flattened out to conform to the surface of the cabinet beneath it. Would it one day meld into the cabinet itself? Only time would tell. And until that time, it would continue to wait.

Bonus:

Well, you know, it’s true. Waiting is what I do. Oh, I’m ready, sure. At a moment’s notice, I can leap into action. I’ve got a quality seal here and the alcohol is well-contained inside my package. Sure, it’s not a huge package, but there’s alcohol and there’s a wipe, so what more do you really need? As for that whole “melding into the cabinet,” well, that’s just bunk. I’m just relaxed while I’m waiting, you know?

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9 years ago

This drabble was based on my sextuple egg lunch today.

Mummy Egg and Daddy Egg sitting on the plate, Boy Egg and Girl Egg running around. Doggy Egg spin around and bite tail, Kitty Egg sit there yawn. Everyone happy. But Big Bad Fork come poke Doggy Egg, Doggy Egg bark, Doggy Egg angry. Big Bad Knife jump on Doggy Egg, Doggy Egg open, yellow everywhere. Big Bad Fork and Big Bad Knife attack everyone, everyone run away! Big Bad Guys eat all the eggies, but Girl Egg and Boy Egg hide behind beans, runs away and tell other eggies, grow up and cook knife with fork.
(97 words)

Bonus
You sicken me. You torture us in the most horrible ways - put us in boiling water or beat us, smother us in foul liquid and throw us on hot metal - all for your own personal preference, as if you think it's a sick game or something. You cruelly eat us alive and force us to watch one another while you do it. And then you have the audacity to make this juvenile story out of it, like you're just trivialising our suffering. For your information, "Mummy Egg" was my sibling born of the same hen, not my lover!
(100 words)

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9 years ago

(I don't know if this is a little bit too risque, but I was inspired to write this:)

I need her in my life again. To live without the sound of her voice is frustrating, simply agonizing. I need to see her darkened curves, beautiful symmetry encompassing me, telling me that I have no hope of escape. The varying pitches of her voice are orgasmic-I can feel her ragged breathing, hinting at her excitement. She needs me. She needs her Master to push to her buttons. I love it when she begs. Hearing her call out me is intoxicating; I melt without hesitation. I can’t wait anymore!

My beautiful speakers.

Bonus: How dare he treat me like an object! I have dignity, dammit! But nonetheless, his descriptions were … shall we say … interesting. I liked the sound of them. He piqued my curiosity. I wouldn’t mind if he, you know, flipped my switch. It’s been a little over a week. We were so loud, his parents almost came in and busted us. But it was so delicious! Goddammit, girl! Get a hold of yourself-he’s only one man! Fine, if he really wants me, I’ll be waiting. I am his favorite after all.

 

 

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9 years ago

The shiny polished surface of the long tube in front of me glimmers with the light above me. The buttons are polished and beautiful, yet I can't describe what it looks like. It's long and tubular, and it makes a melodic tone. It's amazing, and it's only something you can only dream of playing with. I hold it up in my hands and relish in its silver color. It is simply a masterpiece, and it is more than that. I raise it to my lips and blow. It tinkles with the soft noise. I put it down and feel the smooth buttons on the side. It is my dream. It is my life. I cannot live without it, yet I can throw it away and not be bothered. I can hear the low buzzing noise if I disassemble it and blow only into the head of the object. It's comical that, only six weeks into the school year, I have nearly mastered the art of the flute. And I thought it was going to be easy!

Bonus:

I think the girl is talking to much about me. I'm too modest for this! Honestly, when she wears lip balm and puts it on me, it is a little frustrating, but overall, she's doing great! The only thing I could say as a downside is when she did her band pictures. Oh, the horror! But I got through it while she was busy smiling for the camera. I was a shining star that day! But back to the topic! 

I think the way she portrayed me is pretty accurate. It is simply amazing to hear her compliments! Kudos to her and her polishing cloth for making me shiny! I. LOVE. BEING. SHINY.

End of story.

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9 years ago
"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH~~!!!!..." thump, the physics book went as I threw it across the room.

I'm not surprised my physics book just screamed when I threw it across the room e_e *sigh* this is either going to be fun or a pain in the ass...

"Ay! Ay yo ma! Pi'me up an flip me ova like one o' dem waffles! I cain't breathe hyre!"

What has my life come to if I don't find myself at least a little surprised by a talking inanimate object? I must be going mad or, perhaps, I already am.

"AY IM DYIN HYRE! AH AIN'T GOT NO TIME FOR YOU TO BE CONTIMPLATIN' Y'LIFE!"

It's screaming for me to help it now. Should I help it? Yeah. Will I though? Nah probably not. On the other hand, it may be fun - but last I recall, I don't particularly like text books - especially my physics one. It's all the way on the other side of the room now, dying... and besides, what has it ever done for me? It's done fuck-all, really.

Bonus



DIS MOTHAFUCKA LET ME DIE! WHAT THE FUCK KINDA HUMAN AIN'T SURPRISED BY A TALKIN' BOOK?! FUCKIN' HELP A BOOK OUT WHEN HE DYIN'! I DINDU NUFFIN TO DESERVE DIS SHIT!

He toils me around all damn day an' den he 'bout to open me up like a good human an' he throws me like I ain't got no feelings! What in the hell is wrong wit' him?! I was yellin for help an' he sat there thinkin' 'bout god knows what! He prolly thinkin' about what he gon' have for suppa! Fuckin' bitch-ass mothafuckin human. He think he sooo much better than me or any otha object - I ought ta punch 'im in the mouth for what he done to me.

Edit:: Fuck word count. Ain't nobody got time fo dat.

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9 years ago

An ode to the empty crisp packet on my desk.

The crisp packet sat there, abandoned. It was empty, its insides eaten days before along with a glass of disaronno. And yet the glass was long gone, removed, washed and drunk out of again. And so the empty packet sat there alone and waiting for the day when it would one day be moved from the desk that was its temporary home.

Bonus:

He’s right; I am waiting to be removed. And yet at the same time I want to stay. Perhaps it will be a wonderful adventure. I’ll be reunited with the glass and we’ll have so much fun together on our adventures. But what if it isn’t a wonderful adventure? What if I just end up sitting in a pile of other empty crisp packets, forgotten about forever? I don’t think I could cope with that. Perhaps I do want to just stay here after all.

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9 years ago

The silver chrome flask on the table was the most nondescript item imaginable. You must have seen them, shiny thermos used for coffee? But this Thermos was not like any other: inside was a small earring. Forged in the labs of Moscow this earring was the single most powerful object in the world. Genghis Khan invaded China to recover it and Napoleon, Hitler and Charles XII invaded Russia to try to capture it for their own (though they claimed other reasons).

Why did mighty nations fight and die over this, the smallest and most seemingly innocent of objects?

The answer is simple. 

Fashion.

It is with this word good reader that our story begins...

(I actually have no idea where I'd go with this story but I don't have much on my desk except an old Thermos I use to keep crap I find in my room in :) ).

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9 years ago

?I wiped the dust away from my old laptop, it had been a very good friend of mine throughout the 7+ years of it's life, but now it was it's time to put him to rest. It's charger had broken and some parts of it's screen were quite cracked, despite this it worked as well as it did on it's first day.

?I pressed on the power button and it's old cooler started to spin, throwing off the dust it had gathered during the 2 month period it had lain unused.

?The same screen as always opened up, except it's battery would only last for a few more minutes and then it would shut down for one last time. I felt almost sad about it as if I was about to throw away a old friend rather than a outdated laptop.

?I opened a notepad document and titled it "I'm sorry" and all that I wrote was:

?"I'm sorry, but this is the last time you and I will interact, you have served me well throughout your life, never once failing in your actions, but now you're broken beyond repair and I'm sorry to say that you will die here... Goodbye and I'm sorry. Signed, Your Good Friend and User."

?With that, I saved the file on the desktop and just waited and stared at the screen with a combined feeling of nostalgia and sadness until it's screen closed out for one last time.

?"Goodbye, old friend!"

?Bonus

?I felt my cooler turn on once more, finally, for two months I had lain unused, gathering dust, but now my user would use me again, yes, I am still usefull to him!

?Then I realized that my battery was low and said to the user who know was busy writing something.

?"Umm... hey, don't want to bother you or anything, but I need to be recharged." I said to him. At that he only smiled bitterly and continued to write. "Where is Charger anyway, you took him away and he never came back."

?But my question was answered... the user said that I was broken beyond repair and that he appreciated my services throughout the years, but that these were our final moments. I couldn't take it, so I shouted desperately.

?"You can repair me, I know you can, through all these years you managed to repair me, I'm sure you can do it again user... User?" I asked, instead I only got a saddened smile and then as my life had only a few more seconds, I said.

?"I'm scared... don't leave m..." Before I could even finish however, my systems quickly shutdown one by one, as such, in my last moments I said. "Goodbye..."

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9 years ago

Sorry, I was busy the other two days:

She was sitting there. Watching me. It was past midnight and I was stuck on a fucking AR simulation flight on Batman: Arkham city. You know the ones. That is when she called out to me.

"Tim. Stop playing Batman and play with me."

"No" , I said, "I have to beat this and do the Riddler Missions."

*Mission failed*

"But Tim", She said, "It's been such a long time since you played with me."

"I don't care. I need to do this."

*Mission failed*

"Well I need YOU! Please, I'm begging you! PLAY ME! PLAY ME LIKE ONE OF YOUR FRENCH GIRLS!"

"No! I... I have to beat this AR mission!"

*Mission Failed*

"WE NEVER PLAY ANYMORE! I WANT YOU TO PLAY THE SHIT OUT OF ME TONIGHT UNTIL THE SUN COMES UP!"

*Mission Failed*

"N... no, I... ugh..."

*Mission Failed*

*Mission Failed*

*Mission Failed*

"TIM!"

"FFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-"

*Mission Success*

"..."

"... Yus!"

My PSP went untouched that night.

 

Bonus:

FUCK HIM! I JUST WANT TO BE LOVED! HE USED TO WHISPER TO ME THAT I WAS THE ONE! I WAS HIS FAVORITE! WE PLAYED PEACE WALKER ALL THE TIME! I LOVE HIM SO MUCH, BUT HE DOESN'T LOVE ME! ALL HE LOVES IS HIS OLD XBOX 360 WHORE! FAT BITCH!

TIM, IF YOU'RE READING THIS, KNOW THAT I LOVE YOU! I DREAM OF YOU EVERY NIGHT! OF YOU PLAYING WITH ME! COME TO ME, TIM! COME TO ME!!!

 

 

why

what the fuck me

i need to sleep

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9 years ago
The programmable remote control balanced on the end of the couch. It was a very dangerous act. If it fell, it would land on the cold stone floor and most likely fall apart, or worse, get a bump. Well, its whole life was dangerous: it lived in constant fear of the remote gang, that thing. They weren't all too happy that one of those cocky fancy programmable things would take the place of the fourteen irreplaceable, original remotes. Every one of them served their own special purpose. Why didn't their owner prefer character over convenience? Now they were collecting dust in the cabinet below the TV, together with the DVD player, Blu-ray player, Wii and its plentiful accessories. He was living the thug life, that remote. And it loved it. The attention it got as a reward was priceless. Its full color led display and the orange lights that lit up whenever their user needed a guide. It was their best friend, it was. With that thought it bravely continued its act, hopefully waiting for somebody to pick it up.

Day 9834, 17:48
They are chasing me. I can feel it in my motherboard. Their attacks are thorough and ruthless. They never do half work: I can remember the last time anyone angered them. They are like an angry mob and they have friends everywhere. I didn't originally want to mess with them but I was left no choice.

Day 9828, 21:99
That day is finally here. I expected this day to come. Have mercy on me, Lord. I beg you, please let them keep me in one piece. Please, don't let them break my LCD screen.

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9 years ago

Alright, I'm sorry to say this, but you might have to remove me from your tag list. I'll respond when I can, but between homework and my actual writing projects, I don't think I'll have much time to write things here.

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9 years ago

Understood, good luck.

Week One Scores

9 years ago

@betaband - 13
@Ogre11 - 30 !!!!!!!!!!!!
@Romulus - 13
@Chris11302 - 9
@3173v3 - 14
@TheNewIAP - 1
@LeoScales7 - 30 !!!!!!!!!!!!
Mayana - Not on tag list, but good effort.
@FazzTheMan - 6
@BenCrucifix - 25
@ecoLyte - 14
@Ford - 0 (due to incomplete / improperly complete exercises)
@Tim36D - 18
@31TeV - Monday: 30 !!!!!!!!!!!!
@NightBlueBird - 7
@Malkalack - 1
@SwiftStryker - 13
@DerpBacon - 13
@At_Your_Throat - 12
@Will11 - 4
@Kwism1127 - 1
@Jibble - Monday: 6
@MadHattersDaughter - 5
JJJ-thebanisher: Not on the list, but I was thrilled to see your entry. Thank you.

This week ended in a 3 way tie between Ogre11, LeoScales7, and 31TeV. Excellent work, you guys. I need to talk to 3J about point rewards, though, as I really hadn't been anticipating this (though I should have) so please be patient.

As for the rest of you, even though I was judging by the restrictions of the exercises and by consistent participation, I think you all did wonderfully. This was a great first week and you should all be very proud of your efforts.

PS: If you did Friday's exercise and you did not receive points for one or more parts of it, then please remember that I said drabbles are 100 words or less. While the "work of fiction" part is optional, I am sticking to that word count. Likewise, if you did the "category" sentences, but did not do five sentences to five categories as instructed, you did not receive points for that. If you have questions or complaints regarding your score, please PM me. Also, I will catch up on my feedback when I am able, but I have had an intensely busy weekend. Thank you.

Week One Scores

9 years ago
Horray!  I got one!

Congrats to Ogre11, LeoScales7, and 31TeV.  You deserve a pat on the back.

Edit:  Sorry.  Replied to the wrong post...

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9 years ago
Yay, LeoScales7 & @31TeV! Hooray!

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9 years ago

View Point Handouts Here

I have awarded points for the first week of the writing prompts! See the above link for a complete listing of the points that went out. Any questions about your point score goes to Kiel, who also got a little something.

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@Will11 , @TheNewIAP , @Ogre11 , @Kwism1127 , @ecoLyte , @FazzTheMan , @ISentinelPenguinI , @Ford , @betaband , @Claw2k11 , @SonicTurboTurtle , @DerpBacon , @Romulus , @Chris113022 , @galobtter , @Swiftstryker , @BenCrucifix ,@MadHattersDaughter , @At_Your_Throat , @LeoScales7 , @Tim36D , @Jibble , @NightBirdBlue , @3173v3 , @31TeV  

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9 years ago
Woo-Hoo, thanks 3J!

Writing Exercises Restart - Week One

9 years ago

Lol, when I first saw this, I was exhausted, so I was all "Eh? ... But I thought I wasn't getting points for participation, since I'm writing the exercises..." and while I was fumbling around with my phone, I ended up visiting my page by accident and realized: "Waaait a minute, something's different, weren't there only three of th-- oh. O.O" 

xD For whatever reason, the notification didn't pop up for a while, so I was pleasantly surprised. And honored, thank you.

(It still kinda looks like a pencil, though, lol.)

Writing Exercises Restart - Week One

9 years ago
Wow!  Congrats!  You definitely deserve it!

Writing Exercises Restart - Week One

9 years ago

Thank you. ^^

Writing Exercises Restart - Week One

9 years ago

:)

Writing Exercises Restart - Week One

9 years ago

Much as I feel like celebrating for being closer to my goal, I can practically feel my writing muse clawing at me because... I still owe this site at least one more big, feature worthy story, don't I? :P (xD And then there's my other goal of a featured story for every category, but I'm trying not to kill myself, so one step at a time.)

Writing Exercises Restart - Week One

9 years ago
Congratulations!

Writing Exercises Restart - Week One

9 years ago

Thanks. ^^