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I've left constructive comments on a few of them already, I'll try to give some critisism to all of them before the end of the week.

On it.

Giving feedback is pretty fun.

I read Mercenary 

From: Bfinelsen
To: Yummyfood
Date: 3/3/2023 10:36:41 AM

Hey boss, 

saw ur comment this is a project for my school.

i really do not care about the story itself i really wanna just get a good grade.

 the one question i have is, what do you do with your life?

Instead of stalking choose your story maybe go out and talk to a woman.

4 paragraphs is crazy, im not reading that shit. Instead, how about you suck my nuts you fat, bald, basement dwelling, cheeto eating, momma's boy, dumb dum bubble gum stupid lookin ass bitch.

Fuck you and the school that taught you propper grammar. 

love Bfinelsen. :)

I regret nothing lol.

lol

Hope he got graded already since the story has somehow been deleted. Damn this old site and it's glitchy ways.

What grade are these kids in

8th

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From: TypewriterCat
To: Bfinelsen
Date: 3/3/2023 11:17:29 AM

You're still evading the question.

From: Bfinelsen
To: TypewriterCat
Date: 3/3/2023 11:16:22 AM

hop off my dick, why do you care sm. is this all you have going for you ? 

From: TypewriterCat
To: Bfinelsen
Date: 3/3/2023 11:15:27 AM

You didn't answer my question, so I assume the answer is yes.

From: Bfinelsen
To: TypewriterCat
Date: 3/3/2023 11:14:11 AM

genuinely wonder my nuts in your mouth. I'm sorry, did i piss off your lap dog bitch boy, and he had you message me? Grow up mouth breather lmao

From: TypewriterCat
To: Bfinelsen
Date: 3/3/2023 11:11:34 AM

I'm genuinely wondering, is going to random writing sites, publishing games that don't meet minimum site requirements, and then bitching like a faggot when people give you bad reviews, a hobby of yours?

Brilliant idea, would be hilarious. You have my support if that matters.

Lol

kek

Who deleted it?

I didn’t get a chance to read it and experience all of the fun you guys had.

Nice!

In 9th grade we had to write a short story and I went overboard with mine and ended up having five fucking chapters to it.

I think each chapter was like maybe 4-5 pages, but it basically was a small "book" when I turned it in. (Triple stapled the pages, top, middle and bottom left side)

Keep in mind this was the old days too, so I was actually using a typewriter. Though I'd written it all out by hand (in cursive) before typing it out. I think it wasn't until like grad school that I got out of the habit of hand writing everything before typing it out.

Thank you so much!! I put a lot of work into Homework Girl (probably a little too much for the class), but I really enjoyed making it, and I'm glad that some people also enjoyed playing it! I have a couple other ideas that I might still want to make, so I might stick around and make a couple of those ideas too!

I absolutely loved the squirrel game. You did well @Brotherhamster

Thank you! You're all correct, haha, this is a school project. We're highschoolers in a video game design class. Most of us really appreciate the constructive criticism left in the comments. I republished mine to fix the endless restarts that many of you pointed out- thank you! I didn't consider how annoying that could be. I doubt I'll actually improve the game any further after its graded, however. I have no comment on The Boys Go To Miami and unfortunately can't speak for the guy who made it... All I will say is please don't dox him, or any of us for that matter. This website is neat!

Good kid.

You're one of the good ones.

I can say that because I'm brown.