Player Comments on Boobs!!!

I was actually very surprised that this wasn’t just some kind of troll post, especially with the name, and the depth and detail contained with such few pages is just mind blowing to me.

The sheer amount of figurative language and symbols is very impressive. The way that the ending caused such an amazing chain reaction that gave the reader a mind blowing realization, and forced them to reread was similar to that of Life of Pi, but the way that you did it completely blew the insignificant title out of the water. The way that you used the bees to show so much surpasses any that of Ray Bradbury and George Orwell tenfold.

I like how this was open to all genders, which provided for not only multiple playthroughs, but also for an insight into the other character’s lives. Allowing the readers to see what it’s like for a female bee growing up during this time period is crucial to the overall theme of the story, which I’m not going to spoil, and the way that it is done certainly shows what a great author you are.

The character interaction and growth is unprecedented, and I absolutely loved how much I got to know them as I continued to read. I feel that it is difficult to create a specific personality and keep it consistent throughout a story, but the way that certain events changed the characters in such a realistic way, and in such a flawless one at that, takes the story to a whole new level.

The setting couldn’t have been more perfect. The change in the surroundings of the characters from when they were little, to when they finally grow up gives the readers not only the backstory, but also creates a connection between the story and real life. I love how much of a direct correlation there is between the change in setting and the change in character.

I felt such a deep connection with the characters, and I think that this reason alone is what makes the love in this story so much more than what most people believe to be love in real life. The way that you condensed a lifetime of love, pain, fear, anger and every other emotion imaginable in a story is mind boggling. This story has opened my eyes to what real love is, and its absolutely amazing how I could feel the passion between the characters through my screen.

While romance is an important part of what makes a story, I certainly wouldn’t have loved this as much if it was all sunshine and rainbows. You mixed in the inner conflicts with the outer ones perfectly. Most stories focus on either the thoughts and feelings of a character, or the details of the setting, but you have once again blended these two components better than most, if not all, best sellers. The action that you created actually had my heart racing, and I found myself unable to look away at all while reading this masterpiece.

I feel like this alone is going to change CYOAs forever, due to the perfect detail in which I could picture in my mind at any given point, I think that there really isn’t a choice in making the first ever CYOA inspired movie series. With the amazing detail, there probably won’t be a need for a director, and after reading this for themselves, I’m sure that actors and actresses will be fighting for roles so much that they wouldn’t even need to be paid. After the world sees what a magnificent read this is, everyone will immediately drop whatever they are doing to help speed along the process of bringing this to the big screens. I can’t wait until the movie is finished.

While there were a few grammatical and spelling errors here and there, it didn’t take away from the flow, and it definitely didn’t take away from the overall experience of reading such an amazing and unique CYOA type book.

I haven’t read that many of your stories, but this certainly has persuaded me to check them all out. I wish that other authors on this site could learn from you, becuase it is sad how infrequent stories of this caliber are on this site.

I don’t give many, but this has definitely deserved it.

8/8

I would say this was better than about 70% of all of the research papers I receive. First of all, you used some punctuation in the right places. I noticed commas, and I noticed periods, and when you used periods, they were at the end of sentences.

Furthermore, you often paragraphed, and you recognized that when you have a new idea or turn of thought, you have to paragraph. Right there, you are way ahead of my first-year students. I'm not kidding at all.

You used letters for words, like "u" and "r" but that is totally the norm for freshman essays, and you also didn't cite your research. But you didn't paste in the actual internet links into your paper like an incompetent cheater, so I think that's a wash.

You actually had an idea that you could reasonably call the thesis, and I knew what it was from first paragraph or so. That is better than most sophomores. You also had a catchy title, which I require for all papers, but probably well over 2/3 of my students still title their essays "ESSAY #1." This semester, and I am not making this up, a student spelled her *own name wrong* on her essay and when I pointed it out, she just said, "oh, yeah." You did not spell your name wrong, so I gave you points for that as well.

Then, when you were done, you stopped, instead of padding it out with pointless content. And you didn't write to me asking me when I was going to grade it.

I am more than half tempted to link this to my syllabi and say "if you can write as well as this I will pass you and I am not joking."

Absolutely beautiful.

holy shit this was so bad it was good it was great it was astounding it was wow like how did you do this what you are so amazing so cool respect 11/10 so good

Best written story I have ever read, almost matching Tolkien in it's masterful use of the English language.

I may nvr bee the sme.

5/8
Dang, this was actually interesting.

lots to think about here

da fauk

This story game taught me that male bees are the evolutionary original, and ultimate gooners. Literally willing to throw it all away to goon. Worth every cent.

I never knew that

The bad grammar really drove me up a wall here! please tell me why there is a story title that is called "boobs". NO. just no.

¡Excelente! Aprendí mucho.

The Greatest of All Time

Definitely not what I was expecting when I opened this. XD

this is the best story ecer

i respect you but not this story.

8/8 is perfect in every way... It has perfect grammar,amazing story telling, and interesting facts.

First off you have bad grammar did you ever go to grade school and second wtf how old are you!? BOOBS and bees don’t mix I have a suggestion you go get your degree in spelling and then we talk

8/8 i can see clearly now

Very informational. I didn't even know I was a girl till I looked down and saw my boobees.

stop

boobee is actually a good charity foundation I'm shook

Wow. This is a funny story game. A true representation of lolrandom shit on this website. I love this.

Overall Rating: 7/8

SO AESTHETIC

Very gud, enjoyed informachun on bee-kaind, wuld reed agen.

I learned things about bees that I never wanted to know. Thank you.



5/10

fine

LOL

heigh qualty

Nah.

hands down the most educational story i have read on here. Learned a lot about bees!

I now noe zat bee haz boob. Me ferry enlightened. Me clap clap. Will, u geniuz.

Mmmmm, booba.

Interesting.

Awesome. Loved the spelling!

i liek bobes verry god

Hmm...

Pretty damn good

This was quite interesting, and getting to know facts is good. However, there are two very little places you can change:
1. Punctuation. At the start of a sentence, and after a fullstop, use capital letter to make it look neater instead of random letters around the page. This will make it look more like a passage or a sentence.
2. Text talk. Text talk is frequently used on the Internet, but being a story or a fact instead of a chat room, you could use normal words.

So overall, I think this is quite good and useful, so I gave a 5 :)

So, when I originally rated this story I rated it much higher. I thought it was pretty funny and I felt obligated to rate it higher than I should have. Going back to it again, I really don't think this story should still be published. I am well aware that the author is an accomplished writer and that this was made as something of a joke or experiment but it honestly doesn't meet the standards asked of the other authors on the site, especially new authors. The myriad of spelling mistakes, often nonsensical content, and lack of any real coherency would get any other story laughed at for a week and then unpublished. But this story has been up for over a month and currently stands at a 5/8 rating. I'm sorry but I honestly think that's kind of messed up, especially when there are other stories with much more work and content put into them with both a lower ratings and less people rating them. Again, I understand that this was a joke and something of an experiment. But I feel like the experiment is over and we've all had our laugh. As funny as it's been I feel like it would be best to unpublish it. If only to avoid the droves of noobs who will use it as an example of, "Why was Boobs!!! not unpublished but my illiterate story was?"

Either way, it's up to you what you want to do. I hope you have a nice day and continue to make the great stories I know you can create.

What I learned from this is that queen bees are fucking sluts.

Spoiler alert

cANceR

Bee.

Best story ever 8/8

oh well

This brilliantly insightful reading should absolutely be read by more people. I was enthralled all the way through.

Was far more educational than I thought it would be. I feel enlightened.

Huh?

Good read!

To bee or not to bee boobies

Herro this is a gud storie, keep it rup

1/8, made me cry.

not enuf boob leafing mad comet

Max enlightenment achieved

You're like, crazy...

Orge is a tranny CONFIRMED.

Haha I loved this :D I think we should have a special category for these kind of stories so my Land of Bad Writing and Pokémon thing can join this masterpiece in someplace glorious :D :D 8/8

Absolute art. Would read 100 times. 8/8

best game ever m8 i r8 8/8 m8 no h8 m8

Very short, and it is likely a joke. But it's not all that bad, except for the intentional spelling errors.

Fake News!

I learnt a lot about bees today! ... Though I am rather disappointed in the distinct lack of boobs. :(

It was exactly what I expected it to bee.

I liek this yay

This story is a true masterpiece. I now know so much more about bees and boobs than I could ever have dreamed. And yes, I fapped.

I am in tears, I have never been so moved in my life.
8/8 more accurate than Purr's story.

What is this game?

beep boop....boo beep....boobees.....beeboobs

I laughed so hard I cried. I’ve taken up beekeeping now. Bees are my passion. And my life. And my love.

Boobs!!! is truly a remarkable story from Ogre and should be featured.
This story is probably the best edutainment I have read. The grammar was impeccable, the branching style was perfect, AND there was even meaningful gender choice.
I learned a lot about bees from this and am considering my old dream of being a beekeeper again. The prose was humorous and educational with just the right amount of naughtiness. ;)
Keep making masterpieces like this, Ogre, and you'll be a top author in no time. My one complaint was that it ended so soon.

In short, I nut.

I laughed, I cried, I clicked through it in about twelve seconds without reading anything to get my free point.