Noticed that the other thread was starting to get pretty long, so figured I'd make a new one. Been reading through the comments of POF today, and here are a few of my favourites:
parts of it were hard to understand. I come from a Christian background so the concept of slavery and forcing children to kill is foreign to me, let alone, it being acceptable in ancient times. certain liberties were taken I assume. gladiators were men, not children and I highly doubt a master would allow a child to fight in the arena
-- JasonX on 6/19/2017 1:53:07 AM with a score of 0
... Considering he comes from a "Christian background", the guy's obviously never opened a bible if he doesn't understand the concept of slavery.
this shiz is pretty kool dood did this instead of homwork lol thx for the good me me's -- Nick on 2/25/2017 10:11:04 PM with a score of 0
Glad to know my game is the reason you're getting held back another year. ^_^
NICE ONE, FEW GRAMATICAL MISTAKES BUT ITS OKAY PLS MAKE PART 2 -- sn3akmo on 9/28/2016 10:57:48 AM with a score of 0
I just like the irony in this one.
It was nice except for one thing...it didn't have a dolphin. -- Hu Da Phuc on 6/1/2016 6:36:19 PM with a score of 0
Damn, I knew it was missing something. >.<
no cursing please -- greda on 1/28/2016 12:36:42 PM with a score of 0
Fuck off.
why do you do this kill your self -- wtf on 2/17/2017 10:43:41 AM with a score of 0
Okay! ^_^
It was an interesting story. Much better than the other one I did. -- Zeaundra on 1/24/2016 5:49:32 PM with a score of 0
Yeah, yours was shit.
I'm usaully a silent reader, but this story changed that. I laughed, I raged, I nearly cried, God I felt like I was there! And not just becausethe story was in second person! Please don't see my comment as a fake, "pay me to make you look good" type of thing. This is a genuine response and I've honestly never been this into a story! YOU HAVE TO READ IT! I could see this as an actual hardcover book! Even a movie! Love the author keep up the good work! Love love LOVE this story! XOXOXOXO Also, to whoever is reading this, please understand I'm not being paid to write this comment! (I tend to say "I wonder how much he/she got paid to wtite that..." when I read comments for anything lol so I'm just putting that out there for anyone who's like me!
-- Tasha on 6/14/2016 11:32:52 PM with a score of 0
£5 well spent. ^_^
5/7 -- Niggatron 5000 on 11/1/2017 1:48:51 AM with a score of 0
... Yeah, this one's not interesting, I just really liked the username.
I wouldn't be surprised that all the IPs (if they rated the game) come from the same area and probably with a few from the same school. She probably told her friends about her game which is a good way to boost the game's rating if they actually bothered to use different IPs and to actually make an account. Oh well. She's Mormon? I never saw that.
lol she's a homeschooled freak tho
Good point.
Maybe it's just the old Warrior Cats crowd , desperately latching on to whatever cat related content the site produces.
Not nearly as funny as Jake's alt follow up PM to me after I warned him about not being an idiot and then went and proceeded to be an idiot.
From: Youmadbro To: EndMaster Date: 2/21/2018 8:33:35 PM
GO SUCK DICK thanks for helping me with those bullies your such a hero. how could you do that to some one who just wanted to make a game ebon and mizal have been cyber bullying me and you take their side your so pathetic. you're so fucking Mean
Well, I once did one of my satirical comments on a retard's six crappy storygame in the past few days. (It was deleted before I could save it.) He became extremely annoyed, so I decided to have some fun with him. The string is long, so it's here instead. I've pm-ed it to others before, but it has so much lol material like: "I am 24 years old and about to get a job at Moo Moo's. I support Gay marriage and am republican. as such, my views in my story game's reflect my views in real life. if you do not like it, tough."
Hmmm
Wow, you'd think one of his high school pressures would be learning Grammar!
Maybe I should make an "Interesting PMs" thread.
Generally posting PMs is frowned upon around here, however I make the occasional exception with banned idiots that keep making alts because at that point they're fair game.
Jake was probably getting banned eventually anyway since he was apparently writing straight up porn for his story.
Awh! And I was looking forward to reading his masterpiece, "50 Shades of Gay"
Amazing how he actually got "you're" correct on the third try. It warms the heart a lil.
This is my brother and I’ve never heard him talk like this. Guess everyone has a dark side.
Oooh, now I wish I was able to read it before it was unpublished. :D
Ah, cool! Thank you for that.
This is the first page? I am....confused.
You're feeling exactly the way you should, it's what the author intended.
OMG, this is beautiful! Not since the infamous Harry Potter fanfic My Immortal have I seen such a masterpiece!
Snow so so so sad i cry and cry and cry when i play this -- foxy pink on 3/15/2018 8:39:41 PM with a score of 0 Haunted this so sad i cried for a very long time it is also very cute -- foxy pink on 3/15/2018 8:27:12 PM with a score of 1 Farewell, My Childhood Self i loved it and when emily died i cried really long -- foxy pink on 3/15/2018 8:18:28 PM with a score of 0
Talk about your "i cri evrytiem"
Quite like this one on Tower of Riddles. ^_^
Ever wondered why I dislike Swededn? This game is an example of why.
You had the flag of Sweden with no sign of Finland...
I entered the Sweden door, since you know, it's right next to Finland...And they frekkin' killed meh!
Nevar trust Swedan. Evar.
-- Rosetail on 5/31/2015 10:58:12 AM
Comment on my storygame TechNOIR:
Still not as good as The Hunt For Cake.
-- Slasher on 2/13/2018 2:48:52 PM with a score of 2
That bastard.
Comment on In School Suspension that is very contradictory.
Yeah as if I even care but it was pretty amazing
-- Moana on 2/17/2018 10:43:45 AM
The roasting of Steve, a comment on Prophecy
Based on the very juvenile dialogue and poor sentence structure, I'm guessing this was written by someone in their mid-teens. If that's the case, there are some interesting ideas and somewhat humorous scenes. If you can fight through the roughly 3000 examples of toilet humor, there's some entertainment value to be had here. If it was written by an adult, I'd have to say I'm underwhelmed.
-- nogard42 on 2/18/2018 4:07:22 AM with a score of 0
A nice one from Mayana.
School Massacre
Look, randomness is bad. It is fine in small amounts, but if that's the entire point of the story, then that story will be bad, too. This wasn't funny or interesting to read, a complete waste of time. Unpublish this and go read a book or a featured story on this site. You might notice they're very different from this pile of shit. If you don't want to be serious about writing, then please do us all a favor and just keep your stories unpublished from now on.
-- Mayana on 4/26/2018 1:41:25 PM with a score of 0
Eternal
FUCK! I died again I sucked at this choose you story, just like I fuck and sucked in real life.
-- yezster on 4/27/2018 8:15:44 AM with a score of 0
Always good when the readers can be honest with themselves.
Digging in the graveyard again because why the hell not. Wild Night (Infinite Story)
Actually, the only gay people I've ever known all turned out to be creeps. I'm convinced every gay man has been molested as a child.
One guy ended up screwing me out of $100 (not literally) the other one ended up hitting on me. Actually they both did, and they both admired my ass - which did flatter me, I must admit. It got to the point where one of them was trying to convince me that I'm 'lying to myself, and that I really loved him and I'm really gay' That's when I told him to go to Hell. I thought I was an open-minded man of the 21st century, but gay people creep me out. Anyway, this is turning into a tangent. This story is pretty horrible. Pixielaughs is it's only redeeming value.
- ChubbyTeletubby
So gay people are all bad and they'll steal your money... You learn new and interesting things every day. ^_^
I always love these:
I had a scare at the end- like the pics, it makes things fun. -- LuvLee on 4/23/2018 12:13:41 PM
Left on a game called Night in the Woods… By Luvlee. ^_^
Here's a fun one.
The battle of two sites https://infinite-story.com/story/info.php?id=916
Infinite Story 4 Life! - Feb 1, 2007
CYSers are a bunch of fucktards.
Come and get me bitches. LOL - Dec 22, 2014
Time has passed and now I am a cruel tyrannical overlord of said CYS fucktards.
And to think, I hesitated. - May 11, 2018
- EndMaster
I dunno. Pretty sure he still thinks we're a bunch of fucktards. ^_^
Snow
It was terrible. Horrible sad and deathly. DO NOT READ IT THIS BOOK. It is about a girl who dies. A guy loves her and dies too, but is having so much fun he doesnt realize it. It sou d okay, but please, if you care for your happiness, don't read this. It is super creepy. I have nothing good to say about it.
-- CC on 5/15/2018 9:24:22 PM with a score of 0
Lol.
But if he's having so much fun he doesn't realize he's dead, surely that's a happy ending?
PrincessStarlight on 5/19/2018 for The Ocean's Daughter
SO ROMANTIC
PrincessStarlight on 5/19/2018 for Find a Date Before it's too Late
PrincessStarlight on 5/19/2018 for An Honourable Gentleman?
*Sighs* So Romantic
PrincessStarlight on 5/19/2018 for The Proposal
PrincessStarlight on 5/18/2018 for Love Triangle
so romantic
PrincessStarlight on 5/18/2018 for College Romance
PrincessStarlight on 5/18/2018 for His Smile
PrincessStarlight on 5/18/2018 for The Fox and The Fawn
SO ROMANTIC, SO ADVENTUROUS, SO COOL, AND SO AWESOME. I LOVED IT, IT WAS SO GREAT IT IS MY FAVORITE ONE OF YOUR STORYGAMES GRACIE98. IT WAS FAN-FLIPPIN'TASTIC.
I feel like she's going to burst out into song about her prince coming someday.
New drawing for a character in one of my choicescript games. I'm keeping it. ^_^
You're unnatural!
No, wasn't me, I only just noticed the ongoing romantic comments.
EDIT: There, she unlocked a new achievement.
PrincessStarlight on 5/19/2018 for Love SICK
SO FUCKING ROMANTIC!!! <3
:::::::'( it's really not real?
Huh... Eric seems like a strange name for a female.
Also, I took a look at the game expecting it to be about a guy called Matt... It was not.
Ah! I see.. That makes way more sense. ^_^
A Very Special Choose Your Story
This game taught me to be gay!
-- 3iguy on 6/1/2018 8:54:39 AM
I'm fairly certain Patar had the power within him to be gay the whole time.
Every comment on this story is gold. I have been laughing for five minutes straight. For the record, I gave it a rating of seven, not eight.
I enjoy the point around the page 'Never, never, never give up' where the author's typing ability starts disintegrating completely, really giving the impression the keyboard was being frantically mashed, perhaps with vision blurred by tears of regret for all the time wasted while rivulets of mascara cascaded down their cheeks. Just adds a nice touch of realism. I was wondering if anyone would be moved at the last minute to throw out the contest theme completely and bash something completely random together to attempt to save their worthless points. Frankly I'm just grateful it was Cricket and not me. I hope the judges and reviewers will look kindly upon this 1000 word apology/feeble excuse offered up by this squirming insect (Name/avatar appropriate! Another nice touch!) but either way, Cricket, today you are better than Ebon and should feel proud. (You were right btw that you're not really well known enough to have gotten custom insults if you had wound up as just another SHAMED noob...however reading the other comments I see going above and beyond has already gotten you noticed and reaped rewards there. We can only assume that you and Corgi will forever haunt each other's most erotic nightmares.)
-- mizal on 6/1/2018 5:33:48 PM with a score of 0
I am sorry to ask this, but was the title of this story based on the story itself? I don’t really understand. The contest was supposed to be about giving the reader “the feels” and have an emotional reaction to reading the story. I guess “ugh” is a feeling. The idea behind the story is nice, but I’m not sure how it fit into the contest at all. That said, the idea could be fleshed out quite a great deal more to make it effective and useful. And the story starts out rather poorly with the classic, “Pick the right choice or die.” That’s really not needed in these stories, and certainly not in a story that’s competing for a contest here. If you’re going to add choices to the story, those choices should have an effect on the story, not just be quick endings to get out of the story. The writing is good, as is the structure. I’m not sure about the options in the story. Basically every option appears to be “Choose the correct choice or you lose.” And in every case, the correct choice is quite obvious. And yes, there are simply too few options in this story to be an effective story. I’d suggest you work more with the story, develop comprehensive choices and options, and have those options have a clear effect on the story. Thank you for sharing this with the site, and I encourage you to write more, but perhaps without a contest and deadline so that you can more fully develop a story.
-- Ogre11 on 6/1/2018 11:12:41 PM with a score of 0
It's certainly entertaining, though short. There are a few typos here and there but nothing so horrible that it stood out. As I can see in your comment, you happen to be one of the people who you mock in your story for "writing eight hours before the deadline" in the Winner's Ending. I found that quite amusing. Overall, I cave it a 3. It is only 1,000 words after all, and I feel like this would have been a lot better if you had the time to flesh it out. You should also specify in the first page that it is the application deadline you are looking at (the one that you say is in a couple of hours) rather than the contest deadline, as it makes for a very confusing timeline. It isn't badly-written though. I feel like given more time and effort, you could produce something of substance. I look forward to reading your stories in the future ^_^
-- Leora on 6/1/2018 2:51:49 PM with a score of 0
And, not only that, but you commented on your own story and gave yourself an 8 rating? I take back anything even remotely nice I could have said in my last comment. You sir, are the worst kind of noob, and I hope you rot in Noob Hell.
-- corgi213 on 6/1/2018 2:24:31 PM with a score of 0
So first you say the contest deadline is in a few hours, but then later go on to say it is in a couple of months? Honestly it seems like you created this storygame, ignored it the whole time, then only wrote it within the last couple of hours before the deadline just to avoid the pit of shame. Like the sorry inept fool of a noob that you are. Honestly Cricket, next time you could at least be diligent and write a nice 20,000 word entry for the contest? Like you don't seem like you'd be a bad writer, you just need to stop being a lazy piece of shit and the rest will follow. Despite avoiding the pit of shame you should still be ashamed of yourself.
-- corgi213 on 6/1/2018 2:23:07 PM with a score of 0
The story was all right, but it was very short, and it had a few typos. It seems as if the author wrote this in a few hours late at night.
-- Cricket on 6/1/2018 2:22:46 PM with a score of 0
I really, really wanted to give this an 8.
-- Fluxion on 6/1/2018 10:59:38 AM with a score of 0
Wait, wait, wait... So you left a comment on your own story, complaining that it was rushed and had typos? No! That's not how you noob! You have to leave a comment saying, "OMG, dis best gam I eva red! U such gud riter! I gib dis 8 out 8 SOOOO GUD!!!" ... Then get all your friends and family to leave similar comments about how amazing the game is. Seriously, you have brought disgrace to the honorable name of noob! Hang your head in shame!
https://goo.gl/images/AiwPsM
... Well, at least this one's honest.
Spyre S-31 a Sci-Fi Adventure by acid_panda and LambWilly
great game seeing as i wrote it
-- LambWilly on 6/7/2018 1:28:19 AM with a score of 0
With all the attention Madglee's Mommy story has been getting lately, sort of surprised it took this long to get a comment like this:
you didn't get to choose much in the game and TOO MUCH READING
-- Fucko on 6/19/2018 4:27:30 PM with a score of 395
So, this one's not a comment on a CYS game, but rather a review left on a COG game, but I thought it was funny enough to warrant sharing here.
Some context... This review was left on a game called The Courting of Miss Bennet by Michael Gray. (A game based on Pride and Prejudice.)
Only got 2 stars because it is litteraly the movie pride predgidus and zombies the only thing missing is the zombies and a few other things however how they speak, where they go, what they do etc is everything from a movie good movie but this novel lacks any originality so there for 2 stars only because I liked the movie
I've also earned some charming comments on my old Kittens of FAT game I made when I was 11.
I'm pretty sure it's because of all of those WC dudes not knowing where to go and latching on to any kitten-related material on the site, including my weird one.
This is the most amazing game ever in the history of mankind! I love cats, and they are cool. Yay.
-- Zach on 3/17/2018 3:24:18 PM with a score of 37
Why thank you.
This game has brought me enlightenment if I had to change anything I would change nothing. May god have mercy on our soul
-- MysticalLixard on 3/10/2018 7:24:54 AM with a score of 37
Perhaps I can spur a second Rennaissance.
CATS!!!
-- Stormfeather on 11/14/2016 6:28:37 PM with a score of 37
A comment which further adds to the cat theory.
This game is weird, convoluted, and so much fun!! I finally got badge #6--my first one! Will keep trying. Please write more like this!
-- LilacRain on 3/6/2016 12:24:20 AM with a score of 620
Pretty much describes 11 year old me. Weird, convoluted, and fun. Damn those naive days of olde.
This was one of the best and funniest stories I have ever played and this deserves an epic gold, wait no, PLATINUM STAR. If you have not played this yet, you must. The game takes realism and stabs it in the back saying, "Screw you!" This is, by far, my favorite game so far and so far I couldn't find anything related to the FAT except the radio broadcast and the title. There are lots of endings and it took me like 4 hours to find ending 7 which by far is my favorite. Play this game
-- fullmetalfan890 on 11/9/2015 12:51:35 PM with a score of 996
Wow.
That was rather interesting
-- Lzark on 8/13/2015 2:58:15 PM with a score of 634
HAHA, one of my favorite comments yet.
:) I remember now. I read this one; it actually is a lot of fun, and impressive too when you realize how young the authors were. I should add this to what I recommend to people.
Well thanks, haha, I was heavily inspired by Jurassic Fairview Park and how expansive it was, which probably explains all of the items and randomness.
:) You are most welcome, and I thank you guys for writing it! It is highly entertaining and actually well thought out, I can tell. I think I’ll check out the other story you mentioned too. I hope you and your bro continue to write: you make a great team, and maybe one day you can publish some of your work.
Well, now you've made me nostalgic for the good old Warrior Cats Takeover days... As a result, I'm going to waste a ridiculous amount of time looking through cat related games on the site, in search of some good Warrior-fan comments.
Cat's Day a Everything Else by NinaB.R.
:3 meow meow meow..... MEOW that was pretty good could've done better though... MEOW!!
-- alienalpha on 1/6/2012 5:25:12 PM with a score of 0
make one about a wild cat please
-- Lilian on 1/6/2015 11:15:50 AM with a score of 0
THis game is dumb just make warriors games plz.
-- noneof ur beeswax on 4/18/2015 6:04:36 PM with a score of 0
It was fine but maybe you want to explore different thoughts for cats. Cats don't chase squirrels: they hunt. It's a natural instinct. And they are very independant and smart. They don't need us to survive. Once my cat went away for a week at a time and she came back perfectly fine and she was an old cat! I think you have the skill to delve deeper into an animal's mind. I am just commenting this to help you with future stories, I mean no offense. Sincerely Clumsypaw P.S. Work on your spelling, PLEASE!!!
-- clumsypaw on 5/25/2015 4:28:34 PM with a score of 0
Hello. I am new leader of bloodclan and I like this and all, but I would like some other choices and things in the story, At least you put you effort in it #COUGH COUGH Unlike warrior adventure COUGH COUGH#
-- Shred(F) on 2/7/2016 5:02:07 PM with a score of 0
Heh..Nice game i was looking for a warrior cats game but well...This is good!
-- DeadFur6932 on 8/26/2016 6:24:17 AM with a score of 0
It was a very creative story and I was thrilled to see that there wasn't any warrior cats in it.I would really like to see a story that contains warrior cats for some inspiration and motivation. And to be amused of course! I hope there is a part two!!
-- Th33moC4t on 9/18/2017 1:28:14 PM with a score of 0
cats:]
-- Daniel White on 11/11/2016 1:21:26 PM with a score of 0
A Day in the Life of a Cat
a Modern Adventure by pigeon309
?pfffft if this is legitimate and someone actually worked on this then you need a new hobby,but to anyone who enjoyed the Erin Hunter books, Warriors, dont read it for it is an insult
-- tigerstar26 on 8/4/2013 5:13:04 PM
I wish i could hiss at my brother :O
-- Coolcat123tiger AJ on 8/12/2014 3:54:27 PM
Awesome! Please continue. :) It's so good. Can you read my story- -Warrior Cats- The Power of Echos I promise you it's a good story as well. It's based on the series of Erin Hunter, Warrior Cats.
-- RisingDarknessWolf on 10/5/2014 4:21:21 PM
I want to go out in the forest and go to clan life
-- Katy on 11/18/2014 1:09:58 PM
waffle waffle waffle waffle Love it but.....MAKE IT WARRIOR CATS!!!
-- Patchflame on 12/25/2014 5:05:49 PM
All I wanted was a Warrior cat RPG... better than HW but notoriusly short.
-- Ginger on 3/17/2015 5:06:37 PM
YOU ARE NOT AH GODH BUT A LOSAH
-- MC MUGGESLIK on 4/11/2015 11:17:43 PM
this is... AWFUL go #BoRiNg if you agree which i do
-- dawna on 6/16/2015 5:33:44 PM
Live the Life of a Cat
a Modern Adventure by kawaii_kitty
YOU ARE MY ONLY FRIEND, CAT TOWER!!
-- Wolfshadow on 9/27/2015 6:42:34 PM
THIS IS HOORIBLE! I DONT WANTTO PLAY WITH SOME LITTLE GIRL AND BE A HOUSECAT!
-- P on 5/26/2018 10:48:02 AM
Do you play cat roleplay on this game?
-- Tairyn Lowenberg on 5/29/2018 3:49:55 PM
Heyyyyyyyyyyy why couldnt i kill the owners XD XD XD make somthing where ya can eat ppl and are a cat!
-- BOOM BADA BOOM on 5/28/2018 10:39:11 AM
Looking at the profile of 'clumsypaw', I find exactly one post in the IRC history. Not a review but it tells me a few things about them:
'I luv it. Hello BAM! Figure that out. HA HA! Leave me alone. Tinypaw attack!!!!!! Totally random. Cupcakes. I ate a cupcake!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!That took 4ever. go away yourself. BYE!!!!!!!'
Try making a post like that that today lol...
... The real tragedy is, this comment was left on the Reading Corner in regards to "The Book Thief" ... Which is one of my favourite books... Now I feel dirty. >.<
Well, suffice it to say that was a very colorful era.
Well, assuming that life doesn't kick my proverbial ass, I'll probably be hanging on. There's a ton of stuff I've missed it seems, and a lot of quality storygames I haven't had the chance to go through.
AVSCYS
handles sensitive topics poorly and criticizes people for going through hard times. I don't care if it's supposed to be "funny" or "a joke" its fucking rude and insensitive
-- thatabsurd on 6/22/2018 10:41:30 PM
I sure hope so. Lol.
He, hehehe. I see what you did there.
Rogues
Fantastic, just fantastic in fact, like a wonderful melody carried so perfectly in our, the midsummer’s night breeze, a tune to the heart, one that will make many hearts race and beat with a drum of anticipation, a story brighter than just the theme or genre of the fantasy or adventure subject and plot, it is a grand, a truly grand story, of life, oft small in scale and vast in its scope, life that feels real, as enticing to us as it is involved to its character’s woes and tribulations, their plight and ascent into great personal legend, it is life in its many varieties, and trials, of character, troubling as mere obstacles and leading as fated choice, trials of choice and change, trials agonising and spoiling for choice as they may sometimes be to us... The sweetest of the bittersweet fruit and chocolate extract, the poisoned pistachio(?) ice-cream in a multitude of flavours. ...but I digress. Bear with me, for it is a long road we’re on, an oceanic one at that.., with many such journeymen, what are as well traversing this at times bleak and oft kaleidoscopic realm of deeads cloaked in shadow,of artful illusions breaking realities’ mold, of noble sedition and hearty deception, and many a fellow sojourner in our paths, are a prospecting “poet” and bard knowledgeable and appreciative in life’s great devices...being what they are... It’s really hard to describe though without somehow falling back in on the vaguest of terms and descriptors... most inadequate to our tale of roguish exploits it’s really not at all like I’ve(we, might’ve) been expecting, it is though and Definitively so, a pleasant kind of surprise. I suppose I could say it’s really a more “realistic(?)” and Definitely engaging take on fantasy, a world and genre that we're ironically beginning to feel become a dull edge in our storytellers’ wares and tool-belts, an item of the repetitive to the point of mundane, if given poor or harsher management than is called for... after all, no matter what the miraculous nature of wonders, amazement without substance and variety does wear off, and even miracles repeated enough become the norm of life, yet another casualty of the mundane experience in our existence, a life that could be as ever fulfilling, and as exciting as any adventure our life presents to us regardless of greater circumstances, ...the metaphorical roses we’re not smelling and fluffy clouds we’re no longer bother to notice, the stargazing we no longer carry on with... And yet, sometimes, just a shooting star, a comedy or a trail of meteors, it’s enough, a story to inspire and grip at our attention with the best of strings... A fading of the stellar dreams and hopes brought down to us to shine and failing, falling short yet again in of our vision and our mind’s reach... a fading that has become a reignition yet again, just leave it to EndMaster... and he’ll spin you a tale like you’ve never heard before, in the style of the old, poignant and empathetic to the heart of the matter, with a good hint of modern spices to bring shock and awe... a delicious and lively recipe that will make your emotive and intellective tastebuds buzz and light your most dormant of senses ablaze, romantic even, you could say — A
-- Almaz on 6/23/2018 4:14:54 PM with a score of 0
I feel like this reader was on mind altering substances when they wrote this.
If this had been formatted a little better though, I probably would have featured it. As it stands though, it looks too much like a jumbled mess stream of consciousness to do so.
The guy has been a member since 2014 and has only rated 3 Storygames, one of them is Necromancer.
... Perhaps it's meant to be a poem?
it's true tho
... Yeah, this seems to be a common thing with children complaining that games aren't suitable for children... Even when the games CLEARLY state that they're not suitable for children. >.<
Wibbons actually suggested that your story maturity rating be raised up from 4 to 6 due to putting "Fuck" in it.
I was just about to post these and happily now I don't have to go through the hassle of copy/pasting!
Glad to see you're taking this admin stuff seriously.
Honestly, I had no idea it was a troll game until you told me, and by then I was halfway through plot. It was a comment that I spent way too long writing, but it got saved here, so I'm glad I wrote it still. Some other new people might learn from this comment. Next few review will be on stories with no real good ones and barely over 3.00
I saw the review on the story, "The Wild West, An Unchangeable World," and liked the outline. I will be using it to review stories from now on. It is a great way to do it.
It was very well structured. I'm reviewing a game with it right now, ugh it has three characters to chose from so I am doing it three times. I know there are better ways, but I am doing it like this. It is on "The Wild Adventurers"
Wait... "I love your books"? Does she think the kid who wrote this game is actually J.K. Rowling?
The Price of Freedom: Innocence Lost
Really enjoyed it. A few grammar errors other than that grate story King (Score of 0) 5/31/2018 10:10:07 PM
... I can't tell if this was meant to be ironic. ^_^
Spoiler Alert: I know you warned me, but the incest thing was a bit much.
-- Quorrah on 9/1/2018 4:46:13 PM
Protagonist is torturing a woman and has the option of wearing a vagina on his face all the first page, yet somehow it was the incest that was a bit much.
Repression
All right. So I got three different incest endings, and I liked the first one best. You know, the one that repaired the family structure? Yeah that one. Quick question, though: where is the father in all of this? I mean, it never says what happened to him, even in the more violent endings.
-- BristowJeremiah on 9/9/2018 8:57:54 PM
It's assumed he just left, or possibly died while you and your sister were very young. Either way he's not important to the story other than possibly explaining the dysfunctional family dynamic due to the lack of a proper father figure in the home.
It is ridiculously hard to explain why I upped my rating of this story to "it will bring you enlightenment" after getting the Mom/Son incest ending, which I suppose makes sense, considering that enlightenment is ridiculously hard to explain. However, I have finally figured out a way to do it. Read the fanfic that there is a link to in this comment to understand why I said that this fanfic will bring you enlightenment. https://www.fanfiction.net/s/5598018/1/The-Scheming-Borg
-- BristowJeremiah on 9/23/2018 8:23:27 PM
Can't say I approve of linking to fanficdotshit but I do approve of giving the story an 8.
TRASH
I dont know why you people are saying this is great it is awful and retarted not to mention offensive as fuck toward poor white people
-- JodyJo on 9/28/2018 2:38:01 PM
"retarted" Lol.
... Maybe it's like a retarded tart?
Well I imagine that thirsty hoes would be more welcomed here than they would at CoG who would probably accuse them of setting back women's rights 200 years.
There we go, that should help their thirst.
Best comment on that gender story
1/8, what the fuck is a male to non-binary or female to nonbinary? There are only two genders smh.
-- A faggot on 10/9/2018 10:49:34 AM with a score of 0
Dead Man Walking
This is an amazing story but the story is a little short.
-- Raistlin on 10/12/2018 11:23:25 PM with a score of 21725
Guess Berka will have to shoot for 2 million words next time.
shit game, no matter what you do, you end up dying. there is only one correct option most of the time or instant death. Overrated as fuck.
-- storytimex on 10/21/2018 12:05:27 AM with a score of 0
Just like real life. Lol.
It's funny you mentioned writing your storygame while you had a concussion because in the middle of writing The Doll's Quest, I got hit by an SUV when I was standing at a Chase Manhattan drive through waiting to use the ATM. The SUV apparently backed up to get out of line because the driver in front was taking too long at the ATM. The SUV driver didn't see me standing there and slammed into me. The back of my head banged into the pavement and I was knocked unconscious and had to get surgical staples in the back of my scalp. I have ZERO memory of being hit! The funny thing is when the driver and some other motorist got me up and explained what had happened, I was still holding my paycheck (now streaked with blood) in my hand! I guess when you're poor, you hold onto your money for dear life...unless of course you have chemical dependency issues.
Thanks. That was back in February when it happened. The Law Firm I went to helped me with some of the medical bills and then got me what was left of the settlement (after everyone else got their cut). I got 6000 dollars. Not bad.
Well, I'm glad your work paid for it. Medical bills can be steep!
Thanks, I appreciate the concern.
Description of the game Sansssskyyy43's creating:
"A game that can be quick or short depending on what you do, and will require paying attention."
That... I can't... How? What? Why?
Found another one
Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Drone a Fan Fiction by jbranch1998
it was good :)
-- jbranch1998 on 8/24/2015 12:02:37 PM
Awh, not had an interesting comment on any of my games in awhile, but I like this one:
Quest for the Holy Grail: a Fan Fiction by Briar_Rose
ME LIKEY VERY MUCH. I LIKE TO READ THIS. THE LETTERS THAT WERE GROUPED TOGETHER TO MAKE WORDS AND THE WORDS THAT WERE GROUPED TO MAKE THESE SENTENCES WERE PRETTY FUNNY.
-- LiteraryAdonis on 11/9/2018 1:16:55 PM with a score of 0
You walk down the pathway leading into a village. It was busy with furries!
*backs away slowly*
Hans... get ze flammenwerfer. Also: the only path started is to teleport to "the forbidden jungle mistress :p" ... I guess such unholy work won't be able to be published with a maturity of 2. If the sorry excuse of a human writing it survives long enough here to finish it.
Isn't there a quote from Edmund Burke saying something like "All that is necessary to the triumph of good is that evil men are fking lazy" ?
As you pick up the object you realize it was a statue of a wolf holding a sword in a fighting stance. {Congrats you found Wolfen!}
... What just happened?
Eternal: a Fantasy Adventure by EndMaster
I got an erection from being kicked in the dick then I died when I refused to fuck the witch who kicked me. 10/10
-- Zubekanov on 9/27/2018 12:27:38 AM with a score of 0
... He makes a valid point.
This is probably the most accurate description of Eternal I have ever seen.
... I'm still puzzling over this one.
I wasn't offended by this story, but was disappointed in its execution because of how enthralling Endmasters works often are. Every line of text is condescending and presumtuous, and there are no "moral" lessons to be learned, just an exercise in chiding every deviation from some preconceived ideological teen experience. The author purports to be some grand authority on the teen experience while at the same time presenting myopic choices and outcomes. Wile Endmasters other stories in this style such as Tales from the Basement were rather humorous and interesting reads, this just fell flat and was rather painful to crawl through. I would advise any parent looking for actual advice on how to handle a disgruntled teen to stay far, far away.
-- Anonymous on 12/8/2018 6:00:43 PM
Amazing how many fucktards still take the story dead seriously. Lol.
Shit, I read that story when I was twelve and even then I still got that it was a joke!
As a side note, I had some pretty messed up interests at twelve.
Ground Zero
Why did you make this sci-fi and not fan fic? This would have been at the top of the list, and the only thing that needed to change was category name.
-- Austinc on 12/13/2018 8:50:42 AM
Because its obviously not fanfiction.
Well, what can you expect from a kid who's username is just a misspelling of autistic?
If you only knew those fish, you would understand.
A pox upon them!
Price of Freedom
shit
-- Obunga on 12/30/2018 12:34:43 AM with a score of 0
Well if harassment of CoG authors is any indication, Briar was supposed to get a bunch of RAPE threats by now.
I feel so abused!
*Gasp* Don't tell me the game took the Lord's name in vain?
... This is my absolute favourite one of all time. ^_^
I just realized that 3 of my comments are here, so I guess that means that I’m 1/6 retarded or something. I also like Briar’s comment on how my my username is just autistic scrambled because my name on other websites is ‘Austism.’
Epic Gamer Fortnite battle royal furry buring
Undoubtedly one of the greatest stories on this site. I found the characters to be highly engaging and well-developed, in particular Gamer GF, whose tragic death sets the protaganist's arc into action. The inclusivity and tolerance of furries shown by the author puts him/her leagues ahead of most other writers on this site, by portraying furries in a realistic and flattering light. It is regrettable that the story lacked any futa yiff scenes. Otherwise, a very commendable story. 8/8
-- YIFF LORD DICKSUCKER on 1/11/2019 3:39:31 AM with a score of 0
Awh! I wanted to read that.
Love SICK
I like how this story supports brotherly and sisterly love. However, your story does not fit hosted games marketing. Please try again. Better luck next time pal :)
-- Jason on 1/16/2019 9:23:39 PM
Oh come on, whoever this was could have put Jason Hill's whole name.
In any case CoG is strangely narrow minded with the whole incest thing. You can have a big tranny orgy, but god forbid you have two consenting family members fucking each other in a story.
I can only guess this is due to the high rate of bad touch uncles that many of the members there have. Hell even Suicidal Sammy got all triggered when someone suggested that the serial killer have a sexual relationship with his sister. (Because obviously THAT would be over the line for his Edgelord story that never came to pass anyway. Lol)
Who is it? Coins, please tell me it's you! ^_^
If it was me I would take the credit for it. Granted if it wasn't me I would still try and take the credit for it, but I was too lazy.
The Price of Freedom
I don't like you. This is just a cheap ripoff of Road To Colosseum anyways. Hosted games just isn't the right platform you.
-- Jason Hill on 1/18/2019 12:22:15 PM with a score of 0
... Please feature it!
Surprisingly the IP did not match coins.
I.Q level of 2
More like IQ level two bajillionmillion. That man will be the one to cure cancer.
Will start a new one as soon as I find a good new comment... Which unfortunately never happens when you're looking for one.
Wow... This girl has the weirdest boner for games about school.
Maybe they had grungy leather chicks.
