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So I've handed out well over 200 750 (at least) points so far in this experiment. Let's keep the ball rolling.

here are many automated ways to get points (duels, storygames, daily points, articles, etc.) but I also try to give points out for other forms of contributions. Currently, I'm trying to give points out for:

Having a comment featured (2 points)
Contributing excellent aid in the advenced editor forum (Variable Points)

But, I'm a busy guy and it's pretty tough to keep track of everything that's happening, so I'm also giving points out for the following:

Recommending a comment for featuring (1 point)
Recommending a user's excellent aid in the last six months for points (1 point)
Recommending a tag change for a storygame (1 point)
Recommending a storygame for movement to a different category (1 point)
Recommending a storygame for a change in maturity level or difficulty level (1 point for each)
Recommending a storygame for featuring (1 point)
Recommending a storygame for unpublishing (1 point)
Recommending a comment for deletion (1 point)

So, in other words, if you go, right now, and find 5 storygames where they haven't properly tagged their storygame (there are literally dozens of these out there), then you'll get 5 points.

The catch: to get points for recommending something, I have to agree with you. If you recommend a story for featuring and I don't feature it, then you don't get the points. This is to prevent people from gaming the system. Don't worry, for most of the above reccomendations, you won't get rejected often if you follow proper procedure.

I believe Cool74 got around 100 points doing this, the last time I did it.

However, you need to follow the correct procedure to get your points!

Recommending a comment for featuring:

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A link to the storygame
- The comment that you think deserves featuring (copy and paste it)
- The username of the person who wrote the comment (doesn't have to be the exact username, just enough so I understand who it is)
- If there are already 3 featured comments on the storygame, you also have to let me know whose comment you think should be replaced.
- If I agree, you will get 1 point and the person whose comment is featured will get 2 points. If you are reccomending your own comment, then you only get 2 points.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A link to the storygame
- The comment that you think deserves deletion (copy and paste it)
- The username of the person who wrote the comment (doesn't have to be the exact username, just enough so I understand who it is)

It has to either have spammy punctuation, flame the author, be completely incomprehensible, be a duplicate comment, or not actually be a comment (such as "..." or "poop" or something).

Note: Do not recommend comments on Endmaster's or madglee's games for deletion unless they are spammy or deformed. Basically, Endmaster and madglee like to read their flamers so don't rob them of that.

 

Recommending a user's aid in the advanced editor (post must be made in the last 6 months)

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- The user who provided the aid
- A link to the post where he provided the aid

Recommending a tag change for a storygame

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A link to the storygame
- All of the tags you believe the story should have

Recommending a category change for a storygame

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A link to the storygame
- The category you believe it should be in
- A short explanation of why

Recommending a change in maturity or difficulty level for a storygame

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A link to the storygame
- The change you think should be made
- A short explanation of why

Recommending a storygame for featuring

Use http://chooseyourstory.com/forums/the-parlor-room/message/11750

Recommending a forum thread for deletion

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A link to the thread
- A short rationale for why

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing

Reply to THIS thread to THIS post with:
- A link to the storygame
- A short explanation of why

If you don't follow protocol, either there will be no negative repercussions, you will be ignored, or I'll take your advice and not reward you with points. Following protocol expedites the process for me so I don't have to spend a lot of time making changes.

To summarize: post here (for the most part) with recommendations for who I should reward / what I should change and I'll reward you with points.

Additionally, I'll consider giving more points for users who build up a streak of great suggestions.

Thank you! Happy Hunting!

This whole story doesn't even fit on one page. Recommend for deletion. 

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cat-my-story-part-1

That storygame is not very good, but I don't feel that it (quite) warrants deletion. It's got some semblance of choice, more than 1 link per page, not overly broken sentences and it wasn't written maliciously.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/rising-flames

the author was clearly lazy and didn't put in any tags, the length should prob be dropped 1 point as all pats add up to long but each individual path isn't too long.

(I can't fix it right now but I'll they add tags tonight...)

I'm assuming you're on mobile.

First of all, yeah, to get points, you'll need to tell me which tags you think belong.

Second of all, the length is calculated by a formula, not set by the author.

Don't worry since it's my own game I'll fix it if I even get a chance to get on my laptop, and yup mobile at work doing this lol

Not sure if it counts, but Noodles decided to spam himself a bit in the Starts with a Letter forum game.

How exactly do you decide if a post is worth deleting/mentioning in this thread?

I won't closely moderate junk threads like that one (threads without any real content and a bunch of short posts) but I handled it this time and penalized Noodles.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/escaping-the-jungle
-The difficulty should be lower (currently 8/8 difficulty)
-The game is not of sufficient length, quality, or rating for it to be as difficult as it is labeled.
-In my opinion, this story-game should be a difficulty of 2/8.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/choose-your-own-adventure
-The difficulty should be lower (currently 8/8 difficulty)
-The game is not of sufficient length, quality, or rating for it to be as difficult as it is labeled.
-In my opinion, this story-game should be a difficulty of 1/8.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/a-day-in-the-life-of-a-storm-trooper
-The difficulty should be lower (currently 8/8 difficulty)
-The game is not of sufficient length, quality, or rating for it to be as difficult as it is labeled.
-In my opinion, this story-game should be a difficulty of 2/8.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/best-story-game-ever~3a-or-is-it~3f
-The difficulty should be lower (currently 8/8 difficulty)
-The game is not of sufficient length, quality, or rating for it to be as difficult as it is labeled.
-In my opinion, this story-game should be a difficulty of 1/8.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/worst-story-game-ever~3a-or-is-it~3f
-The difficulty should be lower (currently 8/8 difficulty)
-The game is not of sufficient length, quality, or rating for it to be as difficult as it is labeled.
-In my opinion, this story-game should be set to a difficulty of 1/8.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/how-much-do-you-know-about-xkcd~3f
-The difficulty should be lower (currently 8/8 difficulty)
-The game is not of sufficient length, quality, or rating for it to be as difficult as it is labeled.
-In my opinion, the difficulty for this story-game should be 3/8.

Did you just look for low rating and high difficulty stories? lol

That's pretty smart, honestly.

Perfect formatting! Thanks for the clickable link. Agreed on all points.

Should just delete them. Would be much easier. 

Make your own reply to the OP with games you think should be deleted.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/escaping-the-jungle
-The difficulty should be lower (currently 8/8 difficulty)
-The game is not of sufficient length, quality, or rating for it to be as difficult as it is labeled.
-In my opinion, this story-game should be a difficulty of 2/8.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/choose-your-own-adventure
-The difficulty should be lower (currently 8/8 difficulty)
-The game is not of sufficient length, quality, or rating for it to be as difficult as it is labeled.
-In my opinion, this story-game should be a difficulty of 1/8.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/a-day-in-the-life-of-a-storm-trooper
-The difficulty should be lower (currently 8/8 difficulty)
-The game is not of sufficient length, quality, or rating for it to be as difficult as it is labeled.
-In my opinion, this story-game should be a difficulty of 2/8.

Honestly, I think all three of these stories should be deleted. Their whole story is less than a paragraph! 

I chose not to unpublish the stormtrooper one because it's actually got some work put into it. I unpublished the other two. If you'd like points for your efforts then please follow the procedure in the OP and don't just copy stuff from Ford's post because it's confusing to read.

Question... Is it reasonable to recommend a game for deletion if you suspect it to have a ridiculous amount of "fake votes."

For instance, there are a lot of recent troll games where the game will be a 1 or 2 in length, any sane person who votes for it would rate it a 1 (or a 2 if they're incredibly generous) and yet the game's got dozens of people rating it an 8 (or far more likely, 1 person rating it an 8 dozens of times.)

Would voting for your own game several times under different names count as trolling and warrant the game's deletion, or should we just ignore it and wait for the votes from intelligent people to knock the troll game back down to a 2? (It personally doesn't bother me that much, but it'd be a quick and fun way to make some extra points.) 

Send me those games via PM! I have some tools to determine what's going on.

Recommend this thread for deletion for use of annoyingly oversized smiley... It literally hurts my eyes. >.<

http://chooseyourstory.com/forums/the-lounge/message/12714

Agreed.

Recommending thread for deletion

HERMIT CRAB PARTY TIME!

- Do I really need to give a reason? It's another spam thread. Her third one in fact.

I don't think you get points for that, though.

It's a good thing though, I'll start awarding points for it.

I thought that was already set up. heh, I assumed to much then.

... And now I'm curious to know what Hermit Crab Party Time was about... Are we celebrating the death of the recently departed hermit crab? 

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats~3a-an-epic-adventure-part-1

THAT WAS AWESOME!!!!!!!I love how detailed you were.Oh, and I like Snowkit the best.

-- Silvermoon on 6/12/2014 11:44:13 PM

He rated his game and commented on it twice as if it wasn't even his. This could mislead people because he clearly has a bias. I'm not normally one for deleting games or comments but this is clearly biased and he is rating his own game which I hate!

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats~3a-an-epic-adventure-part-1

I liked it,but it needs a little more detail.

-- Silvermoon on 6/12/2014 11:41:40 PM

He rated his game and commented on it twice as if it wasn't even his. This could mislead people because he clearly has a bias. I'm not normally one for deleting games or comments but this is clearly biased and he is rating his own game which I hate!

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/victorious-warrior-cats

It was amazing! No sad parts or deaths. So appropriate!!!!

-- Starshine228 on 2/27/2014 8:33:46 PM

He rated his own story as if it wasn't even his. This is clearly biased and will not help people who are looking at the reviews.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/survivinghighschool

I put at the end that it was not finished so don't get snotty and yes I have some things to work out that's why I put this up so you could point out mistakes

-- Jarjoura on 5/22/2013 9:08:44 PM

Not only did he publish a unfinished game, he got pissed of at his reviews and rated his game so he could get back at them. This doesn't help anyone, he isn't even posting a review....

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/survivinghighschool

Apparently your jealous so bye

-- Jarjoura on 5/23/2013 5:56:22 PM

Not only did he publish a unfinished game, he got pissed of at his reviews and rated his game so he could get back at them. This doesn't help anyone, he isn't even posting a review....

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/randomly-walk

This is so stupid that it's funny

-- Bardockwest on 4/3/2013 8:37:05 PM

He rated his own game twice and didn't give any feedback.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/randomly-walk

Seriously, though... I think it is stupid... this was just a test of how to do this...

-- Bardockwest on 4/9/2013 8:38:17 PM

He rated his own game twice and didn't give any feedback.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/randomly-walk

Best game ever....

-- Endrew on 5/14/2013 2:07:16 AM

This guy posted a duplicate comment. Probably by accident but the duplicate comment should go and leave the original one.

 

Thank you for your very well formatted list! If you feel like it, next time, you could make the links hyperlinks to save me some time.

I did not delete Silvermoon's/Starshine's comments on his own storygame. I think that there's no way to prevent an author from signing out of his account and commenting so when he forgets to do that, it's best to leave it so we can all laugh.

I deleted Jarjoura's this time, but they're on the edge, I'm tempted to leave one next time. He didn't truly break any site rules with his first one as it was a defense of his story. His second comment truly warranted deletion though.

I left Burdockwest's comments because they don't break any site rules. He's not being rude and he's talking about the storygame. He is kind of dumb for commenting with his own account, but w/e.

Delete

Like shooting Bitches in a barrol

 

Jibble recommends a story-game for unpublishing (In correct format because I agree):

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/like-shooting-bitches-in-a-barrol
-1 Page, Troll story, bad grammar, incorrect spelling, everything else that goes with a 1 page troll story and why it should be deleted.

Thank you.

I unpublished this yesterday.

@Jibble

You need to follow the steps or he won't reward you

Thanks!

I'm getting really OCD about difficulty now. This is only the Fantasy Adventure genre as well. I had to re-read these to have a proper opinion and describe the story xD it sucks reading bad stories over again (they're bad enough to be bad, but good enough to not be unpublished - It's like a silver lining that I can't quite see unless I look a certain direction; and then my eye twitches a bit from the irregularity.)

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-league-of-legends
-Change difficulty (currently 8/8). In my opinion this story-game should have a difficulty level of 3/8 - 4/8.
-The choices are linear and 90% of them directly lead to an End Game link. It's very short in many paths and there is nothing difficult about it.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-seven-truth-of-the-seven-rainbow-path
-Change difficulty (currently 7/8). In my opinion this story-game should have a difficulty level of 3/8.
-Linear choices, End Game links on many of the first options.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/crown-the-king
-Change difficulty (currently 5/8). In my opinion this story-game should have a difficulty level of 3/8.
-Not a high reading level that would be difficult for anyone, linear choices, shortest EG link is 2 clicks away with about a paragraph of story in between the beginning and the end (keeping in mind the longest is about 10 clicks with roughly 1 page of 4 paragraphs in between start and finish)

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/eng4u1-seminar-game
-Change difficulty (currently 1/8). In my opinion this story-game should have a difficulty level of 4/8.
-1/8 "No possible way to lose" LIES! ALL LIES! There are many possible ways to lose (mostly scripting problems on the author's part), the story is a bit more lengthy and certainly is not going to be easier than a random warrior cats game.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/jack-and-jill-live-on
-Change difficulty (currently 5/8). In my opinion this story-game should have a difficulty level of 2/8.
-The only thing difficult about this game is ignoring the grammar mistakes. The game is short, and although it has potential - it is not above the average difficulty for a story-game. (ignoring that the average difficulty has been brought down by so many bad games)

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/jack-and-jill-live-on-2
-Change difficulty (currently 6/8). In my opinion this story-game should have a difficulty level of 3/8.
-The game has better grammar than it's prequel, and the plot is more refined. However the story-game in itself is not difficult to play, the choices are linear until the very end(s) and you don't need any advanced witchcraft knowledge to play through. A slight dip in difficulty level would suit this story-game for the younger demographic (therefore including the older masses as well).

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/scarlet-bird
-Change difficulty (currently 3/8). In my opinion this story-game should have a difficulty level of 4/8.
-The game is cute and not very well written, but comprehensible. For it's length, it is actually surprisingly difficult to follow the linear story-line. It's as though the author had a box of Legos[Links] and each one was a slightly different color - but only one specific color would be correct. For the slight up in frustration for readers who want to read the entire game, the difficulty should be bumped up a notch.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/shoot-the-guards
-Change difficulty (currently 2/8). In my opinion this story-game should have a difficulty level of 4/8.
-This game is quite the advanced walk in the park. Item scripting, an objective, somewhat trivial gameplay (I don't know what trivial means), and the difficulty is simply misleading/too low. I might just be tired, but the game requires you to know how to use items - so it must be more advanced than 'sterwerz - return of wariorkat'.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats-adventures-remade~21
-Change difficulty (currently 3/8). In my opinion this story-game should have a difficulty level of 1/8.
-The game was extremely easy. The choices weren't descriptive, the story was cliché, and the endings were abrupt.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/can-anybody-escape~3f
-Change difficulty (currently 6/8). In my opinion this story-game should have a difficulty level of 3/8.
-Contrary to the try-hard title, everybody can escape. I accept the apology of the author for any grammatical errors, nobody is perfect 100% of the time. The plot sucked, the game wasn't advanced in any light, and no complicated situations were involved. Nothing made this game as difficult as it was listed, so it should be bumped down a level or two.

You're doing God's work, Ford. Thanks for tackling difficulties! I hope other people pick up on this one.

The only one I didn't change was Scarlet Bird. It seems that you want to up the difficulty because it's tough to understand what's going on, but you make it seem like it's linear. If it's linear, you could easily just spam links at the bottom until you get through, so I don't think the difficulty should be high. Do you agree?

It's a minor difficulty change, I may have just chosen the right links to get a more difficult story; so scarlet bird's difficulty doesn't have to change.

JJJ would you delete a quiz if it had misinformed answers and questions?

Probably not.

Recommend comment for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/jack-and-jill-live-on

Wow. I thought they were exaggerating when they said how short this was, but they totally weren't. But, other than the length, the writing was ok, definitely not the worst I've ever seen, but here's some tips to improve it: 

CHARACTER: Arguably one of the hardest things to get right, you need to make sure that interactions between characters are realistic and interesting, and for that to happen, you need to have a good idea as to what the characters are like. To quote... someone (can't remember who), 'Everyone wants something, even if it's just a glass of water." So what do your characters want? Do they have a particular way of trying to get it? Do they have any good or bad habits? What are they like to strangers compared to what they're like to friends? Are they timid, brave, accepting, judgmental, etc? Plan out each character so they are a fully fleshed out person, even if you don't put all of the things you plan into the story. 

STORY: There are a few things you need to consider here, like Goals, Atmosphere, History, and Branching, so I'll only put some of them here and cover others later. The first thing you need is LENGTH! Instead of making a sequel, try editing this one and making it longer. The next thing is History. Tell us about the kind of world they live in. For example, elaborate on what that pet Jill has is. Describe it, tell us what it eats, what it sounds like, if it can fight, etc. Things like this really help build up the next thing, Atmosphere. You need to describe what's going on, and how other characters are reacting. For example, the fight was thoroughly underwhelming. Try describing the environment, telling us what the attackers look like, and actually describe the fight itself instead of just skipping to after the fight. And lastly, Branching. The options we choose should effect the story, like maybe if you were to not trust Jack, he'd take offense and storm off, so you have to face the attackers by yourself, then try to find Jack afterwards. 

GOALS: Basically, there was none. The first thing you need to do is to give us a long-term goal, for example, escape the forest. Now, along the way add smaller, short-term goals, like defeat the attackers. And when it comes to long-term goals, you don't even need to keep the same goal for the entire adventure. Let's say that you're about to escape the forest when you find out that your pet-thing is sick, and the antidote is in the deepest part of the forest, so you have to decide whether to go back in or escape and let your pet-thing die. Now, that's not to say you should be constantly switching goals. It should go something like this: Set a long-term goal. Achieve some (maybe four or five) short-term goals while you are doing your long-term goal. Then, if you want, make a discovery that gives you a new long-term goal (this can be before or after achieving the first one). That's a pretty basic set-up, because you can have any number of goals at the same time (although try not to make your game cluttered with constantly switching goals, and let your player achieve some before switching to a new one).

-- Amy2 on 6/10/2013 8:19:47 AM

Wow! Agreed.

Change Maturity Level: Currently rated 4/8

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/any-reasone~3f

The very first scene is a woman being raped on her parents' grave by their murderer.

 

Holy shit. Agreed as well. Make sure you list what the new maturity should be when you want it changed, though.

I would like to recommend this comment for featuring.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/any-reasone~3f

Dark stories like this can be really good when written well, but this story really needs more explanation of the situation you're in and how you got there. For instance, if your brother murdered your parents, why aren't the police involved? Especially if your sister knows he did it. Also there were a lot of spelling mistakes, which is why it's always important to proofread your stories before you publish them.

Comment left by Briar_Rose.

Agreed!

I am recommending these comments for deletion. Note that Silvermoon is the author of the story. I assume that he or she thought the comments were anonymous. I honestly don't care if you count them as one comment or two.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats~3a-an-epic-adventure-part-1

THAT WAS AWESOME!!!!!!!I love how detailed you were.Oh, and I like Snowkit the best. -Silvermoon

I liked it,but it needs a little more detail. -Silvermoon

It's sort of frustrating to have to repeat myself :)

Basically, those comments aren't breaking site rules. We can't stop authors from logging out and then posting on their storygames with comments that praise them, so why would we delete the comments when they're logged in?

Sorry, it was just  two posts that appeared to be aimed at misleading players. I know there isn't anything "unlawful" about this. But, filling your comments bar with a bunch of your own comments should be discouraged, right? The comments bar is for other people to leave comments about your game.

Discouraged, definitely. However, authors leave comments on their own storygames all the time, in order to respond to other comments, so it's not a cut and dry rule. Those two comments are dumb but leaving them up allows people to make judgements about the author and I'm okay with that.

When authors post on their stories it just shows what kind of person they are. In which case you give them that "Dude really?" look and keep walking. In the end, posting comments to praise your own story just makes you look stupid, and I personally find joy in reading them.

Completely agreed! Well said, Danaos.

Alright. Here is a comment that I believe you can agree is worth deletion. Granted the story wasn't stellar or anything, but I think the comment counts as "flaming".

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/esacaping-from-twolegs 

THAT WAS AWFUL!!!!!!, JUST AWFUL!!!!!!!!!! YOU SHOULD HAVE WROTE MORE WORDS, AND MADE A LONGER STORY, YOU MOUSEBRAINED PIECE OF FOXDUNG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

Comment left by Silvermoon.

hahaha

Agreed!

JJJ, can we recommend certain comments in certain forum threads be deleted whilst keeping the thread?

Yes, that's fine, but only if it's in a thread that contributes to the site. I won't be policing most forum games or joke threads, etc unless there's something offensive. In other words, I won't be working to keep really shallow threads on topic.

All comments listed are from this URL http://chooseyourstory.com/forums/forum-games/message/12659

Recommending a forum comment for deletion:

The Thing - Psychological Horror RP

I like foxes - 3 hours ago Jibble

Recommending a forum comment for deletion:

The Thing - Psychological Horror RP

And fabulous ducks - 3 hours ago Jibble

Recommending a forum comment for deletion:

The Thing - Psychological Horror RP

Anything that makes me smile! - 3 hours ago Jibble

Recommending a forum comment for deletion:

The Thing - Psychological Horror RP

Lol, playing on your friends ipad is fun - 3 hours ago - Jibble

Recommending a forum comment for deletion:

The Thing - Psychological Horror RP

Sorry but my friend got on my device. - 3 hours ago Jibble

He basically spammed the thread.

Handled. No points for forum RP spam reporting though and it's not a high priority for me.
 

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/survivinghighschool

SurvivingHighSchool -a School-Based by Jarjoura

This game is unfinished and should not of been published. The author even admits it is unfinished.

Err... I don't think that storygame is published. . .

oops lol my fault
 

Recommending a forum comment for deletion:

mousepaw's first comment and all attached to it within the Warrior Cats Games thread.

I don't agree with her first comment, but it's so close to on topic. I'm not sure it should be deleted.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats-adventure

 

ppl if you click she-cat it means YOUR a she-cat.

-- LpsloveAJ on 6/13/2014 7:16:36 AM

YOUR SUCH A MOUSE BRAIN!!!!!!!! I CLICK SHECATS AND IT WAS SAYING HE AND HIM!!!! WORST GAME EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!>:c

-- Silvermoon on 6/12/2014 6:10:45 PM

this is so bad

-- chloe on 6/12/2014 3:17:01 AM

:3

-- lyssa on 6/5/2014 12:44:01 PM

why did ebonylight have to dieshe was my girl

-- jjjjjjjjjj on 5/31/2014 8:05:46 PM

wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwhhhhhhhhhhhhhhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaattttttttttttt?

-- skystar on 5/18/2014 1:05:37 PM

i lost my mate nooooooo

-- eclipse on 4/20/2014 12:23:02 PM

best game ever 100/100 stars wowe

-- ,k; on 4/5/2014 10:49:58 PM

can you put fight with ebonylight or whatever and fight with sipiderclaw to save your mates and have kits plz

-- scourgeBCLSblood on 2/7/2014 6:38:48 PM

MUFFINZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ok, the honest truth- meh

-- Hninja on 12/23/2013 7:39:20 PM

dasasd

-- lipe1233 on 6/12/2013 4:08:15 PM

 

 

I deleted Silvermoom's, Lyssa's, skystar's, hninja's, and lipe1233's. The others did not break site rules. Please mention next time that you are nomination comments for deletion, somewhere in your post.

I have come to the conclusion Silvermoon is an utter idiot :D
 

*wistles*

Recommending a comment for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/final-fantasy-quiz

This quiz is terrible and I will tell you why.
First question is how many Final fantasy games are there. The answer he gives is 15 but in reality it should be around 78...

Second question is how many movies are there. The answer he gives is 5 but in reality it is 2 movies...

Third question is who were the main characters in FF10. He only lets you pick 3 characters when in reality there was 7 main characters.

Fourth question is how did Final Fantasy get its name. He says that it got its name because the creator made sucky games and this was his "Final Fantasy". This is "Kinda" true. The creator made GOOD games but he couldn't make enough money so he made one last game that turned into one of the most well known RPG's ever made.

Fifth and last question is who are the main characters in FF8. Again he only list 3 people when in reality there where 6 main characters.

Conclusion: This quiz is misinformed, the answers are wrong and the author clearly didn't do his research. The grammar was bad. 1/8

-- Madbrad200 on 6/13/2014 8:14:26 AM

Recommending a change in maturity in a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/blackbirds

I wish this to be changed from a 6 to an 8

You enter this game raping sombody, then you snap her neck and drink her blood..... After that you can choose to go to prison where you get request to get hanged.

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/blackbirds

It was very poetic. I would love for you to extend some paths and make this a full blown story.

-- JamesValkyrie on 8/3/2013 2:25:08 AM with a score of 0

He posted a duplicate comment. Should probably delete his duplicate.

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/no-shit~21~21~21 All comments below are from this link.

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:37:32 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:37:49 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:38:02 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:38:19 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:38:42 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:38:59 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:39:28 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:39:36 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:39:44 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:40:18 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:40:34 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:41:20 PM with a score of 0

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-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:41:29 PM with a score of 0

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NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK!NO SHIT SHERLOCK

-- Swiftstryker on 6/12/2012 8:42:21 PM with a score of 0

Sorry JJJ for making you read all that but Swifty basically spammed the comments section on that game. Whilst the game is shit and those comments were kinda funny it is very immature and clearly is spam.

Recommending a change in maturity for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/bloody-story

I wish for the maturity to be changed from a 6 to an 8

You are a psychopathic kid who when he doesn't get what he wants, he tortures people. It is greatly detailed and brutal and I definatly think it should NOT be a 6. For example, you rip someones eyes out, rip there tongues out. You cut there arms,legs and hands off. It is greatly detailed.

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/spider-quiz-2 - All comments below are from this link.

Created by www.spiders.uni.cc

-- on 8/14/2005 12:29:06 PM

This is a duplicate comment. Delete the duplicate and leave the original.

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You a ass for writing all those names in Latin..

-- CovElite on 11/8/2012 7:25:01 PM

Is this considered flaming?

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/college-romance - All comments below are from this link

The game was quite short, and not much fun. Annoying how after all your success with Marc, you just drown in a toilet. Really bitch?

-- Bubu on 7/27/2012 9:52:36 PM

He called the author a bitch? I would assume that is considered flaming.

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At least Dug had some ceed in his croch, as I raised four kids on alcohol. Yea! He's so cute.

-- Tgetruegamer on 2/13/2013 3:32:04 AM

This comment is a duplicate comment. Delete the duplicate and leave the original.

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/life

the choices are so obvious

-- betaband on 8/22/2012 9:26:10 PM

This comment is a duplicate. Delete the duplicate and leave the original.

Recommending a category change for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/if-ninjas-could-fly

This storygame should NOT be in Edutainment. I think it should be in the category Everything Else. It doesn't teach me or anyone else anything so Edutainment is wrong in my opinion.

Recommending a tag change for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/if-ninjas-could-fly

This game is tagged as Socially Important. That should be removed and replaced with RPG. This game is in no way Socially Important.

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What the fuck is this?

-- walker on 4/6/2013 2:45:31 PM with a score of 0

This comment is a duplicate. I recommend deleting the duplicate and leaving the original.

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/slavery

...no.

-- Swiftstryker on 2/6/2014 6:12:13 PM

Swifty, the best reviewer out there. He posted this comment, it doesn't give any feedback what so ever

Your comment isn't worthy of featuring. While it goes into detail about the specifics of the quiz, the writing level in it could be improved (was/were) and it isn't written in a tone that suggests an objective review. Try to capture the big picture from an objective standpoint, in future reviews.

I didn't agree with the Bloody Story maturity change. The writing wasn't good enough to add the detail necessary to actually picture what was going on, so it's pretty comical and doesn't need to be increased.

What storygame was walker's comment on?

Note: Maturity only goes up to 7. 8 signifies a purely pornographic story, but they aren't allowed here.

I agreed with absolutely everything else. Wow. Holy shit, @Swiftstryker . That was incredibly ridiculous.

Walkers comment was on http://chooseyourstory.com/story/2035

Yeah...I am terribly sorry you had to read all of that :D

Agreed about that comment too.

@Handkerchief
You need to write it in the correct format. Read what JJJ wrote and if needed read how I wrote my request.

Recommending a comment for featuring:

- The Price of Freedom: Innocence Lost

- This was a very fascinating story. It reminds me a lot of Hunger Games, only instead it takes place during times of the Romans mixed in with Greek Mythology. The main characters were very believable, the plot had me on the edge of my seat, and the choices involved were some of the deepest yet. I truly felt immersed into the world of Andreas and really felt like I was facing his pain, troubles, and sense of isolation in a new and unfamiliar world. One perfect example of this is the scene when he hugs his mother as the slave owner drags him away. That had me in tears. Lula and Andreas were, by far, the strongest characters in the entire story. That being said, I did have some gripes. For being a story that's rated on Length 7/8, it sure was short. Also, I felt like Rhode's character softened a little too early for me. It would also be nice if we had more backstories on characters like Gerda, Zeru, or even Brausis. I'm not expecting it to all come out at the same time, but to be revealed along the way. Of all the stories I've read on this site so far, I have to say, this one was very well written. I am highly anticipating the next chapter and hope it comes out soon.

-- AppDude27

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- The Price of Freedom: Innocence Lost

- What I love about this story, is how it flawlessly illustrates both the youth gladiators of Rome and how they were treated as slaves from foreign lands as I am constantly reminded that people from all over the world are being packed into these ships and sent off to an unknown land. It paints the image of hopelessness, being trapped, and not knowing if I am even going to make it through the journey. Even making the choice of who gets a piece of bread carries its weight of the uncertainty if this will be my last meal.

The characters all had their own personality to them that just jumps right out of the page simply through the way I can hear them talk. However, some of them still have some room for development since the only ones that I can relate to is my brother and the first girl I meet. This doesn't take away from the story, but it makes me question why I should care about whether or not anybody else but my brother and I live. This includes the instructor, since the interactions that I have with her doesn't give me any incentive to make me care for her. Considering that I haven't known her for too long, it makes me wonder why she already seems to care for me and the others like we're all a family.

Overall, this is a great beginning to a story and I am sure that I'll enjoy the next one just as much if not more. That is why I give The Price of Freedom: Innocence Lost a 7/8.

-- Danaos

I featured Appdude's comment but yours isn't quite feature-worthy. Your comment is great in terms of its content. It does a great job of reviewing the best and worst parts of the story, and it's also got great tone. The problem with your comment is the grammar. Featured comments need to be great reviews of the story and they also need to flow well. Your comment is fraught with grammatical errors. Particularly, you should proofread your comments for run on sentences and conjugation errors (was/were, etc).

Damn my typing speed!

It's not your typing speed! I type very quickly too, but it's critical that you go back and re-read your writing, regardless of how quickly you type.

Recommending a storygame for unpublishing:

- lurid

- It seems to be some sort of erotic story gone horribly wrong. The author says it's not finished, and most of the links are end game pages with no words.

Agreed

Wow, that was mostly just child porn in text form.

Yeah, it was pretty fucked. Probably worse than Love SICK, mostly because it's not written well enough to be tongue-in-cheek.

Oof, just read the first page, this guy is definitely a pedophile.

I feel like I'm being put on a watch list for reading it.

Not even the guys at Chyoo would like this one bit e.e

Unfortunately Chyoo is filled with either unfinished crap or porn that makes no sense at all. I mean at least make the porn make sense....

Recommend this comment for deletion.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats~3a-your-story

WORST GAME EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...

-- Silvermoon on 6/13/2014 1:40:51 AM

Deleted it.

Thanks. Point awarded.

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats~3a-test-battle

I DON'T CARE WHAT ANYONE ELSE SAYS,BUT THIS WAS LAMER THAN LAME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/13/2014 2:18:54 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/you-are-warrior-cat~21

YOU ARE TERRIBLE AT THIS AND YOU NEED TO SEND THIS THING TO HELL BY DELETING IT YOU ROTTEN PIECE OF FOX DUNG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/13/2014 2:34:01 AM with a score of 78043

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warriors~3a-loner-enters-clans

I HATE IT!!!!!!!! IT NEEDS TO BE LONGER MOUSEBRAIN!!!!!!!!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/13/2014 2:29:03 AM

... Actually, can we just delete all comments left by Silvermoon? 

lol. Agreed about deleting those.

Found some more 

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/wild-warrior-cat

I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!! YOUR THE FIRST PERSON TO MAKE ONE OF THESE THAT LETS THE PERSON DOING IT DECIDE IF THEY ARE A BOY OR GIRL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!,THANK YOU!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/12/2014 7:07:49 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats~3a-an-epic-adventure-part-1

THAT WAS AWESOME!!!!!!!I love how detailed you were.Oh, and I like Snowkit the best.

-- Silvermoon on 6/12/2014 11:44:13 PM

I liked it,but it needs a little more detail.

-- Silvermoon on 6/12/2014 11:41:40 PM

(The second one doesn't look like spamming, but she left it on her own storygame, so... Yeah, not sure whether leaving a comment praising your own storygame, pretending that the game isn't yours warrants the comment being deleted or not. )

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats-adventures-remade~21

ALMOST EVERY WORD IN THERE WAS MISSPELLED MOUSEBRAIN!!!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/13/2014 1:50:35 AM

Didn't delete the ones in her own game. Please read upwards in this thread or ctrl+F those comments.

Okey dokey ^_^

And another one:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/a-moon-later

AWFUL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/13/2014 11:34:37 PM

Agreed.

Anyone else notice that Silvermoon is making up the majority of the comments getting reported? Unless you all have some sort of vendetta.

xD ... It's a not a vendetta if someone repeatedly writes trollish or just generally terrible, delete-worthy comments.

Sure it is! Those comments were all completely reasonable, I'm just being spiteful 

All comments listed below by loqman are spam. He states in the review that "Probably a good game, i Rated it 8..." meaning he didn't even play the game.... He was simply just advertising his game whilst spamming different storys with bullshit.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Boar-Hunting

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:19:46 AM

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-animal

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:19:33 AM with a score of 0

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/a-long-walk-home

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:17:13 AM

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/life-of-snow-~3cwarrior-cat-thing~3e

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:17:01 AM

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/random-dreams~21

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:15:59 AM

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/are-you-happy-with-your-choices~3f

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:14:43 AM

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/1960%27s-pop-culture-quiz

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real horror fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:12:57 AM with a score of 0

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/marvel-adventure

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:10:32 AM

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/tick-tock-goes-the-clock

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:09:32 AM with a score of 1

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/in-life-and-death

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:07:52 AM with a score of 0

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/alone-in-the-ball-pit

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:06:33 AM with a score of 0

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/baseball-game

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:02:29 AM

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/shoot-the-guards

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 11:01:03 AM with a score of 0

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-maze-runner

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real maze fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 10:55:43 AM

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-adventures-of-phoebe-mcgee~3a-episode-1,-the-lighthouse

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough... cool story game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 10:49:52 AM with a score of 0

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/331-oakmount-drive

I did found it amazing... especially its length which is enough for a real horror fast game!

Probably a good game, i Rated it 8...

I wrote some game too its pretty long, come check it out if you have a time... i need some observations from some real writers...

-- loqman on 5/20/2014 10:44:10 AM

Agreed. So weird though... he doesn't even have a game out..

Oh bloody hell there's more:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/realistic-warrior-cats

THIS IS THE WORST THING I'VE EVER READ!!!!!!!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/13/2014 2:38:33 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/morningkit

REALYY THAT'S IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/13/2014 2:06:15 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/wild-cat

TERRIBLE!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/13/2014 1:59:17 AM with a score of 0

Reading them all in sequence is just so amusing.

Swiftstryker probably has made the worst comments I have ever seen :D whilst Silvermoon is just an idiot.

I'm starting to notice a pattern here. The sad thing is Silvermoon will comment multiple times on a story which means she has to keep playing through it.

The best thing is, he commented on his own story and acted like it wasn't even his lolololooolol

Agreed

Gadzooks! Look at all those exclamation points! That is a crime against punctuation!

@Briar_Rose  Silvermoon and Swiftstryker are certainly......creative.....

VERY VERY CREATIVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 

hahahhahaha

I detect a hint of sarcasm 

No, I thought it was funny.

I DUH FEEL DUH SO PURRRROUD

More comments recommended for deletion.

So here's the Warrior Cats fans telling writers off for not making the games about Warrior Cats:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/a-day-in-the-life-of-a-cat

I need it to be interesting with Warriors!

-- jalyn on 6/12/2014 5:28:27 PM

i was hopping it would be like warrior cats

-- ripplestone on 6/7/2014 10:14:24 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/wild-cat

I think... Isn´t this cat a warrior cat, lost on a mission?

-- KajkaElina on 6/2/2014 2:20:00 PM with a score of 0

 

Also some comments I found that could be deleted for annoyingness:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/wild-cat

i love it but HERE IS A ORDER YOU MUST READ THIS COMMENT 
make number 2 please I ORDER YOU TO DO IT :)

-- mousepaw on 4/15/2014 3:18:55 PM with a score of 0

it is so cool! and I won!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-- justin on 8/16/2013 6:30:52 AM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/kitty-love

Oh I LoVe It Is ThE BeSt StOrY On ThE SiTe.

-- DuMbPeRsOn on 3/4/2014 1:16:49 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/apocalypse-then

WhAt ThE HeCk I Never LoSt AnY NuTrIsIoN.

-- DuMbPeRsOn on 3/6/2014 8:54:48 AM with a score of 40

Agreed on all.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-legend-of-zelda~3a-Orcania-of-time-quiz

.

-- Peerce on 11/22/2013 10:34:22 PM with a score of 10

He just put a period and nothing else. He didn't give any feedback what so ever.

Agreed!

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Forest-Findings

The choice between the shovel and flashlight is a double-edged sword, frustrating readers to no end.

-- Nightsky on 4/19/2014 4:27:56 AM

He just copy pasted what someone said right before him.

Done!

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Forest-Findings

Recommending a tag change for a storygame:

I think RPG should be removed from this storygame. It is more of a quiz or puzzle than anything else.

 

Agreed. Please make sure to always provide a full list of tags you think the game should have, when you're recommending tag changes.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-legendary-warrior-cat-~2d-chapter-one-added - Comments below are from this link.

It was ok, I guess,IF I WAS A BOY IN REAL LIFE!!!!!!, I'M A GIRL, HAWKKIT IS A BOY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!,AND I WANTED TO BE LILYKIT YOU MOUSEBRAINED KITTYPET!!!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/12/2014 6:51:49 PM with a score of 0

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BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! BOO!!!!!

-- Silvermoon on 6/14/2014 9:40:19 PM with a score of 0

Both of these comments seem a bit spammy and do not give any feedback. Also "YOU MOUSEBRAINED KITTYPET!!!!!!" did seem like an insult....

Got them before reading this, but yes, I agree (obviously).

Thanks, Silvermoon seems to be on this thread quite a lot :D He has been mentioned 31 times XD

@BerkaZerka

Thank you for always coming here and saying you got to them, so that I can award the user who recommended them, the points they deserve.

Also, please feel free to go tag hunting. Tags like part of a series and previously featured are often abused.

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http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats-adventure - All comments below are from this link

Great to read and extreamly fun especially because I love Warriors by: Erin Hunter!

-- Sandpelt on 6/13/2014 12:20:55 PM

This is a duplicate comment. I recommend deleting the duplicate.

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:)

-- WariorCats11 on 5/31/2014 6:21:54 PM

A random smiley face doesn't tell anyone anything....

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I like this quiz i guess. but what did i get?

-- mossybreeze on 5/25/2014 2:08:25 PM

This game isn't even a quiz....

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me didn't even read story

-- Jadeclaw24 on 5/25/2014 6:37:34 AM

If he didn't read the story he shouldn't have commented. This doesn't help anyone.

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I love the srories pretty good. I'm also writing warrior adventures but In book form. My first one is called darkest journy. Its about skyclan and their journy to find a new home. The clans have.radided them out of there home. Ya. You.should. have. Thing.werer people.can.type.in what they say . Ya.thx. if you want to comment me.back well idk I don't have email so byez

-- silverfeather on 5/11/2014 1:50:54 PM

I think he just wrote that comment to advertise himself or something. He didn't even seem to comment on the game.

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best game ever 100/100 stars wowe

-- ,k; on 4/5/2014 10:49:58 PM

You might be wondering why I put this comment in. Other than the fact there are not 100/100 stars he seems to copy paste this on all the storys he plays.

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hi im vivian i think that i could help you make a new warrior story and im sorry i do not have an email yet maybe if you play minecraft we could join one of our worlds btw my username or whatever you call it is toxiccupcakes so maybe we coulld talk about ideas that way

-- cinderpaw on 4/4/2014 6:46:49 PM

HAHAHA.....*ahem*...I think he was just advertising his server and himself. If he wanted to help he could of just messaged the guy...

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Unicorn POop

-- Uniccorn on 3/23/2014 12:47:47 AM

Somehow I don't think "Unicorn POop" has anything to do with the story he played....

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CAN YOU PLZ MAKE THE MATE HAVE AN OPTION TO LIVE? ALSO, THERE ARE FEW OPTIONS, AND THEY ALL END OUT THE SAME. WE CANT KEEP DOING THE ROLEPLAY AWAY FROM THE CLAN, WE MUST MATE, WE MUST LOSE BATTLE AT START, AND MATE MUST DIE. PLEASE CHANGE IT.

-- NO on 2/22/2014 1:17:41 PM

Not only is this comment completely ridicules. He commented again and said "Re rating this, picked bad options, didn't see it all, sorry about last rating, this is really one of the best choose-your-stories ever!" meaning he didn't give a fair rating. He his rating and comment were not fair then they shouldn't really be there.

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awesome RP its impressive

-- jade on 2/17/2014 11:03:17 AM

What does this game have anything to do with RP? Should probably deleate it.

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It was a great story, quiz. But the death of Spiderclaw was REALLY sad!

-- Mina on 1/6/2014 4:40:31 AM

Again, this game is not a quiz....

The last two were fine. It's okay to call it a quiz, as long as your comment isn't just saying that they wanted to know their score. It's also fine to call it an RP. Agreed with the others.

Recommending a comment for featuring:

Hoo, boy, where do I begin? I am a Yu-Gi-Oh! fan, but this quiz was unpleasant to play. You need go through and check for spelling mistakes, starting with the title. There are only two proper spellings of it: "Yuugiou" and "Yu-Gi-Oh!" ... also, it would be better if you were specific about -which- Yuugiou. (In this case, "Duel Monsters.")

Inside the actual quiz, though, there are several more errors: your spelling of the word "Egyptian" (a word that all fans and high-school students should be more than capable of spelling) was atrocious. You misspelled a lot of character names, monster names and a few other random words. Your spacing and format need work. You capitalized random words in the middle of sentences, such as "At", "Had", "What", and so on.

You neglected to capitalize the first letter of the first word in some sentences and the first letter of the proper names of some characters ("yugi" "honda".) You neglected punctuation for some sentences, such as forgetting to put a period at the end of the first sentence on the fourth question page and you added random punctuation in various places--including, but not limited to the last two links on that same page.

Question 13 is inaccurate. Shadi possesses the key and -scales-, not the necklace. The necklace belongs to Ishizu. Question 19 isn't wrong, but it's vague. You should specify that you're talking about Duelist Kingdom rather than Battle City.

Lastly, this quiz would be much more interesting if you added character / monster images. Or, instead, you could've also added screenshots from the episodes each question pertains to and use the images as hints.

-- Kiel_Farren on 4/18/2014 9:12:06 AM with a score of 25

Is this the sort of thing you are looking for?

Perfect... but you need to link the storygame.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/yugoh-trivia

Sorry!

Thanks

Hmm... Think I'm gonna go look for feature worth comments too. Finding spammers is easy, but acknowledging people for giving very good feedback is much nicer, and gets them points too ^_^

You always leave a cute comment with those cute faces of yours :D
 

Lol... thanks, MB. Now my fanboyish rant is on display. xD

hehe :D

Recommending a storygame to be deleted:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/fun-ass-story

This story fails too meet the Minimum Site Standards (I''m not sure if you want me to post this here).

Recommending a category change for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/splice-girls

Edutainment.

I think it should be in Edutainment because it is trying to teach people punctuation.

And JJ. If you play this game and click the bottom choice, then click the next choice. You will get the "Bad Ending". On this "Bad Ending" is a YouTube video. It is one of those videos that seems normal but after like 20 seconds some scary ass women pops up and screams so loud your ear drums pop. Is this aloud exactly?

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/wild-warrior-cat - All comments below are from this link.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

love it

-- hi on 6/8/2014 3:58:55 PM

He just copy pasted what someone posted before him. And I have a feeling these comments left on this game are fake accounts.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

love

-- Fur me on 6/8/2014 7:47:42 PM

Saying "love" doesn't help anyone.

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love

-- Ripplestone on 6/8/2014 8:54:26 PM

He just copy pasted the previus comment and it doesn't help what so ever.

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lol

-- lol on 6/9/2014 9:06:14 AM

Again this doesn't help anyone.

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Your right Silvermoon.

-- Sparrowpool on 6/13/2014 2:25:05 PM

Doesn't help anyone and when he posted this Silvermoon hadn't even said anything yet.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/your-life-in-thunderclan

*Groan*

-- Briar_Rose on 6/14/2014 5:53:27 PM

Sorry Briar! This comment doesn't really give any feedback at all. It doesn't tell me anything helpful.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/you-are-a-fish

okkkkkkkkkkkk then

-- Scrappydoo1996 on 5/22/2014 3:10:54 PM

Spammy and doesn't help anyone.

Recommending a comment for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/mattias-the-one-knight

The typos and constant fourth wall breaking narration makes this hard to read. The listing of information seems kind of lazy; you could have placed some well written dialogue instead. That would give us the same information without jarring us out of the story.

There are many characters but there's hardly any character development, if any, for most of them. This is, again, mostly due to a distinct lack of dialogue. Since there are so many characters in this story lack of development just leaves them bland and unmemorable.

I can't say I particularly liked the plot. Overthrowing a tyrant as the chosen one is pretty cliche but can still work out well. Some points of the story made me laugh but my favorite were: "theyll give you a log if your the chosen one" and "Its for this reason that she was locked up in a tower ever so high, 65 feet to be exact". The first one speaks for itself but as for the second...65 feet is not high for a tower.

I expect much of the combat choices depended on our stats and could actually have involved horribly complex mechanisms for all I know. What I do know however is that "Slash and chop" hardly makes a difference to me when the other option is "Slash and slash". Even worse it's a life or death decision.

SPOILER ALERT-(I appreciate Arthurian legends as much as the next guy but it just felt tacked on. Uther does have plenty of achievements under his belt as a character of his own. That Mattias becomes king by killing the former despot is pretty far-fetched.)

I do want to end on a positive note though and I will...try anyway. I kind of liked the RPG aspect of this; walking into someone's house to take things is certainly nostalgic. It's also clear, particularly with quite a few updates, that some effort has been put into this.

-- Smith on 3/23/2013 11:50:31 PM with a score of 9525

I think this guy put a lot of thought into his comment and deserves to be featured. He trys to cover each aspect of the story and that I don't see often.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/a-very-special-choose-your-story

You're an idiot

-- Jwild913 on 6/10/2014 7:07:01 PM

He insulted the author and didn't give feedback.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/desperate-heart

GAY

-- Bum on 6/26/2013 6:35:39 PM with a score of 0

Not only is it immature, he is using that word as an insult.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/happiness-test~21 - All comments below are from this link.

BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORING

-- WAHAHA on 2/25/2003 10:11:14 AM with a score of 74

Immature and doesn't give any feedback.

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so so

-- Paul t on 3/5/2003 7:03:57 PM with a score of 105

Doesn't help anyone.

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SHIBBIDDIE DIBBIDDIE DIBBIDDIE YEAH!

-- RED ARMY MAN on 2/9/2004 7:56:54 AM with a score of 92

Doesn't make any sense at all.

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148

-- JJJ-thebanisher on 9/2/2006 6:46:41 PM with a score of 148

Sorry! But I don't think this helps anyone at all.

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145

-- Expander on 12/6/2007 4:55:18 PM with a score of 145

Same as above.

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pony

-- Primetime58 on 1/19/2013 5:04:56 PM with a score of 88

Ponys are nice and all....when they have anything to do with the subject at hand that is....

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In constructing personality tests, one of the key issues is being receptive to the nuances of the audience, yet this is something which this quiz utterly misses.

Either your in school or work, ---- well I'm at university studying for a doctorate, so what does that make me?

You get plus points for having many friends, yet are you the sort of extraverted person who needs! many friends or are you an intravert more happy with your own company?

One question involved whether you've experienced depression, yet the text basically slated you for this, despite the fact you might be recovering, or in a position where your happy with yourself.

While the score system and totting up of possible endings here is quite well done and I do give the author credit, it is pretty obvious this was written by an extremely young person (and not just because the age range basically ended at 30 as though that were close to death), who hasn't had a lot of experience or much knolidge of the nuances of people beyond external happiness.

So, a worthy effort,but one which really needed better writing and psychology to have any point or force at all.

-- darkempathy on 7/10/2013 10:11:41 AM with a score of 91

This comment is very constructive and well thought through. It helps the author and the readers get a good look at the game.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

im moderately happy id that's right I like this thing it works

-- Wilko19 on 8/31/2013 11:50:32 PM with a score of 96

This is a duplicate comment. I recommend deleting the duplicate and leave the original.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

im moderately happy id that's right I like this thing it works

-- Wilko19 on 8/31/2013 11:50:33 PM with a score of 96

This is a duplicate comment. I recommend deleting the duplicate and leave the original.

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It sucks I got a 0 out of 150 I mean who says that to someone ????????????????????????????????????????????????

-- Poopy maker on 3/3/2014 2:46:12 PM with a score of 95

Immature and a bit random.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/snow - All comments below are from this link.

Good

-- bobmcbob on 2/12/2008 4:14:32 PM with a score of 0

This is either a duplicate or it is a copy paste.

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fgdfdfgdf

-- dcfdgfd on 6/15/2011 6:26:24 AM with a score of 0

This comment is as random and stupid as this persons username.

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Beautiful story, but so sad :(

-- Y on 10/21/2011 12:56:16 PM with a score of 0

Copy/paste.

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This story sucks so much. I don't know how high you were when you wrote this. Are you so lonely that you have to write porn? WTF? Please do us a favor and either quit writing, or jump in front of an oncoming semi you sick, twisted little horny man.

-- Trevor on 4/11/2012 1:46:33 PM with a score of 0

This comment is not only offensive, it is incredibility stupid. Snow is far from erotica lol.

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A wonderful story from the beginning to the end. I just love it.

-- Amy on 4/16/2013 3:43:24 PM with a score of 0

This is a duplicate comment.

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THIS IS A GREAT THING TO DO

-- smileyoutahherebossen on 5/1/2013 11:59:41 AM with a score of 0

Random and unnecessary.

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WHY DO YOU HAVE TO KILL HER EVERY TIME TRYED SO HARD NOT TO KILL HER AND IT MAD ME MAD THET SHE DIED EVEERY TIME NO MADER WHAT!!!!!!!!!!!!

-- anonimus on 10/20/2013 3:02:53 PM with a score of 0

Unnecessary and spammy.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/choose-your-own-adventure

>:)

-- ZombieOMommy on 5/31/2014 7:19:15 AM

Smileys don't help anybody :)

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-secret-of-daphne

This is AMAZING. Phenomenal really. I loved every second of it.

-- Kiara on 2/22/2013 6:23:04 PM with a score of 0

This is a duplicate comment.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-order-of-the-midnight-sun - All comments below are from this link.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

36e 37E 71S 106E 107N 108W 109N 110N 111W 119N 120N 122e 126E 146E 148S 150E 151N 152W 153N 154N 155E 161S 163E 166N 167E 168S 170W 178S
maze

-- Harmphrey on 11/6/2013 3:57:40 PM with a score of 6259

Helping people cheat and it doesn't comment on the game...

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Show,don't tell

-- dc on 4/7/2014 3:05:08 PM with a score of 5756

Random and doesn't help anybody.

 

 

This story sucks so much. I don't know how high you were when you wrote this. Are you so lonely that you have to write porn? WTF? Please do us a favor and either quit writing, or jump in front of an oncoming semi you sick, twisted little horny man.

-- Trevor on 4/11/2012 1:46:33 PM with a score of 0

Lol. That one is pretty funny for Snow actually.

EDIT: Oh and thanks for looking out Brad, but no need to concern yourself with the guy leaving the "You're an idiot." comment. The only ones that I get annoyed with are those spammy ones that stretch the text all the way across the page.

"This story sucks so much. I don't know how high you were when you wrote this. Are you so lonely that you have to write porn? WTF? Please do us a favor and either quit writing, or jump in front of an oncoming semi you sick, twisted little horny man.

-- Trevor on 4/11/2012 1:46:33 PM with a score of 0

Lol. That one is pretty funny for Snow actually." (quote from Endmaster)

No, no, apparently it totally was erotica.  There's a couple of:

A little sweet in places, but really not enough of it to care much about the ending or indeed the romance, indeed I'm disturbed by the fact that the most described passage was the love making. 

So is this story about a girl who only wants to be with a guy who lets her take the lead? I don't get it.

 

Sorry that I deleted it! I didn't realize it was one of yours until the second after I pushed delete.

That first story is not published. I put splice girls in everything else. I don't really care about the video being there since it's called 'scary surprise' haha. I'm leaving *groan* because the community ruled on that. I would personally delete it. I left Paul's comment because it's not useful but it's not spammy. I did not feature the happiness test comment because the writing wasn't very good at all. I didn't delete the last two comments on Snow. I left the two comments on OMS. The maze is shitty and I'm glad someone posted the solution. And dc is right about that tip. Could you be a little more selective next time? Also please read the OP about recommending comments from endmaster's stories.

Recommend the following comments for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/homo-perfectus-8

Okay, positively excellent ending. I would like to point out that there was a plethora of grammatical errors, and you often spelled the word 'lose' wrong; however, you're Icelandic, so I can't expect you to be perfect in this area. I loved how I had to think about who to use and how, as well as risk vs reward constantly. The characters, especially Masochist and Baryon, really made me appreciate them and how they were much better people than originally thought. I really enjoyed this, and it was quite challenging. 

8/8

-- written_agreement on 12/1/2012 6:20:24 PM with a score of 1001

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-free-hand

Considering how young you were when you wrote this, it's fantastic. I have one complaint, though. You're able to kill the slime monster multiple times if you keep going back and... well, it detracts from the seriousness of the scene if you do that. xD

-- Kiel_Farren on 6/20/2013 2:40:33 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/homo-perfectus

?Excellent, creative story. Very well done. There are a few typos and what not but they didn't detract at all from my immersion. I cannot believe I haven't read this story before now. I very much liked the use of items; at times, I was basically clicking them to determine what you thought was a relevant enhancement, but for the most part there seemed to be a lot of choices on how to proceed by using "abilities." Great use of scripting. Looking forward to reading the sequels.

-- madglee on 7/20/2012 9:01:21 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/homo-perfectus-2

This was really really awesome! Magnificent improvement from HP1. There were still a few grammatical errors but they weren't at all like the first one and they weren't distracting whatsoever. As a non-native english speaker, you've done some incredible things. There was a gameplay flaw that I noticed. When I was hiding in Techno's closet, I should have been able to use my smelling to determine that they were still in the room. Also, some of the dialogue felt really contrived, particularly between gangsters. All of that being said, I really enjoyed this! Great job!

-- JJJ-thebanisher on 5/5/2011 3:07:34 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/love-story

This story seemed to only have the ending you (the author) wanted. It was either get the guy or be miserable. I'm sure that if you want to you can add more details to the characters and to the plot. The plot was also a little random, one moment your in a movie theater and the next you get shot? Where? Why? It needs some work, but that point could be an amazing and interesting point if you develop it. 

Also,I actually wasn't sure if I should like Luke (the guy) based on some of the 'you'll be alone forever' endings. Him thinking I'm the rude one during the interaction with his classmate? Him ignoring me just because I didn't hold his hand on a first date? Yeah, he gives off a weird vibe. (To me, this part is more personal)

-- bookmonkey on 5/3/2013 5:24:39 PM

 

Also, recommend these comments for deleting:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/homo-perfectus

oH vERy BORING

-- fariz on 3/9/2013 3:53:16 AM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/homo-perfectus-2

WOOHOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-- Psychotikitty on 3/12/2013 7:51:02 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/highways-to-hell

THEESE GAMESARE WIERD N BORING.- DONT BOTHER WITH EM

-- RANDOMPERSON on 2/28/2011 10:12:09 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/first-dates-can-be-tricky

XD HAHAHA!!! Laugh my crazy ass to hell!!! XD LMCATH!!!

-- Psychotikitty on 5/17/2013 8:02:43 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/you-are-a-fish

okkkkkkkkkkkk then

-- Scrappydoo1996 on 5/22/2014 3:10:54 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/love-story

a bit boooooooooooring sorry but the truth is the truth!

-- U DONT CARE on 6/15/2014 2:44:34 PM

I didn't think Written_Agreement's comment was quite good enough to be featured. There were a, not there was a, and it just felt too clunky to be featurable. It's very close though.

Kiel_Farren's comment doesn't really say enough IMO. It's not a bad comment but it doesn't talk enough about the game as a whole to be featurable.

I'm glad you chose the comments you did though because I'd say my comment is on the very very lowest end of featurable and bookmonkey's is at the very very highest end of not-featurable. The grammatical errors ruin Bookmonkey's otherwise great comment.

I featured mine and madglee's but not the others. Madglee's comment was the best of the bunch.

madbrad beat you to Scrappy's comment.

I agree with everything else.

 

Also, recommend this thread for deleting:

http://chooseyourstory.com/forums/the-lounge/message/12755

It got double posted.

I miss the koala 

Don't worry Aman, the koala will live on in our hearts forever ^_^

Gone!

Thanks.

Comments recommended for featuring:

Creative story with good writing and an engaging plot. These features went a long way to making the story stand out on the site. I would have liked to see some of my choices affect events more dynamically, such as a character behaving/reacting in a different way depending on wrong or right choices, and some plot twists. However, as it stands, the story is a very enjoyable read with a unique presentation, clever puzzles, and a nice implementation of the advanced editor. An embedded movie near the end was particularly striking. Definitely worth reading. Nice work.0
-- madglee on 1/5/2013 11:41:04 PM with a score of 2200

(On http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Avery-M~3a-Dead-Man%27s-Journal )

Awesome! One of my favorite games I've read so far and definitely my favorite mystery/puzzle game on the site. Loved the art, the video and the story. Only flaw I can think of is that it would've been cool if there were more suspects, but otherwise, this is a really awesome story game and I really admire all the effort you must've put into it. 8/8! Will come back some time to read the first 16 pages of the Hunger Games :p
-- Briar_Rose on 1/7/2013 8:45:54 AM with a score of 2900
(Also on: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Avery-M~3a-Dead-Man%27s-Journal )

A fun and funny game!
Good: The story is good and there are many choices to choose from. I liked the radio controlled car and disguise tricks!
Bad: Not enough clues given on how or when to use the items.
Ugly: I spent hours trying things: seemed to have gone everywhere and gotten everything even the Loading Dock location, but none of the other items seemed to do anything and I couldn't figure out how to use them. So I settled for the Lame Ending :(
-- magcos on 1/25/2012 3:06:45 PM with a score of 0
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-Wal~2aMart-Game~21 )

Pretty random with, most pages being one or two sentences. Every once in a while there was good page. Not enough choices, and a few grammar mistakes. It would be better if there were more links and longer pages.
Nice try 3/8
-- betaband on 9/3/2012 10:47:34 PM
(On http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-Great-Jungle-Escape )

Very nicely written with good descriptions and plot. The variety of choices one has are also excellent. I don't see that it's necessarily linear, because of course you want to move the story forward. Some of the choices, however, could have branched a bit more instead of leading to instant death. Also, I would have liked more of the story! I felt it ended too quickly, right as I was figuring things out. Excellent job, though. Please keep contributing.
-- madglee on 9/6/2006 1:43:57 AM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Cantina-Band~3a-Dusty-Death-in-D~2dMinor )

Believe it or not, I beat it without the walk through. I feel so proud :)
The major problem is that we honestly don't have reasons to use items in certain rooms. it was annoying going everywhere and trying to use the scepter. We also never go to use the laser rifle, which I really wanted to use haha.
I rated it a 6/8 though the author rated it 8 so many times makes me want to give it a 1 to be honest.
Still, good game, nice puzzle, even if it was incoherent. (At least I thought so)
-- Tanstaafl on 9/22/2013 7:40:32 PM with a score of 0
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Get-out-alive )

I would have rated this higher if A) all the questions were from the deathly hollows, since that is the name of your quiz, and B) if at the end, where you posted the correct answers, if you also repeated the questions, so that I could remember what the answers were answers to.
-- mistman96 on 8/1/2013 10:31:12 PM with a score of 70

(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Harry-Potter-and-the-Deathly-Hallows-Quiz )
 

(Aaaand... though it's probably not actually feature worthy, I found this old comment: )

What's with your choice of weapons? "knocks you out cold with a throwing star."? How are you even suggesting that's possible? (And for the record, it IS possible, but using a throwing star in the normal way? Would traditionally either kill you flat out or just leave you with an extremely mild wound if it hit. And no. Pressure points are not the answer for blades.)

It'd make sense if he just hit a pressure point with a martial arts move. Or a blunt weapon. A careful hit in the right spot with a bokken, maybe. (I say "careful" because its primary ability is to break bones.)

The other part I don't get... one of the ninjas kills you casually with... a gun? Wtf? >_> Using a gun, especially when it's unnecessary, kind of removes what's cool about a ninja in the first place. (And unless you're just trying to be random, they worship cows in INDIA, not Japan. -.-')

-- Kiel_Farren on 10/2/2012 2:26:38 PM

(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-Epic-Adventure-of-Epicness )

 

I didn't feel that Briar's, Tanstaafl's or Betaband's, Mistman's comments were feature-worthy due to being sort-of weak on content and/or a little clumsy sounding. I also didn't feel that Magcos' comment was featury-worthy because that style of review doesn't flow very well.  I'm really on the fence about madglee's second comment, I featured it but it's in the lower range of featurable comments. I also didn't feature your comment, mostly because it doesn't actually paint broad strokes. Comments need to talk about the game as a whole and not just specific instances, in order to get featured.

When looking for featured comments, you need to increase your standards/stringency a little bit.

@Kiel_Farren You should HyperLink the links.

@Madbrad200 Did it, thanks for the reminder.

No problem :)

@Madbrad200

Thank you! Take 5 points for making my job easier.

Thanks!

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/wargames

Whore whore whore, what a wet pussy!

-- Fucking nigger on 5/31/2013 9:32:43 AM

Not only is his name incredibility offensive, his comment is so immature and stupid that my brain just malfunctioned reading it. Offensive comments and username like this should be removed.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/a-stranger%27s-love

Heck yes, a cute Korean boy? I'm imagining him looking like Sung Kang with his shaggy hair like in Tokyo Drift. *swoon*

-- Skysworne on 7/19/2013 11:40:28 AM

This is a duplicate comment.

 

Agreed!
 

I recommend this story game for unpublishing:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/esacaping-from-twolegs

It's not finished, but that aside, it still doesn't meet the new rules for the site's minimum storygame standards

Agreed!

Recommend the following games for category change:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/alone-in-the-ball-pit

This game should be in Modern Adventure.

It's about a hobo that wants to play in a ball-pit... There's no element of fantasy in the game.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/minecraft-online

?This game should be in Fan Fiction.

It's based around Minecraft. Storygames about other computer games are fanfiction too.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/shoot-the-guards

This game should be in Modern Adventure.

It's a game about a guy who breaks out of prison. Again, no elements of fantasy in it.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-werewolf-in-land-park

This Game should either be in Modern Adventure.

It's set in modern times and includes a werewolf. I wouldn't put it in Horror because the werewolf isn't scary, but I definitely wouldn't call it Fantasy either.

I agreed with everything but the last one. I'm not sure, but I think it would fit into urban fantasy. What do you think?

I dunno, the first one sounds like my fantasy.

Yeah, I guess so. I still wouldn't say Fantasy was the most suitable possible category, but if there's some element of Fantasy in it, then it should be able to stay. (I didn't know urban fantasy was a thing.) 

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/choose-your-own-adventure~3a-applying-for-ssi

YOUR SUCH AN IDIOT TO MAKE THIS NO FUN AT ALL

-- Author4 on 10/22/2013 7:26:23 PM

Excessive caps and insulting the author.

Recommending a tag change for a storygame

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/jason

Tags - RPG

This game is not "Geared for children" at all. It is a fighting game...

That second storygame is unpublished. Why do you keep sending me unpublished storygames?

Does the "Random" button give you unpublished games? That might be why.

It shouldn't!

Yeah....sorry :D

No, I'm actually curious, how are you unaware? Are you scouring every user page for sneak preview storygames?

Maybe he went on someone like BZ's point history (as he has played every game) and looks at the games there?

hahaha

No, I get bored so I look at peoples points for games to play. I pick a game, play it, rate it then I read the comments and look at the tags to see if I should report anything.

Cool. That makes perfect sense.

If you want I can start checking if the game is published :D

I'd prefer. Usually you can tell because underneath the rating in the game properties page it will say based on 24 votes since ... and it won't give a date.

I will do that then.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/randomly-walk-ii,-the-epic-sequel~2e

Too much sugar in your system. Holy Jesus.

-- Swiftstryker on 6/2/2013 3:44:37 AM

This is a duplicate comment.

Thanks!

Recommending comments for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/kittens-of-fat

1

-- Kparcher527 on 5/19/2014 5:10:01 PM with a score of 62

Incomplete and just random.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/survive-the-zombies

SHIETS.

-- Fuck on 6/3/2014 12:43:16 PM with a score of -666

and also on survive the zombies...

WAFFLESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS

-- Killa_Robot on 8/5/2011 1:16:25 AM with a score of 0

 

You can't delete Killa's comment, it's on his own game! 

Decided not to delete Killa's comment. If it were a warrior cats game, and the author did that, then maybe, but Killa's earned the right to troll his own comments section.

Lol. How exactly does one go about earning that right?

As a rule of thumb... if the game is featured, the author's probably earned it for that game.

Recommend this comment for deleting:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/light-in-the-darkness

Ok... But you have to make it longer, and plz check out my warrior cat stories, too.

-- cgal3454 on 4/29/2014 9:15:19 AM

It's just advertising her own games.

Agreed!

Recommend the following comments for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/a-midnight-walk

gOOD

-- haledakota on 5/10/2013 7:35:36 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/dragon-adventure

VERY VERY VERY short, but good

-- epiclab on 4/10/2013 11:46:32 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-quest

NoT GooD

-- Wasteland on 6/22/2012 2:57:46 AM

GOOD GAME could be better

-- zoerosicki on 5/13/2012 1:49:02 PM

 

I also recommend this game for a tag change:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-quest

It's not "Socially Important" 

I left epic's and Zoe's. I don't like either comment but they don't break the rules. I deleted the other two, but only for their annoying capitalization.

I removed the tag on The Quest, but if you'd like points, like I've said over and over and mentioned in the OP, you have to format it by telling me all of the tags that SHOULD be there. So in this case, if you don't think there should be any tags, you should say: "There shouldn't be any tags." Usually, at least one tag applies.

Oh, okay... Uhh... I guess it could be under "Geared for Children"

Recommending a category change for a storygame:
http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-legendary-warrior-cat-~2d-chapter-one-added

I wonder why it's an edutainment... I didn't really learn anything. It should be in fanfiction.

Recommending the deletion of a comment:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/shoplifting-adventure

yay first comment

-- crookedsmile on 6/7/2014 10:13:48 PM with a score of 0

Commented on his/her own storygame with a comment that has no use whatsoever.

Omg... That's the first 'first comment' comment I've ever seen here. How depressing.

Recommend these comments for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/armed-forces-quest~3a-terrorist-attack~21

AT THE TRUCKS , BANG BANG , ENDED !

-- Losbirro on 11/20/2013 5:25:34 AM with a score of 200

suuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuucks

-- bob on 6/24/2011 10:14:59 AM with a score of 100

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/baby-eddie-game

COMPLETE UTTER FAILIURE!!!! this game SUKED! what were you trying to get at anyway? 1/8

-- fergie14233 on 1/7/2011 9:25:38 PM with a score of 100

(No comment, just the name)

-- JJJ on 9/6/2005 11:54:20 AM with a score of 10

it was rubbish!!!!!!!!!!!!11

-- louise on 8/15/2005 12:05:21 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/blackbirds

Uuuuuuhhhhhhhhhh………………… 
>.<

-- Nightsky on 4/25/2014 5:45:10 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/bob's-psych-ward

gj

-- Holy_Sword on 12/5/2013 7:36:08 PM with a score of 0

2/8

-- Wasteland on 6/27/2012 6:04:19 AM with a score of 0

(It got double posted)

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/destroy-cartoon-network~21-

SUCKED

-- Matt on 2/1/2013 3:49:12 PM

LITTERALLY!

-- Racer6 on 12/10/2005 9:15:54 AM

Hey 
what the?????????????

-- java on 12/8/2005 1:14:50 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/jack-at-the-tracks

........................................................................................OK..............................

-- Zack on 7/4/2004 12:59:21 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/rob

NoT GooD

-- Wasteland on 6/21/2012 2:15:59 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-bus-of-doom

WTF THAT WAS AN AMAZING STORY!!!!!!!

-- Moony_Ramos on 5/1/2011 10:15:00 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-college-experience

http://i.imgur.com/ZGdNdQn.png

-- Swiftstryker on 12/12/2013 8:54:09 AM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-weird-day

OOOKay. 
Interesting.... 
-- th*mage*of*kings on 6/19/2008 6:43:56 PM

um............................................................ 
ok

-- Racer6 on 9/2/2006 12:59:46 PM

This game was cool! I loved every minute! I recomend it to every person!

-- Victor on 3/11/2003 7:57:22 PM

This game was cool! I loved every minute of it! I recomend this game to everyone!

-- Dillon Battershell on 3/11/2003 7:53:11 PM

This game is cool! I loved every minute! I recomend this game to everyone!

-- james cobwell on 3/11/2003 7:50:37 PM

This game was cool! I loved every minute! I recomend this game to everybody!<br>

-- Tommy Callahan on 3/11/2003 7:48:11 PM

(The last 4 comments are all slightly different versions of the game's 1st comment.)

I left Moony's comment. I don't think being in all caps instantly means you get deleted. I also left Mage's comment.

lol That picture :D

Change maturity rating:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-skilful-tactician

Maturity Rating is currently at 4, should be 1 or two (it's a [clean] quiz).

Done.

Also recommend these comments for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/lachlan's-birthday~21

?Not b@d ! !!!!!!
-- Wasteland on 6/22/2012 2:21:32 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/multi-player-action

devious

-- joe on 3/7/2002 8:12:29 PM with a score of 150

(He's just repeating himself)

Done

And I recommend these comments for deletion too:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/revolutionary-war

it sucks @#$%^

-- stegythedinosaur on 4/8/2012 1:51:02 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/vocab-~231

IT WAS OK NEEDS A LITTLE WORK THOUGH 

-- joe7584 on 3/22/2013 1:15:19 PM

Also, I'm going to break my own moral code and recommend one of my own comments for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/what-would-you-do-if-you-could-help-out~3f

Okay, okay... Where do I start? ... Firstly, if you see a man talking to the manager about losing his wallet, why not just give the wallet to the man instead of the manager? Second, no there isn't an animal rescue center in the world with a policy that you can't give a kitten to a deaf kid, that was just dumb. Third, if a family's starving and homeless how the hell do they have the money to go to Starbucks? It's bloody expensive in there :p

-- Briar_Rose on 4/13/2014 5:30:54 PM

I didn't delete Joe's comment. I didn't feature your comment. There's nothing wrong, at all, with your comment, but it doesn't speak at all about the game as a whole. It's well written and makes good points, but it solely focuses on specific problems with the story and doesn't actually review the story as a whole.

I think I just like hearing myself complain 

Found some more comments to recommend for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/skipping-school

OMG OCTOBER!!!!! YOU DID IT!!!! 

*****CONGRATS***** 

CHECK MY PROFILE :D.

-- GodsSlayer on 9/30/2006 12:39:28 AM with a score of 10000

I WON!! WHOOO!!!!!!!!!

-- :) on 2/13/2012 6:30:41 PM with a score of 10000

I AM A MASTER

-- Nuclearwarfareaw10 on 9/8/2013 11:30:57 PM with a score of 10000

MUST. GET 10000!!!!

-- Mtactical on 10/31/2013 2:39:36 PM with a score of 8000

ts okkkkkkkkkkk.kind of

-- bob on 6/9/2014 10:26:50 PM with a score of 8000

Agreed. Check out GodsSlayer's profile though. He was considered for being given a trophy at one point. 1000 points back then was much harder to come by considering there were only 300 published storygames!

Weird, I just thought he was spamming 

Recommend these comments for deletion too:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/an-escape-from-the-top

STUPID ELEVATOR!!! oh well, i'll try it again and NOT click "Go To Elevator"... lol sis! 
XOXO- orangelilly

-- orangelilly on 7/26/2008 11:22:04 PM with a score of 0

now its the stupid SPIDER! U G H!!!!

-- orangelilly on 7/26/2008 11:26:27 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/escape-the-room

this is so cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-- seanb on 9/16/2005 4:27:28 PM with a score of 0

i WINNNN

-- masterelf on 2/1/2012 1:52:52 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/ocean-adventure

could have used a bit more effort and descisions, but 4/8.

-- Rommel on 5/17/2007 5:31:15 AM with a score of 1030

(It got double posted)

I FINALLY WON! BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!!!!!!!!<br>DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEAR HOW LONG THAT TOOK ME???<br>I LOVED IT!!!! Make another! Make another! MAKE ANOTHER!!<br>PLEEEEEAAAAAAASSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!

-- IceFireKirby on 5/13/2004 2:51:55 PM with a score of 1020

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/twenty~2dthree

soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo easy<br>

-- ashleigh on 7/26/2002 12:29:12 PM with a score of 22

I hate this game I need help 

SOMEBODY PLEEZ HELP ME

-- Tidus on 6/3/2005 9:13:56 PM with a score of 22

YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYA I BEAT IT I"M THE MAN OH YEAH

-- Tidus on 6/7/2005 6:24:55 PM with a score of 22

Also, recommend these comments for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/captivity-chapter-1~3a-death~26-escape

?A little clumsy in application, but really not all that bad. I like the feel of 'pacing back and forth' as the dog - sort of waiting for things to happen. Though there probably needs to be a bit more description or explanation or even options (like dig a hole or something) during those times, so that the reader doesn't feel like he's not getting anywhere or is wondering if the game is broken.

-- BerkaZerka on 1/23/2014 12:31:37 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/escape-the-school-part-2

Nice little puzzle game you have here - I liked it :) 

I think you could boost its Ratability though, by giving more information (a paragraph or so more) with each location and interaction with the Items. 

Also, maybe add more interaction with the shooter than just random Left/Right Die/Live. Perhaps have a 'Beg For Your Life Choice at least or a clue as to why going in one direction over the other would be bad or good. 

Finally, After the Shooter, I went back into the SS Room, even though I thought that encounter occurred in the Science room or hall coming out of it. 

Anyway, not too shabby ^v^

-- BerkaZerka on 6/27/2013 9:21:42 PM with a score of 0

Man, I feel bad for JJ. He's got his work cut out for him...

Agreed on everything!

Recommended comments for featuring:

@Loudleaf: What's so weird about that? Let's not judge :P

The game is pretty short depending on which path is chosen. The whole "someone was murdered in this house" thing is all a bit cliche, there's not much of a twist or new spin on the concept. There were a few grammatical errors here and there, and a few little hiccups in the fluency ("Caleb screamed in horror and sadness"--how does one scream of sadness?).

It might be helpful to slow down a bit on the first page too so that the reader isn't thrown into the story too soon. Overall, this story is like its rating: not the best, but certainly not the worst.
-- Allusional on 4/18/2014 2:46:59 PM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-Haunting )

I have not read many stories on this site, so I cannot really compare this to anything else.
However, I was asked to read and comment, and so I shall.
I see that many others have rated this highly, with enthusiastic praise, and I am sorry, but I am unable to give such a glowing recommendation.
The writing is very sloppy, with many spelling mistakes and little care for grammar or sentence structure.
There seems to be an attempt on your part to use a large, complex vocabulary, however "vestigeal" is not a word, and if you meant "vestigial" then you have used it incorrectly.
I do not find the story particularly original or unique, but you do seem to have made an effort.
Are you a child? In that case, I would give you high marks for the attempt.
Overall, it is the writing of someone who has been told by others that they possess skill, but not someone who has consistently honed their craf
-- Mirrormask on 8/7/2008 3:15:03 PM with a score of 0
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Priesthood )  

There's some serious potential here! The plot is definitely better than your last game, and the pathes are nice and non-linear. However, your storytelling (including spelling and grammar) could use some serious work. My advice would be to spend a little bit more time working on those aspects. I can tell, due to the extremely short timespan between each one being made, that you must be rushing to churn these games out. Perhaps you could have someone read your next one(s) over and help correct mistakes?

Again, a pretty good game, but there's still a rather large amount of room for improvement.
-- Doodled on 4/10/2012 4:30:17 PM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Escape-School-2~2d-Watergrove-Academy )

Recommended comments for deletion:

it was bas
-- donkey Kong, i like donut on 10/16/2013 9:36:11 AM with a score of 660
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Dead-Man-Walking-%28Zombie-Survival%29 )
Reason: What? Just... what? That doesn't make any sense. )

uhh...self explanitory
-- stegythedinosaur on 4/15/2012 4:39:57 PM with a score of 0
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/TRAPPED~21~21~21 )
Reason:  ...What is? Because this review sure isn't. >.> )

WWWWWWWWWWOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWw perfect length, challenging, no words to describe it exept...UHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH...Wow that was a game.<br><br>P.S check out my game Shadow X
-- Julious Jay Bradford on 9/21/2003 3:33:19 PM with a score of 0
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/TRAPPED~21~21~21 )
Reason: Alright, maybe this is just me, but ... this comment makes my eyes sad.)

so xd
-- zb on 5/3/2003 8:13:02 PM with a score of 0
(On:  http://chooseyourstory.com/story/TRAPPED~21~21~21 )
Reason: Again, what? )

?
-- bjhovey on 5/29/2014 7:46:53 PM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Get-your-crush~21 )
Reason: Not even a single word.)

um.
-- Rainswept on 6/8/2014 12:05:07 PM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Ducky-Park )
( Reason: I know you said one word reviews are fine, but... >.> does "um" really count as a word?)

I didn't think Mirrormask's comment was featury-worthy. It didn't flow very well and was in my opinion, unnecessarily pointed. Agreed on the rest... exceptional formatting!

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/die-zombie~21-die~21-pt-iii~3a-the-final-chapter

Should be tagged, 'Previously featured'

Tag added. No points awarded, obviously. I would explain why, but that would be the umpteenth time and umpteen is too many.

@everyone-who-recommends-tags-goddamnit!

Noticed this guy a few times and started to find him mildly irritating, so I recommend all these comments for deletion :

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-weird-day

(coughing)

-- EricDrewCents on 5/27/2012 5:11:06 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-bus-of-doom

(coughing)

-- EricDrewCents on 5/27/2012 5:13:16 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-underground-railroad

(coughing)

-- EricDrewCents on 5/27/2012 5:53:48 AM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/baby-eddie-game

(coughing)

-- EricDrewCents on 5/27/2012 6:03:47 AM with a score of 10

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/how-did-this-happen~3f-part-ii

(coughing)

-- EricDrewCents on 5/27/2012 6:10:40 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-decision

(coughing)

-- EricDrewCents on 5/27/2012 6:22:02 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/pie

....TROLL...****...

-- EricDrewCents on 6/22/2012 12:18:15 AM

(I giggle at the irony of the last comment.) 

Agreed. And penalized EricDrewCents.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-strangest-apocalypse-ever

it wasn't bad but it wasn't particularly good either. It was a nice first try.

-- JamesValkyrie on 7/24/2013 10:22:44 PM

Duplicate comment.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/MALL-TRIP-ADVENTURE

tee hee

-- betaband on 2/23/2012 8:45:27 PM

tee hee?

Recommending a comment for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-Price-of-Freedom~3a-Innocence-Lost

What I love about this story, is how it flawlessly illustrates both the youth gladiators of Rome and how they were treated as slaves from foreign lands as I am constantly reminded that people from all over the world are being packed into these ships and sent off to an unknown land. It paints the image of hopelessness, being trapped, and not knowing if I am even going to make it through the journey. Even making the choice of who gets a piece of bread carries its weight of the uncertainty if this will be my last meal.

The characters all had their own personality to them that just jumps right out of the page simply through the way I can hear them talk. However, some of them still have some room for development since the only ones that I can relate to is my brother and the first girl I meet. This doesn't take away from the story, but it makes me question why I should care about whether or not anybody else but my brother and I live. This includes the instructor, since the interactions that I have with her doesn't give me any incentive to make me care for her. Considering that I haven't known her for too long, it makes me wonder why she already seems to care for me and the others like we're all a family.

Overall, this is a great beginning to a story and I am sure that I'll enjoy the next one just as much if not more. That is why I give The Price of Freedom: Innocence Lost a 7/8.

-- Danaos on 4/25/2014 9:34:33 PM with a score of 0

This describes the characters and how the story was wrote quite well.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Escape-the-Room-2

Okay I mean was really ez

-- 60guy4 on 3/13/2013 3:01:25 PM with a score of 0

Duplicate comment.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/September-the-14th-Part-I

LOLOLOLOLOL!!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA YANKEES!!!! MUAHAHAHAHAHAHA -10000000!!!!! AHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! if only the red sox had won though.... o well!

-- 12345678987654321 on 5/27/2005 8:48:32 PM

Spammy.

Recommending a tag change for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/esl-hello,-everyone~21

Geared for Children? and Part of a Series

There is nothing humorous about this ESL test.

Recommending a tag change for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/esl-billy%27s-adventure

Geared for Children? and Part of a Series.

There is nothing humorous about this ESL test.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/trivial-true-or-false

that`s all folks

-- jm on 12/1/2010 12:23:11 AM with a score of 6

A bit random.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/trollstuck

ok

-- betaband on 4/4/2012 11:17:37 PM

Copy/paste and it doesn't really give any feedback.

Agreed on all.

We need more people to recommend featured comments.

I'm sure any storygame rated 6 or over is bound to comments that are feature worthy.

I don't see many too be honest.....that and most of the time I'm am too lazy to read them all.

Funnily enough, from what I've seen most of the really detailed comments are written about really bad games. The really good games just get comments saying "This is awesome!" 

Yeah, that is very true ^_^

                                   

Ha, @Madbrad200 , Madglee likes flame comments (similar to Endmaster). A day in hell is his game.

Thanks, when I read it I thought it said EndMaster and BerkaZerka :D

I also did an EndMaster one yesterday without realizing :D

Recommend this game for unpublishing:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/light-in-the-darkness

Even for a Warrior Cats game, it seemed especially bad. I don't know, maybe because the writer keeps putting things in brackets when they want to talk out of character. Maybe just 'cos it just creeped me out when you play as a girl and get... Climbed on... *Shudder* >.<

Are we now entering the "grim dark" phase of warrior cats fanfic now?

Looks like it... Next thing you know we'll be getting sparkly, emo, vampire kitties. *More shuddering* >.<

@Briar_Rose

Do you think that storygame doesn't meet minimum site standards? If so, show me how. Here's the article.

Hmm... Reading the game again, I think it probably does meet some of the minimum site standards, but I remember the spelling and grammar being a lot worse the first time I read it. I'm wondering if perhaps the game was edited shortly after I read it. Either way, it doesn't fail to meet all of the site's minimum standards. My bad.

No worries! Thanks for helping out.

Recommending more comments for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/bowser-trivia~21

THIS GAME IS RULING THE EARTH EVERONE! I MEAN RULING THE EARTH!

-- Adam666 on 10/1/2005 11:24:58 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/change-the-1986-boston-red-sox-game~21

?... ... eh.

-- Kiel_Farren on 8/26/2012 2:05:53 PM

Retarded.

-- NeverMind on 1/27/2012 6:51:03 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/hockey-quiz~3a-what-nhl-player-are-you~21

gfjhetyj

-- gwth on 5/16/2014 9:02:48 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/insult-eminem

HAHAHAHAHAHA

-- brittany on 7/24/2006 9:00:38 PM with a score of 50

Pathetic game... just terrible. My first ghame (WWII grand strategy was waaay better than this... and WHAT THE HEL IS THIS CRAPPY GAME DOING ON THE TOP GAMES FOR EVERYTHING ELSE???

-- Rommel on 1/13/2006 3:42:20 PM with a score of 50

EMINEM SUCKS LIKE *BEEP*

-- I HATE EMINEM on 3/7/2003 5:50:08 PM with a score of 50

YUCK!!!!!!!!

-- dstgsh on 3/1/2003 2:41:14 PM with a score of 50

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/wolves

IT WAS HE BESTTTTT 9999999999999999999999999/10

-- jUNIOR on 10/18/2005 10:26:59 PM with a score of 5500

Ahh, the shame... xD Briar found one of my lazy comments... I guess I figured that fell into the "one word" category, but on reflection, it really doesn't.

Nah, I'd say "eh" is half a word at most 

I left Adam666's comment.

Recommending this game for unpublishing: 

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/jurgen-the-warrior

I believe it fits into your standards for deletion. Rating of 2, Length of 2. I couldn't find the thread with your guidelines, though. @JJJ-Thebanisher

They are here. Please re-read them. That game is not deletable for that reason.

Comments recommended for deletion:

Fwupah
-- ThisisBo on 6/14/2011 4:10:54 PM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/September-the-14th~3a-Part-VIII~3a-Tiff-and-Tuff-Take-Tokyo )
(Reason: Not a word.)

No comment
-- BlueLion9 on 12/19/2013 3:04:28 PM with a score of 700
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Test-Your-Knowledge~3a-The-Hobbit )
(Reason: ... Why on earth would someone comment to say they're not commenting?)

THAT WAS AWESOME! I HOPED THE ZOMBIES DIDN"T KILL ME WITH THEIR DUMB BRAIN EATING TEEEEEEETH! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
-- Ryanwag222 on 2/9/2007 5:29:33 PM with a score of 0
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Die-Zombie~21-Die~21-Pt-III~3a-The-Final-Chapter )
(Reason: All caps. Gah.)

KISS MY ASS GEORGE BUSH. ()()
-- haledakota on 4/12/2013 10:22:13 PM with a score of 2121
(On: chooseyourstory.com/story/Die-Zombie~21-Die~21-Pt-III~3a-The-Final-Chapter )
(Reason: All caps AND a badly made text pic of... ... an ass, I assume. Classy. Real classy.)

woah that was !$#%^ easy!<br>:>)<br>
-- Jace on 9/11/2004 3:02:00 PM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Budget-Boom )
(Reason: I'm not sure what he was trying to do, but it's not working.)

....
-- RyuuKitsune9 on 2/5/2012 12:18:25 AM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-Soul-Adventure-of--Grobyc--Dior-Fortree )
(Reason: I understand that sometimes there are no words to describe how bad a game is, but again... no words. xD So this is not a comment.)

GREAT GAME!! INCREDIBLE STROY, ACTION, AND CHARACTERS PLUS ORIGINAL STROY AND ACTION AND ITS NOT LINEAR AND NICE LONG.
-- Anubis on 10/8/2007 2:25:03 PM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-Soul-Adventure-of--Grobyc--Dior-Fortree )
(Reason: Gawd, the caps. My eyes...!)

You are a fuckin moron for making this terribly bad piece o shit. You are a fucking primative primate, fucktard.
-- Asshole on 5/31/2013 5:21:07 AM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Cougar-Crossing~3a-Imminent-Threat )
(Reason: "They see me trollin', I'm hatin'" ... in all seriousness, the story may not be one of our best, but this is just trollish nastiness.)

Too nonsense!
-- RobustSporadic on 6/2/2012 5:24:42 AM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Cougar-Crossing~3a-Imminent-Threat )
(Reason: xD What? )

LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-- Sarah on 4/3/2014 7:48:23 PM with a score of 350
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Test-Your-Knowledge~3a-The-Hobbit )
(Reason: All caps, waaaaay too many exclamation points.)

COOOOOL........
-- Killer999 on 9/27/2011 12:55:12 PM with a score of 0
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Chuck-Norris-Chasedown )
(Reason: >.> Caps.)

Seriously..... The end part
-- Nuclearwarfareaw10 on 8/9/2013 9:13:35 PM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-FRED-Quiz )
(Reason: Another "too nonsense" comment. xD)

hehe
-- Reese on 12/29/2005 3:51:04 AM
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Nutters )
(Reason: "Hehe" is not a word.)

STOP MAKNG DEMOS
-- JJJ on 6/27/2006 10:21:06 PM with a score of 0
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/myadventuregame~2ecom-the-game- )
(Reason: All caps, no punctuation, misspelled, and... *looks at the name* oh. xD Um. Sorry.)

yay!
-- tigerxii on 10/12/2012 9:43:43 AM with a score of 1883
(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Who-wants-to-be-a-Supervillain~3f )  
(Reason: Is "yay" a word?)

yar yar
-- MexicanGrinch on 10/5/2011 7:19:21 PM with a score of 201938
(On: chooseyourstory.com/story/Who-wants-to-be-a-Supervillain~3f )
(Reason: Okay, now, I know "yar yar" is not a word. -.-)

 

I don't see what's wrong with people making comments in all caps...

We're only supposed to be deleting comments that are completely useless.

Mmm ... maybe I misunderstood, then. I -do- find all caps comments eye-bleedingly annoying.

Anyway, one word comments are generally useless, but those are okay.

Okay, I left Haledakota's, RobustSporadic's, Nuclearwarfare's, and mine. Caps aren't enough to warrant deletion. Caps + excess punctuation, sure, but not just caps. Also, we're not removing comments for a single grammar mistake. Too nonsense clearly meant "too nonsensical."

After looking over your guidelines, I wish to recommend this game for unpublishing:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/mitchell-pearce's-misadventure

Rating 2, length 1.

@JJJ-Thebanisher

Done. Don't tag me in these posts. I'll get to all of them, in order.

Sorry, that was an edit of a post I made earlier. I was afraid it would go overlooked. I don't mean to be a nuisance.

It's okay. Until this bug is fixed, you can't tag me anyway. Just a heads up.

That explains a lot. Thanks for the head's up.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/i-need-tips,-help~21~21~21~21

Game should be deleted, worthless. (Not a game, should be a forum post)

Done.

Thanks 3J! (Just an overall thanks for the cleaning up of the site) 

It's a team effort! Thanks for doing your part.
 

For shiggles, look at who wrote it. XD.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/yer-pickle

No plot, 5 pages long doesn't even make sense and no choices. Also it is apparently about an under aged girl giving a pickle to another under aged girl so....

@Drakoblare

If you want a storygame deleted, you need to tell me how it doesn't meet these standards.

It's been out since 2013 though for some reason it has a 3/8 (but that's cause some gave it an 8)

I guess not using Caps lock correctly counts as bad grammar (pfff)

There is indeed, no plot

No pacing since there is no plot

Literally no decisions, at all 

No dialogue 

You think the grammar is so bad it's unignorable?

To be honest the grammar is fine by my standards but this isn't even a game. 

Personally I do not think it warrants deletion.

Yeah, I decided to delete it. I'm going to add another clause to the site standards to cover it.

:(

There were so many points to gain in that comment section :D

That's why you didn't want it deleted? LOW!

New clause: "The storygame is not a storygame and is instead intended to fulfill a goal such as communicating with another member or advertising a product."

That seems like a good idea, well done!

And I was going by this when I said it shouldn't be deleted. "After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, your storygame is rated 1/8 and After receiving at least 7 ratings and being published for at least 1 week, your storygame is rated 2/8 and its length is 1/8".

Gotta get those coins maaaan

Drakoblare was arguing that it met criteria 3 for deletion, not criterias 1 or 2. It doesn't have to meet all of them!

Oh it doesn't? I thought it did :D

Please re-read the article.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-big-little-history-quiz

Got all of them... almost! Good job!

-- Killer999 on 9/14/2011 11:07:17 AM

Duplicate comment.

Agreed.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/mario-party-quiz~21

...

-- Havacoman on 10/16/2006 10:09:16 PM with a score of 20

I don't think using ellipsis is going to help anyone.

Agreed.

Recommend these games for category change:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/starclan-vs-the-dark-forest~21-part-1

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/thunderclan-warriors

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats-adventures-remade~21

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats~3a-adventure

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/wild-warrior-cat

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/windclan-tunneler

They're all Warrior Cats games, so they should all be in Fan Fiction

All agreed! You are some sort of possessed warrior cat hunter...

Actually, since you're getting rewarded, I guess you're a Warrior Cat Bounty Hunter. Briar Fett. That's you.

hahaha ^_^

OMG, I wish that was an actual job 

Dammit, got to recommend my own comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-secret-affair-episode-i

"Do you want to be my girlfriend?" 
"No, you're married." 
The end. 
... Works for me :p

-- Briar_Rose on 6/19/2014 11:31:30 AM

Comp was lagging, so it got triple posted.

It wasn't your computer. I bet @alexp just did something to the back end. Everyone felt it. Exactly what he did... well I'm curious!

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Mario%27s-Adventure-Island - All comments below are from this link.

BBOOOORRRRIIIINNNNGGGGGGGg

-- alfred junior on 2/21/2003 4:35:45 PM

Excessive caps and no constructive criticism.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

WWOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW<br>

-- QWERT on 10/15/2003 8:30:29 PM

Exxesive capa and no contructive criticism. JJ, why do old comments have <br> in them a lot?

Agreed. Probably because comments used to have html editing enabled, or something?

Did you get both of them. I think I edited it as soon as you commented :D

Of course I did. :)

Recommend the following comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/grief

That was wayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy too short

-- anonomys on 5/25/2014 9:34:02 AM

Agreed!

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Mario%27s-Adventure-Island

KIK ASS! GOOOO LUIGI!

-- Jon on 9/29/2003 9:29:53 PM

I'm not sure about this one but it does use excessive caps and no constructive criticism.

I think that's a fine comment.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Mario%27s-Adventure-Island

-- on 1/27/2005 7:04:40 AM

It is just his name and no comment.

Done

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Mario%27s-Adventure-Island - All comments below are from this link.

it sucks @$$

-- Brad on 7/4/2005 3:34:13 PM

This is a bit insulting but it might be fine.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

-- on 7/28/2005 9:02:17 PM

This is just his name again and no comment.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://www.angelfire.com/dragon3/cheatchat/cheatchat.html
is my website and it is AWESOME. On the Giga-Games extension ou can see all the games I made by myself (without this website)

-- Giga-Games on 8/17/2005 3:11:46 AM

He is just advertising his website.

All gone.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Mario%27s-Adventure-Island

awesome

-- skullkid2802 on 5/15/2011 1:00:33 PM

This is a duplicate comment.

Handled

Recommend this comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/hallways

Well SORRY! This is my first one! Try out my 46th Annual Hunger Games, tell me if it is better

-- TheNightmare413 on 1/3/2014 1:13:29 AM

(I know it's her own game, but she's telling people to read her other game and I don't know if that's allowed.)

I'll leave that one.

Recommending a tag change for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Luigi%27s-Adventure - All recommendations below are from this link.

List of tags: Geared for Children.

This isn't humorous at all and but it is certainly geared for children.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

You dumbass, I've not enjoyed infact I've wasted my time!

-- RobustSporadic on 6/3/2012 5:25:56 AM

Insulting the author.

Recommending a tag change for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/invasion-of-the-evil-pickles

List of tags: Based Off A True Story(?) and War.

Somehow I don't think this is serious or socially important ^_^

Recommending a story for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/bazooka-rider~2e

It fails to meet minimum site Standards.

1.The grammar is bad and he uses abbreviation a lot which is very poor.

2. There is no plot at all.

3. It randomly skips to places and has Endgame links all over.

4. The dialogue is completely random.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Inferno-quest-series~3a-~231The-Burning-adventure

I beat tit the real way this time. Fun game.

-- ESRTIOKNE on 3/6/2003 9:05:55 PM with a score of 1021175000

He copy/pasted and corrected himself in the next post.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/What-REALLY-Goes-On-In-Los-Angeles~3a-The-24-Hour-Flood - All comments below are from this link.

So, does anybody like the game? I worked hard on it & had a few problems, but if you find the bonus goodies, you'll have high points & some stuff to boot.

-- JDog on 3/31/2005 4:16:09 PM with a score of 446

Duplicate comment.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

So, does anybody like the game? I worked hard on it & had a few problems, but if you find the bonus goodies, you'll have high points & some stuff to boot.

-- JDog on 3/31/2005 4:16:10 PM with a score of 446

Duplicate comment #2.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

So, does anybody like the game? I worked hard on it & had a few problems, but if you find the bonus goodies, you'll have high points & some stuff to boot.

-- JDog on 3/31/2005 4:16:11 PM with a score of 446

Duplicate comment #3.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Miccy2000%27s-CSI~3a-Australia

It sucked ok mine was better.

 

-- JJJ-thebanisher on 4/22/2014 1:07:48 AM with a score of 600

Duplicate comment.

 

How could the pickles one be based on a real story?

That last comment was pretty good trolling. In case you didn't realize, it wasn't me, the person just typed my name in there but wasn't logged in. Obviously deleted both.

You never know JJ, you never know!

 

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Trivial-True-or-False

Delete comment:

I've less idea! -- RobustSporadic on 7/3/2012 11:25:52 PM with a score of 2

(Because I'm not sure what the hell it is supposed to mean XD)

Yeah, no idea. Gone.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/seduction - All comments below are from this link

dude...you really need to learn how to spell

-- kt on 7/22/2004 9:26:39 AM

Duplicate comment.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

you should die. You dont know what you're doing.

-- da ravemaster on 12/26/2005 6:21:06 PM

Not exactly a pleasant comment :D

Done

Got a duplicate comment for deletion for Ground Zero.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/ground-zero
 

This was amazing I loved how deep the story went and how it managed to reference other branches of choices. Like the Elliot thing and how it's referenced while you are atomic alliance officer.
-- SSS on 6/20/2014 4:31:29 PM

The name was different on the other comment, but other than that, it's exactly the same.

Thanks :)

Is there a set of guidelines for what criteria a comment needs to meet in order to be deleted?

It has to either have spammy punctuation, flame the author, be completely incomprehensible, be a duplicate comment, or not actually be a comment (such as "..." or "poop" or something).

I am struggling to find any now so good luck Kiel!

Tsk, tsk, MB. Don't you know? xD The internet never runs out of stupid...

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Fairview-Highschool-Game - All comments below are from this link.

Meow meow meow. Meow meow meow meow meow... Meow meow meow. Meow.

-- Kitty on 3/11/2011 1:30:20 AM with a score of 100

Does anyone here understand Kitty language? If not then we should probably delete it.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

Hi.
-- Swiftstryker on 3/29/2012 8:19:19 PM with a score of 100

Saying "Hi" isn't going to help anyone.
 

Done!

Recommending Comments For Deletion

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/hell-girl~3a-the-shattered-mirror

The fucking options presented did not satisfy the anger you made me feel whilst playing this game. I'm going to go decapitate an old man now. Fuck you.
6/8

-- Coffee on 5/24/2014 8:40:40 PM with a score of 0

i got mad and set her to hell after my first failed game.paybacks a bitch.

-- Tristan on 4/9/2014 1:52:37 PM with a score of 0

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/through-time

swag

-- cuzzie on 6/1/2014 5:22:05 PM with a score of 97530

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/survive-the-zombies

not as long as i'd like it to be

-- populouspoptart on 6/16/2014 11:41:49 PM with a score of 8000

Yay

-- Rolf on 5/31/2014 12:47:23 PM with a score of -666

-sigh- don't threaten people

-- keirebu on 3/17/2014 1:35:48 AM with a score of -666

I had the "decent" ending, and 2 achivements, No-one left behind, and best friends.

-- EarthCollision on 3/5/2014 2:16:18 PM with a score of 200

Sex: Yes Please

-- MidkiffCboy on 2/23/2014 5:58:51 PM with a score of -666

I'm not sure I even understand the plot of this storygame...

4/8

-- ShriekingTiger44 on 2/6/2014 2:50:02 AM with a score of -666

not bad i have played better

-- dfyf on 1/12/2014 6:33:47 AM

sorry bob...

-- DmitriSteiner on 12/22/2013 9:22:57 AM with a score of 200

this suxs

-- hi on 6/28/2013 9:37:24 AM with a score of -666

 

I'm going to leave Coffee's comment. I think it's pretty funny and decently eloquent in its own way. The 6/8 shows that he's being tongue in cheek. I'm leaving Tristan's comment... I'm not sure what you think is wrong with it. I left populouspoptart's comment... why would I delete that one?! I left Keirebu's comment and I left EarthCollisions comment.. They're both totally fine. I left dfyf's comment and ShriekingTiger's comment and I deleted hi's and DmitriSteiner's but I probably should have left those.

In essence, I need you to be a lot more selective in your reporting. Most of the comments you reported were totally fine. For your next batch of comments, please give a reason as to why you think they should be deleted, so I can see what you were thinking.

As a note, MidkiffCboy's comment is/was related to the story. (Same as DimitriSteiner)

I realized that after. Sorry to those two users.

Recommend Unpublishing: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/too-excited
It is short and not well written.

If it doesn't meet these site standards, please explain how.

@Xt1000305

You should list what Minimum Site Storygame Standards it does not meet, it makes it easier for JJ.

Thank you!!!

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/Is-Dave-Chappelle-crazy~3f

.....

-- PrinceOProvidence on 1/7/2007 5:37:05 PM with a score of 0

Ellipsis does not help anyone when it is a bit random.

Agreed.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/TV-Show~3a-Madness-of-Seal

oK. -- Killer999 on 9/23/2011 9:57:33 AM 

(comment that should be deleted)

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Game that should be deleted:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/My-Little-Pony-Adventure

Unsure what exactly it violates, and you really have to see it to understand why it should be deleted, but... The game is hard to read. Odd 'preferences' make the page longer than they should be with no text in between. It's really odd. The game is pointless and annoying.

I'd say that storygame meets all of these standards:

• Grammar and style poor enough that it cannot be ignored
• A plot which is poor or nonexistent
• Poor pacing (usually characterized by frequent and unpredictable end game links)
• A lack of important decisions
• Unbelievable or overly cliched dialogue (if dialogue is present in the story)

So I deleted it. Agreed on the comment too.

Here are a few comments I noticed while playing. I feel that these deserve featuring because of the quality of advice they offer to the author. I know featuring comments isn't your top priority, but I feel these guys deserve recognition.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/where-am-i~3f-0~2e0

This could actually be a decent little story, if you'd bothered to proofread it. Terrible spelling, grammar, run-on sentences, and other issues make it difficult to read.
The background could use more explanation as well. There's a lot of totally interchangeable, ill-defined characters (who all seem to have names ending in "y") who all (I guess?) know each other, and suddenly start narrating the backstory to one another. It feels like you, the author, know what this story is about- but you didn't do a very good job explaining it to the reader.
The overall impression I get is that you were in a tremendous rush to write and publish this as quickly as possible.

Comment left by Sethaniel.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/myvacation

If you see a sim game with a sandbox concept and unique variables, you know it's good. This is basically a fun and unique vacation/work sim that you can spend endless hours playing. The storygame is very non-linear, which gives more freedom to the player, but a little more linearity would perfect it. The storyline flowed nicely and I like it how you could sometimes make big choice (Rebels or Governor) and how useless things seem useful (Like, Nigel, he's funny). The only big problem is the bugs that might need a little bit of editing to get rid of it. But no complaints here, all storygames as diverse and complex as MyVacation have bugs! Thumbs up and great game, I can't wait for the sequel.

Concept left by Zephyrme2847.

 

Featuring comments is among my top priorities. The second comment is not feature-worthy though. A feature-worthy comment needs to read better than that. Zephyr's comment does a good job of addressing the storygame as a whole, but the writing quality isn't quite feature-worthy.

Alright. Thanks for letting me know.

Comments recommended for deletion:

so gud
-- goosenecklamp on 6/1/2014 4:36:48 AM with a score of 0

(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-price-of-freedom~3a-innocence-lost )
(Reason: xD Please tell me this is delete worthy, I just... "gud"? Really? You need to be trying to spell that badly.)

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-- fhgfhfgh on 6/24/2014 8:12:15 AM with a score of 0

(On: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-price-of-freedom~3a-innocence-lost )
(Reason: Utter nonsense spawned by utter nonsense.)

(Yeah, only two this time, a bit distracted by other things.)

That first comment isn't quite deletable. Sorry. You know what he was trying to say.

Another duplicate comment.
Tales From the Basement
http://chooseyourstory.com/story/tales-from-the-basement

I played the 2nd and 3rd paths, but so far I haven't seen any actual epilogues, even though I clicked on everything...
-- Celicni on 6/24/2014 7:29:55 AM

 

Done

Delete forum comment:

http://chooseyourstory.com/forums/the-lounge/message/12849#376692

OR we can just shut the hell up.  I'll fix this when we're done being idiots.

Edit : To the more intelligent members of the site, I am sorry, but I'm just not in the mood to have to see this kind of behavior on the forums as often as this is, being carried across multiple threads.  And yes, if you're really seeing this, I'm now able to edit out these giant-spaced comments. @ISentinelPenguinI @nmelssx - Swiftstryker-Meet Mara 3 hours ago

 

I can't actually copy/paste his(she?) comment because he posted with that giant text of his. The text makes the page ridiculously long and is definitely considered spam in my eyes. He did this because he didn't like what Sentinal and Nm where posting. In my opinion he should of asked an admin to remove there comments rather than spamming the thread himself.

Or respectfully ignore us since we were just having a friendly chat which had nothing to do with him. 

IMO, they should delete swift's comment. It makes it near impossible for me to navigate the page.

Nm, I think he should of asked an admin if he wanted it removed. I realize it was a joke but clearly he didn't like it. It isn't his job to go round making that big text of his because of "unintelligent" people.

I've deleted it and deleted nmelssx's creepy shit as well. I agree with you, Madbrad, a little bit more class would go a long way.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/captured~21

Very good. I liked the ending, it had me guessing throughout the whole game. The first hint to the ending was in the cell with the girl, when you see twhat the door is on the other side of the cell from when you first woke. 7/8

-- PortalSpartan on 6/22/2014 8:26:54 PM

Duplicate comment.

Done.

Recommend the following comments for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/insane-asylum

ORIGAMI!

-- airguitar124 on 11/6/2011 6:19:50 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-drugs-wouldn't-stop-the-nightmares,-chapter-one~2e

buhruh

-- jarvan on 10/30/2011 2:01:43 PM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-zombies-are-coming-part-1

VERY AWESOME!! JUST NEED A LOT!!!! OF IMPROVEMENTS!!!! AND IT WILL BE AWESOME!!!! AND ALSO GRAMMAR YOU NEED TO TAKE LONGER WORDS TO KEEP READERS ENLIGHTENMENT!!!!! but i think i can help you.....

-- jasperranz on 10/4/2012 1:16:23 AM

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/try-not-to-die~21

LINEEEEEEAAAAAAR.

-- Anubis on 1/19/2009 8:48:49 PM

 

Also recommend this comment for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/zombies-are-racist

Ha! This game is hilarious, it's unfortunate that it's incomplete, I actually had a pretty good laugh reading through this (the scene with the zombie and the wrench had me cracking up like a goddamn fool). 

As a parody of the zombie genre and a humorous little story, this is perfect, and I sincerely hope that was your intention while making this. 

Otherwise... well, I think you should probably brush up on your storytelling. As a serious story, this would fall short on rather many levels (For one, the scene that had me cracking up - the zombie violating himself, then you, and then you violating him, all with a wrench, is - while hilarious - hardly something you should include if you want a story to be in any way realistic, touching or even mildly respectable). 

You also seem to be following the traditional zombie path (You wake up, zombies happened, then you find a military camp). Don't, I cannot emphasize enough how much this has been done to death, it's the exact same story for every zombie telling and it gets old quick. I know it may be difficult to think of some more original progression, but that's the challenge to any overworked genre, and those rare works that take the less-travelled path will often get rewarded for it; if their author is good enough that is. 

Your pages are too short, and you have a few loops. Fix those, haha; try and give the reader a sense of what's happening around him, don't let them just think of everything as a sequence of actions, you have to try and make them feel like there is some real progression here, not like they're just some guy screwing around in an apocalyptic world. 

All of that being said, I personally much prefer this game as a parody, you've done an excellent job of making me laugh and I value that more than the traditional zombie story. 

As a storygame? This will get a 3/8 from me, i'm sorry to say; even if I enjoyed it, it is incomplete, short and has loops. Fix those and it'll definitely bring my rating up,

-- Drakilian on 4/3/2014 11:12:42 PM

Didn't delete Anubis' comment. Agreed on all the rest, especially Drak's comment.

Recommending comment for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/The-pharmacist-from-the-future

It's a shame. Having a game with a time machine that you can keep using to go back and fix things that went wrong that day is a really clever idea. Unfortunately the game just wasn't well written. Most of what was going on didn't make any sense and it had some story development that could've been very interesting if it was explained correctly. For instance, the rich man pretending to be a bum was interesting, but the game never properly explains why he was pretending to be a bum. Also, the inventor of the time machine deciding to kill himself because of his mistake was interesting, but you never explained what happened to make the man decide that inventing the time machine was a mistake.

Comment left by Briar Rose.

Agreed.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-day - All comments below are from this link.

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE. THANKS FOR THE TIME MACHINE TIMOTHY APPERS WITH A MAGIC WAND AND SHOOTS YOUR DOG WITH IT THEN YOU RREALIZE THAT WAAS YOUR MOTHER/FATTHER/WALRUS. YOU DIE FOR DRINKING BREAD

-- JOEL on 7/9/2012 5:22:39 PM

Another of those long spammy comments.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

X

-- TETRIS239 on 6/24/2014 5:43:27 PM

Not sure what "X" means but I don't think it is helping anyone.

Done and Agreed.

I wanted to join in but now I have to go over every comment in every storygame so this might take a while. :/

Okay I have been searching for a few minutes and I already found one that is pretty mean on one of my favorite storygame.

this was on HIGHWAYS to HELL by smallfry.

the comment was from sally meatballs : 6/13/2014. at. 6:17:33 pm

here is what it said: It was awful!

 

my reason: it is one of my favorite storygames and it is not really spam but it was mean and if he/she red it the wrong way they could be very offended.

Thanks shark but I recomend copy/pasty the comment in its entiaty.

Such as:

Good story blah blah blah.lpsldaojsa90jds

-- anonymous on 6/16/2014 1:46:41 AM

This makes it easier for JJ. Also put a hyperlink so JJ can quickly go to the game/forum you are talking about. Like this

I have no idea how to do it >:O Im a idiot.

There is a guideline to this which just so happens to be the very first post in this thread.

EDIT: Thought you were talking about something else :p

That's fine :D

- Click that button (Button shown to the left) there and then enter the URL in the box (box shown below) that will pop up. Then click Ok.

 

How do you get the URL Im not a computer person I perfer out doors.

I like outdoors too :D

A URL is something like this: http://chooseyourstory.com/forums/newbie-central/new-reply?postId=377818

That would likely be at the top of your screen. (Shown Below)

Thank you I am a computer noob kind of so thx alot.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/highways-to-hell WOOHOO MY FIRST LINK!

Well Done :D

Happy Hunt.....Linking!

:D.

We invite you to join us but comments are not the only things you can help with. In the OP there are a list of things plus forum problems. I wouldn't recommend doing it if you don't enjoy it, do it after you rate a game for instance.

Okay I will start searching every forum tonight!. :|

Recommending a comment for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/slumber-party

One of the main issues with this particular game is that there doesn't seem to be a real goal here other than for your character to have a good time, which ... isn't exactly a bad goal, but you have to make the experience more interesting than just "you and your friends did this activity, so-and-so giggled, it was fun."

This game presents no challenge, no consequences, and honestly, no real choices, because there is literally no way to lose and no other outcome your character can have other than to have a good time. I mean, I can get there, then go straight to sleep, and it doesn't effect the ending. The story just insists I had fun, regardless of what I do. That's why it falls flat as a game, the player doesn't feel like they've really accomplished anything or like their choices even really matter.

Since the game is incredibly light on text, tone, content, and general length, I believe it was written either by a young writer or for very young players. So, yes, it's decent for what it is, in spite of me not enjoying it. There's nothing in here that's bad for kids.

(However, if you're trying to make it for the youth of today, why are you having them play boardgames? My sisters only play boardgames with our parents. Why not video games? Why not a wii / xbox dance party game, jamming out to ... whoever it is tween girls idolize these days?)

Truth be told, just because something is for kids does not mean it needs to be light, or short, or all smiles and rainbows-- Disney is an example of a company knows how to be interesting, even a little dark, while keeping both their kid and adult appeal. Maybe you should study up on more successful writers and try again.

-- Kiel_Farren on 6/21/2014 9:27:38 PM with a score of 0

I feel this is really worth featuring. It gives some suggestions as well as criticism to the author in a neat fashion.

Lol, people keep finding my "random burst of insight" reviews. I guess I'm trying to write more quality comments to make up for all the times that I didn't leave any comment at all.

Agreed!

I recommend this comment for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/indivisible

Aww, I was hoping we'd be able to 'change' history in the game rather than being forced to play it out as it was.

Nonetheless, this was a very informational piece (to the point that it should probably go to Edutainment!). It was interesting and was a good, but brief summary of the Civil War's major battles.

As noted above, this could've been a really, fantastic Storygame if we were able to really change how the Civil War was played out, as well as see the consequences of our actions if the Confederacy ended up winning, or we couldn't bring the Union together.
As it is now, however, it can only serve as an informatory essay about the American Civil War. 5/8 

Comment left by Tanstaafl.

 

I recommend this comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/james-2

Good idea but... Being good gives you "godliness". Are you insinuating non-religious people are not good? Also forced prayer in the school....
"If Jesus can forgive mankind for hanging him on a cross I can forgive a guy for knocking down my stuff"...seriously.

I don't need a Bible to dictate my morals thank you very much, I am a happy person and I don't take a morals from a book that stones gay people to death! 

Comment Left by Madbrad200

Explanation: He appears to be judging the game on his opinion of the game's subject, not on the game itself or how it adhere's to its subject. The game was about the standards of godliness, according to the book James 2, yet the commentor assumes that it was an attack on his beliefs and begins to make a series of inflammatory comments regarding the subject of the game. Again, the comments wouldn't be bad if they were actually referring to the game and not the bible itself.

Agreed on featuring Tan's comment.

I'm not deleting MBs comment. It's not a great comment but it's not delete-worthy. He's not flaming the author and he is talking about the storygame, so it's fine.

Recommending a change in difficulty level for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-story-of-the-bible

8

This is a game with multiple choice but only one on every page is correct. The rest are just "EndGames".

On a side note; is this "game" really "Fan Fiction"?

Recommending a tag change for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/kingdom-war

War

This is far from historical (lol) and nor is it an RPG.

 

I changed the difficulty to 6, not 8. It's not easy to get through that storygame, but it's just a matter of clicking the right links until they let you through. Check out Jurrasic Fairview Park for an example of an 8 difficulty. In that storygame, you could click randomly for years and never finish.

Agreed on the tag-switch.

Hey, 3J, would you delete a comment if it is in response to someone else's comment and not the game itself? Note: "Mabrand" is supposed to be "Madbrad".

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/james-2

Oh yes, and Mabrand, any christian that "stones" people for being gay isn't doing the right thing. The Bible teaches tolerance, NOT acceptance.
(Ok not always tolerance, like living with a child molester, but whatever)

Comment left by Puddlebunni

Probably not. I have seen a lot of those sort of comments. (Unless the comment he is replying to gets deleted).

Just because they're prevalent doesn't mean they're allowed.

"Probably not"

Besides I think we should be able to reply to others. He probably forgot to add that in his previous comment and decided to leave another one.

 

Nope, responses are okay.

Recommending a comment for featuring:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats~2din-the-forest-part-1

Warrior Cats again? Okay...where do I begin. First, your grammar is not good. It's not so awful that I get upset by reading, but it is below average. When you are describing a scene, this includes characters, don't put everything within parenthesis and don't apologize to the reader while we are reading the story because it completely breaks any immersion.

The choices you present at the beginning doesn't even add to the story, it isn't even talked about past the first page. The story itself was rushed. Many things in this story seem to be just thrown at me simply for the sake of it being there. As I continue to read, it seems like you were thinking that since you're almost done you shouldn't try as much. Never a good thing. If you were so keen on making the "romances", and I use that term loosely, gender specific, why didn't you just make a gender choice at the beginning of the story. I could literally be a male on one page and a female on the other.

Anyway, I can't bring myself to give this a 1/8 because it does appear to have some effort, though minimal, put into it. So with that, I give this story a 2/8.

-- Danaos on 6/27/2014 3:42:38 PM

This is a good comment that seems to cover most aspects of the story. I think it should be featured.

Recommending a comment for deletion:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/colosseum-crasher

Needs more work, more variance, and more development. However, it's not a heinous concept.

-- Drydenhouse on 5/25/2014 8:18:25 AM

Duplicate comment.

Recommending a category change for a storygame:

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/warrior-cats~2din-the-forest-part-1

Fan Fiction

This is based of of the "Warriors" books.

In terms of content, Danaos' comment is actually unbelievably good. However, it's completely fraught with grammatical errors. In that second paragraph, he mixes up the proper pluralization too many times for it to be featured.

Agreed on the rest.

Recommending a storygame for deletion

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/who-wants-a-cookie

- It has a 1 rating and a 1 length, deletable by minimum site standards (it hasn't been a week yet, but it is very, very unlikely that the author will ever get a rating any higher than a 2, and I believe the other standards will suffice to delete it).

- It is literally just you eating a cookie. It starts off asking if you want to eat a cookie. Your only answer is sure. You can choose to wait a few hours while the cookie goes stale (who cares, it's a cookie?) or you can eat it right away and enter an infinite cookie eating loop, with the option to stop eating cookies and end the game. 

I wanted to do that but it hasn't been a week yet.

You don't need to wait a week, we made the other four standards for those who made their way around a loophole or two.

(Or did we need to fit all 4 of those? I'm prepared to argue that it has a pornographic theme, all of that cookie eating, clearly food porn,)

Hey...didn't you read my comment on the story? I told you to stay away. I told you ALL to stay away.

Dammit, I was after that point too 

Please re-read this article. "If any of the above 5 conditions are met, and the storygame is reported, it will be deleted."

I deleted the storygame, but you didn't list a legitimate reason for it to be deleted, so I can't award you the point.

Bah, i'm fairly sure "Blatant lack of plot" and "Linearity" was heavily implied by my second paragraph.

The storygame has all of the following characteristics:

• Grammar and style poor enough that it cannot be ignored
• A plot which is poor or nonexistent
• Poor pacing (usually characterized by frequent and unpredictable end game links)
• A lack of important decisions
• Unbelievable or overly cliched dialogue (if dialogue is present in the story)

While it did, you didn't say that. You never mentioned his grammar, or the pacing.

That's because the grammar was standard - at least, the same quality as most other storygames here (and it was short enough that it would have been really hard to screw up the grammar anyway).

Pacing pretty much tied in with the description of the game, haha. 

Am I supposed to just copy-paste that list every time I think a storygame here should be deleted? I was of the mind that you'd simply infer from the description whether or not it matched the criteria yourself.

Let's try this another way, can you tell me, right here, how it doesn't meet the minimum site standards?

Bah, fine, i'll copy-paste the list of minimum standards the next time I choose a story to be removed.

Make sure you copy+paste the correct part of the minimum site standards that it doesn't meet. What I'm looking for is an explanation of which part of the minimum site standards it fails to meet. The reason you aren't getting points is that you didn't specify which part of the minimum site standards the storygame failed to meet.

@Drakilian I agree with Drak. I was going to post it too until I saw it wasn't a week old :D

Recommending a forum thread for deletion

http://chooseyourstory.com/forums/the-lounge/message/12886

- It's basically just another complaint/"I'm leaving" thread for Mousepaw, with the added spammy-type comments and coins' big goddamn pikachu picture.

I don't believe that thread still exists!

Please use the new thread.