Player Comments on 331 Oakmount Drive
This was very good. I really enjoyed the horror and overall feeling of this story. The writing was quite descriptive and lively, and clearly plenty of effort was put into making this quite a thrilling experience.
I liked the unwitting horror premise, and there's so many ways to meet your demise in this game that winning was both a challenge and quite fulfilling in the end. I started this with already good expectations, but I'm happy to say that this story did a fantastic job in succeeding my previous expectations.
Needless to say, I rated this quite highly and I can see why this storygame is regarded well, as it's quite entertaining.
Bravo on crafting a very spooky but enjoyable horror storygame. ^_^
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TharaApples
on 3/21/2017 6:36:54 AM with a score of 0
Wow... somehow, I ended up getting the exact same ending that I got the first time I played this game, a million years ago! I guess I was so caught up in the story I didn't even notice! The writing is PERFECT--not too long and redundant, but with enough detail to keep you hooked--the choices are good, and, overall, I'd say this is definitely the best horror game on the site!
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Badger
on 12/2/2008 10:47:11 PM with a score of 0
This game is fantastic. It's in the classic "choose your own adventure" format, is exciting, well written, and has an original (scary!) story. Very impressive. Congrats.
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march5th00
on 6/12/2007 12:45:17 PM with a score of 0
about as scary as the turd i crapped in the toilet
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— michael on 8/5/2024 9:02:16 AM with a score of 0
well that was interecting
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Phoenixthe1st
on 7/12/2024 5:30:32 PM with a score of 0
better
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— n0 on 12/1/2023 8:18:34 AM with a score of 0
hello
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— n0 on 12/1/2023 8:17:40 AM with a score of 0
It's good for a short story!
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RiverStyxx
on 2/8/2023 10:02:15 AM with a score of 0
Very short, a lot of build up for not a lot of pay off. The options left much to be desired.
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— Heather on 2/2/2023 6:51:59 AM with a score of 0
i hate this
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— kayla on 5/28/2022 3:23:14 PM with a score of 0
this shit ass on gromp realistic skull emoji
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— Gwid on 4/6/2022 11:50:08 PM with a score of 0
jac
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— kack on 4/5/2022 8:20:28 PM with a score of 0
war gut
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Bruha12
on 3/20/2022 1:21:33 PM with a score of 0
Very interesting, but not as horror-y as I was imagining. It was still a delightful read but there was some grammar mistakes, weird plot turns, and small odd description and dialogue. Other than that, you did a good job!
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AestheticLlama
on 4/21/2020 8:02:14 PM with a score of 0
This was an interesting and creepy story slightly let down by poor pacing and a short length.
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JerkyJacob
on 4/19/2020 9:35:22 PM with a score of 0
*SPOILERS*
This is an excellent example of how to do as short horror story. The mood setting is superb and the story is something that could actually happen, making it even scarier. I absolutely loved it.
I'll start with the things I like about it.
You crafted characters very well, establishing dynamics between them even with the shortness of the story. Their interactions are believable and make sense, and the way they act given a stressful situation makes sense as well and fits their character.
The plot is unique and something I haven't heard of before. Your setup of an innocent cleaning job (with some sinister undertones thrown in) gradually devolving into horrifying madness is beautiful. It's something done often, but you do it very well.
Now, the few things I didn't like.
There were a few spelling and grammar errors throughout, but they were hardly noticeable and didn't distract from the story or ruin the mood. You often used two exclamation marks or other excessive punctuation, but it wasn't to the point that it was obnoxious. I would cut down on that in the future, but it's not a huge deal.
There were a couple instances of inconsistency with knowledge of the characters. You have links to the same pages sometimes and sometimes they give conflicting information. There was one time where you'd already met Mrs. Alexander by going into the kitchen, then when you get back to the foyer to escape, she's there but Alex doesn't know who she is. It's not a big deal and doesn't take away from the story if you're not looking super closely, but I'd just like to note it.
When you meet Mr. Alexander in his office after searching it and finding the newspaper clippings in the book, he enters, and explains the situation calmly, it feels like there should be another choice than "Run!" The narration notes that he gives a sound explanation of the previous events, and I wanted to see what would happen if Alex stayed and listened to him. I'm sure you could easily integrate another death or a path to the bathroom with the body.
6/8 :)
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Megumeme
on 12/17/2019 8:53:08 PM with a score of 0
I didn’t like it
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— H on 4/13/2019 9:04:06 PM with a score of 0
Great story! I can picture the house in my mind!
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— Jaiden James Samples on 3/17/2019 8:39:08 PM with a score of 0
The storyline is good and interesting but too short !
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— Kuro on 3/7/2019 4:29:03 AM with a score of 0
A bit short.
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Geordie
on 2/25/2019 3:45:42 AM with a score of 0
The story is... okay. The characters seem to have had quite a bit of care put into them and depth. But, suffice to say that their dialogue is very cringe-worthy at points. It doesn't seem very real and the horror aspects of the story seem rushed and predictable. Speaking of rushed, the pacing is not the best. The story goes from 0-100 real quickly instead of transitioning slowly towards, for example, a chase scene. I had no idea what was going on because all of the sudden Mr. Alexander was evil. In stories like this you need to give time to develop a character, especially the antagonist. You never gave a reason to fear him.
Anyways this review is more of a rant so it isn't exactly organized, but I hope the author of this story had improved from the feedback given when this story first came to be.
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Cheete
on 12/14/2018 10:37:52 AM with a score of 0
Clap clap clap. Very good game but it only took me around 10 minutes to find the good ending. It succeeded in making me feel frightened even with the overdone brutal murderer plot.
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— Szy on 11/4/2018 8:39:10 AM with a score of 0
Oh, I died! Very fun story.
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Quorrah
on 9/1/2018 4:58:15 PM with a score of 0
Great story! it's good at keeping you wanting to read on and go back to find other endings! you put in a lot of effort into this and it shows. Good job!
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— lisha on 8/21/2018 4:51:57 AM with a score of 0
This is really good. Wish I knew how to actually make one.
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thisisme
on 6/14/2018 4:18:36 PM with a score of 0
It was alright
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ItsMeowjic
on 3/3/2018 1:15:15 PM with a score of 0
Very enjoyable, and I wish you made more than just this one story!!
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TrueParanormal
on 3/1/2018 8:47:07 AM with a score of 0
My first time playing I got away pretty quickly, I was curious about what else there was to find so I kept replaying it and I died many times. There are so many paths to take, it's wonderful.
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Rachael
on 2/10/2018 4:42:19 AM with a score of 0
I certainly loved it. While it wasn't horrifying as far as I had gotten, I did enjoy the descriptive details that were put in. I might play it again sometime in the future just to see how far into it I can get.
However, I could only rate it 4/8 because of one thing: Lack of intense horror. To me, it was just mildly scary. But definitely worth the time.
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Okisan
on 1/16/2018 3:20:38 PM with a score of 0
it's ok.
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Crazy8
on 1/10/2018 7:33:07 PM with a score of 0
I liked how there were several different endings and the fact that the choices you make actually produce different opportunities, endings, and choices.
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HorrorFanatic
on 1/9/2018 8:35:44 PM with a score of 0
pretty good, I like the death scenes the most
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DarkFang74
on 1/5/2018 6:42:01 AM with a score of 0
I feel that you could have made it longer, but it was still very enjoyable!
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— Ella on 12/21/2017 1:49:01 PM with a score of 0
Great story!! I was on the edge of my seat the entire time! Still not breathing!
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— Belle Melander on 12/15/2017 11:30:37 PM with a score of 0
It's a fun little story. Several different paths to take, most ending in death. Unfortunately, there's heavy emphasis on "little" story. Even getting to a good ending was still relatively quick. I feel like this story could have benefited from taking a little more time to expand it. More thorough descriptions, deeper characters, a bigger house to explore and a slower build to the danger and horror would have easily changed this fairly simple concept into something much deeper and more memorable. But, as I said, it's still fun despite being short. 5/8
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Glandros
on 11/27/2017 10:57:39 PM with a score of 0
why so this story so short?
and I didn't understand the story
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nate123456789
on 11/13/2017 9:08:36 PM with a score of 0
Well that's easy... just take another look at the scary kid and I'm out. Wow! :)
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TestingJest
on 10/5/2017 12:36:32 AM with a score of 0
this story is amazing my heart was beating so fast this whole time wondering if i could control them and let them live
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— illegal_potato on 9/25/2017 3:27:50 PM with a score of 0
It's way too hard
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21rowcma
on 8/30/2017 7:36:57 AM with a score of 0
Great story
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gorecat
on 8/24/2017 9:24:05 AM with a score of 0
The story developed too quickly and there wasn't enough detail in the writing for me to feel actually scared. I still enjoyed it, but it could have been greatly improved.
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QueenOfSpades
on 8/15/2017 6:14:13 AM with a score of 0
I feel that it was bit harder than said and and also a bit shorter too still it was nice
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Sebsie
on 8/12/2017 12:20:33 PM with a score of 0
Did not live up to its potential.Very disappointing.Still, it was well-written.
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— Mike H, on 8/8/2017 9:00:14 PM with a score of 0
I'll play it again before rating it. This first time it was disappointingly short,but showed potential.
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— Mike H. on 8/8/2017 8:55:10 PM with a score of 0
A bunch of random choices with random consequences
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Morituri
on 7/11/2017 3:49:27 PM with a score of 0
WHAT HAPPENS TO SOPHIE AND ALEX???? DO THEY LIVE?? WHO IS MR. ALEXANDER??
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— angry commenter on 5/30/2017 9:07:17 AM with a score of 0
wow gruesome af but AWESOME
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— kendrick on 5/29/2017 7:39:28 AM with a score of 0
Nice game, wish it was longer but overall a good job.
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GCMStory
on 4/23/2017 4:08:46 PM with a score of 0
in some choice you have no other option. e.g. saying hello to the deformed child after meeting up with Sophie. It became obligatory in the story.
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— pup on 4/19/2017 7:24:54 AM with a score of 0
It was a good story. It scared me a little bit.
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— Victoria on 4/18/2017 12:35:27 PM with a score of 0
It's a really nice game, very scary, but I still don't really understand why the read-headed women is eating the organs of young women. Still, a fantastic game!
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— Sasha on 4/17/2017 11:10:42 AM with a score of 0
This was a really good story and seemed hard with some decisions just wished I could of lasted longer. 8/10 would recommened
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— Jack Learoyd on 3/26/2017 8:32:28 AM with a score of 0
it was a great story I like the ending
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— some dude who liked it on 3/19/2017 7:49:20 PM with a score of 0
This story was very entertaining, I liked it.
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ReadingforEver
on 3/17/2017 8:38:37 AM with a score of 0
This has been quite a very interesting story and it's very well put together!
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— Dalton stone on 2/16/2017 11:15:22 PM with a score of 0
Good
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— Joepbwoy on 2/13/2017 4:01:29 PM with a score of 0
Not bad. I enjoyed it!
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— Jim on 2/11/2017 3:49:54 PM with a score of 0
Not bad! I got to be a millionaire in the end, but there are tons of different endings.
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Tawnystar
on 1/31/2017 1:20:20 PM with a score of 0
I kinda wish it was longer, but other than that I liked it. I guess I got the good ending? Seemed to wrap up pretty well without a lot of bad stuff happening.
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— Kisskissfallinlove on 1/18/2017 10:19:10 PM with a score of 0
It's pretty okay and creative, but for me, really short.
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— Nobody on 12/26/2016 10:59:14 AM with a score of 0
Hey! :-). I loved this story. Was on the edge of my seat the whole time, since entering the mansion. :-). Anyway, my character and her friends managed to get out alive. Yay. :-). Anyway, as I said, great work, and I look forward to delving into your upcoming stories! :-). That mister Alexander was dead scary. But also verry well articulated. In fact, I feel the whole story flowed effortlessly from start to finish. Honestly. Glad I played wisely. :-).
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— Rahila on 12/22/2016 12:43:51 PM with a score of 0
Wish it had been WAY longer!
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— Quorrah on 12/14/2016 11:20:43 PM with a score of 0
The ending where their throats are slashed was totally unexpected. Well written.
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— Ec3 on 11/27/2016 10:12:17 AM with a score of 0
Got A good ending this time but I still think we could survive longer sure I became A millionaire but don't you want to know what happened in the mansion? (Rated 8/8)
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TinyTerd10
on 11/13/2016 10:23:52 AM with a score of 0
I got the off to the left ending and rated 8/8 it really wasn't to scary at all but then again horror is very hard to do and I got a very early ending I knew that would be an ending but I still did it because I didn't want to act like everyone in a horror movie like WHY WOULD YOU GO TO THE CHAINSAWS FOR A "WEAPON" JUST CAUSE THE CAR LOOKS CREEPY? EASY ESCAPE DENIED who agrees with me that horror movie characters do the stupidest things?
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TinyTerd10
on 11/13/2016 1:53:47 AM with a score of 0
Hey, that's pretty good!
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dumblooserstop
on 10/21/2016 1:06:15 PM with a score of 0
This was a great game, I had a lot of fun playing it. You should really try it!
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— Jerry on 9/8/2016 11:28:10 AM with a score of 0
This time a saved someone!
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BigRonn77
on 9/7/2016 3:20:25 PM with a score of 0
Woo Hoo safe and a millionaire! Fun short story with plenty of choices.
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BigRonn77
on 9/7/2016 2:51:44 PM with a score of 0
it is a vey good book i liked it better than reeses cups
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— sally on 9/2/2016 10:50:34 AM with a score of 0
Its fun
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Pinnacle_stanley
on 8/7/2016 10:36:43 PM with a score of 0
really good! i liked it!
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— cupcakegal on 8/4/2016 5:59:13 PM with a score of 0
This wasn't as scary as I had expected, but well-written nonetheless.
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Crescentstar
on 8/1/2016 11:18:24 AM with a score of 0
great amaizing
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— riley hardwick on 7/20/2016 7:01:37 AM with a score of 0
Ok this is just like the original Choose Your Own Adventure
Book series. And that is excactly what i wanted
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— Ian on 7/2/2016 10:23:27 AM with a score of 0
that was not what i acpected
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— Me on 6/27/2016 8:54:06 PM with a score of 0
So many endings owo
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Seto
on 6/12/2016 6:41:17 PM with a score of 0
Great fun! :)
Not the longest or most original of stories, but it's very well written and a great distraction. It's interesting, quirky, with characters fleshed out enough to invest in them :)
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RobinMask
on 6/9/2016 3:42:38 PM with a score of 0
Pretty Good, very short.
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DragonGirl246
on 4/28/2016 3:36:02 PM with a score of 0
Its a good story.
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Karateprincezzz
on 4/21/2016 7:05:19 AM with a score of 0
Short but good!
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— Nick on 3/25/2016 2:59:56 PM with a score of 0
Very interesting. kept me playing for a better ending each time
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Paladin
on 2/18/2016 2:57:20 PM with a score of 0
I'm very sure this was supposed to be longer, but from my point of view, it was very short. Well, the door miraculously opened, and NOTHING happened that I'd like to call 'scary'. Nice try.
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— Little Critic on 1/23/2016 6:21:15 PM with a score of 0
First CYOA I've read in years and it was a fun read.
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— new guy on 1/14/2016 1:49:27 PM with a score of 0
Chilling & eerie..nice plot
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ketienya
on 1/8/2016 8:12:11 AM with a score of 0
WOOW
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— Best Game vever 11/10 on 12/2/2015 2:54:25 PM with a score of 0
so bad...
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Erce87
on 11/25/2015 4:15:44 AM with a score of 0
Sweet i'ma millionare!
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— Jacob on 11/12/2015 9:02:34 AM with a score of 0
Great job. I really enjoyed it. The plot was very good and the story cleverly written. This book is very good.
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HerobrineBlockson1
on 11/6/2015 10:54:29 PM with a score of 0
Short but fun.
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Galootius
on 10/26/2015 5:31:19 PM with a score of 0
"Wielding a butter knife." Oh I love it! this is one of my favorite story games on this site! Well done. :)
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Blazewhisker
on 10/20/2015 9:28:50 AM with a score of 0
I like the story.
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— James on 9/18/2015 2:31:55 PM with a score of 0
well this is just wonderful 4 choices and I get my face ripped off...
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— me on 9/10/2015 8:07:28 PM with a score of 0
Exceptional. This is the best storygame I have played. The story is not especially long, but the brevity does not diminish the quality. Yunakitty's diction and vernacular are wielded masterfully to give the reader just the right amount of context and character development. Even in this short format the senses of anticipation, suspense, and fear are well developed.
If I were to give any advice it would be to expand on the personalities of the characters more (to enhance the reader's relationship with them,) and to build anticipation just a little longer before throwing the reader into the horror. Also a trivial note: there is a typo on the very first page, which was a bit of a downer.
8/8. Play it and play it again.
Cheers, Yunakitty
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dueconsideration
on 9/10/2015 4:42:37 PM with a score of 0
Wow... This game was incredible. The writing was perfect, not too 'over' and not tok cliché. This game somehow reminded me of the witch's house. I loved it! It made me look like I am the original character. (Well, obviously that's the point of these games) But it was brilliant. Enjoyed playing this! <3
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Redlily01
on 8/19/2015 3:23:07 PM with a score of 0
i didn't want to die so it left me angry
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— i got eaten on 8/10/2015 10:33:02 PM with a score of 0
I can understand how some can see this as horror, though I personally wasn't affected, and, other than a problem with the first sentence, it is well written.
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DeathIncarnate
on 7/26/2015 6:45:26 AM with a score of 0
I liked it but it would be better if it was a bit more developed and had some extra characters though. Overall alright
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— hijsn on 7/17/2015 4:41:55 AM with a score of 0
Yayy, I'm a millionaire! But I won't spoil it.
Good God, this was seriously creepy and pretty messed up. I love it! Keep up the good work!
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GMB13carat
on 7/3/2015 9:46:34 AM with a score of 0
That was a quick and painfull death.. Don't expect that soon. Overall it's really well written. I just wish it'll give more suspense rather just jump into the climax so soon. I'll get back to this.
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Max_Hadrian
on 6/20/2015 9:16:21 AM with a score of 0
Well written and truly feature-worthy. I felt so curious about the story that whenever I would reach an End, I would just go back and try different paths. Due to this, I discovered that this game was actually quite hard or might be too short for my liking. However, all in all, I believe you did a really good job!
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Penworth
on 6/6/2015 1:52:23 PM with a score of 0
Wow... it was different, but it was only mildly enjoyable. I guess I'm feeling some type of way, since both my characters died...
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— Maraa_cruzi on 5/24/2015 2:26:10 PM with a score of 0
Eh this is OK.
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Fiercerose123
on 5/22/2015 4:53:53 PM with a score of 0
Worth every cent!
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JustSomeNerdGirl
on 5/17/2015 6:51:41 PM with a score of 0
Good story line, just bad detail.
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TheBigCheese
on 5/13/2015 10:51:20 AM with a score of 0
Very fun story! Nice use of setting.
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— SkinderJella on 4/22/2015 11:57:08 PM with a score of 0
It was quite short but the quality of the writing was fantastic! I really enjoyed this story. Maybe the author could make it a little longer?
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Mystiquo
on 4/17/2015 4:14:42 AM with a score of 0
Very good!
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Creature
on 4/9/2015 3:30:52 AM with a score of 0
it was cool you should make more plz
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amythekiller125600
on 4/5/2015 5:07:27 AM with a score of 0
That was a great book, I`m usually not one for choose your own adventures but I got bored. Anyways, this was good, not THE best out there, but CERTAINLY not THE worst. Thanks, and take care.
-Lucy
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— Lucy Georgic on 3/21/2015 10:34:32 AM with a score of 0
Are all endings death? It is pretty scary, and gross. Nice game.
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WizzyCat
on 3/21/2015 9:48:15 AM with a score of 0
Wow, very good.
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betaband
on 3/19/2015 6:45:00 PM with a score of 0
I certainly enjoyed it, it provides comedy, as well as a good story, and, frankly, a wide variety of choices.
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crsc3110
on 3/17/2015 4:00:59 PM with a score of 0
Coll story bro
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— Barack Obama on 3/15/2015 8:26:23 PM with a score of 0
GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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— MLG360STORYREADER on 3/14/2015 4:57:03 PM with a score of 0
Amazing story, great choices and some very funny comedy throughout. A must-play.
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ninjaman1399
on 2/26/2015 10:50:01 PM with a score of 0
I'm surprised but I wom with just about no problem with a few choices I like the game and it was fun.
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Fableheath
on 2/24/2015 10:08:15 AM with a score of 0
I dont like it.
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— priya on 2/17/2015 1:31:05 PM with a score of 0
I died
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gravy
on 2/8/2015 8:18:05 AM with a score of 0
It kinda creeped me out.It was good
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— Fuck on 12/30/2014 7:31:21 PM with a score of 0
Nice game.
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Shinobi
on 12/16/2014 12:01:17 AM with a score of 0
i survived happily!
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dailynnem
on 12/14/2014 8:17:23 PM with a score of 0
I really liked this, but I do wish it was a little longer. Plot was great too!
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— Karkitty on 12/14/2014 5:34:57 PM with a score of 0
Omg you should definitely play this story more than once! The first ending I got was a bit disappointing, but it's getting better and better! :D
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Mejuffrouw
on 12/10/2014 10:23:50 PM with a score of 0
It was absolutely amazing the writing was incredible and I felt as if I was in the story nothing but intrigue and adrenalin
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fbrrrs
on 12/10/2014 4:21:43 PM with a score of 0
What was up with the girl that was all deformed?
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Captianobvious11
on 12/8/2014 10:09:30 PM with a score of 0
Awesome
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— Aspen on 11/18/2014 12:15:36 PM with a score of 0
Short but cool
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Shadowgirl21
on 11/18/2014 12:03:26 PM with a score of 0
I think I won
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XxDragonslayerxX
on 11/3/2014 8:07:26 PM with a score of 0
pretty good:) I got out almost TOO easily
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— liv on 10/28/2014 7:32:57 AM with a score of 0
not a bad story plenty of endings and unexpected traps, you're writing is fairly good, i think you could have had a bit more description but it wasn't bad at all.
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mokaevans
on 10/19/2014 4:10:20 PM with a score of 0
Cool story, decent writing and intresting characters played through every ending, i have 2 minor complaints
*Because of a short story i wasn't very connected and it wasn't a amazing experiance
*Endings do need a bit of work but the deformed kids and elixa? sorry if i get her name but these ideas...GREAT including the ritual thing goin on but great story
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— !@#$%^&*() on 10/13/2014 4:50:56 PM with a score of 0
what a horror..!
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Farsah
on 9/30/2014 6:35:51 AM with a score of 0
It was an alright game, beat it the first try:)
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— marvelcomiclesbian on 9/26/2014 8:41:43 PM with a score of 0
not good, but not bad, i sayeach part is kinda fun,at first i just chse things to choose them but, i realized and chose the correct ones. it was weird,
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— Tess on 9/20/2014 9:27:58 AM with a score of 0
This was a really great story! I loved how detailed and realistic it was! The only thing I didn't like was the ending...
Keep up the great work!
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alleycat
on 8/18/2014 7:08:40 PM with a score of 0
Trying to find out the mystery of this house was fun.
It feels like many of the outcomes of your actions are impossible to predict and your choices are based on guesswork rather than figuring out the best option.
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31TeV
on 7/14/2014 1:45:32 PM with a score of 0
This was just great it was not the best horror story I have to give that on to Anti-life.
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24freddy
on 7/12/2014 1:37:20 PM with a score of 0
cool, but very easy.
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norton158
on 7/5/2014 4:40:06 AM with a score of 0
The story was too short with not much explanation for course of events.. Its pretty much win or die on every decision..
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salvator786
on 6/27/2014 8:41:16 PM with a score of 0
DAM CRAZY
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— Chris on 6/1/2014 7:05:34 PM with a score of 0
It's really creepy...
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Tapiocaqueen
on 5/25/2014 12:51:38 AM with a score of 0
Pretty fun. I died from Mr Alexander.
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Dudeman101
on 5/15/2014 12:08:10 PM with a score of 0
a very nice story and storytelling! it's a very compelling story, even though i had a hard time visualizing the room layout. kudos!
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chenliyong
on 3/4/2014 8:20:48 PM with a score of 0
AWESOME GAME!!!!!!
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— PIE on 1/27/2014 10:16:17 PM with a score of 0
well this sucked
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dfyf
on 1/23/2014 3:40:12 AM with a score of 0
A Very Good Horror Story, its also creepy with the fact the Mrs. Waited on the car, on my second ending however I think like "How The F*ck this Maid can stay here" I Also still wonder what Jonathan have in his paperbag..
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RabbitSeason
on 12/25/2013 7:09:52 PM with a score of 0
I liked this but i wished it was a bit scarier and full of a little more depth.
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taivy9166
on 12/18/2013 10:53:53 PM with a score of 0
this story kind of cheesy
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tsantsan
on 12/1/2013 9:08:11 PM with a score of 0
I have only had 1 ending so far. Let's restart :D
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— michael on 11/10/2013 12:52:40 PM with a score of 0
The writing is good, clean of mechanical errors and generally interesting. That said, the choices felt very arbitrary; as far as I could tell, there was no real indication of what choice would lead to a good outcome. Rather like most of the old Choose Your Own Adventure books, you're pretty much just guessing. The story was not particularly frightening, though the premise was interesting.
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Sszinid
on 11/6/2013 7:22:10 PM with a score of 0
That was a awesome story, I loved it.
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dischead
on 11/3/2013 9:25:38 PM with a score of 0
Loved it.
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Fletch
on 10/28/2013 10:48:46 PM with a score of 0
It was really good, thank you for writing it and I hope to see more in the future. :)
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— Josh on 10/19/2013 7:20:07 AM with a score of 0
died a few times, a bit short though...
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Grev
on 10/14/2013 10:28:07 PM with a score of 0
i got the good ending hey make a game of the slenderman
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— no on 10/12/2013 10:49:36 AM with a score of 0
It was fun. But you should have made the difficulty 5/8
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Rockdude11
on 9/21/2013 12:23:00 PM with a score of 0
Well...
It certainly is mechanically sound, and it is somewhat enjoyable. I've played it three times now in the past few minutes. Here are my complaints-
First of all, what struck me was how impossible it was to discern one choice from another in terms of smart or stupid. There are no hints in the writing, and no real way of knowing what is and isn't a good idea. I just know what I would do in this situation, and apparently, that would kill me.
That's forgivable, though. I can roll with that, so long as it's scary.
It's scary, right?
...that's the other problem. The writing is good, if this were a mystery or a thriller. But it isn't. A good scary story needs atmosphere, and this story just doesn't have any. There's no lead in, no subtle touches that clue you in that something is wrong. It took me several tries to even get a clue of what was going on, because different paths have little bits of information, that don't make sense unless they are all together. For that reason, this book is fine. Not great, not awful.
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Thewaiter
on 9/18/2013 5:08:45 PM with a score of 0
It was ok
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— john on 9/14/2013 10:42:17 PM with a score of 0
Wow...heart pounding! I was really rooting
For the good ending. Thank goodness I got it. That was
Crazy.
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ethereal
on 8/21/2013 2:06:08 AM with a score of 0
Well writen and creative. A bit short, but that's not a problem at all, because it gets across what is needed for the story.
It would be nice to have had it be longer though.
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SteelMachete
on 8/20/2013 4:59:40 AM with a score of 0
I never cared much for the horror genre, so maybe that's why I don't get the end at all. There didn't seem to be many choices except for "go into room A" and "go into room B;" I wish there were a few more choices for the player. Still, an interesting story.
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Christian_Writer
on 8/9/2013 10:10:15 PM with a score of 0
I felt like I had hardly any choices, and I didn't. If I cannot make a logical choice in this game, then it does not deserve a good rating. In a Choose Your Story game you are supposed to be able to CHOOSE YOUR STORY. There were hardly any different endings, and multiple times you asked me what to do, but gave only one option. Another complaint; I didn't have the choice of whether to be male or female (or in some cases other), and I didn't get to pick a name or make my own.
This wasn't a good C.Y.S., but it could have been a good story.
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skillfulljack
on 8/4/2013 11:13:00 PM with a score of 0
Found the choices a little short, but all in all I will go back through for multiple replays.
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Aeon_Spiral
on 7/25/2013 4:10:52 PM with a score of 0
While there were some minor spelling or grammatical errors, I can say I had a pleasant time despite the short length of the story. Whether or not I would have been able to see the children I'll go back and look because, apparently, they're there somewhere. I noticed that, in most instances, the bolder options gave more favorable outcomes and that not being a hero will most-likely get you killed. Still, it was a very enjoyable read, and I will definitely go back to look for any more favorable endings that I may have missed.
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jkulibert2
on 7/16/2013 9:48:17 AM with a score of 0
This was cool!
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Ilove1D
on 7/8/2013 11:35:51 PM with a score of 0
Way to short...not enough options....has a lot of potential tho, good premise.
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RPGAnalyst
on 6/30/2013 4:08:01 PM with a score of 0
I REALLY LIKED THAT GAME! Could use some usable equipment and deeper character storylines, but aside from that. A pleasure to read!
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karmanicci
on 6/18/2013 10:10:56 PM with a score of 0
Okay, but very short and more random than strategy.
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— Jen on 6/16/2013 5:20:01 PM with a score of 0
I wish the story was a bit longer but overall very enjoyable.
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Soreallyfake
on 6/2/2013 7:33:34 PM with a score of 0
This isn't really a choose your own adventure, at least as far as I've gotten. Every decision I made immediately ended the game before I could get into it. One choice is illogical, but right, and the other will kill you. I can't possibly get immersed. Very displeased!
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— Apple on 5/27/2013 1:04:48 AM with a score of 0
meh theres to many ways to die and length isnt a 6 its more of a 2 or 3
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Wilko19
on 5/19/2013 5:32:27 PM with a score of 0
Really enjoyed my time in this story. I just wish that some of the branching lead to longer trails.
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Mikey2slow
on 5/18/2013 9:45:05 PM with a score of 0
It's a good game, rather intense even though short. Kinda wish there was an explanation though for the murders and things, especially the charred books.
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Rossatronix
on 5/13/2013 12:04:08 PM with a score of 0
This was really fun and interesting! Nicely written, and a perfect puzzle game. It kept me hooked!
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StrawberryKitten
on 5/1/2013 5:26:50 PM with a score of 0
Really liked this
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Fran_911
on 4/20/2013 2:47:40 AM with a score of 0
I liked it!.
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Panther
on 3/20/2013 11:47:51 PM with a score of 0
Thank goodness it isn't that long. Was shit scared. Well-described. And I became a millionaire. cool.
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toni
on 3/13/2013 11:26:11 PM with a score of 0
It was very short :/ well written though , not too many options . Not to be rude , just being honest .
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— Anonymous on 3/13/2013 3:31:40 AM with a score of 0
I have to admit the game certainly was not the best but it is a way to burn off some boredom
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logster9
on 3/9/2013 10:27:11 AM with a score of 0
The story was great. It was well written, so much so that I wished it was longer. Despite it being game based there was a lot of magic to the words that enabled be to picture evert scene. As with most stories, the detail is important to the reader. I want to read more!
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— Rishal Sangan on 1/23/2013 1:58:23 PM with a score of 0
good, but wish it were longer.
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carissabutler
on 12/28/2012 4:23:20 PM with a score of 0
Seth says MEH!!! Interesting and creative, I liked it. 5/8
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SethIsBeast
on 11/7/2012 4:11:52 PM with a score of 0
Great next time make me poop
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— keel on 10/25/2012 10:19:57 PM with a score of 0
This is very awesome
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— Jasper on 10/12/2012 7:32:45 AM with a score of 0
niiiice. kinda reminds me of something.....
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Marmotlord
on 7/20/2012 2:25:26 AM with a score of 0
Ridicuously dangerous!
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RobustSporadic
on 6/26/2012 5:49:14 AM with a score of 0
awesome! scary!
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Hoten5
on 6/25/2012 3:45:16 AM with a score of 0
This one was pretty good. Using your gut instinct helps a lot, buuuut sometimes i had to go back a few times to get all of the endings.
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— Jordan on 6/2/2012 9:31:41 PM with a score of 0
good i beat the game
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haledakota
on 5/20/2012 9:16:18 AM with a score of 0
Nice story, it needs a little more depth to itr
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lmarin83
on 4/28/2012 3:09:12 PM with a score of 0
Pretty good. I like stories that don't go on and on, so I liked this one. :)
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doodller
on 4/26/2012 9:18:46 PM with a score of 0
Pretty good. I like ones that there aren't too many options and the pages aren't extremely long. This one was absolutely amazing. I think I found all of the endings. If you ever decide to make another one, you should have items. Can't wait!
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Pengu_333
on 4/22/2012 2:12:38 PM with a score of 0
...Good.
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Swiftstryker
on 4/2/2012 1:34:42 AM with a score of 0
ok
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betaband
on 3/4/2012 9:20:02 PM with a score of 0
cool storyline
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ZenUndead
on 2/23/2012 12:46:21 PM with a score of 0
i got a good ending.Pretty good,could use some improvement.
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jarvan
on 10/29/2011 9:11:51 AM with a score of 0
Too many crappy endings, too many ending in general, and all similar endings make this game reveal no more additional information about the characters.
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— Tony on 9/7/2011 3:07:07 AM with a score of 0
This story was really great! There were several different endings and I felt inclined to go through and find them all - it's an excellent way to spend extra time in a computer class! :)
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— symdrone on 8/29/2011 12:09:13 PM with a score of 0
Wow that was so fun. It was really long too, took me a while to get out of the house safely. But really cool, i liked it a lot
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lliz_brs777
on 6/2/2011 6:18:57 PM with a score of 0
Short yet good.
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Killer999
on 5/25/2011 2:33:40 PM with a score of 0
Short and simple, but still entertaining.
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RenHaru
on 5/17/2011 3:54:11 PM with a score of 0
Bo approves
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ThisisBo
on 5/3/2011 9:28:39 PM with a score of 0
It was good, but a bit longer than my attention span can last.
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English_Kinigget
on 4/28/2011 10:12:25 PM with a score of 0
This story didnt last as long as I would have hoped unfortunately :(
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— Ms Debra I Clason on 12/4/2010 4:46:09 PM with a score of 0
Very fun adventure! I'm using this as an example for my class as we do a similar PowerPoint project.
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— Andy on 10/28/2010 5:21:43 PM with a score of 0
Just be ever so careful.
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— Jamie on 4/10/2010 3:28:26 PM with a score of 0
bich ass game!
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— rer on 3/3/2010 3:05:46 PM with a score of 0
How could anybody eat women's organs to have a healthy child. How ridiculous!
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— Jamie on 12/24/2009 6:26:54 PM with a score of 0
its good but boring
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miller100
on 8/28/2009 6:38:07 PM with a score of 0
That was chilling...
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Juranas
on 8/28/2009 12:55:02 PM with a score of 0
Good story but Mr. and Ms. Alexzander are very stupid to refare to medeval riturals but good story i syrvived but with a scar and shpohie
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— 123colby123 on 7/20/2009 4:43:34 PM with a score of 0
It's definitely creepy...
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MsDuck
on 4/30/2009 4:22:46 AM with a score of 0
i like the detail and the fact that every path is different.
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slothman11
on 4/17/2009 5:32:36 PM with a score of 0
Well written, sweet story. I especially liked how each path was unique, and the whole background story is not explained until you read every path.
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urnam0
on 1/26/2009 1:02:06 AM with a score of 0
Darkest story I've ever read. This is real.
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Vitamins_n_Stds
on 10/18/2008 12:38:18 AM with a score of 0
One of the best stories EVER!
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FEfan
on 7/18/2008 7:52:08 PM with a score of 0
That was a true under-the-covers story. I play so many game centric games that I forget what a story-centric games like this feel like. Of course, being a story-centric game, it is a bit disheartening to see a few typos and seemingly random occurrences, but it's easy to forgive those.
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Melike
on 4/3/2008 10:14:07 PM with a score of 0
Very,very,very good. I'd give it a 7/8 because I thought there was more cussing then there needed to be.
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goosebumpsreader
on 12/29/2007 11:57:34 AM with a score of 0
I had a good time with this one. Very well written.
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Smallfry
on 12/6/2007 10:40:05 PM with a score of 0
could have been longer but that wuz pretty good!!
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emma101rox
on 12/1/2007 1:16:53 PM with a score of 0
What a good game! Good description, good.. well everything! This game ocks!
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goosebumpsreader
on 9/8/2007 10:39:05 AM with a score of 0
An AMAZING game! It was nice and long, but a little linear, but very good grammar and a lot of effort. Nice job.
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Anubis
on 3/28/2007 4:37:30 PM with a score of 0
the game is sucky long and boring and i hate your name change it
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— bob on 11/15/2006 10:03:41 AM with a score of 0
This is an awesome game! No way to make it any better, it's brilliant. On my good list for sure.
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October
on 10/28/2006 12:51:33 AM with a score of 0
I'm not really a fan of horror/suspense, but it was done really well: excellent writing, very descriptive, good plot.
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tsmpaul
on 10/26/2006 3:44:19 AM with a score of 0
Excellent story- it's great to play a well-written game
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Sethaniel
on 10/16/2006 9:43:11 PM with a score of 0
fantastic game, it was well written, very suspenseful, creative, and had a very intersting plot, great job!
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firestorm78
on 9/20/2006 12:00:07 AM with a score of 0
Without question one of the best stories on the site. Extremely well written, creative plot, great descriptions, and enough choices. Miccy - waddya mean, quality over quantity? The quality is impeccable, and it IS a story. You're supposed to read, not just click through a bunch of two sentence pages. Excellent work, please write more!
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madglee
on 9/13/2006 1:19:29 PM with a score of 0
it was great i did not get killed
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— jade on 7/10/2006 10:36:41 AM with a score of 0
Pretty good! ^_^
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— Ashen Snake on 6/7/2006 9:24:07 PM with a score of 0
I passed it by clicking back whenever I died. I am sure the story wasn't that bad, but nobody likes it when every page in the game takes forever to read. Quality over quantity next time.
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— Miccy2000 on 2/8/2006 4:22:55 AM with a score of 0
This game is THE best I've ever played
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— Tidus on 7/19/2005 8:05:25 PM with a score of 0
That was excellent, and it should definitely be featured. It was written very well, and should be appealing to any sort of adventure gamer. You should wrote more, it was great fun!
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— Mina on 4/19/2005 3:12:24 AM with a score of 0
Nice ending! I finally understand the wole thing about Mr. Alexander. I played this once before, but I died early on. Really nice story, and very suspenseful.
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— Badger on 4/14/2005 12:20:47 AM with a score of 0
bit more finished, with some definate endings, but still a couple of loose ends to clean up! great story though like I said. Take some time to finish it pleease. post on the message board if you need some advice at any time. Great story yuna.
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— march5th00 on 3/20/2005 7:29:05 PM with a score of 0
Totally awesomne game! Just great! Wonderful! Completely awesome!
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— The Master Survivor on 2/17/2005 6:10:55 PM with a score of 0
I don't like leaving unfinished games category featured. Please finish this game, or it'll have to be removed. Hope you're still around. This game has crazy potential and is beautifully written. but there are dead links, and there's nothing more annoying... well almost nothing. Great game, just finish it!!
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— march5th00 on 2/16/2005 9:23:53 PM with a score of 0
this is the second time ive read this story and i have to say im still impressed. this has got to be the most intense and suspenseful story on this site. please finish it though, those bad links are killing this game.
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— nate on 1/11/2005 2:36:18 PM with a score of 0
This could be one of the best games on the site if it was finished
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— choco2 on 3/2/2004 2:44:49 PM with a score of 0
it's a great story! I loved it! I just love it when people on this site make complete sentances, and don't use alot of slang. the only problem with it was that there are some links that just lead to a "new page" page. anyways, it's a great story, so keep it up!
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— kassia on 10/19/2003 2:20:03 PM with a score of 0
I'm sorry i just clicked buttons did i win!
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— Julious Jay Bradford on 10/14/2003 5:42:48 PM with a score of 0
Very nicely written. The descriptions evoke appropriate feelings of dread. It's a short game, but challenging and quite fun! I enjoyed playing through it.
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— DuckandCover on 9/11/2003 11:32:17 AM with a score of 0
Not too bad, but you'll want to finish off the dead pages.
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— Freebooter on 9/10/2003 9:13:17 AM with a score of 0
Cool very long it must have token you a while it was good from a scale of 1 to 10 i give it a 7 but come pages wernt done.
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— Golden on 9/6/2003 4:22:57 PM with a score of 0
This is a very intriguing story, but there are a few links that are missing. Finish this and this game will be one of the more scary stories on here.
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— nate on 8/25/2003 11:20:50 PM with a score of 0
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