It will be randomised, but you can use the 'swap' card to team up with members you want to work with.
Locked (Not that it matters for mods, of course).
I'll join
I'm in! Yahoo!
Not sure if someone else mentioned this, but probably changing the number of featured comments per story to 5 rather than 3 seeing as there's been an increase in better comments in general.
(And an increase in shitposting comments as well, but as we all know, the fools have got to have their fun)
Alright, I like reviewing. I'll toss my hat in the ring!
Locked!
Ill Join team 3 for the funsies, but ill take it a bit slower than usual.
I'm in this year too.
Do your worst.
Logged on for the first time in awhile and saw my pointless points had dwindled from a whopping 480 to a measley 380. This seems like a good chance to totally not get distracted and sink further into the pit of shame... what could go wrong?
I'm going to enter to force myself to review one story this summer at least. I haven't looked at this in ages so this could be fun. Might try to get something started tonight so at the very least I have something.
My understang is that I just need to do a review and it will automatically count towards the contest.. let me know if I need to post my review in a specific thread or something.
Oh, I must have forgotten to link the tracking thread. I'll ask Will to edit the OP later, but you should track all your reviews there and we'll add them to the leaderboard.
Yeah, a few years... it's good to talk to you again, Mizal. I hope things have been going well around here!
Oh, I see. I guess I should go do that and get an easy 50 points... maybe.
Thanks! I am glad to be back. This writing community is the best I've found, and I haven't been motivated to read or write as much as I should be.
I appreciate the feedback! The Gower story was very fun to write with input from Gower himself. I hope he is still around! The time loop story I'm surprised to hear positive feedback because it was my first story and really just a way to test the editor. At the time it was written it got very poor feedback... but I did update some of the issues and I'm glad you liked it!
Glad to hear he is writing a new story and still around! I'm terribly sorry about the AI generated papers though... Last I heard, as far as 20 years from now, they never figure out a solution to this problem.
Hmm... yeah, that must have been some static or hacking: something was messing with your communications. You should really use the tried and true tin cups on a string method rather than all this crappy internet stuff. Boring grammar was not Gower's thing.
Yep, they are the same thing.
Damn it, I'm in
Can I join Team 3
Hey, another familiar face. I hope life is treating you well, Ace.
Inside joke? Or did someone take over Mizal's account? It's been awhile--anything is possible here.
Ah, I didn't notice it in his original post because I read it while doing something else, haha. I get it!
I'm just as slow as I used to be.
I've also been okay. Thank you!
Count me in.
I'll sign up!
Steal cards wouldn't be released too often. There will be mini-challenges once a week with the chance to win a card (which may or may not be 'steal') and/or points, not to mention that a steal could be blocked with a 'stop' card. Most teams would remain with their members for most, if not the entire duration, of this contest. I suppose for really loyal teams, there's also the possibility of swapping two members of other teams just to cause a bit of chaos.
Goddamn it. I just HAD to say "Do your worst" didn't I?
Fuck it. Time to review.
EDIT: Last year there was a rule stating that for a review to qualify, it had to be authored by someone who had been active since at least 2020. Will that be the case this year?
According to the rules, no. According to recommendations, you have a higher chance of your comment getting noticed if it is an active member.
I vote we change team # 4's name to "Your Worst" or "Doing your worst"
How about just "The Worst"
Only in jest. I don't really mind who I'm teamed up with.
I'm aware, but I cope with comedy, or spite. I'll only cry for a minute and then review a story or something. Plus it seems like I can switch people off my team if I want, so that's fun!
Until then, we can be team "The Worst" I'll concur and that makes 2/3 vote!
Ironic since Shadowdrake is the only one on that team with a review so far.
That would certainly be a great way to skyrocket to the top of the leaderboard. Also, it looks like your team is winning so far.
I'll take the points, then ship him off too the worst team and realize my dream of writing an entire story game out of just comments on other peoples stories, complete with choices, multiple endings, and somewhat relevant feedback. I play for keeps... until tomorrow when I lose motivation.
Nah. I did complete a 1,500 word review of Ace's story though.
If I was gonna review Eternal (again) it'd take me the length of this contest to finish it. Eternal is a masterpiece.
I appreciate the vote of confidence! When I eject Ben I'll bring you on board team "The Worst"
My service seems to be causing double posting issues. My apologies.
Yeah, the storygame doesn't have to be authored by someone active since 2020. However, if anyone is thinking of only reviewing 2-length storygames from long-forgotten authors, well, let's just say that they're not going to be handed out commendations easily.
Could I join in a few weeks? By then, I might have the time to work on reviewing games.
You can join at any time according to the rules. Just a pro-tip... lurk until you are ready to join. Once you make a post like this there is a chance you are just considered "in" the contest.
Well, I guess it's time to rearrange my schedule now.
If you wait until everyone else forgets about this... you might just sneak into an easy victory! Although there are a lot of people in this mob. I wouldn't feel pressured, all you need is one good comment on 3 months. Take your time.
Heh, not for me! I've still got finals coming up, so it's crunch time!
I say this, yet I spend half my time just listening to audiobooks. At least now I have something else to procrastinate with.
Team 3 is Fucked is an excellent name
Team 2 should be Grill Night and the Newbie
As this has come up a few times in questions, it's probably best to clarify it here: Rating a story gives you a Site Point, but that has no bearing on the contest. Writing a normal, non-featured review is generally welcomed, but in this contest, it does not give you any points (but still, feel free to track them because it makes us more likely to see and consider featuring those comments). Now, onto featured reviews. Depending on storygame length, they each give a different number of Contest Points (see the original post for this). Getting a review commended gives you 2 Site Points and you get another 3 for daily commendations, but since the mods are generous people, you could also get additional Site Points (same scoring system as Contest Points). These would be distributed at some point, probably after the contest has concluded.
It’s time for the first Mini Challenge, where you compete against other participants to win an advantage. Which team will emerge victorious? May the best review win! The Challenge Participants must write the best review they can of Shadow of a God-King. Each participant can submit one entry. The winner will be selected by the author, Fluxion. For the three of you who have already reviewed that story, just choose another one of Fluxion’s stories and comment on that instead. Reward
The winning team will get a ‘Select’ card. This enables you to limit another team's reviews to a specific storygame genre for 72 hours! Additionally, writing a featured review would grant you 7 Contest Points and up to 23 Site Points*. *1 point for rating the storygame, 2 points for the featured review, 3 points for daily commendation, 10 points if you’re the most commended that day, and 7 extra points. And all this just for one review, that’s insane. Deadline You have until 11.59pm EST on 9th June 2025 (Monday). To participate, post your review on the storygame itself and make a note of that as a reply to this post. (Apologies for the late post! Normally, challenges would be released on Friday and you would have until Sunday to complete them, but I have been very busy with packing items for an upcoming trip).
LOL I am honored. I doubt anyone else reviews it though. The reward seems small for the 126,000-word 136,000-word count (since updates). Then again... imagine forcing a team to review only fan fiction.
If no one does it can I pick my teammate's review which is already done? I feel like giving our team the default win is fair. And Mousecore's review was phenomenal.
I'll have you know that I'm half way done... with the prologue...
That's not a bad move: It was intriguing. I did already find two minor grammatical mistakes... but it's otherwise very well-written. However, I tend to not mind a slow start/slow burn story as much as other people. Knowing details of the world helps me get into it.
End manages to read and rank his contest storygames in a couple of days, which often includes really large entries. The last few times I reviewed long stories, it takes at most slightly over a day (and yes, I also do other things like meet friends, work on university projects and occasionally watch movies). But out of curiosity, how long does everyone take on average to read and review stories? I might consider extending this challenge if it'll make it more feasible.
(Also I planned this mini-challenge before the contest began to keep up with the tradition of spotlighting a contest-winning story, and I had no idea Flux was even joining let alone that his team would do so well).
The last 7 length story I read took me 3 days... so it's not unreasonable to do this in a weekend. However, I personally have other plans this weekend preventing me from spending a lot of time on this. It's summer, so people might be hit-or-miss on weekends. Also, some of us are slow readers.
I agree with this I tend to take notes so I can point out specific tips to help the author improve... not a ton just like a few examples. I also like to read every path to get a sense of the entire story not the one branch I read.
For reference, because it was asked, I'm still not done with my review of "Shadow of the God King". I'm probably slower than most but I will probably finish it tonight. I have a ton of notes and just started chapter 3... I plan to write a long review and have a lot of feedback. I didn't actually have much time to read until yesterday, when I finished an entire chapter (I went back to see how every choice affected the story as well, but it was not clear). This could be finished in 3 days (a weekend)--even with the long review process--but it would have to be a completely free weekend without other plans or work getting in the way.
I don't think the mini game was unreasonable, just pointing this out for reference to those making the mini games.
Yeah, I noticed this and figured the game had a lot of coding for this type of thing; however, the changes aren't apparent to the reader. I was very confused that you could skip chapters in the beginning because that would erase all the choices before hand. I'll have comments about this for you, so we don't need to discuss here. You can always message me after the comment if something doesn't make sense or you want to talk about something though.
Could you send me the scripting for that sort of thing? I'd really appreciate it.
Like Mizal said, all I did was set the variables to the proper value with each link. Just like when you do it in any other page. So for each chapter I have a list of variables that I set to 0, 1, 2 or whatever values I wanted them to be to ensure on page scripting and other things are what I wanted. The only trick is just remembering which choices affected which variable, and putting them in to be activated at the start of the chapter.
% LIBRARY := 1
% BULLY :=1
(disregard spaces obviously; Libraray being 1 is dependent on a previous variable, but it's irrelevant after the library scene so I just went with that the rest of the story)
So just regular variables. Since they all link to chapter starts, I didn't have to use DEST to link to a specific page within a chapter, but I did do that for testing puproses and then removed the link when I published.
That's really helpful! Thanks Fluxion!
Yeah, I'm shooting for a featured review, haha. I appreciate the encouragement! I was posting because someone had asked how long a review takes... now I need to go actually finish that story!
Maybe I'll say that the best new review wins, so if only one person reviews it and writes 'story gud' they win by default. At the very least this, may inspire some shorter comments and take off some of the pressure of writing a long review.
Pffft I have until midnight tomorrow. I can get a good review in by then
I think it will be funnier if someone force a team to read romance and dating, since they are equally as awful. The fanfiction section at least has some bones to it.
It goes by EST, so you have two hours, technically. I think. Maybe.
Now that the first Mini Challenge is over, @Fluxion will judge the entries and decide on a winner. Although I've been away, Will has noted that five individuals have taken up the challenge: Darksoul, Liminal and Mizal have reviewed Shadow of a God-King, whereas RK and Mousecore reviewed Fluxion's other stories. May the best challenger win.
Looks like no one on my team managed a review... so I'll be looking at the love and dating section to see if any are readable...
Noted! I can review your game and some of these other suggestions if it happens.
Haha, I haven't read as many stories as you might guess. Also, anything written in the last four years would be new to me now. I appreciate the recommendations!
Reviewing other active members stories is the most fun part of this! I have always enjoyed the community here, and helping people who might actually read the comment to improve is more rewarding. I'll get to it after I finish "shadow of a god king" (even if we don't get restricted). I'm assuming I'll actually have time to read today and tomorrow... so I'll probably finish my review around the time we get restricted if it happens, haha.
I believe I already have a featured review on this... unless it's been replaced? I appreciate the suggestion, although I was mostly joking!
All is fair in love contests and war. My review is 6 years old, so it was bound to happen. I did go check, and I did review that one. No clue if it was ever featured, but I seem to remember it being featured a long time ago.
Yeah, bad timing. That game is very interesting. However, I'm sure there are more good stories in there! I haven't read that category a ton--so I'm not sure how true the trope that they are all bad, sappy romance stories is.
So, this was difficult. Mizal's review made me laugh. Liminal's was succinct and focused on a couple things I really tried to emphasize (character thoughts and world building). The three others were very in-depth, well written and very helpful (and clearly took a lot of effort given their lengths). In fact, DarkSoul, RK, and Mousecore all wrote fantastic reviews, and it was really hard for me to decide between them. Since all three were high quality, I had to look at other things to choose.
In the end, one of these reviews actually helped me improve the story it was written about, and that's Mousecore's. Without Mousecore's review, I wouldn't have noticed a scripting error in By the Light of Day. Years later, I can't imagine how many one's or two's of people managed to get to the end and wonder who the hell Sebastian and Emily were when they hadn't even met them in the story. But now that should be fixed, thanks to this review.
Consequently, I award the points to Mousecore (and of course, The Review Bored—although I can assure you, team bias played no role here... yeah.).
Sounds... legit?
Agreed. Big prizes for this contest... might keep people engaged for the full 3 months--maybe.
...Time to call in sick to work and read for a week straight.
Eternal
one of the best storys i have thank you — pierre2893 on 6/2/2025 10:07:42 PM with a score of 0
Rogues
onef the best stories i read — pierre2893 on 6/8/2025 3:58:09 PM with a score of 0
Necromancer
one of the best stories i read — pierre2893 on 6/9/2025 5:34:39 PM with a score of 0
Death Song
it is not the story you are one of the best creators i ever seen every story i read was magnifecent — pierre2893 on 6/10/2025 7:15:47 PM with a score of 0
Ground Zero
not one of his best stories but i like it — pierre2893 on 6/10/2025 9:45:35 PM with a score of 0
A Very Special Choose Your Story
weird thing but not that bad — pierre2893 on 6/10/2025 10:18:34 PM with a score of 0
Paradise Violated
didnt expect it to be so short but not bad — pierre2893 on 6/11/2025 3:16:01 PM with a score of 0
Innkeeper
great story i liked it — pierre2893 on 6/11/2025 7:11:27 PM with a score of 0
You lot are lucky Pierre isn’t in this contest, because as far as I’m concerned he’s soundly beaten the chicken soup out of all of you.
Get this man on Team 8!
I feel bad because this person might not speak English as a first language... but the comment on Eternal is wild. They are reading these very quickly though... I think I spent like weeks flipping through Eternal alone.
Man, I am so bad at these challenges. I only managed one... and I had been working on that one review since the start of the last challenge! It just happened to count. Living up to team The Worst's name!
Edit: ended with 2 because one got featured after I posted
Yeah, reviewing longer stories is nice points wise... and I am "way to detailed" on my reviews. I appreciate the encouragement! 3-5 was my goal, but I suppose it worked out...
Congratulations to you as well, RK! I didn't think 2 would win it... but looks like my last-second bribe came in handy! It's about time the review board didn't win something... and perhaps we can use our power up to "stop" them! Haha.
Yeah, thanks Will! The contest has been fun so far. This was a nice challenge and kept me motivated.
I'd like to join this contest! Maintaining a facade of productivity is an important thing, y'know.
I'm interested in taking part in this! Now that I've been at my new job a while, I should have some extra time on my hands.
It's a good thing this is a summer reading competition... or you guys would surely win with that name!
Perhaps... you have given us much to consider on this team name. Only time will tell!
Don't tell me you've forgotten about Sentinel Penguin, the spork-wielding mod. But he's often referred to as a penguinite so maybe that's a different species entirely.
I had an interesting thing happen, so I figured I would just bring it up and ask the dumb question: There was a comment that I had get featured twice. I'm not sure if this was an accident because two mods got to it at once, one mod with two personalities got to it first, or if it was an intentional attempt to give more pointless-points for the one review. The obvious question is does this count for double the points in the contest? Or is do I just enjoy the fact that an accounting error worked in my favor this time?
Well you get the comms since there's no way to take them away (yet) but for the contest purposes it only counts once.
What happened was I was going through all the recent comments on stories and just clicking the story links in different tabs so I could easily just feature stuff.
Ended up featuring yours twice by accident since I'd featured it while featuring one of Cat's (I think) and when I got to the original tab I'd opened you got featured again while I was just clicking through.
I figured it was something like this; I often double post things when my internet is lagging or I have two windows open. For now, I'll enjoy the extra points and brag about them to make it more hilarious when the mods come back to collect them like undercollected taxes.
Holding his breath, Shadowdrake listened carefully from his perch in the willow tree. All he could hear was the gentle gurgling of the stream to his back and the natural silence of the forest sleeping in front of him, as if this were the only patch of woods in CYStia undiscovered by the bands of delinquents that camped along the riverbank. It even smelled pristine, earthy, as if a rainstorm had just washed away the unpleasant smells that festered in the city proper, but this night was clear.
"Come on," Shadowdrake27 pleaded as he peered into the darkness. "We need this to catch the review board..."
Seeing nothing, he was about to leave when a twig snapped. There was a rustling of leaves, but nothing came into view. Shadowdrake27 blinked and scratched his head, leaning forward to get a better view as if something might materialize in front of him.
Empty space muttered in the clearing under the willows branches, which hung down like curtains thinly separating the rest of the forest from a 20 foot diameter around the tree. Leaning closer, Shadowdrake27 struggled to hear the words being uttered by nothing--as if the wind itself could whisper--when RK suddenly appeared.
A gasp and gentle thud broke the silence of the night as Shadowdrake27 fell from the lowest branches of the willow tree. Pain shot through his back as he laid on it in the cool grass with the misty breeze rolling over him from across the river.
“Are you okay,” RK asked, leaning over Shadowdrake27, worry spreading across his face.
“Yeah…” Shadowdrake27 groaned, struggling to his feet. “I didn’t know you could turn invisible.”
“You did say to make sure no one saw me heading here—not even my own teammates.”
“It would have been okay for me to see you coming though.”
“Sorry about that: when you are the last of the great hot dog wizards, you take warnings of caution seriously! Especially since Yummyfood is missing these days.” RK scanned the forest and added, “So, you said you had a way to take down the review board?”
“Indeed, but we are waiting on—“ Shadowdrake27 started before he was interrupted by soft whistling coming from the complete darkness deeper in the forest.
RK and Shadowdrake27 scrambled behind the Willow tree and peered into the darkness; strolling up to the tree while whistling a merry tune in utter darkness, Will emerged with a warm smile on his face. He stopped on the other side of the tree and finished the tune before looking around.
“I’m here—as promised!” Will announced in a friendly tone.
“Can you keep it down?” Shadowdrake27 hissed, stepping out from behind the tree with RK. “The goal was to meet secretly!”
“Oh, I doubt they can hear us… they are too far ahead. Besides, they are all asleep: everyone is—except us three.”
A shiver ran down Shadowdrake27’s spine as he looked around—noting for the first time that they were alone and isolated. He cleared his throat and responded a bit louder, “Fine, did you bring the stuff?”
“Indeed!” Will’s smile broadened. “30 points, 15 for each of you.”
“Thanks, Will! This will allow us to—“
“But there is a catch!” Will interrupts. “Two, actually. First, these are for your teams, not for you two.”
“That’s fair,” RK said with a smile of his own. “These will make a huge difference!”
“Second,” Will continued with the smile growing to an unnatural smirk. His eyes gleamed with joy as his words formed slowly and clearly. “You can split the points evenly… or one of you can steal all 30; however, if you both try to steal you both get nothing.”
“What?” Shadowdrake27 exclaimed. “This was not the deal! We agreed on 15 points each!”
“And I held up my end of the bargain… you both can take them if you agree.”
“Fine, RK let’s just—“
“No, no, no!” Will interrupted again. “Not so quickly, little dragon. You will give your reply to me privately, and I’ll only count the final answer at the end of the weekend.” The smile on Wills face seemed to split his face in half as his eyes grew so wide they caught the moonlight like a cat stalking its prey in the night.
Shadowdrake27 gritted his teeth, but RK pointed out, “15 points make a huge difference… but 30 points changes everything. I see why this would be tempting, and it’s not a true challenge without a twist.”
“RK, what are you saying?” Shadowdrake27 questioned as the sun began to rise. He clenched his fists as a few early risers began to crowd around and pick up on what was happening.
“Just that we have a game to play,” RK responded casually, waving his staff as if swatting away a fly. “We both seem to be good at games… this should be fun.”
“Steal the points!” someone shouted from the crowd that had formed—craving blood even in a battle of whits.
“This is CYStia, after all,” Will chided.
“Hey! What’s going on over here?” Jster02 called from the forest, walking towards the growing mob.
“Welcome newcomer!” Will said in a friendly tone, his usual warm smile reappearing. “Let’s get you on a team; it’s never too late to join the fun!”
The pair walked off towards the river as Shadowdrake27 and RK faced each other in the expanding sunlight. Will never looked back, as if he was unaware of the chaos he created in his wake.
Surprise! I based your character off the profile picture... so I took a few liberties. I assume you also can use magic to make condiments appear for a BBQ, but very little is known about wizards.
Yeah, game theory assumes a head to head and had you go for the both the safer play and higher upside play. In this game, it's best to say you will split and choose steal. Saying you will steal is madness because it guarantees 0 points. However, picking steal has two outcomes of 0 or 30 with an average of 15; meanwhile, actually picking split has two out comes with 15 and -30 averaging -7.5. It's statistically better to pick steal.
I also picked split though. Knowing your opponent changes the game, and we have been amicable so far. It's also a group game rather than a head to head. I see the worst case being all the points get lost as the review BORED (sorry Rex) runs away with it. Therefore picking split ensures the 30 points get into the game for someone that isn't already winning. Also, 15 points is like two really long reviews which is fought 2 weeks of work for me... I'm okay with the 15. If I get 0, it only took me a few minutes to write that review anyway.
Mizal is correct: I'm probably the most boring person to have playing this game... however, I'm also busy during the days and only free at night really. If I were to make a back stabbing move it would probably happen 3 minutes after the deadline
Well, if Cavus didn't say it, I will. Someone commend this.
I appreciate the vote of confidence! Glad people liked the short story... I haven't been writing much recently, so it's nice to get positive feedback.
Also, pointing out the 30 hours remaining is diabolical, haha. Time can be a cruel thing when making decisions.
I do apologize, it was just glossed over in my story. That is a very easy slip up to make.
Alright, I'll bite. I missed writing reviews. Put me in the game, coach!
Alright, I should really get around to actually doing this. First though, we really need a team name.
My suggestions, cringy as they are:
That is all.
The Final Draft sounds best to me.
Yes, the Final Draft definitely captures that aura of procrastination we have all experienced at some point into the past, only to make something decent at the last minute :)
I saw your message and will check it out! Might be a bit because longer stories are hard for me this week/weekend... but I'm going to try to do a few longer ones next week!
I would like to join this competition!