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7 months ago

Noticed that the other thread was starting to get pretty long, so figured I'd make a new one. Been reading through the comments of POF today, and here are a few of my favourites:

parts of it were hard to understand. I come from a Christian background so the concept of slavery and forcing children to kill is foreign to me, let alone, it being acceptable in ancient times. certain liberties were taken I assume. gladiators were men, not children and I highly doubt a master would allow a child to fight in the arena

-- JasonX on 6/19/2017 1:53:07 AM with a score of 0

... Considering he comes from a "Christian background", the guy's obviously never opened a bible if he doesn't understand the concept of slavery.

this shiz is pretty kool dood did this instead of homwork lol thx for the good me me's
-- Nick on 2/25/2017 10:11:04 PM with a score of 0

Glad to know my game is the reason you're getting held back another year. ^_^

NICE ONE, FEW GRAMATICAL MISTAKES BUT ITS OKAY PLS MAKE PART 2
-- sn3akmo on 9/28/2016 10:57:48 AM with a score of 0

I just like the irony in this one.

It was nice except for one thing...it didn't have a dolphin.
-- Hu Da Phuc on 6/1/2016 6:36:19 PM with a score of 0

Damn, I knew it was missing something. >.<

no cursing please
-- greda on 1/28/2016 12:36:42 PM with a score of 0

Fuck off.

why do you do this kill your self
-- wtf on 2/17/2017 10:43:41 AM with a score of 0

Okay! ^_^

It was an interesting story. Much better than the other one I did.
-- Zeaundra on 1/24/2016 5:49:32 PM with a score of 0

Yeah, yours was shit.

I'm usaully a silent reader, but this story changed that. I laughed, I raged, I nearly cried, God I felt like I was there! And not just becausethe story was in second person! Please don't see my comment as a fake, "pay me to make you look good" type of thing. This is a genuine response and I've honestly never been this into a story! YOU HAVE TO READ IT! I could see this as an actual hardcover book! Even a movie! Love the author keep up the good work! Love love LOVE this story! XOXOXOXO Also, to whoever is reading this, please understand I'm not being paid to write this comment! (I tend to say "I wonder how much he/she got paid to wtite that..." when I read comments for anything lol so I'm just putting that out there for anyone who's like me! 

-- Tasha on 6/14/2016 11:32:52 PM with a score of 0

£5 well spent. ^_^

5/7
-- Niggatron 5000 on 11/1/2017 1:48:51 AM with a score of 0

... Yeah, this one's not interesting, I just really liked the username. cheeky

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7 months ago
For everyone that'll find this thread a few months later, here are the links to the first and second threads.

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7 months ago
Just noticed Phoenix the Magic-Cat got a bunch of drive bys one after another:

Very interesting and fun for the brain.
-- Parker on 2/12/2018 3:11:19 PM with a score of 0

I think it would be nice to add a little bit more to the story.
-- Scott on 2/12/2018 2:22:51 PM with a score of 0

Very intertaining
-- Jackson on 2/12/2018 2:21:37 PM with a score of 0

loved it
-- Hugo on 2/12/2018 2:21:14 PM with a score of 0

I FOUND ALL THE ENDINGS!!!
-- Emmanuel on 2/7/2018 10:39:36 AM with a score of 0
this was weird and amusing at the same time

-- Alana Eldridge on 2/7/2018 10:32:03 AM with a score of 0
this is good

-- angel palma on 2/6/2018 12:45:43 PM with a score of 0


There are either a lot of cat children lurking in the shadows, or this is a heartwarming display of all the other Mormons in the commune taking an interest in Bunny's work.

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7 months ago

I wouldn't be surprised that all the IPs (if they rated the game) come from the same area and probably with a few from the same school. She probably told her friends about her game which is a good way to boost the game's rating if they actually bothered to use different IPs and to actually make an account. Oh well. She's Mormon? I never saw that.

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7 months ago

lol she's a homeschooled freak tho 

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7 months ago

Good point.

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7 months ago
She has to be. She's like a tiny Mynoris.

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7 months ago

Maybe it's just the old Warrior Cats crowd , desperately latching on to whatever cat related content the site produces. cheeky

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7 months ago
COULD BE BETTER BUT ITS GOOD ENOUGH
Now You Gotta Deal With This S***
Jakethebro (Score of 0)
2/21/2018 12:51:31 PM

Jake's words on his last day with us and I'll cherish them forever.

I imagine End feels the same:

A Very Special Choose Your Story
I learned some valueable life lessons
-- Jakethebro on 2/21/2018 6:10:48 PM

Innkeeper
bruh I can't win
-- Jakethebro on 2/21/2018 5:30:18 PM with a score of 0

Oh, and another one on Innkeeper from a different(?) banned idiot:

i dint read just choose
-- Rapor on 1/23/2018 1:40:43 PM

Truly he speaks for us all.

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7 months ago

Not nearly as funny as Jake's alt follow up PM to me after I warned him about not being an idiot and then went and proceeded to be an idiot.

From: Youmadbro
To: EndMaster
Date: 2/21/2018 8:33:35 PM

GO SUCK DICK thanks for helping me with those bullies your such a hero. how could you do that to some one who just wanted to make a game ebon and mizal have been cyber bullying me and you take their side your so pathetic. you're so fucking Mean

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7 months ago

Well, I once did one of my satirical comments on a retard's six crappy storygame in the past few days. (It was deleted before I could save it.) He became extremely annoyed, so I decided to have some fun with him. The string is long, so it's here instead. I've pm-ed it to others before, but it has so much lol material like:
"I am 24 years old and about to get a job at Moo Moo's. I support Gay marriage and am republican. as such, my views in my story game's reflect my views in real life. if you do not like it, tough."

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7 months ago
...how does one's views IRL have anything to do with whether a story is good or not?

Anyway haven't read it yet but this reminds me that I once had a long, retarded conversation with a kid who told me I should ease up because how was he supposed to have time to learn grammar, what with the pressures of high school and running a YouTube channel?

I really wish we could put messages in folders or something because I have so many from faceless noobs and would like to organize them somewhat so I could actually find them at times like these.

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2 months ago

Hmmm

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2 months ago

Wow, you'd think one of his high school pressures would be learning Grammar!

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7 months ago

Maybe I should make an "Interesting PMs" thread. cheeky

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7 months ago

Generally posting PMs is frowned upon around here, however I make the occasional exception with banned idiots that keep making alts because at that point they're fair game.

Jake was probably getting banned eventually anyway since he was apparently writing straight up porn for his story.

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7 months ago

Awh! And I was looking forward to reading his masterpiece, "50 Shades of Gay" crying

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7 months ago

Amazing how he actually got "you're" correct on the third try. It warms the heart a lil.

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7 months ago
Wow, thanks a lot. I work on this story for almost 2 years, and come back to it to complete it, hoping people will like it. Then all my story gets is extreme criticism and even THIS:
'Or hell, do something that isn't writing'
Yeah, guess what, that was extremely mean. I try to make a decent storygame to make up for the other one and all you people do is show up and crap all over it.
Thanks. a. lot.
Oh, btw, I understand it might be a bit 'random', and the choices don't influence the story, but I tried my best to make it as well done as possible.
And if you don't know Undertale...
DONT
PLAY
IT.
I'm sorry if I seem a bit rude, but I put genuine effort and love into this story. Your reactions ruin that all.
There are worse storygames, btw. Look at those ones and then come back and tell me this one 'looks like it's written by a crazy hobo."
-- Crimspider on 3/5/2018 4:40:27 PM



@Mayana You did good work today.

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7 months ago

Oooh, now I wish I was able to read it before it was unpublished. :D

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7 months ago

Ah, cool! Thank you for that. 

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7 months ago
Preserving the first page for posterity:







It's one of the more ummm, unique and memorable stories we've gotten in awhile.

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7 months ago

This is the first page?  I am....confused.

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7 months ago

You're feeling exactly the way you should, it's what the author intended.

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7 months ago

OMG, this is beautiful! Not since the infamous Harry Potter fanfic My Immortal have I seen such a masterpiece! heart

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7 months ago

Snow

so so so sad i cry and cry and cry when i play this
-- foxy pink on 3/15/2018 8:39:41 PM with a score of 0


Haunted

this so sad i cried for a very long time it is also very cute
-- foxy pink on 3/15/2018 8:27:12 PM with a score of 1


Farewell, My Childhood Self

i loved it and when emily died i cried really long
-- foxy pink on 3/15/2018 8:18:28 PM with a score of 0

Talk about your "i cri evrytiem"

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7 months ago
I want them to make an account. And also I want them to read Inseparable.

e: look at the order of comments there. Fucker skipped right over mine. HAVE THEY NO TEARS TO SHED FOR THE DEAD AND THOSE WHO STILL LOVE THEM ANYWAY?

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7 months ago
Also notice how they apparently spent 9 minutes playing haunted and twelve minutes playing snow. I think Snow is the only one where we should cry... because there's a damn kickstarter link on it!

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7 months ago

Quite like this one on Tower of Riddles. ^_^

Ever wondered why I dislike Swededn? This game is an example of why. 

You had the flag of Sweden with no sign of Finland... 

I entered the Sweden door, since you know, it's right next to Finland...And they frekkin' killed meh! 

Nevar trust Swedan. Evar. 

-- Rosetail on 5/31/2015 10:58:12 AM

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7 months ago
Rosetail was the WC apologist, right? Or am I thinking of a different one?

All those paws and tails blend together after awhile...

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7 months ago

Comment on my storygame TechNOIR:

Still not as good as The Hunt For Cake.

-- Slasher on 2/13/2018 2:48:52 PM with a score of 2

That bastard.

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6 months ago

Comment on In School Suspension that is very contradictory.

Yeah as if I even care but it was pretty amazing

-- Moana on 2/17/2018 10:43:45 AM

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6 months ago

The roasting of Steve, a comment on Prophecy

 

Based on the very juvenile dialogue and poor sentence structure, I'm guessing this was written by someone in their mid-teens. If that's the case, there are some interesting ideas and somewhat humorous scenes. If you can fight through the roughly 3000 examples of toilet humor, there's some entertainment value to be had here. 

If it was written by an adult, I'd have to say I'm underwhelmed.

-- nogard42 on 2/18/2018 4:07:22 AM with a score of 0

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6 months ago
Seems about right.

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5 months ago

A nice one from Mayana.

School Massacre

Look, randomness is bad. It is fine in small amounts, but if that's the entire point of the story, then that story will be bad, too. This wasn't funny or interesting to read, a complete waste of time. Unpublish this and go read a book or a featured story on this site. You might notice they're very different from this pile of shit. If you don't want to be serious about writing, then please do us all a favor and just keep your stories unpublished from now on.

-- Mayana on 4/26/2018 1:41:25 PM with a score of 0

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5 months ago

Eternal

FUCK! I died again I sucked at this choose you story, just like I fuck and sucked in real life.

-- yezster on 4/27/2018 8:15:44 AM with a score of 0

Always good when the readers can be honest with themselves.

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5 months ago
I like him already.

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5 months ago

Digging in the graveyard again because why the hell not.

Wild Night (Infinite Story)

Actually, the only gay people I've ever known all turned out to be creeps. I'm convinced every gay man has been molested as a child.

One guy ended up screwing me out of $100 (not literally) the other one ended up hitting on me. Actually they both did, and they both admired my ass - which did flatter me, I must admit. It got to the point where one of them was trying to convince me that I'm 'lying to myself, and that I really loved him and I'm really gay'

That's when I told him to go to Hell. I thought I was an open-minded man of the 21st century, but gay people creep me out.

Anyway, this is turning into a tangent. This story is pretty horrible. Pixielaughs is it's only redeeming value.

- ChubbyTeletubby

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5 months ago
Rant @ the gays ft. One line review

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5 months ago

So gay people are all bad and they'll steal your money... You learn new and interesting things every day. ^_^

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5 months ago

I always love these:

I had a scare at the end- like the pics, it makes things fun.
-- LuvLee on 4/23/2018 12:13:41 PM

Left on a game called Night in the Woods… By Luvlee. ^_^

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5 months ago

Here's a fun one.

The battle of two sites https://infinite-story.com/story/info.php?id=916

Infinite Story 4 Life! - Feb 1, 2007

 

CYSers are a bunch of fucktards.

Come and get me bitches. LOL - Dec 22, 2014

 

Time has passed and now I am a cruel tyrannical overlord of said CYS fucktards.

And to think, I hesitated. - May 11, 2018

 

- EndMaster

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5 months ago
That explains a few things.

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5 months ago
Ahahahaha, I just noticed this post. How things change.

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5 months ago

I dunno. Pretty sure he still thinks we're a bunch of fucktards. ^_^

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5 months ago

Snow

It was terrible. Horrible sad and deathly. DO NOT READ IT THIS BOOK. It is about a girl who dies. A guy loves her and dies too, but is having so much fun he doesnt realize it. It sou d okay, but please, if you care for your happiness, don't read this. It is super creepy. I have nothing good to say about it.

-- CC on 5/15/2018 9:24:22 PM with a score of 0

Lol.

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5 months ago
I hope they read Inseparable next.

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5 months ago

But if he's having so much fun he doesn't realize he's dead, surely that's a happy ending? cheeky

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4 months ago

PrincessStarlight on 5/19/2018 for The Ocean's Daughter

SO ROMANTIC

PrincessStarlight on 5/19/2018 for Find a Date Before it's too Late

SO ROMANTIC

PrincessStarlight on 5/19/2018 for An Honourable Gentleman?

*Sighs* So Romantic

PrincessStarlight on 5/19/2018 for The Proposal

*Sighs* So Romantic

PrincessStarlight on 5/18/2018 for Love Triangle

so romantic

PrincessStarlight on 5/18/2018 for College Romance

so romantic

PrincessStarlight on 5/18/2018 for His Smile

so romantic

PrincessStarlight on 5/18/2018 for The Fox and The Fawn

SO ROMANTIC, SO ADVENTUROUS, SO COOL, AND SO AWESOME. I LOVED IT, IT WAS SO GREAT IT IS MY FAVORITE ONE OF YOUR STORYGAMES GRACIE98. IT WAS FAN-FLIPPIN'TASTIC.

 

I feel like she's going to burst out into song about her prince coming someday.

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4 months ago
PrincessStarlight on 5/3/2018 for Among the Trees

not so romntic


(Actually looks like she was doing the 'so romantic' thing for awhile before those too, was it you who docked her for comment spamming?)

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4 months ago
A Hero is Born..
SO STUPID, NO OFFENCE
-- PrincessStarlight on 5/1/2018 11:47:07 AM

lol

e: aaaah Briar changed her avatar and it's weirding me out

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4 months ago

New drawing for a character in one of my choicescript games. I'm keeping it. ^_^

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4 months ago
This is unnatural.

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4 months ago

You're unnatural!

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4 months ago

No, wasn't me, I only just noticed the ongoing romantic comments.

EDIT: There, she unlocked a new achievement.

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4 months ago

PrincessStarlight on 5/19/2018 for Love SICK

SO FUCKING ROMANTIC!!! <3

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4 months ago
I thought this was for real, damn. Would've made my day. (although I would've been sad at proof she was fake. Always with the weirdo noobs, I want to believe...)

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2 months ago

:::::::'( it's really not real?

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4 months ago
On A Matt's Purpose

: There Ismail a Ethan in my class he also rapes everyone I am FeMale.

-- Eric Lang on 3/10/2017 11:54:56 AM

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4 months ago

Huh... Eric seems like a strange name for a female. indecision

Also, I took a look at the game expecting it to be about a guy called Matt... It was not. cheeky

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4 months ago
Pfft, I'm old, I literally have no idea what I'm typing most of the time unless I zoom in.

Anyway I think I figured this out, Eric was just using the periodic table in his science class to state that he is Iron Man.

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4 months ago

Ah! I see.. That makes way more sense. ^_^

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4 months ago
P on 5/26/2018 for Live the Life of a Cat
THIS IS HOORIBLE! I DONT WANTTO PLAY WITH SOME LITTLE GIRL AND BE A HOUSECAT!

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4 months ago
This one is a charmer.

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4 months ago

A Very Special Choose Your Story

This game taught me to be gay!

-- 3iguy on 6/1/2018 8:54:39 AM

I'm fairly certain Patar had the power within him to be gay the whole time.

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4 months ago

Every comment on this story is gold.  I have been laughing for five minutes straight.  For the record, I gave it a rating of seven, not eight.

 

 

I enjoy the point around the page 'Never, never, never give up' where the author's typing ability starts disintegrating completely, really giving the impression the keyboard was being frantically mashed, perhaps with vision blurred by tears of regret for all the time wasted while rivulets of mascara cascaded down their cheeks. Just adds a nice touch of realism. 

I was wondering if anyone would be moved at the last minute to throw out the contest theme completely and bash something completely random together to attempt to save their worthless points. Frankly I'm just grateful it was Cricket and not me. 

I hope the judges and reviewers will look kindly upon this 1000 word apology/feeble excuse offered up by this squirming insect (Name/avatar appropriate! Another nice touch!) but either way, Cricket, today you are better than Ebon and should feel proud. 

(You were right btw that you're not really well known enough to have gotten custom insults if you had wound up as just another SHAMED noob...however reading the other comments I see going above and beyond has already gotten you noticed and reaped rewards there. We can only assume that you and Corgi will forever haunt each other's most erotic nightmares.)

-- mizal on 6/1/2018 5:33:48 PM with a score of 0

I am sorry to ask this, but was the title of this story based on the story itself? I don’t really understand. The contest was supposed to be about giving the reader “the feels” and have an emotional reaction to reading the story. I guess “ugh” is a feeling. 

The idea behind the story is nice, but I’m not sure how it fit into the contest at all. That said, the idea could be fleshed out quite a great deal more to make it effective and useful. And the story starts out rather poorly with the classic, “Pick the right choice or die.” That’s really not needed in these stories, and certainly not in a story that’s competing for a contest here. If you’re going to add choices to the story, those choices should have an effect on the story, not just be quick endings to get out of the story. 

The writing is good, as is the structure. I’m not sure about the options in the story. Basically every option appears to be “Choose the correct choice or you lose.” And in every case, the correct choice is quite obvious. And yes, there are simply too few options in this story to be an effective story. I’d suggest you work more with the story, develop comprehensive choices and options, and have those options have a clear effect on the story. Thank you for sharing this with the site, and I encourage you to write more, but perhaps without a contest and deadline so that you can more fully develop a story. 

-- Ogre11 on 6/1/2018 11:12:41 PM with a score of 0

It's certainly entertaining, though short. There are a few typos here and there but nothing so horrible that it stood out. As I can see in your comment, you happen to be one of the people who you mock in your story for "writing eight hours before the deadline" in the Winner's Ending. I found that quite amusing. 

Overall, I cave it a 3. It is only 1,000 words after all, and I feel like this would have been a lot better if you had the time to flesh it out. You should also specify in the first page that it is the application deadline you are looking at (the one that you say is in a couple of hours) rather than the contest deadline, as it makes for a very confusing timeline. It isn't badly-written though. I feel like given more time and effort, you could produce something of substance. I look forward to reading your stories in the future ^_^

-- Leora on 6/1/2018 2:51:49 PM with a score of 0

And, not only that, but you commented on your own story and gave yourself an 8 rating? I take back anything even remotely nice I could have said in my last comment. 
You sir, are the worst kind of noob, and I hope you rot in Noob Hell.

-- corgi213 on 6/1/2018 2:24:31 PM with a score of 0

So first you say the contest deadline is in a few hours, but then later go on to say it is in a couple of months? 
Honestly it seems like you created this storygame, ignored it the whole time, then only wrote it within the last couple of hours before the deadline just to avoid the pit of shame. 
Like the sorry inept fool of a noob that you are. 
Honestly Cricket, next time you could at least be diligent and write a nice 20,000 word entry for the contest? Like you don't seem like you'd be a bad writer, you just need to stop being a lazy piece of shit and the rest will follow. 
Despite avoiding the pit of shame you should still be ashamed of yourself.

-- corgi213 on 6/1/2018 2:23:07 PM with a score of 0

The story was all right, but it was very short, and it had a few typos. 

It seems as if the author wrote this in a few hours late at night.

-- Cricket on 6/1/2018 2:22:46 PM with a score of 0

I really, really wanted to give this an 8.

-- Fluxion on 6/1/2018 10:59:38 AM with a score of 0

 

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4 months ago

Wait, wait, wait... So you left a comment on your own story, complaining that it was rushed and had typos? No! That's not how you noob! You have to leave a comment saying, "OMG, dis best gam I eva red! U such gud riter! I gib dis 8 out 8 SOOOO GUD!!!" ... Then get all your friends and family to leave similar comments about how amazing the game is. Seriously, you have brought disgrace to the honorable name of noob! Hang your head in shame! angry

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4 months ago

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4 months ago
Congrats on the clickable link, now learn to post images, scrub.

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4 months ago
We really should have an article for how to operate the text editor.

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4 months ago

... Well, at least this one's honest. frown

Spyre S-31 Sci-Fi Adventure by acid_panda and LambWilly

great game seeing as i wrote it

-- LambWilly on 6/7/2018 1:28:19 AM with a score of 0

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4 months ago
Inseperable

Kinda Gay 7/8
-- Bob on 6/13/2018 1:37:41 PM with a score of 0

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3 months ago

With all the attention Madglee's Mommy story has been getting lately, sort of surprised it took this long to get a comment like this:

you didn't get to choose much in the game and TOO MUCH READING

-- Fucko on 6/19/2018 4:27:30 PM with a score of 395

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3 months ago
I, too, come to site for stories and then get angry that they are made of words.

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3 months ago

So, this one's not a comment on a CYS game, but rather a review left on a COG game, but I thought it was funny enough to warrant sharing here.

Some context... This review was left on a game called The Courting of Miss Bennet by Michael Gray. (A game based on Pride and Prejudice.)

Only got 2 stars because it is litteraly the movie pride predgidus and zombies the only thing missing is the zombies and a few other things however how they speak, where they go, what they do etc is everything from a movie good movie but this novel lacks any originality so there for 2 stars only because I liked the movie

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3 months ago

I've also earned some charming comments on my old Kittens of FAT game I made when I was 11.

I'm pretty sure it's because of all of those WC dudes not knowing where to go and latching on to any kitten-related material on the site, including my weird one.

This is the most amazing game ever in the history of mankind! I love cats, and they are cool. Yay.

-- Zach on 3/17/2018 3:24:18 PM with a score of 37

Why thank you.

This game has brought me enlightenment if I had to change anything I would change nothing. May god have mercy on our soul

-- MysticalLixard on 3/10/2018 7:24:54 AM with a score of 37

Perhaps I can spur a second Rennaissance.

CATS!!!

-- Stormfeather on 11/14/2016 6:28:37 PM with a score of 37

A comment which further adds to the cat theory.

This game is weird, convoluted, and so much fun!! I finally got badge #6--my first one! Will keep trying. Please write more like this!

-- LilacRain on 3/6/2016 12:24:20 AM with a score of 620

Pretty much describes 11 year old me. Weird, convoluted, and fun. Damn those naive days of olde.

This was one of the best and funniest stories I have ever played and this deserves an epic gold, wait no, PLATINUM STAR. If you have not played this yet, you must. The game takes realism and stabs it in the back saying, "Screw you!" This is, by far, my favorite game so far and so far I couldn't find anything related to the FAT except the radio broadcast and the title. There are lots of endings and it took me like 4 hours to find ending 7 which by far is my favorite. Play this game

-- fullmetalfan890 on 11/9/2015 12:51:35 PM with a score of 996

Wow.

That was rather interesting

-- Lzark on 8/13/2015 2:58:15 PM with a score of 634

HAHA, one of my favorite comments yet.

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3 months ago

:) I remember now. I read this one; it actually is a lot of fun, and impressive too when you realize how young the authors were. I should add this to what I recommend to people.

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3 months ago

Well thanks, haha, I was heavily inspired by Jurassic Fairview Park and how expansive it was, which probably explains all of the items and randomness.

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3 months ago

:) You are most welcome, and I thank you guys for writing it! It is highly entertaining and actually well thought out, I can tell. I think I’ll check out the other story you mentioned too. I hope you and your bro continue to write: you make a great team, and maybe one day you can publish some of your work.

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3 months ago

Well, now you've made me nostalgic for the good old Warrior Cats Takeover days... As a result, I'm going to waste a ridiculous amount of time looking through cat related games on the site, in search of some good Warrior-fan comments. cheeky

Cat's Day a Everything Else by NinaB.R.

:3 meow meow meow..... MEOW that was pretty good could've done better though... MEOW!!

-- alienalpha on 1/6/2012 5:25:12 PM with a score of 0

make one about a wild cat please

-- Lilian on 1/6/2015 11:15:50 AM with a score of 0

THis game is dumb just make warriors games plz.

-- noneof ur beeswax on 4/18/2015 6:04:36 PM with a score of 0

It was fine but maybe you want to explore different thoughts for cats. Cats don't chase squirrels: they hunt. It's a natural instinct. And they are very independant and smart. They don't need us to survive. Once my cat went away for a week at a time and she came back perfectly fine and she was an old cat! I think you have the skill to delve deeper into an animal's mind. I am just commenting this to help you with future stories, I mean no offense. Sincerely Clumsypaw 
P.S. Work on your spelling, PLEASE!!!

-- clumsypaw on 5/25/2015 4:28:34 PM with a score of 0

Hello. I am new leader of bloodclan and I like this and all, but I would like some other choices and things in the story, At least you put you effort in it #COUGH COUGH Unlike warrior adventure COUGH COUGH#

-- Shred(F) on 2/7/2016 5:02:07 PM with a score of 0

Heh..Nice game i was looking for a warrior cats game but well...This is good!

-- DeadFur6932 on 8/26/2016 6:24:17 AM with a score of 0

It was a very creative story and I was thrilled to see that there wasn't any warrior cats in it.I would really like to see a story that contains warrior cats for some inspiration and motivation. And to be amused of course! I hope there is a part two!!

-- Th33moC4t on 9/18/2017 1:28:14 PM with a score of 0

cats:]

-- Daniel White on 11/11/2016 1:21:26 PM with a score of 0

A Day in the Life of a Cat

Modern Adventure by pigeon309

?pfffft if this is legitimate and someone actually worked on this then you need a new hobby,but to anyone who enjoyed the Erin Hunter books, Warriors, dont read it for it is an insult

-- tigerstar26 on 8/4/2013 5:13:04 PM

I wish i could hiss at my brother :O

-- Coolcat123tiger AJ on 8/12/2014 3:54:27 PM

Awesome! Please continue. :) It's so good. Can you read my story- -Warrior Cats- The Power of Echos 
I promise you it's a good story as well. It's based on the series of Erin Hunter, Warrior Cats.

-- RisingDarknessWolf on 10/5/2014 4:21:21 PM

I want to go out in the forest and go to clan life

-- Katy on 11/18/2014 1:09:58 PM

waffle waffle waffle waffle 
Love it but.....MAKE IT WARRIOR CATS!!!

-- Patchflame on 12/25/2014 5:05:49 PM

All I wanted was a Warrior cat RPG... better than HW but notoriusly short.

-- Ginger on 3/17/2015 5:06:37 PM

YOU ARE NOT AH GODH BUT A LOSAH

-- MC MUGGESLIK on 4/11/2015 11:17:43 PM

this is... AWFUL go #BoRiNg if you agree which i do

-- dawna on 6/16/2015 5:33:44 PM

Live the Life of a Cat

Modern Adventure by kawaii_kitty

YOU ARE MY ONLY FRIEND, CAT TOWER!!

-- Wolfshadow on 9/27/2015 6:42:34 PM

THIS IS HOORIBLE! I DONT WANTTO PLAY WITH SOME LITTLE GIRL AND BE A HOUSECAT! 

-- P on 5/26/2018 10:48:02 AM

Do you play cat roleplay on this game?

-- Tairyn Lowenberg on 5/29/2018 3:49:55 PM

Heyyyyyyyyyyy why couldnt i kill the owners XD XD XD make somthing where ya can eat ppl and are a cat!

-- BOOM BADA BOOM on 5/28/2018 10:39:11 AM

 

 

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3 months ago
I remember A Day In the Life of a Cat, commentors were all getting so salty someone dared write a story about a normal, non warrior cat.

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3 months ago
Found and deleted a couple of WC games due to this thread, haha!

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3 months ago

Looking at the profile of 'clumsypaw', I find exactly one post in the IRC history. Not a review but it tells me a few things about them:

'I luv it. Hello BAM! Figure that out. HA HA! Leave me alone. Tinypaw attack!!!!!! Totally random. Cupcakes. I ate a cupcake!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!That took 4ever. go away yourself. BYE!!!!!!!'

Try making a post like that that today lol...

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3 months ago

... The real tragedy is, this comment was left on the Reading Corner in regards to "The Book Thief" ... Which is one of my favourite books... Now I feel dirty. >.<

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3 months ago
Realizing now that they probably posted a LOT, that was just the only post that was outside of Forum Games.

...makes it so, so much worse.

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3 months ago

Well, suffice it to say that was a very colorful era.

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3 months ago
Congrats on surviving btw, and hope you're sticking around now that I've noticed you've been posting more.

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3 months ago

Well, assuming that life doesn't kick my proverbial ass, I'll probably be hanging on. There's a ton of stuff I've missed it seems, and a lot of quality storygames I haven't had the chance to go through.

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3 months ago
Well Rogues is the big event right now so consider that a recommendation.

If you wander off again be sure to come back at the end of September, the entries for the epic contest will be published then and there's some heavy hitters in there.

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3 months ago

AVSCYS

handles sensitive topics poorly and criticizes people for going through hard times. I don't care if it's supposed to be "funny" or "a joke" its fucking rude and insensitive

-- thatabsurd on 6/22/2018 10:41:30 PM

I sure hope so. Lol.

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3 months ago
This story is pretty offensive, it can get graphic and downright ruthless at times so if you don’t like that sort of humor, don’t read this story. But if you read it anyway don’t complain if you get offended, I did warn you and keep in mind it IS only a story.

...and they read it anyway and then complained. That's absurd.

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3 months ago

He, hehehe. I see what you did there.

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3 months ago

Rogues

Fantastic, just fantastic in fact, like a wonderful melody carried so perfectly in our, the midsummer’s night breeze, a tune to the heart, one that will make many hearts race and beat with a drum of anticipation,
a story brighter than just the theme or genre of the fantasy or adventure subject and plot, it is a grand, a truly grand story, of life, oft small in scale and vast in its scope,
life that feels real, as enticing to us as it is involved to its character’s woes and tribulations, their plight and ascent into great personal legend, it is life in its many varieties, and trials, of character, troubling as mere obstacles and leading as fated choice, trials of choice and change, trials agonising and spoiling for choice as they may sometimes be to us... The sweetest of the bittersweet fruit and chocolate extract, the poisoned pistachio(?) ice-cream in a multitude of flavours. ...but I digress. Bear with me, for it is a long road we’re on, an oceanic one at that..,
with many such journeymen, what are as well traversing this at times bleak and oft kaleidoscopic realm of deeads cloaked in shadow,of artful illusions breaking realities’ mold, of noble sedition and hearty deception,
and many a fellow sojourner in our paths, are a prospecting “poet” and bard knowledgeable and appreciative in life’s great devices...being what they are...
It’s really hard to describe though without somehow falling back in on the vaguest of terms and descriptors... most inadequate to our tale of roguish exploits
it’s really not at all like I’ve(we, might’ve) been expecting, it is though and Definitively so, a pleasant kind of surprise.
I suppose I could say it’s really a more “realistic(?)” and Definitely engaging take on fantasy, a world and genre that we're ironically beginning to feel become a dull edge in our storytellers’ wares and tool-belts, an item of the repetitive to the point of mundane, if given poor or harsher management than is called for...
after all, no matter what the miraculous nature of wonders, amazement without substance and variety does wear off, and even miracles repeated enough become the norm of life, yet another casualty of the mundane experience in our existence, a life that could be as ever fulfilling, and as exciting as any adventure our life presents to us regardless of greater circumstances, ...the metaphorical roses we’re not smelling and fluffy clouds we’re no longer bother to notice, the stargazing we no longer carry on with...
And yet, sometimes, just a shooting star, a comedy or a trail of meteors, it’s enough, a story to inspire and grip at our attention with the best of strings...
A fading of the stellar dreams and hopes brought down to us to shine and failing, falling short yet again in of our vision and our mind’s reach... a fading that has become a reignition yet again, just leave it to EndMaster... and he’ll spin you a tale like you’ve never heard before, in the style of the old, poignant and empathetic to the heart of the matter, with a good hint of modern spices to bring shock and awe... a delicious and lively recipe that will make your emotive and intellective tastebuds buzz and light your most dormant of senses ablaze,
romantic even, you could say

— A

-- Almaz on 6/23/2018 4:14:54 PM with a score of 0

I feel like this reader was on mind altering substances when they wrote this.

If this had been formatted a little better though, I probably would have featured it. As it stands though, it looks too much like a jumbled mess stream of consciousness to do so.

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3 months ago

The guy has been a member since 2014 and has only rated 3 Storygames, one of them is Necromancer.

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3 months ago
This is amazing, I don't think there's a single coherent thought anywhere in it. This is the kind of thing I'd love to hear a dramatic reading of.

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3 months ago

... Perhaps it's meant to be a poem? frown

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3 months ago
keagan on 6/25/2018 for High School Romance

this was freaking boring all u had to do was ask a hoe to the dance!

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3 months ago
On Blooded, the vampire story by Malk and Steve.

Steve's half was pretty good.
-- 3iguy on 7/1/2018 11:43:26 AM with a score of 0

That's kind of cold, lol.

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3 months ago

it's true tho 

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2 months ago
daisy on 7/23/2018 for Prometheus Academy
What were you thinking???!!!! I am a child and it is to bloody!

Orion on 7/23/2018 for Prometheus Academy
Very good. Aged it like 5 times. But to much cussing

...Maturity 7/8?

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2 months ago

... Yeah, this seems to be a common thing with children complaining that games aren't suitable for children... Even when the games CLEARLY state that they're not suitable for children. >.<

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2 months ago
Yeah, I had a noob message me when my game came out and told me it needed to be rated PG-13... even though that rating section literally says "If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R."

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2 months ago

Wibbons actually suggested that your story maturity rating be raised up from 4 to 6 due to putting "Fuck" in it.

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2 months ago
Eh, fair enough. 4 still says 13 or older though I'm pretty sure.

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2 months ago
PG-13 allows a single f-bomb.

Most actual 13 year olds use way more than that in a day.

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2 months ago

I was just about to post these and happily now I don't have to go through the hassle of copy/pasting!

Glad to see you're taking this admin stuff seriously.

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2 months ago
New user Micropen wrote far too long a review on a trash troll game.
http://chooseyourstory.com/story/dilemma

His review is nearly as long as the story itself, and way more than the author deserves:


Intro: Let me just say this story is trash. It may be rude to say that, but it needs to be said. I think you can do a lot better if you try to. If you can't or won't then please refrain from making another story until you get the skills required, and/or the motivation. Now this story may not be worth the effort of this comment, but in case your listening here we go.

Concept: The concept is good, but it is ruined by the author's writing. The idea of you dying and going to a afterlife is good, but you waking up and finding out it is a dream is not. That is very overused and most of the time, unless under very specific cercumstances, will not work. If the game is about that you know you are stuck in a dream, and have to escape, then that can work. Most of the time it will not, and while you can get away with it if your writing is good. Though sadly, yours is not.


Plot: You are a person who dreams they are dead, you can "choose" if you believe in god or not, and if you say you do then... guess what? The person does not believe you and you get met with a message saying that they do not believe you, and that the author "totally" was not too lazy to make a new path. The story is so liner. Your choices in "what item do you buy," and "what drink do you buy," don't make any difference. They don't even give you a item! How hard would it have been to add a item, even if it did nothing? The end result is the same anyway you go. You end up in the same place every time. I looked for other paths everywhere, but where are they??? So you make a storygame that is very liner, and the one ending you do get is "It was all a dream!" You also broke the forth wall in ways that you should not have. It can be a very good thing for a story, but the narrator has to feel like a character. Well instead he was a place to put your notes, but that's okay because I'm SURE you used your time to develop other characters, (See Characters) This was the most lazy thing I have ever seen. Now that I am done ranting...

Characters: There is the main character, and... no one. Every other character in this story has no name. You broke the forth wall a lot of times, so why don't you make the narrator a character, but no, he is you. A place for you to tell your reader things about the... I would say story, but they seem to serve not much of a purpose in the story. They are mostly useless in a story with so few words.


Structure: Liner. Down right liner. I've went over this, moving on.


Word count: 746 words. That is not enough for one path in a decent story, and since your story has ONLY ONE PATH this is a big blunder, or to put it in your terms, a big no no.


Spelling and grammar: This is the only thing even halfway decent. It did not distract me to much.


In conclusion; this story is bad. I gave it a 2/8 for pity. It will die, and the only reason I did this was to practice my reviewing skills. It will burn, and sadly, this comment along with it. You did not deserve this comment, or even my time playing through it looking for paths. You wasted my time with a very bad story.

~MicroPen

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2 months ago

Honestly, I had no idea it was a troll game until you told me, and by then I was halfway through plot. It was a comment that I spent way too long writing, but it got saved here, so I'm glad I wrote it still. Some other new people might learn from this comment. Next few review will be on stories with no real good ones and barely over 3.00

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one month ago
Well sometimes it's hard to tell a troll game from a game that's unintentionally hilariously bad, but that one was extremely low effort either way so you were definitely wasting your time. And 'lol random'' games are rarely received well in any circumstance. < p/>

You Are A Disc In My Dad's Spinal Cord being one of the rare exceptions if anyone wants an example of how to do that kind of game right...

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one month ago
Somebody's using my review outline! I'm so proud ^_^

(And don't worry about it, I made the same mistake with my first serious review. I spent 30 minutes reviewing a 500 word game that got deleted the next day.)

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one month ago

I saw the review on the story, "The Wild West, An Unchangeable World," and liked the outline. I will be using it to review stories from now on. It is a great way to do it.

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one month ago
Because @MicroPen just mentioned @Leora 's comment on my story game, I just wanted to thank Leora for writing such a helpful and structured comment filled with constructive criticism that helped me plan out what I was going to change for my next story game. (The recreation one, I have a thread on it.)

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one month ago

It was very well structured. I'm reviewing a game with it right now, ugh it has three characters to chose from so I am doing it three times. I know there are better ways, but I am doing it like this. It is on "The Wild Adventurers"

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one month ago
No problem :) I read through the new one in the tread and it looks pretty good so far.

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one month ago
Short little glimpse into a world where love is a luxury, and survival coats every choice. Very enjoyable little tale. Thank you!
Inseparable
jspringer55 (Score of 0)
8/19/2018 8:14:45 AM

...I mean, it's a nice comment, but I wonder if he put it on the wrong game.

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one month ago
jenna on 8/26/2018 for Harry Potter...
i love your books i have one question though can you make something like the cursed child except called harry potter the next genration please it would be a dream come true

p.s i have never been out of my hometown



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one month ago

Wait... "I love your books"? Does she think the kid who wrote this game is actually J.K. Rowling? cheeky

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one month ago

The Price of Freedom: Innocence Lost

Really enjoyed it. A few grammar errors other than that grate story
King (Score of 0)
5/31/2018 10:10:07 PM

... I can't tell if this was meant to be ironic. ^_^

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one month ago

Spoiler Alert:
I know you warned me, but the incest thing was a bit much.

-- Quorrah on 9/1/2018 4:46:13 PM

Protagonist is torturing a woman and has the option of wearing a vagina on his face all the first page, yet somehow it was the incest that was a bit much.

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one month ago
thequeen13 on 9/8/2018 for Homo Perfectus [delete]
$15 dollars for a candy bar!? That's outrageous! Humanity does need to be destroyed.

thequeen13 on 9/9/2018 for Homo Perfectus 2 [delete]
$100 for a movie ticket!? Well, actually that's believable. Jolly good show my good man



Looking forward to her going through the entire series yelling about prices...

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one month ago

Repression

All right. So I got three different incest endings, and I liked the first one best. You know, the one that repaired the family structure? Yeah that one. Quick question, though: where is the father in all of this? I mean, it never says what happened to him, even in the more violent endings.

-- BristowJeremiah on 9/9/2018 8:57:54 PM

It's assumed he just left, or possibly died while you and your sister were very young. Either way he's not important to the story other than possibly explaining the dysfunctional family dynamic due to the lack of a proper father figure in the home.

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one month ago
A true connoisseur of sister fucking. It's good to see someone taking the art seriously.

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21 days ago

Repression

It is ridiculously hard to explain why I upped my rating of this story to "it will bring you enlightenment" after getting the Mom/Son incest ending, which I suppose makes sense, considering that enlightenment is ridiculously hard to explain. However, I have finally figured out a way to do it. Read the fanfic that there is a link to in this comment to understand why I said that this fanfic will bring you enlightenment. https://www.fanfiction.net/s/5598018/1/The-Scheming-Borg

-- BristowJeremiah on 9/23/2018 8:23:27 PM

Can't say I approve of linking to fanficdotshit but I do approve of giving the story an 8. yes

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16 days ago

TRASH

I dont know why you people are saying this is great it is awful and retarted not to mention offensive as fuck toward poor white people

-- JodyJo on 9/28/2018 2:38:01 PM

"retarted" Lol.

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15 days ago

... Maybe it's like a retarded tart? frown

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16 days ago
Love Story
a Love & Dating by Amiiychan

cool but needs more love
-- savannah on 9/28/2018 1:49:19 PM

I hated this game, it ended too fast it didn’t make me wet.
-- Juddie on 9/27/2018 11:54:45 PM

BITCH I GOT A HAPPILY EVER AFTER!!!!
-- Taylor on 9/14/2018 9:44:22 AM

nice work,i like it
-- jiknbhb on 9/11/2018 12:04:25 PM

nice game but also super bad in some ways but nice!
-- lol on 9/10/2018 12:12:51

great game !!!!
-- amelia on 9/3/2018 6:29:49 PM

One choice wrong and it ends but it might be good ?? ? Help
-- Toysite on 8/19/2018 5:25:22 PM

this is bad bc there is NO choice... it sucks. no input from viewer. sorry for harshness
-- Moi on 8/17/2018 6:04:24 PM

I love quiz of romances they are hot and sexy
-- sophia baron on 8/12/2018 10:22:25 PM

Superrr
-- sara on 8/3/2018 6:21:17 PM



....this is an unpublished game from 2013, who even are all these thirsty hoes and what are they doing there?

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16 days ago

Well I imagine that thirsty hoes would be more welcomed here than they would at CoG who would probably accuse them of setting back women's rights 200 years.

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5 days ago

Image result for bucket of water

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5 days ago

There we go, that should help their thirst.

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9 days ago
stargazer on 10/4/2018 for Prometheus Academy
Huh...?


How insightful. e: gave it a 1/8 lol

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6 days ago

Best comment on that gender story

1/8, what the fuck is a male to non-binary or female to nonbinary? There are only two genders smh.

-- A faggot on 10/9/2018 10:49:34 AM with a score of 0

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6 days ago
The story actually agrees with the faggot, it will not let you play as the fictional non-binary gender.

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2 days ago

Dead Man Walking

This is an amazing story but the story is a little short.

-- Raistlin on 10/12/2018 11:23:25 PM with a score of 21725

Guess Berka will have to shoot for 2 million words next time.

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yesterday
....well, still better than 'too many words' I guess.